Submitted to: Contest #300

Ancient Creatures of the Black Ponds on the World Voyages of the Destiny's Dreams

Written in response to: "Write a story about a place that hides something beneath the surface."

Adventure Historical Fiction Kids

A gigantic bone stuck up from the black goo like something beckoning from beneath the surface.


It was the 1800s. Anya, the Storyteller of the Blue Lantern, stopped breathing and her heart pounded.


Her thoughts raced. “The legends are true. It is them. Underneath. How many are there? What are they like?”


The stories carrying ancient wisdom awakened deep inside of Anya. They bubbled up from somewhere beyond time.


She could almost hear sounds coming from beneath the shiny dark surface of the seepage. It was neither liquid nor solid. The dark slime seemed almost as if it had its own life or energy.


“Stop paddling,” Anya called. “Don't get too close. You’ll get stuck. It will get you, too.”


The dry, broad plain around them stretched like open arms, welcoming and inviting them. Distant mountains peeked through the morning’s ocean mists. Sage perfumed the air and stung the nostrils with a clean, sharp, spicy scent.


It drifted deep into the mind, flowing and stirring memories from unknown places.


“How do I know this?” Anya asked herself. Images floated to the surface of her consciousness like dreams inherited from her long line of storytelling ancestors.


She spoke to the group in the boat. “I know what this is. My grandmother’s stories. Before time as we know it there were massive creatures on earth. Giant tigers with huge saber teeth. Towering hairy animals with long tusks. There was a dark pool of ooze that lured them and took them captive in its depths. They rest there now.”


Upturned faces gazed at Anya with mouths dropped open and eyes wide.


“Legends say that eleven thousand years ago, fifty thousand years ago, maybe one hundred thousand years ago, the earth was covered in ice. Creatures larger than a big ship lived here. Gigantic bears standing up as tall as ship masts. There were huge, hairy, slow-moving creatures with long claws. All kinds of monstrous lizards and snakes, too. The ancient animals stepped into the dark stuff seeping up and bubbling from the inside of the earth. They sank into the stickiness to lie beneath the midnight sludge.”


It was Anya’s first journey on the river that led inland from the ocean in the area called Los Angeles in the 1800s. She and a small group of others from their sailing ship the Destiny’s Dreams were on their world voyages. Now the wooden vessel with its three masts of square canvas sails bobbed at anchor in the bay.


Anya, Adelberto the First Mate, Isabella his wife, the woman known as Wind Reader, Akela from Hawaii, Luciana the mapmaker, Alfonse the Peruvian-French captain, and a few sailors stared at the glistening surface of the black mud seeping out of the ground in a series of ponds.


They were riding in the “Caballito de Tortoro” which means small boat. It was a traditional reed boat made in Peru like the ones from the big lake high in the Andes mountains.


Caballito’s bow was like a cougar’s head and the stern was shaped like a bear. Bundles of reeds from the Andes Mountain lake were wrapped together and strapped to make a lightweight water vessel. On her world voyages the Destiny’s Dreams sailed into places of ancient arts and wisdom.


When Captain Alfonse saw his first reed boat he knew he wanted one. He felt a vibration stir his body like a shiver. Now the Destiny’s Dreams carried the smaller Cabillito de Tortoro on the deck. The crew and passengers used it to go ashore when they anchored and to paddle up shallow, narrow waterways.


“Let’s see this bone of a giant creature.” One of the young sailors called out.


“Keep back,” she called. But it was too late.


“I’m alright. I want to see what this is.” A fifteen year old sailor spoke and leaped from the boat on to the ground. He walked over and stepped on the murky soot colored ground. It was Akela, from Hawaii. His name meant leader or guide. He joined the crew at the last port, after arriving on a voyage from the big island. Brave and bold, he was still learning caution was part of being a leader too.


He reached for the massive bone sticking up like an arm beckoning.


“I just need to see what this is.” His words faded.


“Shhhhllllluuup.” The black pool made a sticky, sucking sound.


“Oooohhh. Uuugggh.” Akela’s head whipped around, his arms waved, he lost his balance, and one leg disappeared up to the ankle into the midnight pool.


“Don’t move. We’ll get you. Stay still.” Anya’s voice held a tone of command. She was short and slight. She breathed deeply and hollered.


“You’ll sink beneath the black ooze if you move.”


“HHHHuuuuhh.” Akela gasped. His eyes rolled. He stared at Anya. His limbs froze.

“Quick,” Anya pointed. “Grab that branch.”


Adelberto climbed out of the boat and stood on a rocky ledge next to the river.


