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Romance Fiction Holiday

              In January 1, 2018, Lucas was staying in the bed and the alarm was ringing loudly. He didn’t want to get up because it’s holiday. So, he moved his hand over the table near his bed to stop the alarm clock. But he was opening his eyes wide open immediately because he touched something weird, soft and warm it doesn’t seemed like alarm clock or table. He looked closely to his hand go and he saw something that he didn’t expect. He scratched his head and looked at there again. He didn’t know that woman at all why did she get in his bed and what happened last night. Only thing he remembered is he was happy and had a dinner with a girl. And then, he looked around the room. He recognized that wasn’t his room at all. He didn’t remember how did he get here and why did he sleep together with a girl. A minute later, the girl was waking up and saw him with a towel position. Because he just finished showering and get out from the bathroom. He said “I am glad you wake up now, I didn’t remember anything so do you remember what happen yesterday”. She was being shock and looked at him closely from head to toe. Then, she watched herself back and shouting loudly. He knew why she was shocking so much. He said “calm down, so we both didn’t know why we get here, it’s not time for getting shocked think about yesterday back”. She was crying but she said “I remember we take a dinner at beautiful place like a fairy tale, we talked over hours and drunk you take me go for a ride by your car and headed to the river bay but later I didn’t remember at all”.

                    However, he changed his clothes and she took a bathroom. He went out and looked around the place for checking. Then, he knew this is the motel and he heard the noise of the train. When he went outside, he knew where they were. Then, he looked around the motel and he saw his car. He said inside his mind “thanks god, it’s not broken yet”. He went to the restaurant near the motel for buying the foods. When she finished showering and changing her clothes, he went back to the room with packed foods. He said “we must eat our breakfast first before we leave here”. She nodded and they were having their breakfast together. Later, they drove back to their home together. When they went home, they didn’t see any family members at home. So, they decided to act like normal. They didn’t know their family members had known everything. Both family members were discussing at the nearby restaurant hosted by the Lucas family. Actually their meeting wasn’t accidentally, Lucas’s grandmother and mother choose the girl from match maker and they contacted her family especially her parents. They chose the place, fix the time and make them match each other romantically. Inside their discussion, they knew their kids were spending the night yesterday. They didn’t know what happened between them but this is the situation they wanted to let it happened. Then, they continued discuss about what to do next. Especially Lucas’s parents said “their son wasn’t easy to talk about marriage but the other way he wasn’t a person who would avoid something or someone hurt because of him”. His grandmother said “she knew about him well, he might accept this marriage arrangement this time”. They head back to their homes after discussion done well as plan. Before they left they told each other to contact if something special after they told them.

                      First, Maria’s mother went back home and trying to calm down herself. Then, she went upstairs to meet her daughter. When she went there, Maria wasn’t there. So, she came down stair and went into the kitchen. She said “there she is”, then her mother hurried go near her daughter and make her scare. Suddenly, Maria’s mother asked her “where have you been yesterday, why didn’t you back home, are you with someone or dating someone if you do you must tell Mama about it first”. Maria shoved her hands suddenly and dropped the ladle in the pot. Then, Maria said “No, I didn’t have such person but yesterday I was being drunk and spend a night at motel”. Mother said “why didn’t you take a taxi you can head back home that way”. Maria said “Mama, I didn’t know what happened I didn’t remember anything”. She faced down to the floor and mother said “how did you get back home today”. Maria played her hand and said “it’s the taxi driver who drove me back”. Mother said “so it’s now a taxi driver”, she was shocking with Mama’s words. But mother continued saying “Mama know best my child don’t worry I know that child too me and his parents let you guys meet each other and we do hope you guys connected like a match and now the god fulfill our wish”. Maria said “Mama what are you talking about”. Mother said “aren’t you get it still, we always worried about you because all of our daughters were married and only you left, do you think you are still young to stop think of dating or marriage”. Maria said “Mom it wasn’t”, mother told her “tell me the truth aren’t you love him”. Maria thought back by looking down to the floor and said “I liked him since first meet at restaurant”. Mother said “Mama knew you loved him I can see in your eyes, that’s why everyone said love at first sight”.

                     At Lucas family, Lucas’s mother and grandmother also asking him the questions. Now, he couldn’t get out from their questions. At last, he said “yes to them”. They were being happy and they contacted each other for saying the great news. Both of them didn’t know their parents already prepared for their wedding ceremony. It’s very rushed for them but for their parents from both sides it was being late. They followed their engagement ceremony the later day and the next day they did wedding ceremony. Every family member were surprising and wishing their best wishes for them. After the wedding ceremony done, they entered into their wedding room. This wasn’t their first time meeting each other alone but now they were keep silent and stay stable. Their door was being locked from outside. They discussed about what to do next for their future. Then, they made a agreements between them, they didn’t want to break the rules of their family. At that time, they did agree for acting as married couple for a year. They didn’t even know what will happen on coming future. Three months later, she was being pregnant and he thought she was a girl who dated many guys before him. When the time come, he did a DNA testing the baby in her womb. He couldn’t escape now because it was his child. From that time, he took the duty of father for his baby boy who will born later. He put his all will and strengths over taking care of Maria and the baby. He didn’t notice himself why he loving her more and more was happening unexpectedly. But he knew his heart was beating so fast when she was there with him. Three months later, their baby boy is born and the conditions and situations are changing especially between his parents. They destroyed their engagement letter and looked at their wedding photo which was standing right beside their bed. They looked at their baby with all their love and they do love each other more meaningfully and truly. Their relationship was being stronger than ever they did notice that. That’s why “who know what will happen on the future, didn’t say you are not loving someone because you may love someone unexpectedly”. 

February 19, 2021 15:05

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Diana Quill
07:37 Feb 25, 2021

This was a pretty good base story, however, there were numerous grammar mistakes, and I found the 'then this happened, then that happened' theme very repetitive and unengaging. You had a good idea, but you need to work on formulating your stories well and using proper grammar and punctuation, as well as dividing paragraphs and speech from one long text. I hope this helps :)

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Floraine Thwin
15:04 Feb 26, 2021

thanks for pointing out my errors. I created it in a rush.

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Floraine Thwin
15:05 Feb 26, 2021

thanks for pointing out my errors. I created it in a rush. It's help me a lot.

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Floraine Thwin
15:05 Feb 26, 2021

thanks for pointing out my errors. I created it in a rush. It's help me a lot.

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