(this is my first story, plz don’t be mean to me)
July 2000
I never left to live in the city before, I’ve always lived in the country. I also never believed that love was the strongest force on eart. Today was the day I was going to live in an apartment named The Bernard, which means brave and hardy. When I took my first step in my new home, a strong scent of my grandma’s cologne hit me. I knew she was here.
I followed the scent to the kitchen, and saw her facing the corner, was she in time out? Suddenly I heard some sobbing, it was my grandma.
“Grandma? You okay?” I asked. She turnt around quickly wiping away her tears so I couldn’t see them, although I did, I pretended not to.
“Of course I am, why’d you ask?” She said. She never plainly lied to me like that Before.
“Grandma, stop lying, I saw you crying, what’s going on?” I insisted
“Well, uh, I was mourning your grandfather,” she said “since we left the country, I wasn’t able to go to his grave.” This did not satisfy my question, because we just left the country.
“Um, okay then..” I replied. My parents showed my room, and surprisingly it was much bigger than my old room. I took some time to explore around the house and it seemed interesting. But there was some kind of thing that was giving me bad vibes, and I don’t know what it is. We ordered some Chinese food to eat for dinner, and I slept in my sleeping bag. (we didn’t finish unpacking) I fell asleep quite easily, but woke up around 2 AM to hear my grandmother talking to my parents, and she was crying. I stood up, and started eavesdropping on their conversation With a glass cup on the wall.
“Oh, my please we need to leave here! Please Thomas listen to me,” She sobbed “It’s not safe for anybody, please Thomas, Bethany listen to me! This room is the reason your father has died!” I unintentionally dropped my cup and it shattered into little pieces, unfortunately they heard it and I heard a lot of “what’s that?” They came busting into my room checking if everything was okay. They faced my way and saw the glass and me kneeling down near the wall.
“What are you doing?” My mother asked.
“Nothing..” I replied.
“She was listening to our conversation, Bethany,” My father said “Come on Sophia, we need to talk.” I was really nervous, was I in trouble?
“Sophia we were lying to you about how your grandfather died,” my grandmother said. But I hadn’t felt anything, because I knew they where lying all along.
July 1987
”Benny!” running as fast as she could, to hug her Loved one after 3 months apart. “Oh I missed you Benny! I’m so glad you are safe! The Coups were looking for you!”
“What for?” Benny laughed
“Im not sure, but you have to be careful around here these days.”
“Okay then honey.”
As she proudly walked home with Benny, he told her that they are able to buy their own house. The girl was overjoyed! They had to share a home with another family they hated, the Coups. They where a violent family that could do anything to anyone just for fun. The father of the Coups died due to dehydration when the girl and Benny had left for vacation. They forgot to pay the rent before they left. Little did they know, the Coups father‘s spirit was roaming the house.
After 2 months out the house, the girl became pregnant and Benny realized that they forgot something at their old home, they really needed it at that time. So Benny took the taxi there and reached there at around 1 AM. When he went in, the house was completely empty, so he took time to dance and curse the family that treated them badly. Suddenly all the lights in the house turnt off, and they weren’t turning on again. Benny stopped goofing around and went out to check the power, then it started raining like crazy. He started getting scared, and went inside, it was raining hard. He started hearing people calling his name and he was sure the nobody was inside the house. Suddenly the whole Coup family appeared, but as ghosts. They locked the doors and suffocated him. They hid his body his a secret cabinet in the house. They left a note saying what they did to him. The girl started getting worried it was 5 AM and he still hasn’t come back. So she drove to the house and saw the note, she became depressed and she had to raise her son on her own. The Coup family still lingers the house till this day, and always makes sure no family comes to live in the house ever again.
July 2000
I was shocked, I never thought my grandfather would have died like that. I started crying, not because I was sad but because I was scared. I didn’t want the same to happen to me Or my family. I didn’t sleep that night, instead I sat on my bed with my eyes wide open.
After 2 months I was getting ready for bed and bumped into the wall. The wall then fell on my back, when I saw what I had done i also saw what I had discovered. There was a tunnel that seemed to go far. I went to say goodnight to my parents and took my phone and a flashlight and I went in the tunnel. The door closed behind me without me touching it. I crawled farther and farther until I saw some light I crawled farther and saw a room I never thought we had. And I saw an old man sitting down reading a book. He looked up at me,
“ARE YOU A COUP?” he asked
“N- no sir, I’m a Robinson...”
“ROBINSON? AYE, THAT ME LAST NAME, WHY YOU STEAL IT!?”
“No sir I was born with it.” he calmed down a bit.
“What’s ye name?” he asked
“Sophia, Sophia Robinson” i replied
“Want to know me name?” I nodded “Me names Benny, Benny Robinson” my phone started ringing, It was my parents, I think they found out I wasn’t in my room, uh oh.
“Look, are you happy here?” I asked
“No, I miss me wife” he sadly answered
“I think I know where your wife is” I smiled
I helped him up and we crawled our way out, when we reached my room I called my parents to come in my room with grandma. They came, and while my parents got mad at me, grandma started crying and hugging My grandfather. She thanked me. And I felt proud that was the day I made my family reunite. It is true that love is the strongest force on earth.
The End
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Hey Keishina, we were paired in the Critique Circle. I love the plot of your story! You are really good at showing the reader instead of telling them what is going on (example "When I took my first step in my new home, a strong scent of my grandma’s cologne hit me"). Trust that your reader will pick up what you have shown them! The sentence "I knew she was here." is unnecessary with the great sentence you have before.
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