50 comments

Adventure Thriller

My name is Katrina Wilcox, but my friends call me Kat for short. I live in New Hope, North Carolina, a hot spot for supernatural activity. Listen up people because I’m only going to say this once. Monsters, demons, and ghosts are real, and I hunt them down like the cowards they are and bring them to my swift justice! I know what you're thinking. Why is a thirteen-year-old girl waging war on things that go bump in the night? The answer is quite simple. I’m the only one who can.  

Let me bring you up to date… 

A long time ago, a pact was made in the supernatural world between vampires, lycans, monsters, demons, ghosts… you get my point, right? Anyway, those evil entities came to an understanding that the only way they were going to survive is if we stopped believing in them. With the help of an evil witch named Belinda, they all sacrificed a bit of their powers to cast a dark veil over our eyes.

The spell worked for the most part. People went on with their lives, and monsters became a farce that could only exist in books and movies. This ensured the livelihood of many dark creatures because humanity couldn’t hunt what they didn’t believe in. The spell didn't work on children and to this very day, kids are the only ones who can see them. When a child sees a monster, they tell their parents and they cast it off to their overactive imaginations. Through the ignorance of adulthood, the secret existence of evil remains safe.   

I come from a long line of traditional monster slayers. Some family members love it, and some hate it. My parents used to be hunters themselves until the veil engulfed their minds. No one knows exactly what age the spell takes you, but our best guess is the ripe old age of twenty. Because my parents used to be hunters they still remember their past adventures, but now they can no longer see the monsters. That’s where I come in by the way!  

The last creature my mom killed was Santa Clause. Yeah... he’s not a jolly old fat guy that brings you presents every year. Nope, he’s an evil soul sucking demon who preys on young boys and girls on the most sacred day of the year. He would sneak into people’s houses and transfer the children's souls into sugar cookies and eat them. 

My mom stayed up all night waiting for him. She had a gut feeling that Santa was coming for her, so she set a trap for him. Mom pretended to fall asleep that night, and sure enough he came for her. She heard the soft creeping sounds of his snow boots as he inched his way to her bedroom. When he opened the door - BAM!! - my mom hit him with an electrified sledge hammer and fried his ass!

My dad is a pure bad-ass that doesn’t like to get his hands dirty. He killed Dracula himself! When he went on his third-grade field trip to Transylvania to tour the Bran Castle, he separated himself from the tour group, and found a secret passageway in the library. He pulled out his trusty-pure-sunshine flashlight and quietly made his way down into the spider infested catacombs.  

There he found a dozen brown coffins perfectly lined up in a straight line. He was surprised to find out that Dracula had OCD. Anyway, he opened those coffins one by one and injected them with a full syringe of holy water. Those vampires didn’t wake up hissing or screaming like you see in the movies. Nope, they died peacefully in their sleep. When dad got to the main man himself he had about ten syringes left, so he injected all of them for good measure. With Dracula dead, my dad rubbed some hand sanitizer all over his hands and rejoined the tour group with no one the wiser.  

Word gets around in the hunting community, and my parents learned about Belinda and her evil spell. In fact, that’s how they met each other. Together my parents developed a plan to find the evil witch and kill her. With Belinda’s death, the spell would be lifted, and everyone would wake up like a kid escaping from a bad nightmare.  

After years of tracking the old witch, my parents always came up empty. They got close a few times, but their time eventually ran out. When they turned twenty the veil swallowed their vision and they were blinded to the darkness that still plagues this world. 

With the veil infesting their minds like a hungry parasite, my parents decided to get out of the hunting business and live normal lives. They ended up going to college and got married, but the most important thing they did was give birth to me - Kat The Monster Slayer! I’ve decided to finish the quest my mom and dad started a long time ago. 

I will find Belinda, and I will kill her with my bare hands!  

My own adventure started two days ago when I found my parents' old journals neatly tucked away in the attic. I wasn’t snooping or anything like that. Well… maybe I was, but that’s our secret. Anyway, I was specifically looking for any notes on Belinda’s whereabouts. My dad kept detailed information about every hunt he had ever been on. My mom on the other hand never felt the need to chronicle her adventures.

I rummaged through half a dozen boxes until I found what I was looking for. Like a moth to a flame, a small leather-bound book seemed to be calling me. I knew right away that it was the book I needed. I flipped through the pages like a wild grandma searching for her momma’s secret recipe. On the very last dry rotted page, I found the last known coordinates of the evil witch, Belinda. She was last seen on Roanoke Island, in North Carolina.   

“That’s only about a two-hour drive from New Hope!”   

I looked back at the journal entry and read my father’s pristine handwritten notes.  

In the year 1590, a large group of settlers disappeared without a trace from Roanoke Island, NC. Only two clues were ever found. The words “Croatoan” were found carved into a gatepost, and the word “Cro” was etched into a nearby tree. After extensive investigations over the years the settlers were never found... 

