Submitted to: Contest #300

The Veil of Eldermoor

Written in response to: "Write a story about a place that hides something beneath the surface."

Fantasy Fiction Mystery

Eldermoor was a village cradled in the embrace of time, its cobblestone streets glistening like polished bone under the mist that rolled down from the Blackspire Mountains. The peaks, jagged as the teeth of some ancient beast, loomed over the valley, their slopes cloaked in dense firs that whispered in the wind, their needles carpeting the earth in a soft, fragrant decay.

Cottages of weathered stone and timber huddled together, their roofs blanketed with ivy that shimmered with dew in the dawn light, while chimneys puffed woodsmoke that curled into the air, blending with the scent of damp moss and freshly turned soil. The village square, ringed by gnarled apple trees heavy with crimson fruit, buzzed with the hum of bees and the chatter of sparrows darting through the branches.

Eldermoor was a place where the seasons painted the world anew—autumn’s blaze of amber and ruby, winter’s frost that turned the streams to silver ribbons, spring’s riot of wildflowers spilling over the hills. Despite the vibrant tapestry above, an ancient secret pulsed like a heartbeat in the earth’s hidden veins.

Mira had lived in Eldermoor her entire life, all twenty-three years, her days woven into the village’s rhythm. She was a weaver, her fingers dancing over the loom in her cramped attic workshop, where sunlight streamed through a single window, illuminating motes of dust that floated like tiny stars. Her tapestries, rich with earthy greens and fiery golds, told stories of Eldermoor’s past: the First Settlers’ arrival under a sky bruised with storm clouds, the great frost that glazed the valley in ice so thick it cracked the oaks, the wolves whose howls once echoed through the moonlit hills. Her work hung in the village hall, their threads glowing faintly in the firelight, admired but rarely questioned.

Mira, known for her sharp gray eyes, had a questioning nature, always examining the world as if it were a tapestry she could unravel to uncover its depths. It began with the whispers, not the gossip that flitted between neighbors over mugs of spiced ale, but a sound that seemed to rise from the earth itself, carried on the wind that rattled the village’s shutters. Mira first heard them one autumn evening, walking home from the market square, her basket heavy with tart apples and skeins of wool dyed the color of crushed berries. The sun had sunk below the Blackspires, painting the sky a deep violet streaked with gold, and the air was sharp with the promise of frost, stinging her cheeks.

She paused by the old well at the village’s edge, its stones slick with moss and etched with faint, spiraling runes worn smooth by centuries of rain. Leaning over to adjust her scarf, she heard it—a low, murmuring sound, like voices speaking in a tongue older than the mountains, rising from the depths of the earth. It wasn’t from the well’s black throat but deeper, as if the ground itself were muttering secrets in a restless sleep.

Mira froze, her breath a fleeting cloud in the chill air. She glanced around, but the street was empty, the nearest cottage a silhouette against the darkening sky, its windows glowing like embers. The whispers faded, swallowed by the rustle of leaves skittering across the cobblestones, but they lingered in her mind, a splinter she couldn’t pluck.

She hurried home, her boots clicking on the stones, the village’s familiar beauty—lanterns swaying in the breeze, the distant bleat of goats—now tinged with unease.

The next morning, she sought Old Thom, the village’s unofficial historian, who lived in a cottage at the edge of the square, its walls sagging under the weight of ivy and memory. Inside, the air was thick with the scent of pipe smoke and polished wood, shelves groaning with leather-bound books and half-carved figures of wolves and ravens.

They sat by a fire that crackled and spat, its light dancing on Thom’s craggy face. His eyes, rheumy but piercing, studied her over his pipe as she spoke. “Whispers, you say?” he muttered, puffing smoke that curled like specters in the dim light. “From the ground?”

“By the old well,” Mira said, clutching a mug of chamomile tea, its steam curling around her fingers. “It was… strange. Like voices, but not human, rising from the earth.”

Thom’s face tightened, his wrinkles deepening like fissures in stone. He set his pipe down with a clink and leaned forward, his voice a low rasp. “You’d do well to leave it be, Mira. Some things in Eldermoor are best left buried.”

His words only stoked her curiosity. Thom knew more than he shared—she’d seen it in the way he sidestepped certain questions, the way his stories of the village’s founding halted at the edge of something unspoken.

That night, unable to sleep, Mira lit a beeswax candle, its honeyed glow pooling on her worktable, and studied her tapestries. One, older than the rest, depicted the First Settlers arriving in the valley, their faces solemn as they stood before a circle of stones under a moonless sky. The stones were tall, jagged, their surfaces carved with runes that seemed to pulse with faint light, set against a moor painted in shades of midnight and moss. Mira had always thought it an artistic flourish, but now she wondered. Were those stones real? And if so, where were they hidden in the valley’s embrace?

