Whispers in the Candlelight

Submitted into Contest #270 in response to: Set your story in a kitchen, either early in the day or late at night.... view prompt

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The clock on the wall ticked softly, each second stretching into the next with a languid ease. It was late, long past the hour when the rest of the world surrendered to sleep. Yet, Amelia found herself awake, drawn to the quiet hush of the kitchen like a moth to a flame. The moon hung low outside the window, casting silvery beams that sliced through the gauzy curtains, painting spectral patterns across the worn wooden floor.

She stepped barefoot onto the cool tiles, the faint chill seeping up through her soles. The air was thick with the scent of vanilla and the lingering aroma of spices—a remnant of the day’s baking. Shadows clung to the corners, pooling beneath the aged oak table that stood steadfast in the center of the room. Its surface bore the marks of years gone by: scratches from mislaid knives, stains from spilled wine, and the etched initials of youthful indiscretion.

Amelia moved with practiced grace, her fingers trailing along the countertop, brushing against the smooth ceramic of the teapot waiting patiently by the stove. She hesitated, her gaze drifting to the window where the world outside seemed both vast and distant. The garden was a tapestry of darkness, the silhouettes of overgrown hedges and tangled vines merging into an inky abyss.

A sigh escaped her lips—a soft, wistful exhalation that mingled with the silence. Nights like this were heavy with memories, each one a delicate thread tugging at the edges of her consciousness. She could feel them hovering just beyond reach, like whispering voices carried on the wind.

With a flicker of resolve, she turned away from the window, striking a match to light the candle atop the mantel. The flame sputtered to life, casting a warm glow that pushed back the shadows ever so slightly. The kitchen transformed under its gentle luminance, the familiar surroundings taking on an otherworldly hue.

She watched as the light danced across the array of copper pots hanging above the stove, their curved surfaces reflecting distorted images that seemed to move of their own accord. The sight stirred an inexplicable unease within her—a flutter of something not quite fear but akin to it.

“Why can’t I sleep?” she whispered to the empty room. The sound of her own voice was strangely comforting, a tether to reality amid the swirling thoughts.

Amelia busied herself preparing tea, the ritualistic motions offering a semblance of normalcy. She measured the loose leaves with care, their earthy scent rising as she poured the hot water. The steam spiraled upwards, disappearing into the dimness above.

As she waited, her eyes wandered, settling upon the collection of porcelain figurines lining the shelf above the sink. They were delicate things—ballerinas frozen in perpetual motion, their painted faces bearing serene expressions. Her grandmother had cherished them, each one a relic from a bygone era.

A sudden draft brushed against the back of her neck, sending a shiver down her spine. She turned sharply, half expecting to find someone standing behind her. The kitchen remained empty, the only movement the flickering candle flame swaying gently as if stirred by an unseen breath.

“Get a grip,” she chided herself, a nervous laugh escaping her. “It’s just the wind.”

But the windows were closed, and the old farmhouse was solid, its thick walls impervious to casual breezes. She tightened her grip around the teacup, the warmth seeping into her palms.

The silence pressed in again, heavier this time. It was as though the house itself was holding its breath, waiting. Amelia’s gaze fell upon the doorway leading to the hall, the darkness beyond seeming denser, more impenetrable. An irrational urge to venture into that void tugged at her, but her feet remained rooted.

She sipped her tea, the liquid soothing her throat but doing little to quell the growing restlessness within. Her thoughts drifted to her grandmother’s stories—the tales of spirits and lingering souls that she used to share by the fireside. As a child, Amelia had listened wide-eyed, caught between fascination and fear.

“You’re too old for ghost stories,” she murmured, attempting to shake off the unease.

Yet, the house was old, its history etched into every beam and floorboard. It had seen generations come and go, witnessed joys and sorrows woven into the fabric of time. Amelia wondered what memories were held within these walls—what echoes of the past lingered in the spaces between moments.

She moved to the table, running her fingers over the carved initials—A & J, encased in a haphazardly drawn heart. A faint smile touched her lips. Her own handiwork from countless summers ago, when the world was simpler and the future stretched endlessly ahead.

A creak echoed from the hallway—a soft, almost imperceptible sound. Amelia froze, her heartbeat quickening. It was probably just the house settling, she told herself. Old buildings made noises; it was nothing out of the ordinary.

