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Bedtime Sad Mystery

The dumb spiders were crying in a dilapidated house. Suddenly, the raindrops with the heavy wind were alike fighting with the earth. A six-month pregnant woman was fighting for survival like the deer which was caught by the four hunters.

The new saying resuscitated in her life...

“Having a pregnant woman for lust is a simple thing when the giants rape the four years child".

The chaste woman was approaching death by the four youngsters who were sunk in the drugs.

‘Arun, Enough let’s let her, she can bear no more.’

‘Joseph, the girl who is caught in the hand of boys like us who have the sovereignty is the machine to feed for our sexual appetite.

‘Not for that dude, it’s awful to see her that’s why I said, otherwise no problem, you just enjoy.

She was dying cell by cell like the goat ensnared in the knife of butcher. The face of the baby in her womb appeared like an angel in her eyes. Her hear spoke with a breath. That is heard in the baby’s ear.

Baby, forgive your Mom, The god, who gave the blessedness to carry in my womb, didn’t give the boon to live lifelong as carrying you in my heart. I believed that your smile is my life. That man I married abandoned me, now these men are drinking my soul as an absorbed trickle. My baby, I couldn’t bear this, your Mom couldn’t bear this.

Fate caught her soul like the mirage. Even she was dead that giants were having sex with her body.

Before the dawn, they let her there and left by their car for seeking another body for lust.

She was sleeping eternally in the dilapidated house as the oasis becomes desert.

The dumb spiders and the unarmed raindrops were crying yet.

****

Summer holidays, the vehicles started the journey towards the cool places. Arun and his friends were waiting with a keen for the next day at the road.

‘Kumar, have you bought the drinks, pickle and side dish?

‘Those are a perfectly ready dude, but still, we didn’t find a girl da! It has been long days that we hunted together.’

‘Let’s have a college girl tonight. What do you say, Joseph?

‘Yah Arun! That girl we had last month in that dilapidated house is a super figure da.’

‘Ha... You didn’t forget that still now.... ‘That three were laughing happily.

The evening sky marched and was ready for the dot decorating competition.

Suddenly, Kumar’s phone rang unexpectedly too.

Hello...

He was shocked by the words told at the end of the phone. He stunned.

They asked ‘Kumar what happened?” Kumar couldn’t hear what they asked him. Joseph holds up his shoulders.

Kumar's eyes were filled with sorrow. Tears peeped over the eyelid. He was stuttering.

Our Basith (weeping choked his throat)

Yes, Our Basith, what is for that?

Our Basith has passed away. He has gone.

Arun also stood up from the seat with traumas.

How? What happened to him?

He has hanged himself in his room.

They have reached Basith's house quickly than their agitation.

They were broken like the chips because of the death of their friend who was with them together.

The whole village attended his funeral because he was a rich boy.

The squirts were finished, momentarily the huge crowd converged saying consolation to Basith's family.

Finally, his friends also left from there.

The lip of the lady who bus crutch was raising hands, talked with the lord.

‘Ya Allah you have punished the sinners who destroyed my granddaughter, Ya Rab punish the remaining sins like this.’

 ****

Car was in the journey carrying the minds that couldn’t bear the separation of the friend.

The reticence is the lenitive music in the car.

`Arun...’

‘Joseph, what? ‘Ask me without hesitation’

‘Don’t mistake me.'

‘Hey, when did I have mistaken you?’

‘Again, I tell you to ask me without hesitation.

Kumar's ears also were ready to listen.

‘Do you believe the ghost, devil, and spirit?

‘Why do you ask this?’

‘First, you tell me then I’ll explain you.’

‘Dude, devil, and ghosts are unreal matters.

Those are many people’s illusion and hallucinations that are all.

‘Arun, Basith didn’t hang himself'.

Kumar stopped the car suddenly.

'Arun, what does he mean now? Joseph

What happened to you? Even we haven't drink now. Then why are blabbering? '

‘Kumar, Don't get angry! Just listen to him. You just drive the car.

No...

Kumar agreed to Arun's words.

'Joseph, tell us whatever you think'

'Arun, I mean....'

When he started to say he got shivering Arun touched his shoulders.

'Hey, I am with you tell me boldly’

'When we entered Basith's room, I saw a doll there.'

