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Fantasy Holiday Science Fiction

The sun's final sliver hovered over the Ibiza horizon as James pinched Shauna's knee to his right. They watched from the roof of a 20-story hotel three blocks from the beach. The two of them sang together:


"Oh, tell me why, do we build castles in the sky? Oh, tell me why….".


"I would pinch the sun from the sky for you if I could," James whispered.


Shauna began to laugh as James belted the female vocal with eyes closed to disastrous effect. The ecstasy pills from the previous night were still lingering, and both were keen to embrace the moment before an evening in the hotel. James' high note and Shauna's laugh were stopped dead by a short but jolting rumble to the Earth beneath them.


"Terremoto!!!" a distant voice screamed.


The couple jumped up and leaned against each other to maintain balance. The sliver of sun in the distance began to flicker like a disco light.


"That was beyond an earthquake," James said to Shauna. A violent thrust sent both of them to the ground. As they sat there trembling, the sun rose again above the horizon. James and Shauna held each other while those on the beach and ground beneath did the same or darted off in various directions.


"James, what is it? Is it the pills?" Shauna cried.


"No, my head is clear", he replied.


The sun quickly rose to a late afternoon height and stopped. The Earth rumbled again, and the sun shifted down to the position of early evening. As Shauna looked through squinted eyes at the misplaced star, she could make out a hand holding the sun in place. "Can you see that, James? This has to be the drugs!"


"James looked closely, his eyes partially shielded by his Oakleys. "No, it's there; that is a hand." Two fingers are pinching the sun like a ping pong ball…."


As he spoke, the surrounding screams rose to deafening levels as an enormous finger parted the sky and entered gently into the sea. The finger shone a brilliant turquoise, and scrapes and bruises decorated its surface. Following a more incredible rumble, the Earth was rotated back and forth by the finger, throwing people 10 feet either way. James and Shauna were kept on the roof by a 5-foot-high parapet.


The Mediterranean Ocean flooded the beach before flushing the town beneath them further inland. Screams of the drowning could be heard, while the sun's movement manifested to the terrified crowds as a dimming and brightening of light. The air temperature fluctuated ten degrees up and down again and again. James and Shauna held each other and couldn't look. Somehow, the hotel remained standing.  


Shauna found the courage to look again at the giant finger. She saw its multiple sections pulsate as it twisted and shifted the globe in one direction after the other. As she observed more closely, she witnessed the gravitational pull as boats and swimmers flew to its lower region.


"James, what is going on? Smiley faces are sick, you said. This isn't a smiley comedown."


"This isn't the damn drugs," James cried back."


A second finger then lowered from the sky to position itself further inland. It began to sweep buildings away side-to-side as if clearing a space. Still, their hotel remained untouched.


Booms and crashes accompanied the screams as waters sounded beneath like a power shower to the ear. James got gazed upwards. The sky had dimmed. "Look!" he said.


The couple focused to see the intricacies of a giant palm of a hand as the lone finger wreaked havoc around them. The cold air had hit sub-zero temperatures, and they trembled now for warmth, and not only with fear.


"What is happening?" Shauna said. "Is this a dream? Whether I am dreaming or just tripping out, don't ever let me swallow anything small and round ever again!"


"I wish it were sweetheart," James replied. This giant hand, this rumbling Earth, that sun, it's all real…"


 Shauna felt herself being pulled backward along the roof's surface by the gravitational pull of the unidentified hand. As this happened, James wrapped his arm around a nearby pipe and held onto Shauna. Their screams were drowned out by a slow crackling with intermittent taps from above.


The people around all seemed to quieten as if in anticipation before a booming audio bellowed over the landscape in a strange, high-pitched language. The blocks of sound scratched and squealed before a semblance of English emerged from the din.


"Apologies, species. One of our young misplaced its favorite rock. We are currently searching for it. Your side of this galactic body is currently the least affected, as your opposite is the site for the thumb in what you call a pinch. All efforts are being made to minimize long-term damage."


The couple became entranced through shock and seized to acknowledge their surroundings. Their minds wavered between the previous night's dancefloor and the harmonies they felt and sang during the world's last conventional sunset.


As they lay trembling but calming, the chaos around them quietened. The floods began to recede, and the screams reduced in number. Shauna opened her eyes to see the sun finally set for good from cloud height to over the horizon. A second agonizing scream, reminiscent of an infant, bellowed from the sky.


The fingers rose, and the hand moved away.


"We could have gone to Blackpool," Shauna sobbed. "Why did we have to party in Ibiza?"