“Here.” He moved closer to Akela. One arm reached out holding the branch.


“Grab this.”


“I’ve almost got it. Just a little closer.” Akela leaned to stretch toward the branch.


“Shhhhuuuu…” There was a sucking noise and Akela’s foot sank deeper into the murky stew.


“Gggguuuug.” Bubbles gurgled around Akela’s foot and leg.


“Sh…sh…sh…” Wavelets of the dark stew rippled across the surface.


“I’ll get you.” Adelberto’s breathless voice was suddenly cut off. He stepped closer to Akela.


“SSsshhhhuuug.” The sticky stew surged around Adelberto’s leg and his foot disappeared.


“Stop. I mean it.” Anya’s voice cut through the air.


“I think I know what to do.” She grabbed a coil of rope in the Cabillito de Totoro.


Alfonse watched. “I know what you want to do.”


“Everyone. Grab paddles. Get ready to paddle like you never have before. Lives depend on it.”


The sailors and passengers braced themselves and held the paddles.


“Get ready to catch this,” Anya called.


Short and slight, but strong, hurled the coiled line toward Akela. It struck Adelberto and he grabbed it. Akela caught it with one hand and wrapped it around his arm.


“Now. Pull. Pull. Pull.” Alfonse and Anya hollered. Paddles dipped into the water and the group leaned all their weight into it.


“OOOOoooo.” Like a deep intake of breath, the dark brew of ooze gave way on the legs of the captives.


“More. Pull. Pull. Pull.” Anya’s words ended in a shriek.


“It’s working. Again. Now!”


“Wwwwhhhup.” The midnight pond gave up it’s newest victims.


Akela fell into Adelberto’s arms and the two stumbled through the sticky seepage toward the small boat.


Captain Alfonse’s hands on the lines dragged the two captives from the black ooze and back into the boat.


Later that night, Anya got her journal out and wrote the story down in her slanted script.


Many decades later, the faded journals from the Destiny’s Dreams written by the Storyteller of the Blue Lantern were found in an old sailor’s trunk in the attic of the keeper’s house for the Mystical Coast Lighthouse.


A ten-year-old girl named Emily read this story to her friends on a rainy day by the faint light coming through the attic window.


The antique lantern sitting nearby caught the window’s light and the etched designs on the blue glass sent indigo colored shadows onto the walls that moved and wavered.


In their imagination, the children thought they saw shapes like an old fashioned wooden sailing vessel, a reed boat with a bow like a cougar and a stern like a bear’s head, and shadowy figures against mists and ocean spray.


"Look. I think I see them now." One of the children pointed.


It was as if the stories and memories floated out of the journals and painted the walls with images.



Posted May 03, 2025
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Thomas Wetzel
04:21 May 09, 2025

Really cool story. I think one measure of a talented author is the ability to make readers truly enjoy a genre of writing that they don’t usually gravitate to. You did that here. A lot of cool geographical and historical references brought this to life in the best way. You had me all the way to the end..

Funny. It just occurred to me that the tv shows and films I saw as a kid routinely featured the perils of quicksand, I am 56 years old and I have never, nor do I know anyone who has ever, actually seen quicksand, but when I was 10 years old I was vigilantly looking out for it on the sidewalks of NYC as I walked to school every morning.

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Kristi Gott
05:15 May 09, 2025

Thank you, Thomas! The La Brea Tar Pits of Los Angeles inspired the story. There really are fossils of ancient animals in the tar pits.

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Thomas Wetzel
05:23 May 09, 2025

Yes. Been there! Cool spot.

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Kristi Gott
06:31 May 09, 2025

Wow!

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Daniel Mersiyano
03:28 May 09, 2025

I was listening to a writing podcast the other day that mentioned that the most effective stories make use of the reader's senses, beyond just sight. It's rare that I feel like I can hear a story, but you did a great job with that in this story, so really nice job!

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Kristi Gott
18:08 May 09, 2025

Thank you so very much, Daniel, for your encouraging and thoughtful comments!

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Tanya Humphreys
22:56 May 08, 2025

Interesting story, captivating from the start. Nice noise descriptions.

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Kristi Gott
18:09 May 09, 2025

Thank you, Tanya, for your comments! I am glad you liked it.

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Janine W
19:23 May 07, 2025

Beautifully told. I felt like I was right there with Anya and Emily—such vivid, timeless storytelling!

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Kristi Gott
18:10 May 09, 2025

Thank you very much, Janine! Your encouraging comments mean a lot!