I wonder if the evil witch Belinda had anything to do with this mystery. It is believed by many slayers that Belinda’s last name is, in fact, Cro. A settlement charter from that area clearly shows the signature of Belinda Cro, and I believe these facts to be irrefutable. My own investigations into this matter have proven fruitless, and with my twentieth birthday rapidly approaching, I’m afraid I have run out of time.  

With that new information, my mind was set. I packed some supplies and borrowed my mom's car. Sure, I’m not legally allowed to drive, but that doesn’t stop old blind people now does it? I drove off to Roanoke Island in the radiant moonlight where my destiny awaited.  

Now that you're all caught up, let’s continue… 

Reaching my destination, I approach an open field where the “Cro” tree once stood. I have no idea what I’m looking for, but I just have a feeling that something is here. I sway my flashlight through the misty fog searching for anything out of place and I hear a growling sound coming from the thicket just ahead of me. 

The sight of two red eyes sends shivers down my spine, and I know right away that a lycan is stalking me. I reach into my duffle bag and remove my crossbow loaded with a silver tipped arrow. A true slayer always comes prepared. I keep my eyes glued on the rustling thicket, waiting for the attack. The sound of running footsteps interrupts my focus and the werewolf explodes from the bushes. 

BOOM!

A thundering gunshot erupts from just behind me and the soaring beast falls dead at my feet. I quickly turn around and see a boy about my age holding a smoking shotgun. He’s wearing camouflage and if my heart wasn’t beating a mile a minute, I would totally kick his ass!  

“Who the hell are you?” 

He lowers the boom stick, and replies, “My name is David, and I just saved your ass!”

“Excuse me!? I didn’t need your help, David!” I condescend his name on purpose.

David walks over to the fallen lycan and kicks it to make sure the beast is dead. “I’ve been hunting this werewolf for months now,” he says smiling. “Thanks to you, I finally killed him.”   

“I’m not bait!” I say frowning. “I’m not here to hunt some stupid lycan, I’m after something much more important!”  

“Are you kidding me? A pink haired little girl like you is a slayer?”  

I clench my jaw and utter, “Not that it matters to you, but yeah, my name is Kat The Monster Slayer, and I’m hunting an evil witch!”  

He starts laughing at me. “Ok, ok… I believe you. You have some attitude,” he says grinning from ear to ear. “I like that about you!”  

That’s brazen of him to say. He might almost be cute if it wasn’t for his arrogance.

“Hey, how about I help you?” he says. “We’re both hunters and we can cover more ground if we work together.”  

I hate to admit this, but he’s right. I need to get back home before my mom finds out I took her car.    

“I guess you have a good point,” I say after a deep breath. “Why don’t we split up to cover more ground?” More of an order than a question. 

David narrows his eyes, “I think we’ll do better if we stick together. There might be more werewolves in the area!”  

“No!”

“I’ll search by the creek, and you can search over by the ridgeline,” I yell, pointing to the dense trees. 

He quietly nods his head in agreement and walks towards the ridgeline. 

“Keep your eyes out for any strange markings on the trees!” I yell.

“Yeah, yeah… Who died and made you boss?”  

I march toward the creek paying close attention to the trees. Water is a good source of life, and I just know that something has to be here. The bubbling sound of water fills the night air, and I stare at the creek with great intent. In the glassy surface of the water, the moonlight reflects a strange tree just off to my right side. 

That’s it, I just know it!

I approach the tree with great caution because I feel my insides quivering. This tree only has one branch, and the bark is worn almost like someone was rubbing it. I raise my trembling hand to the worn branch hoping that my instincts are right. 

Come on Kat, pull yourself together!

I grip the branch tightly and pull down with all my might. To my surprise the ground beneath me opens up and swallows me whole. I fall several feet into what I can only describe as a labyrinth. Thick wispy strands of fog cover the floor and torches are hanging along the stone walls. I can’t see anything else, so I reach for my flashlight and the damn thing won’t work. I bang it against my hand to no avail.  

In the empty abyss of darkness before me I hear a hideous cackling that chills me to the bone. I reach into my bag and light one of the torches with my lighter. Belinda must be here I know it!

Trudging forward into madness, I notice human bones scattered all along the floor. The smell of rotting flesh makes my eyes water and I feel like barfing. The evil cackling is getting louder, so I must be getting closer. I keep up my stealthy pace that leads me to a massive tomb filled with dead bodies and skeletons.

Sitting on a throne forged from human bones, sits an old lady cloaked in a black dress. I can see her long white hair sticking out from her cowl and shadows mask her wrinkly face. She looks at me through evil eyes and laughs wildly.  

I harness all of my courage. “Is your name Belinda Cro?” 