'What do you mean a doll in Basith's room? I'll believe if you say that there was a girl in his room, doll... clod... Don't relate Alibaba story. '

'Kumar, don't interact, first listen to him what he is going to say. Okay

'Arun, okay. I won't talk any more.

Now tell us.

'I looked closely that doll... there ... there... ( Arun hold up his shoulders) My name was written in blood. I asked Basith's mother about that doll, she asked me which doll.

When I turn to show her, the doll was not there. '

'So that ghost is going to kill you too.' (Kumar again interacted)

'It's okay if it kills me, but... After we buried Basith's body, I saw Kumar's name in that Meezan stone...

'Why are you crying? '

'Kumar's name was written there.'

Again the reticence was the music in that car.

'Kumar... last month.... that dilapidated house, we raped a girl (continued with no end)

'Yeah... what's for that? '

When we were with her, she was dead, not only that, now she is looking at both of you.'

The value of death showed fear in the eyes. When Arun's eyes looked at Kumar, the death of Basith has appeared like a short film behind the backside of him.

Kumar laughed ghastly in the front seat.

‘Kumar, what happened da....?

'Hey.... sinners... I am not Kumar. Somehow I am also your partner. I am that chaste woman's husband. Her spirit killed me first, later Basith, then Kumar...

'What are you blabbering? '

'Yes, your friend is no more...

'Have you drunken?’

(Again that drastic laugh) 'Now your Joseph is going to die without knowing this ...'

The car door of the seat side where Arun seated, was opened and threw him,

Arun couldn't get up from there.

He was floundering because of the strong contuse in his chest; the car was burned in a fire.

The car crashed at the rock.

****

Science world was watching Arun surprisingly Arun departed from his friends and now living isolated, he was given a penalty that had never given to anybody there before by God.

Now, Arun is three months pregnant, because of the curse of a chaste woman.

The eon admired about him. After losing his relations and properties he realized what is really a life...

He was rejected without a dwelling, now his luxurious mansion and palace is that dilapidated house where they tasted the dead body of the chaste woman...

Day by day his stomach has grown big in size.

Even he couldn't commit suicide, his thoughts and activities were tied by the curses of a chaste woman...

'Oh, chaste! Please kill me! I could bear this no more.'

He begs for his death, suffered more than a hundred thousand times thinking his fault. The chaste woman arose before his eyes. She carried a doll also. When he saw her, he melted like a candle...

'Anna (brother) please doesn’t weep’

The heart does its work

A spurt of tear overflowing as the sea.

'I am a sinner, who destroyed you, but still, you call me as your brother ...'

'Anna...! God has given the punishment rather than your sin.'

'Yes completed three months today. After seven months will I get free?'

'No.....' Arun was frozen with eerie. She related continuously.

'Medical world says that you are conceived now, that's not true. According to fate, you should have died in that car accident, but god will increase the shape of the womb till the end of an eon.'

He didn't know to reply to the words of chaste woman, he measured the answer by eyes.

'Hereafter, it is the retribution to men, who destroy the women not only that, all of your friends will join with you in the vault of heaven.'

'The reserved time from God for me is  over

A chaste woman disappeared like dew, leaped up in the flower.

Arun's heart accepted the penalty as penance, realizing the mindset of a woman entirely.

Time passed ten o'clock, usually, the road seems crowded, and today it’s depleted.

After the college, Arun's sister Nithya was going home, in the rain as she couldn't get the bus.

Her wetted dress showed her body parts as beautiful paintings. Whilst, Varun and his three friends bowed down heads, which had come in bail and was arrested in the rape case.

Nithya crossed that place with afraid of her chastity, as she has seen their faces, viral in newspaper and televisions.

Today, Varun and his friends are one month pregnant, because of the help for someone's sin.

****

June 15, 2021 04:44

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Wilson Howard
05:05 Jun 20, 2021

Men like them don't deserve to get pregnant, that's why God does not punish them like this. Pregnancy is a beautiful experience no man like him can have it. If there is really a punishment then this is revenge, harassment which only a victim can decide. Anyways, good style of writing.

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:21 Jul 28, 2021

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Aiyana Henderson
01:18 Jun 20, 2021

What a messed up story. Great writing though! I feel like the characters got their karma.

