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Science Fiction Contemporary Drama

When I woke up, the world was dead.

Somewhere in the darkness, a sound rippled - soft at first, like distant rain. Within seconds the gentle whooshes grew louder until a chaotic thrumming enveloped the room.

I lay still, my eyes shut, trying to make sense of it. The unworldly noise had a hypnotic pulse. It grew and shifted, rising and falling like an oncoming blizzard. Wings. Hundreds of them, beating the air in frantic, uneven rhythms. 

I prised open my tender eyelids and squinted at the window. Outside, an avalanche of fleeting silhouettes swept past the vertical blinds.

Starlings. They whirled en masse in a dense cloud, cavorting alongside the guttering and eaves with a movement both chaotic and purposeful. It was as if the world beyond my room was an endless choreographed celebration of the sun’s dwindling embers.

The thrumming of their wings filled the air until bright stars appeared in the heavens, heralding a cessation of the frenzy. Soon silence reigned once more. There was no other noise now - no hum of machines, no distant voices, no footsteps in the hall.

Above me, the dull glow of a green fire exit light flickered below stained ceiling tiles. The rest of the room was dark, its corners engulfed by deep shadow. 

I was alone.

It took an age to sit up. My aching limbs were heavy and unfamiliar. Tubes pulled at my arms, tethering me to the bed. In the dim light, I could make out an IV drip and tangled cables attached to silent monitors.

One by one, I freed myself. The cannula slid from my arm with a sharp sting, and blood welled up briefly before I pressed my thumb against the wound. The IV stand teetered as I pushed it away, the faint metallic rattle echoing in the silence.

I swung my legs over the edge of the bed and extended my wobbling legs. The thin cotton gown clung to my moist back, and I shivered as my stocking feet touched the cold, hard flooring. I gripped the bedstead as my muscles adjusted to bearing my weight and gazed around the deserted room in the pale light.

What had happened here?

The security door at the end of the ward caught my eye. Normally, it was locked tight, its keypad flashing red, the hum of electricity a constant reminder of its function. Now, though, it hung ajar, the corridor beyond was enigmatic and inviting.

I hesitated, glancing at the fire exit lights above. The emergency power must have kicked in—but it clearly wasn’t enough to keep the security systems running.

It wasn’t just my ward. The entire hospital was lifeless.

I steadied myself and crept toward the door, my lightweight socks whispering against the pitted linoleum floor. A faint smell drifted past me—smoke, sharp and acrid, mixed with something metallic. My stomach twisted, my mind racing with half-formed theories. Fire? An evacuation? Or something worse?

I pushed the door open and stepped into the corridor beyond.

The hospital stretched out before me, a labyrinth of darkness punctuated only by the ghostly green glow of fire exit signs. The silence pressed against my ears, thick and suffocating.

Each room I passed was the same: vacated desks, abandoned computer terminals, empty beds with sheets crumpled as if their occupants had vanished mid-slumber. A wheelchair lay tipped over by the lift, its half open doors frozen in place. The faint smell of antiseptic clung to the air, but it was overpowered by the acrid tang of smoke.

I reached the stairwell and paused, gripping the rail for support. The smoke was stronger here, wafting up from the lower levels. It curled through the air, wrapping around me like an augury, depositing delicate ash on my gown.

As I turned a corner in the dim light, my foot caught on something sharp. A sudden, blinding pain shot through me. I stumbled, my bare foot landing on broken glass that glittered faintly in the glow of the fire exit light.

“Ah!” I hissed, pulling back and hopping on one leg. Blood welled up from a jagged cut on the sole of my foot, spilling onto the floor.

I reached down, trying to examine the wound, but the pain was already spreading, throbbing with each beat of my heart. I had no choice but to limp onward, leaving faint red smears behind me as I moved.

The ground floor was worse. The cafeteria was deserted, tables overturned and trays of half-eaten food scattered across the floor. A vending machine stood smashed in the corner, its contents long gone.

The fire exit doors were heavy, but they gave way with a single, desperate shove. They burst open with a hollow clang, and I stumbled out into the open air. The drizzle hit my skin like tiny needles, cold and biting. 

