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Fantasy Historical Fiction Fiction

I was about 8 years old, i had come for a sleepover at my great grandmother's house. there was no other houses beside hers around here. Her house was quite big and i enjoyed coming over. It was one rainy night, my great grandmother was sitting in her big red chair, holding a hot cup of tea. I had my legs folded sitting on the floor in front of her. It was cold , I was wearing my orange zig zag sweater. I sat down staring at my great grandmother waiting in suspense, I was thinking what story she would tell me tonight. my great grandmother started, ¨ i was a little girl about your age living in a small village in pellion, france.¨ I lived with my daughter which is your grandma. only a few people lived here. it was a beautiful place filled with nature. Almost everybody knew each other. Nobody could imagine what was about to ruin the peaceful life in the little village. Ur grandma Abella and me rented a little cottage. In the cottage were 4 brown mats to eat on, a sink, mini refrigerator, 2 beds and 2 chairs. Everyday me and abella would go for a morning walk. It was just another normal morning, abella put her black boots and fuzzy mittens on while i grabbed my yellow cotton scarf. We stepped out hearing birds chirping and looking at the water going in little waves. We closed the wooden door behind us, and took off. I had brought my handmade basket to pick some oranges on the way. While we were walking i noticed something unusual coming out of the ground. I didn't think too much of it, but i was sure that it had not been there before, because i had been walking past there for more than 6 years. Me and abella picked some ripe oranges from the bush and returned back to our cottage. i made some fresh orange juice and an egg toast. In the evening we we sat together outside looking at the beautiful scenery. After that i would make dinner which was usually, rice and water, after that me and abella would go to sleep. This kept going on for years, that was our routine. Every day i walked by that mysterious thing would get bigger and bigger, and shockingly no one seemed to realize. I started getting suspicious. After 3 to 4 years the thing had become so humongous and everyone in the village noticed it. Some started to get worried and neighbors would go house to house discussing this. Then one day i was out planting some flowers, my old friend greta was helping me do it. Our favorite thing to do was planting. we talked to each other while doing it. We had grown many vegetables like cucumbers and tomatoes and also fruits like watermelon and grapes. Our favorite was the juicy, mouth watering grapes. Some were purple and some were green, i prefered the purple ones and gretta prefered the green grapes. So anyways while we were planting abella was sitting inside reading a book. I heard a little rumble and some rocks scattered around. At first gretta didn't realize but it happen again! we both were very confused. It was late night and most people were sleeping only me, gretta and abella were left awake. Abella ran outside and hugged, and screamed, ¨MOTHER! MOTHER! I hugged her tight in with my arms and she said out of breath, ¨th..the room was shaking aunt greta. Gretta said, yes sweetie we felt it as well what is going on!? I told abella and gretta to go inside, I will take care of this. At first they didn't listen to me and told me that it is not safe but after i convinced them to go. They both went inside the cottage. Right then I realized what might be happening, i recalled those mornings i would go on a walk with abella and i remembered that that mountain looking thing was growing bigger and bigger, people were just thinking its a mountain but it might be a volcano! I screamed in my head, and thought about how miserable this even is,. I told myself if this is true....what are we gonna do? Just after that the volcano started shaking in extreme pressure, i screamed gretta, abella! Expecting to see molten rock and fire burst out i saw something green and human shaped burst out, it wasn't just one it was a bunch of them! i was very confused, I lifted my dress , my brown sandals, not made for running hit the ground hard and i ran towards, when i got closer i realized something and that's what terrifies me, i screamed ¨ WITCHES¨ i heard the villagers gasping and lights turned on, in the top cottage an old lady lived, in the shadow i saw her pull out her lantern, and there it was a witch had already gotten into her cottage and down she fall screaming for help. I gasped with my hand in front of my mouth and felt like i was gonna pass out. This was such a horrific moment. The witches cackle and sit on their brooms. One witch came down close to me, I ran as i felt my heart pounding more than ever, It just seemed so un