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:21 Jul 28, 2021

Great Pleasure! Thank You So Much My Dear Friend!

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Rayhan Hidayat
17:50 Jun 18, 2021

That is unironically a great title. Kudos ;)

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:20 Jul 28, 2021

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03:48 Feb 12, 2023

I think I understnd the story, but even if I don't, it is so beautifully written, I felt like crying for all of them. This paragraph is so beautiful: Baby, forgive your Mom, The god, who gave the blessedness to carry in my womb, didn’t give the boon to live lifelong as carrying you in my heart. I believed that your smile is my life. That man I married abandoned me, now these men are drinking my soul as an absorbed trickle. My baby, I couldn’t bear this, your Mom couldn’t bear this. There are some wording mistakes, but I can only unders...

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Susan Catucci
18:47 Sep 17, 2022

I understand many of the comments others have offered here. Perhaps this is odd, but by the end of reading this, I loved that not every passage was clear to me. This was a story I read with my eyes but my heart and soul were most affected and I found the entire experience beautiful and meaningful. I may read it again a few more times to let my brain catch up, but I'm not yet convinced that is necessary, or that I would enjoy it any more than I did. Bravo, Mohamed.

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Tommy Goround
21:07 Aug 03, 2022

No new stories in...a year?

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Vadasz Sara
15:41 May 07, 2022

This story is pretty much about female struggle, beyond the basic theme, the horrible crime. The gang has a habit to rape women and only the curse of a "chaste" woman works, while rape is always rape. Pregnancy appears as a punishment, not a honour and responsability to give life. Nithya - I guess she was attacked too - seems to be a scapegoat in the revenge game, if I understood correctly. The storyline is enough for a movie or novel, there's a lot of potential for a genre of your choice.

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Mohamed Sarfan
13:26 May 12, 2022

Violence against women continues in this world moment by moment. But, change alone is going away until today. Great Pleasure! Heartfelt thanks for your in-depth reading and valuable feedback.

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Rose Lind
04:33 Apr 25, 2022

There were drunken soldiers who raped a young woman, as she was dying she said Allah is watching

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Brian Stanton
23:28 Apr 06, 2022

I have a feeling English is not your first language. I suggest you write in your mother tongue then have it translated, and not Google translate. I'd like to read this, but I can't understand it.

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15:47 Jul 25, 2021

Again, another wonderfully imagined story with alot of beautiful imagery. Your visual depiction of certain scenes is very praiseworthy. This is the second straight story of yours that I have read. I must say you have a very fertile writerly imagination, something that helps propel your story plot line forward with a lot of gusto. However if I may suggest, it would go well if you would a little more care about proper grammatical structure and syntax. I noticed more than a few tense errors, sentence construction flaws, and ambiguities. My f...

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:20 Jul 28, 2021

It's Valuable Comment; I'm Really Excited. I am very pleased with your loving command and appreciation. I owe a debt of gratitude to a sweet friend who loves my fantasies. I will definitely write better in the coming seasons as you would expect. Great Pleasure! Thank You So Much My Dear Friend!

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Andrea Magee
22:06 Jul 16, 2021

Another terrific story!

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Mohamed Sarfan
17:33 Jul 17, 2021

Thank You!

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04:21 Jul 07, 2021

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:14 Jul 28, 2021

Thank For The Sharing Of Information! Gook Luck & All The Best

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Cole Lane
13:21 Jun 24, 2021

Mohamed, this was such a haunting story, done very well. I read this some time ago and just re-read it again. Your writing style is full of pictures, like the way you describe even the approach of night as a 'dot decorating competition'. You bring these wonderful subtle details that are not cliché, but really interesting. This story was a heavy topic that was handled well. Adding the doll and the spirit was an exceptional, never underestimate the wraith of a Grandmother's prayer for retribution. :) I look forward to reading more of your s...

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:13 Jul 28, 2021

It's Valuable First Class Comment. I am glad to have received as a gift the praise of a loving heart. My humble affections for the pleasant companion who spent time reading. Great Pleasure! Thank You So Much My Dear Friend!

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Arlex Rodriguez
13:22 Jun 19, 2021

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Mohamed Sarfan
07:08 Jul 28, 2021

Great Pleasure! Thank You So Much My Dear Friend!

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