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Coming of Age Fantasy Fiction


Once upon a time, in a melting pot in a rural area far from the crowds, there was a large field where there were lots of piles of objects that were no longer used, from small to giant ones. Lots of residents who inhabit that place, even though they are fighting each other they know each other.


Call it XAXE a lump of worn-out scrap metal stabbed into the ground, frowning his forehead, furious and a little rusty. The sun that supports it is gradually feeling bored, maybe because it is shining on a group of objects it seems that are getting more and more shiny every day instead of getting dull and rusty


He could only witness the blue beauty at the end of the sky with his dull and no longer young body, knowing that he would soon retire. Wheels, axles, couplings and accessories attached to it are sitting on the edge of the field. His moustache is no longer frightening but instead makes him a piece of scrap metal that is a world-renowned politician or even a long-dead comedian. In his time, he was indeed the best four-wheeled vehicle made of iron in the 1930s. A very tall stature with four legs that is always never dirty even though the road is dusty and dirty. He always prays and hopes to God to be merged into something new and beneficial for humans, but no one or company wants him to be melted down. At the recycling site, it depends on the buyers who come and whoever the residents there always hope will be recycled into something new and have an elegant appearance. His friends are also a bunch of scrap metal of various types, names and no longer being used by the owner


Double-decker Buses, Trailer Trucks, Cars including himself which has more than four wheels have regenerated into heavy equipment or even worse ones become Tanks which are melted down with the armour of their biggest enemy. They are forced to be friends even though it is clear that they are true rivals in the name of glory


Some of the last occupants seemed to think that it was just an illusion for a fancy car with a tie because it was recycled and then levelled up as their colleagues always said because they knew each other. Without a lump of iron that is recycled, melted down and sprinkled on, it would not be possible for all of this to exist


Unlike XAXE, let's call it “Dow daddy”, call it Dowdy, a slow-moving vehicle with a dull appearance and only two doors, when it was first created it was very, very useless and even seemed a failed product was transformed into the Best Performer when the big boss brought it to the place where it was melted down to buy all armoured vehicles for military purposes. Arrogantly clad in a reliable diesel engine as if roaring and wanting to inform all the occupants of the old Iron-Steel Shop that he has moved levels or gone up a class.


XAXE can't do anything because he is currently just a lump of iron without an engine that he can move because it has been a long time since their body was separated when his boss had to find an alternative gasoline engine for his younger favourite vehicle. But even though his body has been cremated he will never die

Meanwhile, on the other side of the complex where they were sitting, there were several railroad cars and old locomotives, which were clearly their toughest enemies, those made of steel, were also anxious. Because it is often possible to hear whispers from plane wrecks where there are no engines and knick-knacks and accessories attached to them. That he will always sit there because it is no longer logical to recondition wheeled vehicles that do not have rails from steel. It seems he has given up hope.


A single grain of sweat still doesn't make him or the drizzle of seasonal rain doesn't change anything about him. In the past, he was a ruler, and in his time he was also a dictator for the vehicles that got in his way. Because once a goods truck was struck by him at the arrogant speed of that time and met where he is now sitting. Even so, the wrecked goods truck was later reconditioned into a bus that always took flight attendants from their mess to the airport. That's because there are rumours that inform about it. He always thinks whether he is weak because he has not been fair to fellow vehicles on land and it always comes out of his mind.


It's only natural that he is arrogant because he always feels himself to be the most valuable mode of transportation. Call me his name Elloco because people often say his name because every time he comes and goes at every station he always stops. Just once transporting 15 train cars that he carried on his shoulders more than hundreds of people as his boss were carried across the country and big cities. Ellice always remembers the story of his love with the idol that died for the sake of the independence of his people who was forced to transport the soldiers to the battlefield. Sad indeed.


Back to the previous location. Not far from there, there are lots of piles of electronic devices that have been left without shelter, such as tapes that no longer have a head to play cassette tapes, televisions that no longer have a bunk because they are flat because they often do fitness, mobile phones that were deaf because they were struck by lightning when used by humans and at the same time the callers were charred to death because of the incident and computers that were already myopic also suffered the same fate as old Xaxe as cars and Elloco and train carriages were still sitting there except for bullets, gunpowder, missiles, grenades, atomic bombs, tanks, fighter jets are still iron in the end.

