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“How are you?”


Sitting at the grass, enjoying the blue sky slowly turning orange, I turn my head at the familiar sound. In front of me, a man stands with a white short-sleeve shirt and khaki pants. Black rectangular-framed glasses sit on the bridge of his nose, covering his dark brown eyes. 


I blink my eyes twice, making sure he is the same man that I know. “Kevin?”


The man flashes a wide smile. “You still remember me?”


“Of course!” I answer, still feeling surprised. I did wish to meet him, yet it never occurred to me that we could ever meet again.


“Here, flowers for you,” Kevin stretches his hand, putting a red-coloured bouquet in front of me, along with a white plastic bag.


“Oh, thank you! Rose? It doesn't match the vibe here, though,” I peek at the bouquet while gesturing him to sit in front of me.


“Whatever with vibes. I just know for sure that you'll like it,” Kevin answers as he crosses his legs to sit down beside me.


Beaming with joy, I nod at his statement. This behaviour of him never stops to make my heart flutter. 


“You look the same as I last saw you,” Kevin states.


“Still pretty?” I jokingly ask as I put my palms under my chin, moving my fingers playfully to resemble the flower petals.


Kevin lets out a chuckle at my action. “Yeah, yeah.”


“You look different,” stopping my fingers from moving, I reply.


“Different like, how?” Kevin gets his face closer to mine.


“Like, these lines at the corner of your eyes weren't there last time,” I stretch my hands, trying to reach his facial features.


Kevin lets out a faint smile, moving his head backwards to avoid the touch of my hands. “Well, ten years have passed by.”


Understanding the uncomfortableness that the guy in front of me is feeling, I pull back my hand, suppressing the wish to caress his face. 


Avoiding the awkward situation, Kevin grabs the plastic bag that he brought and takes out the two white-coloured cans. “Your favourite drink.”


My eyes widen at the familiar-looking logo pasted on the can. “You still remember.”


Kevin pops the can, letting the fizz out, “How can I forget when you always bought the same drink over and over again?” 


“You'll drink it?” I ask while observing the man beside me.


“I have bought it, so might as well,” Kevin gulps the soft drink, letting my jaw drops in surprise by the action.


“I thought you hated this drink? Remember back then in high school?" 


“That was then. At this time, I have grown quite a liking to this beverage,” Kevin excuses himself, then turns around and lets gas out from his mouth.


I mouth 'WOW' in silence as I watch Kevin pour the liquid and swallows the beverage once again. “Since when, though?”


“Since you were gone, I guess?” Kevin replies in a playful tone.


“Oh come on, I know you have already moved on,” I throw another question to corner him.


“No?” I could see Kevin avoids looking at me when he states his replies. The habit that he always does when he is lying.


I cross my arms, about to ask him to spill out his life story for the past ten years, when he pulls out a white envelope from the back pocket of his pants. “Anyway, I've got a letter for you,” Kevin stretches out, “From your parents.”


I nod my head a couple of times as I observe Kevin opening up the envelope, putting the piece of paper in front of me, ready to be read. “How are they?” I ask as I skim through the writing on the paper.


“Healthy and well. From time to time, I drop by your house and have a chat with them,” Kevin puts his left hand under his chin, waiting for me to finish reading the letter.


“Oh, that's good to hear. I feel better knowing that someone is caring for them in my stead,” I lift my head from the letter, looking at the guy in front of me once again. 


“That's the least that I can do,” Kevin forces a smile. 


“Is this the only letter for me?” I ask abruptly.


The guy in front of me is taken aback by my question. He opens his mouth, but he chooses to close it again. Instead, his hand reaches out to the white plastic bag, pulling out another envelope. This time, a golden-coloured one with his name embedded on the front.


Along with a girl’s name beside his.


“This is what you come here for, isn’t it?” I observe the decoration on the corner, as well as the heart ornament in between the two names.


“I’m sorry,” Kevin says in a soft voice. He averts his eyes from mine, and I could see that smile no longer exists in his face.


“Don’t be,” I shake my head, trying hard to push back the tears from falling. All the memories when I spent the time with him comes flooding back.


And silence falls between the two of us for a good few minutes. I am drowning in my thoughts, and so is Kevin.


Until a ringtone from Kevin’s phone breaks it.


Kevin answers the video call, displaying a girl in a red dotted dress on the screen. “Babe, I am here. Where are you?”


“Oh, I’m still inside,” Kevin replies. He glances at me, with a pained expression.


“Are you done? I am at the gate. Come on out please, this place is rather creepy,” the girl ends the call.


Kevin bits his lip as his phone screen turns black. “I feel bad about leaving you.”


“Go, Kevin. Be happy.”


---


“Babe!” the girl in the red dress waves her hands to Kevin.


Kevin turns around to look back at me. “Can I ever meet you again?”


“I don’t think you can. I am leaving. My wish has been fulfilled, after all.”


Kevin nods his head. “Move on, Bella. You deserve to be happy too.” Kevin gives me another smile before walking closer to the girl who is standing near the reddish brick gate.


From afar, I could see the girl wraps her fingers around Kevin’s arms.


From afar, I could see the diamond ring on her finger that shines brightly under the sun’s reflection.


From afar, I could see the two walk side by side, chatting at each other happily.


---


“Who did you meet, Babe?”


“My ex.”