The whispers returned the next evening, stronger, more insistent. Mira was in her garden, the soil cold and hard under her knees as she pulled carrots, their orange tips dusted with frost. The air smelled of earth and decaying leaves, and the hills glowed with the last embers of sunset. The sound rose around her, a chorus of indistinct voices that seemed to tug at her chest, vibrating through the ground like the hum of a distant forge. She dropped her trowel and pressed her hands to the earth, feeling a faint tremor, as if the valley itself were stirring. The voices grew louder, almost forming words, but stopped when her neighbor, Lila, called from the fence, her voice cutting through the dusk. “You alright, Mira?” Lila asked, her brow furrowed, her shawl fluttering in the breeze. “You look like you’ve seen a ghost.”

Mira forced a smile, brushing dirt from her hands, the cold biting her knuckles. “Just lost in thought.”

Lila nodded, her eyes lingering, and Mira resolved to keep the whispers secret.

Eldermoor was small, its gossip as swift as the streams that carved the valley. If she wasn’t careful, she’d be branded a dreamer, or worse, a troublemaker. Over the next week, Mira became a hunter of secrets, her curiosity a flame that burned brighter with each clue. She visited the village archives, a dusty room in the hall where records moldered in tomes bound with cracked leather, their pages brittle as autumn leaves. The air was heavy with the scent of mildew and wax, and cobwebs draped the corners like forgotten veils. She found mentions of the stone circle, described as a “sacred site” by the First Settlers, but no location was given, only vague references to the moor. She questioned elders, her tone casual at first, then urgent, but most dismissed her, their eyes darting away as if she’d brushed a raw wound. With drying herbs and firelit glass jars overflowing her cottage, only Agnes, the herbalist, offered a hint.

“The moor,” she rasped, her hands stained with sage and rosemary. “If you seek answers, look to the moor.”

The moor lay north of the village, a bleak expanse of heather and peat bogs, its surface rippling under the wind like a living thing. It was a place of stark beauty, where gnarled shrubs clung to life among pools of black water that mirrored the sky’s shifting moods. Villagers avoided it, whispering of haunts, though none could name the source. Mira had ventured there as a child, daring herself to cross its edges, but even then, it had felt wrong, the air too heavy, the silence too watchful. However, she would confront its depths if answers resided there.

She set out at dawn, her pack slung over her shoulder, her breath clouding in the chill air. The moor stretched before her, a sea of purple heather and brown peat under a sky heavy with clouds that hung like wet wool. Her boots sank into the damp earth, releasing the sharp scent of bog myrtle, and the wind carried the distant cry of a curlew, its note piercing the silence. She walked for hours, guided by instinct and the memory of the stone circle in her tapestry, the whispers faint but constant, growing clearer the deeper she went. They weren’t words, but they carried emotion—grief, anger, a desperate need to be heard.

By midday, she found it: a hollow in the moor, hidden by a ring of twisted, leafless trees, their branches clawing at the sky like skeletal hands. At its center stood the stone circle, half-buried in the peat, their runes worn but glowing faintly in the dim light, as if drinking the moor’s secrets. Mira approached, her heart pounding, and knelt before one of the stones, its surface cold and slick under her fingers.

The whispers surged, forming fragments: “Bound… betrayed… release…”

She dug at the stone’s base, her fingers tearing through peat and roots, the earth’s rich, loamy scent filling her lungs, until she uncovered a metal box, its surface etched with runes that matched the stones. It was locked, but the mechanism was ancient, and with a rock, she pried it open.

Inside lay a crystal, no larger than her fist, pulsing with a sickly, greenish light that seemed to writhe like smoke. The moment she touched it, the whispers became a scream, and images flooded her mind: a ritual under a blood-red sky, figures in robes chanting as they sealed something into the earth, a presence vast and hungry, raging against its chains. Mira staggered back, the crystal burning in her hand, its light casting shadows that danced on the stones. She understood now. The First Settlers hadn’t just founded Eldermoor—they’d imprisoned something here, something they feared, its power leaking into the valley’s roots.

The crystal served either as key or seal; its voice, or the voices of its binders, were whispers. But why? And why was it waking now, stirring the moor’s restless heart? She returned to the village under cover of dusk, the crystal hidden in her pack, the moor’s chill clinging to her skin. She went straight to Thom’s cottage, banging on his door until he opened it, his face pale in the lantern light, the air behind him thick with the scent of cedar and smoke.

Seeing the fear in her eyes, he whispered, "What have you done?" She told him everything—the whispers, the moor, the crystal. Thom listened, his hands trembling, then sank into a chair, the firelight carving deep shadows in his face. “I warned you,” he said. “The Settlers… they made a pact. This valley held something ancient, older than the mountains; a hunger, a chaos. They trapped it, used the stones and the crystal to bind it, but it cost them. Blood, lives, their very souls. The village was built to guard it, to keep it sleeping.”