December 02, 2022 12:32

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03:19 May 16, 2024

This story is a narrative text. It tells about an old, slightly rusty piece of metal at the dump named XAXE. Enjoying the beautiful sky has become a daily activity. It also recounts XAXE's past as a four-wheeled vehicle. The residents there always hope it will become something new.

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03:13 May 16, 2024

This story is a narrative text Sinopsis:various vehicles and objects reflecting on their past roles and current states, with themes of arrogance, transformation, and decay. The character "Elloco" appears to be a vehicle who once held power and importance but now sits among other discarded objects, pondering his past actions and legacy. Also XAXE a lump of worn-out scarp metal stabbed in the groud and "Dow Daddy" call it Dowdy a slow moving vehicle with a dull appearance and only two dors.The text also touches on themes of mortality and the e...

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Mustika Melati
02:51 May 16, 2024

in my opinion this story is a narrative text. Synopsis of "Iron Tip": In a remote recycling yard in the countryside, there lies a vast field filled with piles of unused objects, ranging from small to large. Among the inhabitants of this place is XAXE, a piece of scrap metal that once stood tall but now rusts away. XAXE, along with characters like Dowdy and Elloco, navigates the dynamics of life in this setting. The story portrays XAXE's desire to be repurposed into something useful again, while other characters have their own roles and conf...

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02:44 May 16, 2024

Nama: Istiqomah Rachman Kelas: X-ULW 1 In my opinion, this story is a narrative text. Synopsis of "Iron Tip" In a remote scrapyard, various discarded objects, from small items to giant machines, have been left to rust and decay. Among the inhabitants of this scrapyard is XAXE, a once mighty and now worn-out scrap metal piece, who yearns to be recycled into something useful. Despite his deteriorated condition, he remembers his glorious past as a top vehicle from the 1930s. Alongside him are other scrap metals like Dowdy, a once-failed ve...

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SYAKILA KIRANA
02:42 May 16, 2024

I think this is a narrative story Synopsis: the story is about the lives and interactions between various inanimate objects abandoned in a remote rural place. The story depicts the struggle of XAXE, a scrap metal sludge, which wants to be processed into something useful again, as well as the dynamics of the relationship between various objects and technological change.

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02:35 May 16, 2024

This is a Narrative text. The Synopsis is : The story is about an old piece of scrap metal, there's a battered XAXE stuck in the ground. In his time he was the best iron star of the 1930s. And there is also Dow Daddy, his nature is different from XAXE, he is slow and very useless. Then there's Elloco who is arrogant because his only mode of transportation is valuable. Once he came he could bring 15 train cars. But in the end everything is just the same, nothing is great, and everything will be the same as having a bed because it is flat be...

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02:30 May 16, 2024

I think this is narrative text, Elloco, once an arrogant and powerful train, recalls his past when he crashed into a truck, which was later rebuilt into a bus. He regrets his unfair treatment of other vehicles. Now, he sits among discarded electronic devices and reflects on his former importance and the love he lost during wartime. Despite their fates, they all remain as mere remnants of their former selves.

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Nur Azkiah
02:30 May 16, 2024

I think this is a narrative story because in a smelting place in a rural area far from the hustle and bustle, there is a vast field filled with piles of discarded objects, from small to gigantic ones. The inhabitants of this place, although often fighting, know each other well. XAXE, an old, rusty piece of iron, stands in the middle of the field. Once, XAXE was the best iron-made four-wheeled vehicle in the 1930s, but now it is just old iron hoping to be recycled into something new and useful.

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Muhammad Ilham
02:28 May 16, 2024

I think this is narrative text Synopsis: In recycling dumps full of scrap metal, there are various types of scrap metal that are no longer used. XAXE, a rusty old car, dreams of itself being recycled into something useful. Dowdy, another old car that previously didn't sell, is now the greatest after being recycled into a tank. On the other hand there is Elloco, an old locomotive that was once arrogant and now regrets its arrogance. They all live with other used items such as broken cassettes, old model televisions, and dead cell phones. Ev...

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02:27 May 16, 2024

This is Narrative text The synopsis centers on Elloco, a proud train, reflecting on his significance and recalling a tragic love story. Nearby, a pile of abandoned electronics underscores technological advancement and obsolescence.