But then it came again, a deliberate footfall on worn wooden boards. Her mind raced, logic grappling with instinct. She set down her cup carefully, the porcelain clinking softly against the saucer.

“Hello?” she called out, her voice steady despite the fluttering in her chest.

No response came, only the oppressive silence that seemed to swallow her words. She took a tentative step toward the doorway, the candlelight casting elongated shadows that reached out like grasping hands.

Amelia hesitated at the threshold, peering into the gloom. The hallway stretched before her, a tunnel of darkness punctuated by the faint outline of doorways leading to other rooms shrouded in night.

She considered turning on the lights but found herself unwilling to break the hushed stillness with the harsh glare of electricity. Instead, she grasped the candlestick, lifting it before her as she ventured forward.

The flame wavered, illuminating fragments of the hallway—the framed photographs lining the walls, the ornate mirror reflecting a distorted version of herself, eyes wide and searching.

A photo caught her eye—one she didn’t recall seeing before. It was faded, the edges worn. In it, a woman stood in the very kitchen she had just left, an uncanny resemblance to Amelia herself. The woman’s eyes seemed to follow her, a silent plea etched into her features.

A chill settled over Amelia, her breath hitching. She reached out to touch the photograph, fingertips brushing against the cool glass. Who was this woman, and why had she never noticed the picture until now?

A soft sob echoed from the end of the hall—a sound so faint she almost thought she imagined it. But it was there, a muffled cry that stirred a deep-seated instinct to comfort.

“Is someone there?” she called gently, her voice barely above a whisper.

She moved toward the sound, the candle casting a pool of light around her. The door to the parlor was ajar, the darkness inside a yawning abyss. Amelia pushed it open, the hinges groaning in protest.

The room was cloaked in shadow, the outlines of furniture looming like silent sentinels. The scent of lavender hung in the air—a fragrance she associated with her grandmother. Memories flooded back: afternoons spent weaving stories, the warmth of a hand clasped in hers.

“Grandma?” The name slipped from her lips unbidden.

A figure stirred in the corner—a vague silhouette that seemed to waver like mist. Amelia stepped forward, candle held aloft.

“Amelia…” The voice was ethereal, barely a breath, yet it resonated deep within her.

“Grandma?” she repeated, a mix of hope and disbelief coursing through her.

The figure became clearer—a woman draped in a flowing gown, eyes luminous in the darkness. It was the woman from the photograph, the familiarity striking.

“You’ve come back,” the apparition whispered, a tender smile gracing her features.

“I don’t understand,” Amelia stammered, confusion knitting her brow. “Who are you?”

Before the woman could answer, a sudden gust extinguished the candle, plunging the room into darkness. Panic surged through Amelia as she stood frozen, the blackness pressing in.

She fumbled for the lighter in her pocket, hands trembling as she sparked a flame. The light flared, revealing the empty room—no figure, no sign of anyone’s presence.

Heart pounding, she backed out of the parlor, retreating to the safety of the kitchen. The familiar surroundings offered little comfort now, every shadow a potential specter.

“None of this is real,” she insisted, clutching the edge of the table for support. “I’m just tired.”

But deep down, she knew there was more to it—a truth lurking beneath the surface, waiting to be uncovered.

Her gaze fell upon the calendar pinned to the wall. The date circled in red caught her eye: October 31st. Halloween. A day when the veil between worlds was said to be thinnest.

A memory flickered—a conversation with her grandmother about souls returning, about unfinished business. Could that be it? Was someone trying to reach her?

Determination steeled her nerves. If there was a message to be received, she wanted to hear it.

She returned to the parlor, relighting the candle with newfound resolve. “If you’re here, please show yourself,” she called into the stillness.

Silence answered, stretching out until it became almost unbearable. Then, a soft rustling, like the turning of pages.

She followed the sound to the bookshelf, where a leather-bound journal lay askew. Picking it up, she recognized it as one of her grandmother’s diaries.

Flipping through the pages, she found entries detailing dreams—visions of a woman lost, a soul disconnected from time.

“I fear for Amelia,” one entry read. “She wanders, unaware of the shadows that cling to her. I pray she finds her way back.”

