The place itself wasnβt particularly bone-chilling, in fact, it just looked like any other 19th century Gothic Manor, but just thinking of its contents made me shiver. The house emitted a musty odor that could be smelled even from where I was standing, making it seem ever more terrifying and ominous. I donβt believe Iβve ever seen a house this torn and tattered before, which only made it seem even more mysterious and ancient. It seemed to grin an eerie, sinister grin that became even more menacing as I continued to stare at it. It almost felt as if it were watching me, waiting for the right moment to strike. As I turned to face the forest beyond it, the house smiled at me one last time, and a cold hand gripped my shoulder tightly.
I jumped up, frightened, alarmed and overall just terrified I was going to be abducted when I heard a boy-ish laugh from behind me.
βYou shouldβve seen your face!β he cackled, bent over and laughing like a hysteric hyena. In truth, I had no idea who this person was, so the idea of him laughing at me seemed unfit for the situation.
βWhat the heck!β I sputtered, annoyed and still a bit frightened, βWhy in the world would you scare me like that? I donβt even know you!β
βOh yeah,β he said, grinning, βIβm Benjamin. See? Now we know each other!β
I rolled my eyes, but a smile was creeping up my face as I said βWell, Mr. Benjamin, Iβm afraid we still technically donβt βknowβ each other because you do not know my name.β
He sighed in vanquish, shaking his head βI suppose youβve got me there,β he murmured, but grinned as he continued, βso what do I have to do to earn the rights to know your name?β
Truth be told, I was just going to tell him my name, but his question sparked an idea in my mind. βWell,β I said, announcing each word with a bit of a flair, like Iβd seen black-mailers do on television, swinging the last syllable of each word up, βI suppose you could retrieve something of my erm- great-grandmotherβs from that house over there.β I finished, gesturing to the house with my thumb. I definitely didnβt want to go in there, not alone at least. To many terrible memories that I couldnβt relive.
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As we walked down the overgrown brush of the hill, Benjamin stumbled a bit. I could tell he was nervous, and honestly, I donβt blame him. Certainly going into an old, rotting house from the 19th century wasnβt something that he would want to do on a Saturday, or any day of the week for that matter. As we neared the former accommodation, I noticed that the ebony paint on the house was peeling, showing the old, rotting wood underneath its peaceful brilliance. Stones had fallen off the structure, giving it a bit of a polka-dot pattern. Many of the windows were broken, showing the dusty, ancient innards of the previously comfy abode. Iβm surprised there wasnβt a βCondemnedβ sign on the house, it was so treacherous-looking.
βI think weβre crazy.β Benjamin commented, shaking his head, βGoing into this place is a death wish.β.
βMaybe youβre right,β I answered, βBut my Great-Grandma recently passed away, so Iβd like to bring something to my Grandma to remind her of her mom.β
βUnderstandable,β he commented, βbut wouldnβt that make your grandma more grief-stricken? And someone surely moved into that wreck after your great-grandma moved out. What if there is nothing left of hers?β
βIβm going to get something for her, and though people moved in after her, she had some stuff hidden in the floorboards, old china cups and candles and such. I know there is. And itβs not a wreck, itβs charming!β
βIf you say so. Then youβll tell me your name?β he asked, tilting his head slightly to the side.
βYeah.β I promised solemnly, gently kicking a dandelion with the toe of my black flats, watching the little white wisps float off, caught by the breeze and carried away.
βI hope I donβt regret this,β Benjamin muttered, jogging down the rest of the hill, Hardly audible, he added, βIf I die in there, Iβm going to haunt you as a ghost for the rest of your life!β
βHah, sure!β I replied, chasing after him.
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The closer we neared the house, the more self-evident it was that the place was completely falling apart. Most of the windows had fallen in due to weathering, allowing strange purple mold to grow up the side of the frame. Lots of shingles from the roof had fallen off, creating little black squares in the overgrown yard. Rats scurried around, crawling into the house through nooks and crannies. The porch wood was rotted, and some of the boards had broken to show the crawl space underneath. All in all, it looked like something out of a movie, those kidnapping ones where they take a kid to an abandoned house in the country and hide them there until they get the ransom.
βOh my word,β Benjamin breathed, as if the air had been knocked out of him momentarily, βHow am I supposed to go into there and not get sick from all the mold?β
βHere!β I said, handing him my scarf, the old and floral kind that used to be popular but now only older people wore them, βPut this around your nose and mouth.β
βYou'd better have a great name.β he mumbled, tying the scarf around his neck and pulling it up over his nose and mouth.
βYouβre welcome.β
Grinning through his makeshift mask, he pushed open the corroded door and took a step inside.
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You could hear Ben walking around, hear the boards creak from underneath him. Each step he took was gentle and slow, almost as if he were full of feathers instead of organs. After waiting for a bit, Benjamin emerged from the rubble of a house, triumphantly holding a piece of worn checkered cloth wrapped around some unidentifiable object.
βWhatβs in the cloth?β I asked, grinning and gleeful, as if I was still just a child.
βTell me your name first.β he protested, pulling the βmaskβ off his face to reveal a giddy grin.
βFine.β I muttered, shaking my head in defeat, βJust please donβt laugh or think itβs weird, alright?β
βI promise.β he grinned, holding up his hand to show the scoutβs honor symbol.
βAlright then, itβs Lyvia Caelum.β I muttered, pushing my hair out of my eyes in embarrassment. βItβs latin.β
I expected him to suppress a laugh or a snort, but instead he just looked almost jealous. βMan, youβre lucky,β he commented, smiling broadly, βmy middle name is Otis!β
Holding back my laughter, I grinned a goofy grin, the kind where you only smile on one side of your face. βOk, now give me the goods!β
Benjamin placed the make-do bag on the grass, which was unusually green considering it hadnβt rained in quite a while. Carefully pulling back each corner, he opened up the βbagβ to reveal its contents. A small china cup with intricate pink roses painted onto it, worn and slightly cracked. A few buttons. A piece of pale blue calico with yellow and purple wildflowers emblemed onto it. An old leather book with the initials LCM monogrammed onto the center. Best of all, a stack of letters held together with a bright red ribbon.
βI accidentally broke a floorboard,β Benjamin explained, scratching the back of his neck, βthese things were underneath it. Sorry I couldnβt get you anything bigger, but that place gives me the creeps.β
βItβs perfect.β I said, hugging the treasures to my chest.
βIt is?β
β Itβs just what I need. Thank you, Benjamin. Itβs perfect.β I repeated my voice sincerely, stroking the journal that was finally mine again, setting down the letters addressed to Lyvia my Love, weathered from time but the intricate cursive still as piercing as when it was originally addressed.
βYouβre welcome, Lyvia.β
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Hello, I enjoyed your story immensely. I know having people look at your work can be a bit daunting! The overall story is excellent. I just felt that if you changed some of the sentences around and cut out some words then it would read better. for example I jumped up, frightened, alarmed and overall just terrified I was going to be abducted when I heard a boy-ish laugh from behind me. could read - Something frightened me. I jumped up terrified. Was I going to be abducted? Then, from behind me, I heard a boyish laugh. I feel it i...
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Thank you for your feedback! I agree, that sentence was a run-on and a bit on the tongue. I need to work on my wording a bit, I do see to leave some gray area and incorrect grammar.
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This was too cute! Wonderfully written with fantastic characters that I became invested in. Great first submission, I hope you continue writing! You are wonderful at it :)
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Thank you so much for your feedback! In all honesty, I didn't even know if I would even get approved, let alone get such a great comment! I'm very glad you enjoyed my first story, and I hope to continue my writing.
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