“Then why is it waking?” Mira demanded, her voice echoing in the cramped room.

Thom shook his head, his eyes fixed on the fire. “Time weakens all things. Or perhaps it’s you, Mira. Your questions, your digging. You’ve stirred it.”

Guilt twisted in her gut, but she pushed it aside. “What do we do?”

“We do nothing,” Thom snapped, his voice sharp as a blade. “You bury that crystal where you found it and pray it quiets.”

But Mira couldn’t. The whispers followed her, louder now, filling her dreams with visions of fire and shadow, the moor’s dark beauty twisting into a nightmare. The village began to change—crops withered in fields that once burst with life, their leaves curling like burnt paper; livestock sickened, their eyes dull as they lowed in the frost-rimed meadows; a malaise settled over the people, their faces drawn, as if the valley’s vibrancy were being drained. Mira knew the crystal was the key, but burying it felt like surrender. She had to understand what they were guarding and whether it could be stopped.

She returned to the moor alone, the crystal heavy in her hand, its light pulsing like a dying star. The landscape seemed to watch her, the heather swaying in a wind she couldn’t feel, the bogs glinting like eyes. At the stone circle, she placed the crystal in the center and spoke to the whispers, her voice trembling against the moor’s vast silence. “What are you? What do you want?”

The ground shook, and the air split with a sound like tearing metal. The crystal flared, and a shape rose from the earth—not a creature, but a presence, a swirling mass of shadow and light that burned her eyes, its edges bleeding into the moor’s twilight. Its voice was a thousand voices, speaking as one: “We are the Bound. We are the Betrayed. Release us, and we will remake this world.”

Mira’s knees buckled, but she held her ground, the moor’s cold seeping into her bones. “And if I don’t?”

With a scream from the moor, trees twisted and split like flesh, stones cracked like breaking bones as it commanded, "Then we take".

She saw it then—the truth beneath the surface. The entity wasn’t evil, not in the way humans understood, but it was vast, alien, a force that would reshape reality to suit its will, swallowing the valley’s beauty in its hunger. The Settlers had feared it, rightly, but their binding had been imperfect, a temporary cage woven into the earth’s roots. Now, freed by Mira’s hastening questions, the moor’s ancient wound broke open.

She grabbed the crystal and ran, the entity’s laughter chasing her through the heather, the wind howling like a living thing.

Back in the village, she rallied those who would listen—Lila, Agnes, a few others, their faces lit by the flickering lanterns in the hall, the air thick with the scent of wax and fear. The crystal glowed on the table, its light casting eerie shadows on the tapestries. Thom, reluctant but resigned, told them the rest: the ritual to rebind the entity required sacrifice, as it had before. Blood and will, freely given, to strengthen the seal woven into the valley’s heart. Mira looked at the surrounding faces. Ordinary people caught in an ancient war, their lives tied to the village’s vibrant, fragile beauty. “I’ll do it,” she said, her voice steady despite the fear clawing her chest. “It’s my fault it’s waking.”

“No,” Lila said, gripping her hand, her fingers warm and calloused. “We do it together.”

In the end, they all agreed, their resolve a fragile thread in the face of the moor’s vastness. At dawn, they returned to the moor, the crystal carried between them, its light dim against the rising sun that painted the hills in gold and crimson. The entity was waiting, its presence a storm that tore at their minds, the air crackling with its rage.

They formed a circle around the stones, chanting words Thom had pieced together from fragments of the Settlers’ lore, their voices rising over the wind that whipped the heather into a frenzy. The crystal burned brighter, and Mira felt her strength draining, her life pouring into the seal, the moor’s earth drinking her essence. She saw the others falter, their faces pale against the valley’s vivid backdrop, but they held fast, their hands linked like roots. The entity roared, a sound that shook the mountains, the ground heaving as if the valley itself were fighting back.

But the crystal’s light grew, enveloping the shadow, its glow merging with the moor’s dawn. The shadows retreated, the ground stilled, and the whispers faded to silence, swallowed by the rustle of heather and the distant song of a lark.

When it was over, the crystal was dark, lifeless, and the stone circle was just stone, their runes dulled by the morning light. They buried it deep, marking the spot with no sign, the moor’s surface closing over it like a wound healing.

The village recovered slowly, the crops returning to fields now lush with green, the livestock grazing under skies streaked with rose and amber, the air light with the scent of blooming gorse. But Mira was changed. She wove no more tapestries, her hands too unsteady, her eyes too distant, haunted by the moor’s secrets. She’d seen what lay beneath Eldermoor’s vibrant surface, and though it slept, the truth remained: nothing stays buried forever, not in a valley alive with whispers.

Posted Apr 27, 2025
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Kathryn Kahn
20:32 May 04, 2025

You've created a very specific sense of place here. The magical crystal was a nice touch. I'm not sure how these people knew what to do, but somehow I don't care. Nice job.

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