I was unfamiliar with the hospital’s service yard and noticed a vehicle exit on the far side of the surrounding chain-link fence. The area contained a dozen industrial-sized refuse containers, enough space for a collection vehicle to turn around and allocated parking spaces for ten cars. All the skips were due to be emptied and overflowed with broken office furniture, surgical waste and swollen black bags, their contents reeking of decomposing matter.

The foul stench of decay caught the back of my throat as I shuffled toward the garbage. The wretched miasma nipped my eyes, making me grimace as if I’d sliced raw onions. I wiped away the bitter teardrops with trembling fingers and reached into the nearest skip. I was desperate for anything useful and hauled out a discarded sack of heavy angular items wrapped in black plastic. As I rifled through the contents, that’s when I saw it: a length of twisted lead piping, its surface tarnished but solid. I pulled it free and tested its weight in my hands. If there was anyone—or anything—still out there, I wasn’t going to face it unarmed.

As I skulked onward, a sharp movement caught my eye. A tawny owl perched on the edge of a skip, its head jerking and tilting as it foraged with its beak. The bird’s feathers glistened in the dim light, and a tattered scrap of food dangled for a moment before vanishing into the raptor’s throat.

I froze, watching the bird with a mix of fascination and disquiet. Its unblinking obsidian eyes flicked in my direction. For a split second it judged me with contempt, then returned to its carrion, indifferent to my presence.

I remained transfixed by the encounter. The only sound was the faint rustling of its wings and the occasional rasp of its claws against the skip’s metal rim.

“Mister Johnson!”

The high-pitched voice was sharp and unexpected, shattering the quiet. The startled bird let out a harsh, nasal screech as it took flight. Its wings beat the air furiously, scattering rain droplets as it rose in a frantic spiral before vanishing into the darkness.

They found me crouched between the bins, my grip on the pipe white-knuckled.

The woman in the rain spattered scrubs who’d called my name edged forward with her open palms visible. Her beady eyes were embedded in a face like a cracked granite escarpment and peered at me from under a dead-crow mop of hair. A few feet behind her, two men hovered in white uniforms, their postures tense. One held a syringe; the other carried restraints.

“Stay back!” I shouted, jabbing the hollow cudgel in front of me.

“Jamie,” Nurse Bailey said, her voice reduced to a soothing whisper. “We’re here to help. You’re hurt. Look at your foot—you’re bleeding.”

I glanced down at my left foot. The sock was soaked through, the dark stain spreading with every heartbeat.

“It’s nothing!” I barked, though my grip on the pipe faltered.

“Come on,” she cooed, stepping closer. “Let me take care of it. You’ve been through so much already. Let me fix this, and we’ll get you back inside where it’s safe.”

Her words slithered into my ears, and I felt my resolve waver. My head spun with exhaustion, pain, and confusion.

“Not… going back,” I muttered, but the words sounded weak even to me.

Her smile widened like a horizontal fissure. “It’s okay. We’ll patch you up and talk later. Let me help you, Jamie.”

The guards inched closer, their faces inscrutable as they emerged from the shadows. I was too slow to stop them. They wrenched the pipe from my hand, and tackled me to the ground.

Bailey crouched beside me, her jaw clenched as her forefinger flicked the raised syringe. “Shh, Jamie. It’s okay,” she said, forcing the plunging up until the air bubbles escaped. “We’ll get you back upstairs, and everything will make sense again.”

Her voice dripped with condescension, and I felt the sharp prick of the needle in my arm. My struggles slowed, the world sagged at the edges and my eyelids fluttered shut.

As they hauled me back inside, the smell of smoke lingered in the air.

Maybe Bailey was right. Perhaps the fire was just a false alarm. Or was it the beginning of the end and we were the only survivors?

The End 

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10:28 Dec 18, 2024

What a read! Two things stood out to me. The mystery of the smell of something burning. And the way you describe the nurse: "Her beady eyes were embedded in a face like a cracked granite escarpment and peered at me from under a dead-crow mop of hair." Those two descriptions engaged something in the primal part of my brain. I felt Jaime's panic in this story. Well done.

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Howard Halsall
12:55 Dec 18, 2024

Hey Wayne, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. I’m pleased it engaged you in such a powerful manner and hope you’ll return to read my future submissions…. HH :)

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Kim Olson
12:15 Dec 13, 2024

Great story. Very gripping! I agree this could be the start of a sci-fi novel.

