It was a cold winter night, and I was driving home from my friend's house. Diana wants me to stay because she was scared I would get hurt on the icy roads. I told her “not to worry I only live ten minutes from here,”. Diana sighed and told me to text her as soon as I got home so that I won't worry her. I was two minutes from my house, stopped at a stoplight. When I blanked out, it was dark but bright at the same time. I didn't see anything or anyone. Suddenly, there was a loud sound. I woke up in a sweat. I was freaking out, how did I end up in my bed, what kind of dream was that, and why is it twelve am. “TWELVE, I HAVE TO TEXT DIANA OR SHE IS GOING TO KILL ME”, I look around for my phone. “AH WHERE IS MY PHONE AT, THERE UNDER THE BED...wait why is it under the bed geez how drunk was I,”? I try to turn on my phone only to find out it's dead of course because my day is starting off great so far. “Screw it I'll take a shower while my phone charges,”. Putting the phone to charge, I take a shower. So many thoughts are running through my mind that I don't have an answer too. Like my phone, I know that I only drank one and that was when I first walked into the house after that I had water and soda. When I got out of the shower I wiped some steam off of the mirror. I was shocked when I didn't see myself in the mirror, pushing against the mirror wiping it over and over again. Nothing I could not see myself. Then I thought maybe my brother did it, he did say he was going to get back at me for putting sharpie on his neck that says “no regrets,” which is so true. “Haha very funny Max, puts a fake mirror in my bathroom that only shows the background and no person,” I yell. Damn in starving, let's go make a sandwich. In the kitchen, I finished making me a sandwich when my front door busted open. “Yo Rosie, I’m hungry you’re hungry, so let’s go get some food. I want a burger, no no pizza. Yeah with stuff crust and wings,” said Max. “Nah, I don't really want pizza. Burgers do sound good though,” I said. Max looked confused. “Rosie, oh Rosie where art thou, oh a sandwich all alone. Don't worry sandwich I'll keep you company in meh belly,” said Max. “Max don't you dare touch my sandwich and I'm right here, enough with the jokes, it's getting annoying,” I said annoyed with how stupid Max is. I was about to tap Max on the shoulder when he bit my sandwich. Suddenly, Max yelled, “CHINESE FOOD IMMA GO GET CHINESE FOOD YOU BETTER BE AWAKE WHEN I GET BACK ROSE,”! Max runs outside and left for the Chinese place down the street. “How is he so smart yet so stupid at the same time, it doesn't add up,” I said as I grab my keys “I might as well take Mrs.Peidra her pots back, while I wait for Max with the food,”. I throw on my sandals over my socks, grab a sweater and walk outside. When I noticed something weird. I slowly turned my head to look at the ground. My footprints weren't visible, I...I couldn't see my footprints, that's...that's impossible this is fresh snow. I should be able to see my prints,” freaking out I ran back into my house. “What, What is happening, my...my footprints aren't there and,”. “*Ring Ring*.”. That’s my phone. “My phone.”! I ran upstairs to see Diana trying to facetime me, I answered and as soon as I saw her face she said ”Oh so now you answer me, okay whatever. And didn't I tell you that I want you to text me as soon as you got home, Rose why can't I see you,”? ”What, what do you mean I'm right in front of the phone, ”. ”Rose, hello answer me, ugh you're probably asleep and answered by accident, okay then I'll call you again later, bye, ”. She hung up, there is no way Diana is playing a joke on me because Diana always laughs before even telling the joke. I’m…I don’t know what is happening. “*Ding-dong*.”. My doorbell? I walked down the stairs slowly and looked out the peephole, I didn’t see anything. “*Ding-dong*.”