"I think they're gonna hear about this in Blackpool, sweetheart,"

James replied. "Just hold me. Everything is going to be over soon."


"You don't know that!!!" Shauna shouted.


"I don't know what over means, but it's gonna be over," he added.


James and Shauna slept.


Hours later, they awoke as the sun rose from the inland east. They stood and walked to the roof's edge, looking down into the demolished city. James pinched Shauna's shoulder.


"No more pills, James," Shauna said.


"Not much more of anything," James replied.


They watched in the distance as the Mediterranean swished itself to a calm.


September 01, 2023 17:35

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AnneMarie Miles
13:03 Sep 08, 2023

Is that a little Mike Posner inspiration, I sense? What a great way to pull from a song and develop it into a story for such a strange prompt. Excellent premise. And I gotta say, I was wildly shocked and pleasantly surprised by the reveal: "Apologies, species. One of our young misplaced its favorite rock. We are currently searching for it." What a fabulous and creative and kind of silly explanation for such a scary situation. This was just delightful. Awesome job and I think you for sharing it!

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Tom Skye
13:20 Sep 08, 2023

Haha I do know the song. Maybe it burrowed its way into my mind somewhere. I found that prompt quite funky. I struggled to think of a suitable premise that didn't involve going back in time. I am quite excited to read other attempts at that prompt. Thanks so much for reading and for the detailed feedback. I'll check out your potion story after work. Thanks again

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AnneMarie Miles
13:24 Sep 08, 2023

Ah, and it wasn't even intentional inspirational from Mike Posner! He would be delighted, I bet, but that does make this even better. Subconscious inspiration. Either way, it works. I've only read a few responses to this particular prompt, and each one is unique. Think this idea might be my favorite.

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Tom Skye
13:22 Sep 08, 2023

P.s. if I remember right, Cora was the naughtiest character (child) 😂

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AnneMarie Miles
13:25 Sep 08, 2023

Sounds about right 😂

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Ty Warmbrodt
15:26 Sep 07, 2023

Wildly imaginative and fun to read!

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Tom Skye
15:33 Sep 07, 2023

Thanks very much for reading. It was a wild prompt :)

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Martin Ross
17:42 Sep 06, 2023

Wonderfully surreal and imaginative!

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Marty B
02:46 Sep 02, 2023

Dramatic! The whims of extraterrestrial titans impacting earthlings makes it tough 'to embrace the moment before an evening in the hotel' Kinda shows that no matter how much we plan, or focus on working vs. partying in Ibiza, fate intervenes and shows us we are just bits of sand on a beach. Thanks!

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Tom Skye
09:52 Sep 02, 2023

Thanks for the early read Marty. I found the prompt hilariously wild and specific at the same time, so wanted to contribute something. You were on the money with the general throughline. The astronomy behind it was a bit suspect, but I had some fun writing it haha I will be really interested to see what others think to write for the prompt.

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Tom Skye
17:37 Sep 01, 2023

I thought this was a wild prompt, so had a go :)

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Jenni Bradshaw
17:49 Sep 12, 2023

If I am ever in Ibiza, remind me to never take a pill. Haha! What a bizarre imagination you have! (I mean that in the best way possible). Makes me want to pinch the sun from the sky! I definitely could imagine giant fingers twirling the planet in its grip like a ping pong ball. And this line: "The sliver of sun in the distance began to flicker like a disco light." - I thought this imaginative detail was brilliant!... "flicker like a disco light" giving the feeling of shaking, but also like they're partying on drugs haha. There are some pun...

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Tom Skye
18:16 Sep 12, 2023

Thank you so much for the enthusiastic take. I will check out the grammar. I actually thought the funky premise might have room for expansion, but the general response has been good to the punchy nature of the story, so I am pretty happy with it. Thanks again. I will read yours in a bit

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Jonathan Page
23:40 Sep 09, 2023

I second the Mike Posner influence. Brilliantly executed! Also gives some EDM dance party vibes without making the story about that. Well played, sir.

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Tom Skye
09:34 Sep 10, 2023

Thanks Jonathan. It was a bit of a mish mash of ideas and I wanted to doing something 'out there' with that prompt. Glad it was entertaining. Congrats on the win last week btw

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Kevin Logue
13:01 Sep 09, 2023

That was a lot of fun Tom, with a dash of dance days nostalgia. The best part for me is the unsaid, the idea that there is an infant galactic being just throwing rocks across the solar system that we assume to be meteorites. Imaginative take on the prompt, nicely done!

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