real. I remembered that when me and gretta were planting we were using a shovel, i ran to the shovel, it was laying on the floor, i picked up the steel shovel and hit the witch smack hard on its head. The witch collapsed. I ran down the steep brick stairs and hid behind the raspberry bush. The bush was very big and i squatted sitting there in hesitation thinking about what had just happened. I had just remembered something, my eyes went round, and i froze in position. i peeked outside and saw people pulling their arms and screaming for help. Just then i heard a familiar voice an old ladies voice screamed ¨HELP P..PLS¨ it was gretta. Without even noticing tears filled my eyes, the only people that i had were abella and gretta. I couldn't imagine my life without gretta, but now she was gone i had to move on,Ii was so scared because while i was in such panic i had left abella behind. I sneakily ran to the cottage and there sitting behind a chair was abella with water streaming down her eyes. As she saw me a little smile spread across her face, she wiped her tears and ran to me. ¨Mother, i thought the witches had gotten you as well, i saw aunt greta get captured by them¨. She told me that she was so glad i was alive. We don't have much time abella, I said. she got up and put her boots on, i put my hand in hers and we ran down the stairs making very little noise. I took her behind the same raspberry bush. it had a very strong smell. ¨Mother are we hiding here¨? said abella. I told her that we were gonna have to stay here till those witches think they have gotten everyone and return to where they belong. äbella said ¨but mother what about our villagers¨. I told her , abella, we are gonna have to face the truth we can't do anything to save them anymore, hopefully they can defend themselves. It was so dark night, abella laid her head into my lap and went asleep. soon after they noise disappeared, and i fell asleep as well. I felt the sunshine in my eyes, and the rooster saying cocka-doodle-doo. i woke up rubbing my eyes. What a stressful night it had been, but only 1 thing that i was grateful for, me and my beautiful daughter abella, had been saved. I gently laid abella´s head down onto the floor. I got up as i felt my feet touch the hard rock on the floor. My shoes had broken from the bottom. i slowly went up the stairs, when I looked I saw all the cottages destructed, as i was going inside our cottage I caught my eye on the flowers that me and gretta had planted. I sat there i felt sadness inside me. i held our flower close to my chest, and said i will always remember you gretta.. Years and years past on and abella had a child which was your mother, I lived with abella and talked with ur mother when she was a little kid, she was very playful and always happy. Then more years had past on and sadly abella died. the grandmother wiped her nose with a tissue, the little boy told her ¨it's ok great grandmother don't cry¨. o..ok my boy¨ said the grandmother. Anyways she continued ¨i am very lucky to still be alive, after that ur mother had you and now here you are¨. That's the end of this story, this historical event was called ¨the witch eruption¨ u may learn about it in school some day. The little boy was so shocked, he could hardly believe that his great grandmother had been through all of this. well now, said the great 

February 06, 2021 05:50

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ItZ_RaYz Lalea
01:20 Mar 10, 2021

wow, I like your story I definitely did not imagine it to be like that.

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Rayann Choudhary
05:05 Mar 09, 2021

Thank you for the feedback! I will work on it. :)

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12:27 Feb 15, 2021

This story is interesting, but could definitely do with some proof-reading. Several times throughout the story you put a lowercase i instead of capitalising it. Also, putting the text into paragraphs will make it much easier to read :)

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Rayann Choudhary
05:06 Mar 09, 2021

yea next time i will do paragraphs

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Elisia Meehan
15:40 Feb 13, 2021

Great job wasn't what I expected but I loved it all the same.

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Rayann Choudhary
05:05 Mar 09, 2021

thankyou!

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Palak Shah
13:46 Feb 19, 2021

Great story; but next time please write in paragraphs to make the story easier to read. Nevertheless, I loved your use of description and the way you have crafted your story is amazing. Well done !! I hope you will check out some of my stories. Thanks :))

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Rayann Choudhary
05:17 Mar 09, 2021

ok ty

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