Her breath caught. The words didn’t make sense—or did they?

A dawning realization crept over her. The nights of restlessness, the pervasive feeling of being out of place, the unfamiliar photograph, the uncanny resemblance.

She glanced back at the mirror in the hallway, moving towards it with hesitant steps. Raising the candle, she looked at her reflection—really looked.

The face staring back was hers yet different. Subtle changes—a softness around the eyes, an old-fashioned style to her dress she hadn’t noticed before.

Memories flooded in, overwhelming in their intensity. She wasn’t Amelia—not entirely. She was Julia, her ancestor who had lived and died within these walls, lost to time.

She staggered back, the weight of the revelation pressing upon her. Amelia was gone, had been for some time. The insomnia, the shadows, the ghostly apparitions—it was all her own doing, trapped between worlds.

The figure of her grandmother appeared beside her reflection, eyes filled with sorrow. “It’s time to let go, Julia,” she said softly. “You don’t belong here anymore.”

Tears welled in Julia’s eyes—a mix of grief and relief. “I… I didn’t realize,” she whispered. “I was so lost.”

Her grandmother extended a hand. “Come, let’s find peace together.”

Julia nodded, a serene acceptance settling over her. She placed her hand over her grandmother’s, the touch warm and real.

As the first light of dawn filtered through the curtains, the candle flickered and died. The house sighed, settling into a profound quietude.

In another part of town, Amelia stirred in her sleep, a sense of tranquility enveloping her. Her dreams had been strange but comforting—a feeling of connection to something beyond herself. She couldn’t shake the impression that she’d helped someone find their way home.

She rose with the sun, a newfound energy propelling her forward. Today felt different, lighter somehow. As she prepared her morning tea, she glanced at the photograph on her kitchen counter—a recent find from the family attic.

The faded image depicted a woman from generations past—a woman who looked uncannily like her. “Julia,” she’d been told. A relative shrouded in mystery.

Amelia smiled softly. “Rest well,” she whispered, lifting her cup in a silent toast.

Outside, the world awakened, the golden hues of morning casting a hopeful glow. And in the old farmhouse by the hill, peace finally reigned.

September 29, 2024 13:09

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Carol Stewart
05:12 Oct 10, 2024

Beautiful progression and build up of suspense. Loved the youthful indiscretion description and the tangled vines abyss, the being caught between two worlds. Would delete 'moth to a flame'. Another highly readable story, Jim.

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Kim Olson
00:35 Oct 10, 2024

Your descriptions were very vivid and haunting. Excellent story! I like how you ended on a positive, peaceful note also. Good story arc with resolution for the main charcter.

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Keba Ghardt
22:06 Oct 09, 2024

Very dreamy, for you; very immersive atmosphere

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20:52 Oct 09, 2024

Oh, wow! Not a horrible ending for this ghost story. Had to read on to find out what would happen. It ended gently like a butterfly finally landing on a flower. Beautifully done.

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Helen A Smith
14:20 Oct 07, 2024

Such beautiful prose, Jim. Just reading the words alone gives pleasure. I felt as if I was there. It was ghostly, but not scary. A compelling read.

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KA James
20:30 Oct 05, 2024

Such a great slow build, to what seems like an inevitable jump scare, but you turn it into a sort of long lost family tragedy instead. Really keeps you reading and wondering, plus a little on edge. Great ghostly story.

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Mary Bendickson
15:39 Oct 03, 2024

Wow! Wonderfully woven. Hope to see this on winner's list.

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Jim LaFleur
16:31 Oct 03, 2024

Thank you, Mary!

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Linda Kenah
18:44 Oct 02, 2024

Jim-your ability to write a story with such vivid descriptions is amazing. This is a beautiful story, expertly told. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Masterful!

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Jim LaFleur
08:42 Oct 03, 2024

Thank you, Linda!

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Kristi Gott
03:15 Sep 30, 2024

Beautiful story told with poetic descriptions! The atmospheres and moods of the kitchen setting, the pictures, the strange sounds, and the old woman set a spell that immerses the reader. Uniquely creative with a lot of imagination and originality. A delightful and enjoyable read!

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Alexis Araneta
17:19 Sep 29, 2024

Lovely one, Jim ! Such a beautifully descriptive story !

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