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Drama Friendship Suspense

It is perfect, everyone should wake up to go to school, college, work and much more, everyone is happy, they had a wonderful and fairytale Christmas and a year of 2021 started in force but stay like this, in front of the house of a rich family a cat appeared the night before, is that a sign? the cat is white as snow and clean everyone looks at her and feels joy, some children tried to touch her but she disappears every time, this is strange but it is said that only the special girl can touch her, right? let's see our story

it is a soothing morning, with a smooth and fabulous sky, all the children go to school happy and happy because they had a wonderful Christmas and a splendid beginning of the year, a boy, a good and loving saw lying on the grass next to a park, a little girl, she looked 14 years old, the child woke her up and asked her “what happened” .. the little girl with the pale face and wide open eyes answered the child with fear -What happened to me? The confused boy told him; that he does not know The girl got up, looked up at the sky and told the boy; "I don't know what happened to me, but it certainly wasn't good." The boy asked her: -Don't you want to know what happened to you? The girl smiled and giggled. The astonished boy asked her why she was laughing; -Why are you laughing? Doesn't that scare you? The girl replied warmly and calmly -Would you like to know what happened to you if it was bad? The boy, not knowing what to say ... froze. The girl began to laugh louder and louder. And then he told the boy; -I feel like I have a horrible past, I don't want to go back there! The boy replied, calmer; -You will be fine, I will help you, stay calm :) The girl hugged her new friend and told him; "I don't remember my past - and I don't want to." The boy asked what he would do then. And the girl answered; -God take care of me, I'm sure The boy smiled and said: -Wrong, God and I will take care of you dear. The girl began to feel loved and told the boy; -I feel like I've never been so loved before, please don't leave me

-The boy smiled and told him that this would never happen to you

The girl thanked the boy for this and asked him;

-Do you have a house? You have a mother, or a cat;

-A cat?

-Yes a white cat, the girl smiled long

-No, I don't have a white cat but one always sleeps in front of my house

The girl answered happily

-How cute

The boy asked the girl if she wanted to go to his house, meet his mother and see the cat and maybe he would find a family.

The girl smiled and at that moment she felt that she had found a perfect friend, it was an endless friendship in her heart!

The boy smiled and at that moment he felt that he really loved, it was a love like fire in his heart!

The two went home happy, on the way the boy was amazed by the beauty of the girl! She was tall, gentle, had long and silky hair, a flushed and perfect face, the boy had wet hands, he felt shy and loving, something incredible!

When they got home they saw the white cat lying in front of his house :)

The girl felt the connection between the two and took her in her arms immediately, the girl felt that she loved the cat and that it was a wonderful thing between them;

At that moment the boy took the girl by the hand and they left the house, on the cat's face you could see a tear flowing.

The boy's mother, when he noticed the girl, asked;

-What is with this pretty and wonderful girl

The boy answered;

-She's my girlfriend and her name is..hmm..Lila!

-Enjoyed to meet Lila, I'm Kim

The girl smiled and answered lightly;

-Nice to meet you too

The boy took the girl by the hand and took her to his room, the girl was amazed, the boy's room was spectacular, beautiful and bright, "Lila" already felt at home

The boy asked the girl if she liked the room.

The girl answered;

-Of course

After 3 minutes the girl asked;

-In which room does your mother beat you?

The boy was shocked ... and answered in astonishment;

-Did you have something like that?

The girl answered strangely;

-Nuuu, it was just a joke :)

The boy breathed a sigh of relief and answered the girl;

-Okay dear

The girl looked at the boy with her big blue eyes and smiled with her perfect smile.

The boy asks the girl;

-Do you know what love is?

The boy was shocked by the girl's answer.

The girl answered;

-I don't know what happened to me -and I don't want to

The boy was sure he had heard that once ... he seemed familiar.

The girl began to look out the window ... when the boy asked her; You love?

The girl left the house and went back to the park and lay on the grass, the girl was sure that her place was there ... no one understood her except the cat.

When the boy shouted at the girl;

-I love you...

At that moment the girl disappeared, the boy started to cry and say it was his fault ... the hours passed and he was still sitting there waiting for his best friend! The boy after hours of waiting decided to go home to sleep, on the way he noticed a beautiful white cat sitting on the grass, the boy convinced that there is no one and that it starts to rain ... he took her home with him to do the his best friend, when he got home, the cat breathed a sigh of relief and said softly, "I'll always take care of you, darling."

January 04, 2021 19:02

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Doug Goodrich
23:05 Jan 13, 2021

Hi Leu, This seems like a stream of consciousness more than a short-story. The formatting is a little weird. I asked someone about their formatting the other day and they said they had used their phone to write it and they couldn't fully format. I applaud the effort but try and think of a through line and a plot more than separate thoughts and streams.

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Almarie Campbell
22:03 Jan 13, 2021

Hi Leu, Not to be harsh but I think I am a little lost in this story. I found that the sentences were running into each other and it left me a little breathless. I had to read the first paragraph over a couple of times trying to understand. The interchange between the boy and the girl were at times stated as 2 boys. On the plus side If I go back to the story the young girl seems to have an unpleasant experience. It left me wondering, was she raped or molested? That also had me thinking. But since the title was," The cat" Was she bitten or sc...

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