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Lovely Aprilia
02:18 May 16, 2024

I think this is a narrative text that tells the story of various objects made of iron and steel in a rural area. the story introduces characters such as XAXE, a hunk of scrap metal, and Dowdy, a slow-moving vehicle. It also mentions the presence of wagons, old locomotives, and piles of electronics. The text describes their features, interactions and thoughts, creating a narrative flow and presenting a natural sequence of events. -The beautiful Apilia muharno (X ULW 1)

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02:14 May 16, 2024

This is a narrative text. the synopsis is: In a remote rural junkyard, discarded objects from various eras coexist. Among them is XAXE, a rusty piece of scrap metal that was once part of a prestigious 1930s vehicle. Despite his dilapidated state, he dreams of being recycled into something new. Nearby, Dowdy, a vehicle that was initially considered a failure but later upgraded for military use, boasts about his transformation, causing envy among the others. Elloco, an old locomotive, reflects on his past glory and wartime sacrifices, now fa...

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Muhammad Sambudi
02:14 May 16, 2024

I think this is a Narrative, The Synopsis is: At the scrap yard, used objects are friends even though they used to be rivals. XAXE, an old car that is no longer used, is jealous of Dowdy, a car that was recycled into a combat vehicle. At the dump there is also Elloco, an old locomotive that was once arrogant and now regrets its arrogance. They are all waiting to be recycled and become something useful, except for electronic items and weapons whose fate ends up just lying there.

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Shakil Al Fayyaz
04:23 May 14, 2024

This is a Narrative, The Synopsis is : In a nearby location, numerous discarded electronic devices lie abandoned without shelter. These include cassette players missing heads, flattened televisions, lightning-struck mobile phones, and myopic computers, all damaged and obsolete. Alongside them, old vehicles like cars and train carriages remain untouched, while weapons such as bullets, missiles, and tanks are still intact, destined to rust away with time. This narrative highlights the decay and obsolescence of technology and machinery in a fo...

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NAZWA EL SAFWA
02:11 May 14, 2024

This is narrative text The text tells a story about various objects made of iron and steel in a rural area. It introduces characters like XAXE, a lump of scrap metal, and Dowdy, a slow-moving vehicle. It also mentions the presence of railroad cars, old locomotives, and piles of electronic devices. The text describes their characteristics, interactions, and thoughts, creating a narrative flow and presenting a series of events.

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Alya Tiyan
02:10 May 14, 2024

pendapat saya itu dia adalah seorang penguasa, dan pada masanya dia juga seorang diktator atas kendaraan yang menghalangi jalannya. Sebab suatu saat sebuah truk barang ditabrak olehnya dengan kecepatan angkuh saat itu dan bertemu dengan tempatnya duduk sekarang. Meski begitu, truk barang yang rusak itu kemudian direkondisi menjadi bus yang selalu mengantar pramugari dari mess ke bandara. Panggil saya namanya Elloco karena orang sering menyebut namanya karena setiap dia datang dan pergi di setiap stasiun dia selalu berhenti. Suatu ketika ia m...

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Ishmah Afiyah
02:08 May 14, 2024

synopsis; This story is set in a smelter in the countryside far from the crowds, where there is a large field full of piles of unused objects, from small to giant. Even though the residents often fight, they get to know each other. The main character, XAXE, is a worn and rusty hunk of scrap metal. XAXE felt angry and frustrated seeing the sun that continued to shine on him and other objects that were shining even more. In the past, the XAXE was the best four-wheeled vehicle in the 1930s, always clean even on dusty roads, but now it's just a...

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02:06 May 14, 2024

pendapat saya, terdapat sebuah lapangan luas yang dipenuhi tumpukan benda-benda tak terpakai, dari yang kecil hingga yang berukuran raksasa. XAXE sebongkah besi tua yang rusak menusuk ke tanah, mengerutkan kening, geram dan sedikit berkarat. Dia menyaksikan keindahan biru di tepi langit dengan tubuhnya yang kusam dan tidak muda lagi, mengetahui bahwa dia akan segera pensiun. Pada masanya, ia memang merupakan kendaraan roda empat berbahan besi terbaik di tahun 1930an. Berbeda dengan XAXE sebut saja Dowdy, kendaraan yang melaju lambat dengan t...

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01:51 May 14, 2024

teks ini termasuk naratif

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Alvina Athasyah
03:38 Sep 01, 2023

goodd

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