In school theres always the popular kids and the quiet kids. The popular kids go to all the parties and are known throughout the school while the quiet kids sit at the back of the room and keep to themselves. Some would say that these two groups wouldn't mix well but here to prove you wrong are Freaya and Alex. Freya is a popular girl who was always the life of the party and incredibly positive. Alex is the shy girl thats not really one for getting along with others and prefers to keep to herself. One day in class Freaya's pencil broke so she went in her bag to get another one. After a quick search she couldn't find one so she asked the person behind her, "Excuse me, do you have a pencil I could borrow." Alex looks up to see Freaya's bright smile, she reaches in her bag and pulls out a pretty blue pencil. "Here you go." Alex says as she hands it to her. Freaya thanks her and takes the pencil. Later after class Freaya goes to Alex to return the pencil, "Here's your pencil back." Alex looks at the pencil and then at Freaya and says, "Actually you can keep it, it matches you more anyway." Freaya grins, "I can keep it, thank you. I'm Freaya by the way." Alex smiles back, "Yeah I know, I'm Alex." "Nice to meet you Alex. So I heard there's gonna be a party tonight are you going?" Freaya suggests. "Oh um, im not really into things like that, I don't like crowded spaces with a lot of people." Alex explains. "Oh thats cool I understand, if you don't want to got to the party then do you maybe want to hang out at my place instead?" Freaya replies. Alex is hesitant but then accepts, "Uh, sure sounds like fun." Freaya takes her phone out of her bag and hands it to Alex and says, "Here put your number in my phone and I'll text you the details." Alex gives Freaya her number and hands the phone back to her. Freaya takes it and says, "Thanks I can't wait, see you tomorrow. Later that night Freaya texts her with plans for a sleepover the next day. Alex is still unsure about this whole thing but agrees to it anyway hoping it might bring her out of her shell a little bit. The next day after school Freaya's parents picked them up and went to there house. When they got there Alex was mesmerized by how big there house was, "Whoa this place is like a castle." Freaya giggles and replies "I guess you could call it that, here I'll show you to my room." They go to her room and Alex gets comfortable on her bed while Freaya gets some snacks. Freaya comes back with chips, candy, and drinks. Alex's eyes glow as she sees her favorite candy. Freaya notices and hands it to her, "Was this the one you were looking at?" Alex nods and says, "Thank you." with a smile. Freaya smiles back at her then sits on her bed next to Alex. Freaya turns on her TV and they start watching movies. Alex really started to relax and feel comfortable until one of Freaya's brothers bursts in, "Hey Freaya, oh you've got a friend over what's her name?" Alex senses the trouble and scoots back and turns in to a ball. "Her name is Alex, now please go your interrupting our movie." Freaya answers. "Why do you have to be like that I just want to hang out with you and your new buddy." Her brother teases as he sits next to Alex. Alex scoots closer to Freaya for protection, Freaya sees how uneasy Alex is. "Please go away your making my friend uncomfortable." Freaya says while guarding Alex. He finally leaves the room and Alex moves back to beside Freaya, "Thanks." Freaya smiles and says "No problem my family can be annoying some times, now back to the movie." But for the next few minutes all Alex could think about was Freaya using the word "Friend." Alex didn't really have very many friends and she like it that way but she didn't think she would ever be friends with the most popular girl in school. She then thought that they were just to different and if they were friends it wouldn't last long and this is only a one time thing so she had to enjoy it while it lasts. The night went on and Alex and Freaya were having a blast playing games, telling each other story's and watching more movies. They had a fun night but it came and went and now it was time for Alex to go home. She had fun but didn't think much of the night because it would probably be her last but little did she know that she just made a friend. Alex thought they were to different but she'd soon realize that they make a great team. Each day Freaya would try and get closer to Alex and of course Alex was to shy so Freaya had to plan all of there hang outs. She then began to think that maybe Freaya was good for her and helping her grow out of her comfort zone little by little. Soon after Freaya decided it was time for Alex to go to a real party. Alex was still a bit skeptical about it but trusted Freaya. She never thought she would but she had fun, though she did have to go outside or in empty rooms to get away from the crowd. Freaya and Alex learned from each other and despite their differences they still had a lot of fun together and hung out all the time so it was time for Alex to accept that opposites attract and Freaya was not just her friend but her best friend. The moral of the story is that Freaya and Alex were the best of friends and they were complete opposites.
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Hi! I'm from critique circle and I have to say that this story is really cute. Your structure of the story is very easy to follow, and it was a nice read for me. For feedback, there are some typos (Alex thought they were to(o) different but she'd soon realize that they make a great team.) And I'd say you can really bring your story to life if you use more figurative language. Describing the settings may help too. These are just my suggestions though. You did a good job!
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I'm here off the Critique Circle! The sequence of events does well by ear & by E-reader, your punctuation and sentence length matched fairly well to it, so I imagine any future changes in your style will too. You did well introducing a little of Alex's perspective on Freaya, and a little of how she managed to build a bond with her through their dialogue, I would've like to see a bit more, but that's just cause I'm greedy. Thanks for writing!
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