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Martin Ross
17:42 May 07, 2025

Marvelous! The fantastic aspects of the Voyages really complement the gentler, culturally enlightening, more meditative tales, and this one was a doozy — like out of Arthur Conan Doyle’s Dr. Challenger stories! I can hardly wait to see the assembled stories some day! Great job!

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Kristi Gott
18:13 May 07, 2025

Thank you so much, Martin, for your encouraging, thoughtful, and kind comments. I appreciate more than I can say. I looked up Arthur Conan Doyle's Professor Challenger stories and characters. Wow. I only knew his Sherlock Holmes stories. Thank you for telling me about the Challenger stories.

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Martin Ross
00:14 May 08, 2025

The Lost World was the most famous one — pre-Jurassic dinosaur stuff. But the other novels and stories cover a lot of sci-fi/supernatural ground. Doyle turned to mysticism and the occult later in his career. If you can find it, there’s a great short-lived show called Houdini and Doyle, that touched on that period.

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Kristi Gott
02:46 May 08, 2025

I looked up Doyle's Professor Challenge and the other stories by Doyle outside of his Holmes mysteries, which I also love. Wow! So cool! I read the summary of the Lost World and the pre-Jurassic dinosaur stuff. Love that! Thank you for much for telling me about it. I will definitely be studying those stories and reading them for fun. Thank you!!!

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Martin Ross
06:23 May 08, 2025

I’ve collected mysteries for 50 years, and one of my treasures is a complete Sherlock Holmes I bought for 50 cents at a local museum. Have fun!

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Kristi Gott
07:25 May 08, 2025

Wow, 50cents! Great!

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Maxwell Pacilio
16:25 May 07, 2025

A charming story that comes to life with your sound effects and pacing of the whimsical adventure.

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Kristi Gott
18:12 May 07, 2025

Thank you so very much, Maxwell! I appreciate your thoughtful comments!

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Sonder Wander
11:42 May 07, 2025

"The antique lantern sitting nearby caught the window’s light and the etched designs on the blue glass sent indigo colored shadows onto the walls that moved and wavered." Great line and imagery!

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Kristi Gott
13:37 May 07, 2025

Thank you very much, Sonder Wander, for your thoughtful comment!

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Martha Kowalski
22:42 May 06, 2025

Had to go back to your last few stories after a while away, always a pleasure :)
Thanks for the like on "Charmed"

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Kristi Gott
23:18 May 06, 2025

You're welcome and thank you too Martha!

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Shauna Bowling
21:42 May 06, 2025

I'm glad Wind Reader is back in this edition of Destiny's Dreams. She's one of my favorite characters in this series. Your sound effects are quite, shall I say, effective, Kristi. I'm in awe of the fact that you find a way to continue Destiny's Dreams no matter the theme of the weekly challenges. Admittedly, I have a hard time finding inspiration with some of the topics.

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Kristi Gott
23:17 May 06, 2025

Thank you very much, Shauna, for your comment because it makes a difference and I will try to bring the Wind Reader back often and create some more characters like her. Thanks again!

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Sandra Moody
03:20 May 05, 2025

I love how your stories read in the voice of the age-old story tellers!

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Kristi Gott
06:01 May 05, 2025

Thank you so very much, Sandra, for your thoughtful comment!

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Kathryn Kahn
18:33 May 04, 2025

I love the way you indicate sound effects. This would be fun to read out loud.

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Kristi Gott
19:10 May 04, 2025

Thank you, Kathryn, for your thoughtful comments! It is my goal to read these stories as audio stories and record them to put online. So I really do try to think of how they would sound if someone is listening to them. Thanks!

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Mary Bendickson
00:04 May 04, 2025

Who knows what lies beneath the surface? Sticky story.

Thanks for liking 'Sunshine Beams'

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Kristi Gott
02:06 May 04, 2025

Lol, sticky...haha. thank you, Mary!

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Alexis Araneta
16:42 May 03, 2025

Once again, a charming, detailed tale. Lovely work!

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Kristi Gott
17:10 May 03, 2025

Thank you so much, Alexis!

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Megan Kullman
16:35 May 03, 2025

I like the literal take on "finding something beneath the surface." Whimsical, and full of adventure. Great story!

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Kristi Gott
18:22 May 03, 2025

Thank you very much, Megan!

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Kristi Gott
01:13 May 03, 2025

Author's note: I write whimsical, light adventures with fantasy and historical fiction for kids through adults. This story is inspired by the La Brea Tar Pits of Los Angeles, which have thousands of fossils of ancient, prehistoric animals who got stuck and sucked into it. I apologize for the typos and missed words. I kept rewriting to develop the big picture of the story and ran out of time. But I will correct those before I put this on my website.

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