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Howard Halsall
23:01 Dec 13, 2024

Hey Kim, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. I’m pleased you enjoyed it and maybe I’ll follow up your suggestion to develop the idea…. HH :)

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Martin Ross
18:50 Dec 12, 2024

A very timely tale, considering the maelstrom of chaos, delusion, apocalyptic anxiety and apocalyptic fervor we face. I could see this as the first chapter of a great sci-fi novel or metaphysical mindblower on societal/mental deterioration. Nicely done again, Howard! One note: I think plunger instead of plunger, but that may be a quirk of US-UK vernacular, so for what it is or not worth.😊

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Howard Halsall
21:41 Dec 12, 2024

Hey Martin, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your reactions. I’m glad you enjoyed it and pleased it provided food for thought. I hadn’t seriously considered expanding the idea, however, now you mention it, maybe it has legs…. HH :) BTW - I’m uncertain about your ‘plunger’ note…. Did I miss something?

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Martin Ross
23:45 Dec 12, 2024

Hi, Howard -- it makes a wonderful standalone, but I think there's opportunity for it as a launching board as well. It may be I'm thinking more commercial today -- I finally sent a few stories off to anthologies, and we'll see how it goes. “Shh, Jamie. It’s okay,” she said, forcing the plunging up until the air bubbles escaped. “We’ll get you back upstairs, and everything will make sense again.” I don't know if you intended plunging or plunger there.

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Howard Halsall
00:10 Dec 13, 2024

Hey Martin, Concerning “plunger” - I missed that, so thanks, you’re quite correct - I should have spotted that one. BTW - I hope you get a favourable response from the anthologies you mentioned - positive recognition and inclusion in a book always helps to bolster one’s spirits. Have you submitted a collection of your stories in one genre or a variety of different styles? I’m guessing they’re for a themed publication…. HH

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Martin Ross
02:47 Dec 13, 2024

Thanks. I’ve sent one to Alfred Hitchcock Mystery Magazine (a longshot), and the other to an upcoming crime indie anthology with an anniversary theme. I have self-published seven collections of my Reedsy mysteries on Amazon, but I’d love to get a few into anthologies or magazines. I appreciate your encouragement, Howard!

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Howard Halsall
23:07 Dec 13, 2024

Hey Martin, It sounds like you’re make excellent progress, however I’m more than happy to offer any suggestions and wish you the best of luck with those submissions…. Take care HH :)

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Anthony Andrés
09:04 Dec 11, 2024

A gripping ambiguous ending can enhance a story, and this was very engaging. I read the story twice to see if there were any clues. I'm personally leaning towards mental illness. Well done!

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Howard Halsall
23:22 Dec 11, 2024

Hey Anthony, Thank you for taking the time to read my story (twice) and share your thoughts. I’m pleased you enjoyed it and appreciate your comments; I reckon you’re correct about the circumstances; the idea suggests a mental health issue. In many ways the story is based on the experience of waking up following a general anaesthetic and discovering the ward empty and thinking a terrible event had occurred. HH

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05:14 Dec 10, 2024

I loved this from beginning to end.

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Howard Halsall
06:49 Dec 10, 2024

Hey Jessica, Thank you for taking the time to read my story and share your thoughts. I’m pleased you enjoyed it and hope you’ll return to read future submissions…. HH :)

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Marty B
22:53 Dec 09, 2024

Great opening, he description of a murmuration of starlings was great - 'They whirled en masse in a dense cloud, cavorting alongside the guttering and eaves with a movement both chaotic and purposeful. It was as if the world beyond my room was an endless choreographed celebration of the sun’s dwindling embers.' This lady seems scary! 'Her beady eyes were embedded in a face like a cracked granite escarpment and peered at me from under a dead-crow mop of hair. ' Thanks!

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Howard Halsall
23:19 Dec 09, 2024

Hey Marty, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts; they’re much appreciated. I had a lot of fun with tale, even if the end is a bit ambiguous….. HH :)

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19:34 Dec 09, 2024

You had me going there, Howard. Has he dementia? And all was not as he believed it to be? I am very worried about the ending - is it really the world's end? Where did the hospital staff come from if the hospital was deserted? Why wasn't he found sooner? Choice use of strong descriptive words. Now that he is sedated, how will he hear and understand any explanation? You have portrayed a truly awful situation, regardless of its truth. What do you believe the truth is?