The girl in the red dress frowns. “Here? What a weird place to talk with your ex.”


Kevin lets out a chuckle as the girl turns her head, looking around between the countless tombstones, trying to take a glance at his so-called ex.


“Don’t be jealous. She already died a long time ago.”


---


It was one Sunday evening when Kevin drove his father's car. We were eighteen, did not even have a driving licence, yet we courageously took off for our date.


The beautiful views on the way to the observatory on the mountaintop distracted our eyes from the road. But during one of the sharp turns, without quick reflex behind the wheel, our car skidded and fell off the cliff.


And I could remember the sunset that I watched with pain all over my body, up until the last moment I closed my eyes.


And today, under the same orange-coloured sky, after meeting the love of my life for the last time, my soul can finally rest.

July 15, 2020 22:19

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Jr. Romars
13:48 Jul 23, 2020

very well written.

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Elle Sin
06:22 Jul 23, 2020

This is certainly a good one and there's an ache in my heart. I can't 🥺 IT WAS AN OVERALL BEAUTIFUL PIECE, I MIGHT AS WELL JUST CRY FOR A MOMENT AND APPRECIATE THE INEXPLICABLY AMAZING TWIST

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Stephu Sunny
03:17 Jul 23, 2020

This was so genius! The twist was so unexpected, but I loved it. The dialogue flowed really well too.

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Gracie Jean
23:17 Jul 22, 2020

Wow the twist was amazing! I caught a couple of minor grammatical mistakes, but I thought that the actual story was great.

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Regina Morrison
13:18 Jul 22, 2020

Wow!! I really enjoyed this story... Your descriptions and your characters are good! And it's so sad! I was not expecting that ending.

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Lenny Kovani
10:52 Jul 22, 2020

Greaaat story, I love the way you write!

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María Barrios
19:55 Jul 21, 2020

I was surprised. It left me thinking of the way life can change abruptly in a moment.

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Deborah Angevin
09:11 Jul 22, 2020

I'm glad that the message I intended was delivered :o

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17:30 Jul 21, 2020

Wow!!! I really loved the twist and the dialogue... It was maybe a little too... elegant? As in, nobody really talks like that and uses the word “beverage” in real life, but once I read the twist, I thought it fit nicely with the story. Great job!!!

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Deborah Angevin
09:12 Jul 22, 2020

Now that you mention it... that's true! Thank you for pointing that out :o

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ℤ ℍ☮️
14:23 Jul 21, 2020

This is amazing! The plot is unexpected and mind-blowing! Great work, Deborah! I can't wait to read more!

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Deborah Angevin
09:12 Jul 22, 2020

Thank you for reading and enjoying it! :D

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14:18 Jul 21, 2020

That was really good! I didn't see the twist coming. A few little mistakes in the English but nothing too terrible. I liked the descriptive imagery. I could almost feel like I was there watching them all.

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Deborah Angevin
09:13 Jul 22, 2020

Glad to hear the imagery delivered well through the story! :D

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Bibisha Shakya
05:56 Jul 21, 2020

This was such a captivating story from the beginning but the plot twist was what really brought it home. Love this post!

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Bibisha Shakya
05:56 Jul 21, 2020

This was such a captivating story from the beginning but the plot twist was what really brought it home. Love this post!

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Bibisha Shakya
05:56 Jul 21, 2020

This was such a captivating story from the beginning but the plot twist was what really brought it home. Love this post!

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Deborah Angevin
11:46 Jul 21, 2020

Thank you, Bibisha! Glad that you enjoyed the story :D

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Samantha Salomon
01:22 Jul 21, 2020

This was great!!

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Deborah Angevin
04:34 Jul 21, 2020

Thank you for enjoying it :)

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Batool Hussain
17:00 Jul 20, 2020

Hello! This was beautiful and the ending is quite perfect! Mind checking out my new story and sharing your views on it? Thanks.

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Deborah Angevin
22:40 Jul 20, 2020

Sure thing, Batool, will check yours out! :D

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Jack Fitzgerald
13:00 Jul 20, 2020

I know that this whole prompt section was about plot twists, but I definitly did not see that ending coming. Great work! :)

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Deborah Angevin
22:42 Jul 20, 2020

Glad that I can surprise you with the ending, Jack! :D

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San T.
06:23 Jul 20, 2020

Wow.. such a wonderful story.. I really loved it.

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Deborah Angevin
22:43 Jul 20, 2020

Thank you for reading and enjoying it :D

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Raven Quill
00:32 Jul 20, 2020

Omg. I am not an emotional person, and this damn near made me cry. Other than a little tense issue, this was beautifully descriptive and conveyed so much emotion without having to say it. Wonderful job :)

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Deborah Angevin
04:24 Jul 20, 2020

Thank you for reading it, Raven! Glad that you enjoyed it :)

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Parul Srivastava
04:42 Jul 19, 2020

Amazing, Deborah. Loved the description....could almost see it without actually seeing it, oh! what a twist. I'm new here...Do read mine too and let me know your thoughts :)

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Deborah Angevin
10:05 Jul 19, 2020

Glad that you enjoyed it, Parul! Sure, I will check yours out :)

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Parul Srivastava
04:42 Jul 19, 2020

Amazing. And what a twist. I'm new here...Do read mine too and let me know your thoughts :)

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