. Why is my doorbell ringing when I see nobody outside? Ugh, why is this day so horrible, maybe my doorbell froze. I opened my door to fix my doorbell when a young man was at the door. “Finally you open up, god I was about to bust down your door,”. “Who are you,why my door,”? “Well,” said the man. “Huh, well what,”? “Well I’m outside the house waiting for you to let me in my god,”. Wait he wants me to let him in. I don’t even know the dude, but he isn’t acting like he doesn’t know I exist. “Ummm yeah sorry come in,” I move over to let him in the house and he looks around. “Hey, umm excuse me but you can see me,” I said. He looked at me but I couldn’t read his face. He had a blank expression on him like he didn’t care about me the slightest. I thought he might be saying this lady is crazy, of course I see her. Quickly I said “Nevermind you see my brother is pulling a prank on me where people act like they can’t see or hear me,”. “It’s not a prank,”. “What,”? “Sigh, it’s not a prank your a walker,” he said with his expressionless face. “A walker is someone who is invisible to everyone. The only reason I’m talking to you is due to the fact that I’m a whisp. Monsters like duat make humans like you invisible. When they make-,”. “WAIT WHAT IM INVISIBLE,”! I was so confused but I knew everything he was saying was true because I could feel it. Like someone or something was watching me, waiting for something to happen. The man went and sat on my couch, and his face went from expressionless to… to a smile. What was this creep smiling for, he’s enjoying this. Who ever this man is he is seriously pissing me off, and he seemed to notice my change of emotions. “Hahahaha oh your so easy to read. One I’m not enjoying your pain, you’re just the first human to actually believe me right off the bat. Two duat turn people invisible to make them go crazy, and when they go crazy they creep up on you and eat your soul. Duats are horrible creatures that will not hesitate to kill you the second they get. And three you would be dead right now if it wasn’t for me constantly ringing your doorbell. So you're welcome,”. “My… my footprints why… WHY COULDN'T I SEE THEM. I SHOULD STILL BE ABLE TO SEE THEM,”?! “Easy, you're dead,” he said so calmly. I’m-I’m dead but… I what no no no I don’t want to be dead. I grabbed my head and covered my mouth, I was bending down because I felt like I had to throw up. Behind me was a noise like growling mixed with laughter. Out of the shadow in the corner of the room a thing, no a monster started clawing their way out of shadows. A scary smile plastered across its face as it looked at me. Horror filled my body, I couldn’t move, couldn’t speak, couldn’t breath. Suddenly arms wrapped around me…it was the man he was hugging me, why. He was speaking shouting I couldn’t hear him. I was too terrified. He shook, I listened closely to what he was saying “stop” stop, stop why. “You need to calm down” “fear” “weakness” his… his voice was coming in and out and the more I looked at him the more the creature was crawling out of the shadows, laughing. I closed my eyes and took a deep breath and trying to calm down. When I opened my eyes the creature was out of the shadows. His smile got bigger and *CRACK*his head was too the side. A blade made of silver was in front of my face. The man was still holding me but he was protecting me. Fear was all I could think about. Fear fear that’s it the man said earlier that they drive people crazy and eat their soul. I was scared I feared death. I was going crazy with fear. The man was trying to tell me that I need to not fear this creature, not fear death. I slowed my breathing and looked at it. Which was hard because it terrified me.
I spoke out loud “wow I never would have thought I'd meet Quasimodo in real life. Sorry that’s insulting to Quasimodo,”. Quasimodo was an inside joke between me and my brother so when I said that I started laughing. Light flashed in front of my eyes. The man was in front of the creature with the silver knife in its head. The creature fell to the floor turning to ash. “How the-you were just behind me,”. “Your jokes are trash,” he said with a smile on his face. “I-I,”. “Rider, that’s my name,”. “Rose,”. “Umm, so HA what what happened,” I said confused. “Well i just killed the creature with my blade and now you're going to listen to what is happening with you, okay,” said Rider. “Yeah, okay I’ll listen,” I said.
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Very creative! I really like the world you're setting up. One thing I might suggest is divvying up your paragraphs and entering whenever someone new is talking in dialogue. Itll break up your text blocks and make it a lot easier to read. Great job!
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