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Howard Halsall
22:44 Dec 09, 2024

Hi Kaitlyn, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. To be honest, the idea was an experiment in ambiguity and very open ended. Without wanting to be deliberately obscure, I certainly wondered where it was going when I wrote it and I’m still figuring out how to explain the events and the denouement. However, I’m pleased it invites questions and interpretation as it could also be the start of a longer piece…. HH :)

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Mary Bendickson
21:58 Dec 07, 2024

Thought he would be stumbling along forever. Hope his 'rescuers' were really rescuing him:) Thanks for liking 'Seeking Fair Lady'. Congrats on your shortlist win. Sounds like you are a pro to be there for the forth time. Hope you get the award before Trudy has to kill you:)

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Howard Halsall
08:30 Dec 08, 2024

Hey Mary, Thank you for reading my latest piece and sharing your thoughts. I guess it offers more questions than answers, which can’t be a bad thing; maybe it’ll linger a while…. Yes, fingers crossed and who knows? Maybe fourth time lucky. I’m also providing half a dozen B&W pen illustrations for the accompanying poetry anthology too, so it’s going to get busy…. And now to make the situation even more complicated, for being a ‘nosey-Parker’, I have to look over my shoulder for Trudy - yikes!! Take care HH

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Mary Bendickson
19:26 Dec 08, 2024

Best of luck on all counts.

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Howard Halsall
20:38 Dec 08, 2024

Thanks, Mary…. I might need a bit of luck :)

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Alexis Araneta
17:51 Dec 07, 2024

Ooooh, gripping. Of course, you did the tone so well. Poor Jamie! Lovely wirk !

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Howard Halsall
18:47 Dec 07, 2024

Hey Alexis, Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. It was a grim story, however the prompt required a dark tone, together with a certain ambiguity at the end…. Take care HH

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Trudy Jas
01:03 Dec 07, 2024

Such a cheerful story, Howard. :-) Poor Jamie had been left behind in the evacuation.

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Howard Halsall
01:51 Dec 07, 2024

Hmmm…. Well, I guess dystopian stories invite a certain brooding tone - it kinda goes with the territory :). However, it’s great to hear from again and read your latest submission. HH

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Trudy Jas
02:26 Dec 07, 2024

You're right. Didn't mean to make light of your work. It's just that I've read quite a few of "last man" stories this week. Though I was glad to see, that "your man" was not alone. Nothing that a good shot in the arm wouldn't set right. :-)

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Trudy Jas
02:26 Dec 07, 2024

You're right. Didn't mean to make light of your work. It's just that I've read quite a few of "last man" stories this week. Though I was glad to see, that "your man" was not alone. Nothing that a good shot in the arm wouldn't set right. :-)

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Howard Halsall
02:32 Dec 07, 2024

No offence taken, Trudy. BTW - Are you still judging submissions for the contest? I bet you have your work cut out accepting that challenge every week because I imagine there’s a tight deadline….

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Trudy Jas
02:43 Dec 07, 2024

Yes, I still judge. I'm by no means the only one, but tend to read more than the minimum. I try to read everyone who's on my "follow" list in the week before. if/when I find one or more that I think are shortlist-worthy, then I'll pick those and spend Saturday's reading from the top down - the ones who submitted early. We're supposed to be done by Tuesday, Wednesday latest. But that's just me. I'm sure thate are judges who do it differently. How are you? Anything new?

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Howard Halsall
03:05 Dec 07, 2024

Hmmm. Do you get any criteria, guidance or guide lines, Trudy? I suppose you can’t reveal the inner workings or you’d have to kill me if I persuaded you otherwise. It’s all so mysterious…. Anyways, I’m well thanks and ploughing my way through a few novels and writing ‘tech’ books. As much as I enjoy short stories, I do enjoy a jolly good page-turner; it’s so useful to step back from the weekly ‘contest’ and recharge one’s batteries and absorb new writing advice too. Oh, and I got shortlisted for the annual Hammond House Publication’s Short ...

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