Her laughter gives birth to an awkward silence. “How do you know my name?” she spits in a shrill voice. 

Before I have a chance to reply, a werewolf erupts from a pile of bones next to me and sends me flying against the stone wall. My bag and torch fall to the ground away from my reach. I take a hard bump, landing on my backside. Belinda starts cackling again like an unhinged sociopath. 

The beast snarls, showing me his razor-sharp fangs and scratches his deadly claws against the floor. I glance over to my open bag and see the crossbow sticking out. My only chance for salvation is just out of arm's reach. 

The lycan dips down ready to pounce and in one swift motion, I roll over to the bag and grab the mighty weapon. As I aim, the beast is already soaring towards me. I close my eyes and fire. 

Splat!

My silver tipped arrow finds its mark and the next thing I hear is the echoing thud of his lifeless body falling to the floor.  

“Nooo!” Belinda screams, rising from her throne.

I reach into my bag and pull out my 9mm handgun. “You’re next, witch!”   

“How dare you come into my home and kill my pet!” she moans. “I think I will add your bones to my collection!” 

My eyes roam back to the skeletons and I can feel sweat rolling down my forehead. “Is this what happened to the missing Roanoke colony?”

“Ha, ha, haaa! Some of them… Yes!” She smiles wickedly at me, and continues, “My guardians and I need to eat!”   

I aim the gun at her. “When I pull this trigger, you’ll be dead, and your curse will be lifted!” 

“Ahhh, stupid, stupid girl! Bullets cannot harm me!”  

I start laughing. “Well... I know the only true way to kill a witch like you,” I say smiling. “I’ve packed these bullets full of black cat hair! It’s a well-kept secret that witches are terrified of black cats, that’s why your kind befriended them decades ago.”

I pause to watch Belinda’s eyes grow wide. “You know… it’s a keep your enemies close kind of thing, because you know it’s the only thing that can kill you!”  

Blam! Blam!

I fire without uttering another word. The bullets pierce Belinda’s flesh and she explodes into a puff of purple smoke. An implosion of sonic energy pulsates through the dark labyrinth and reverberates throughout the entire world, knocking me on my ass.  

I did it! The evil spell is undone!! 

I make my way back to the open field and come face to face with my parents, who look very angry. 

“How did you guys find me?” I ask. 

“Well young lady, thank God for GPS tracking!” my mom utters.

“I hope you know that you're grounded for the rest of your life!” shouts my dad.  

I throw my arms up and yell, “I just killed Belinda the witch, and lifted the veil, and you're telling me I’m grounded?!”  

Almost in unison, my parents shout, “You did what?!”  

Suddenly, my missing partner David runs over to us soaked in perspiration. “I’ve been looking for you all over, Kat!!”  

I see my parents’ eyes grow dark with dread. “Kat, step away from the creature!” my mom cries. 

“What are you talking about, this is David. He’s a slayer like me!” I utter. 

My dad forcefully grabs David. “Kat, this is a shapeshifting soul creature. He feeds on humans and monsters. I can see it in his eyes!” 

I can’t believe this! 

“Why can’t I see what he is?”

Mom cuts in, “His kind are hard to see. They're like wolves hiding among sheep! You can only recognize them from experience.” 

I turn to look at David struggling to break free from my dad’s grasp. “I see you lifted the veil! That’s too bad because I was going to follow you home and kill all of you!!”  

Without warning, my mom grabs a machete from my bag and slashes his neck. David’s head flies through the air and rolls out of sight. 

“Kat, you really did lift the curse!” shouted my mom. “Now we can see again!”  

My dad pierces his lips and smiles like I never saw him smile before. “Now we can hunt again and make this world a safer place to live!”  

Mom exclaims, “Well, I think the adults all over the world are gonna have a big surprise when they see monsters in their neighborhoods.” 

“That’s ok mom, Kat The Monster Slayer will be there to save the day!!” 

My dad ruffles his forehead. “Not without us you won’t. We are a team of monster slayers, remember!”  

I jump up and down in excitement. “Does that mean I’m not grounded anymore?” 

In unison, my parents reply, “Oh, you’re still grounded!!”    

I might be grounded, but that won’t stop me from kicking some evil ass!! 

My family's long-standing tradition of killing monsters will live on thanks to me.

So those creatures better watch their backs, because I’m coming for them next…     

The End

Daniel R. Hayes

June 15, 2021 23:45

You must sign up or log in to submit a comment.

50 comments

Kennedy King
18:12 Jun 18, 2021

I had such a fun time reading this. Kat The Monster Slayer is such an endearing character, and the narrative voice fits her perfectly. I love how you interject her humor throughout the adventure. Great story.

Reply

Daniel Hayes
18:31 Jun 18, 2021

Thank you so much!! I really appreciate you taking the time to read this :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Natania Kurien
17:53 Jun 17, 2021

This was so so good! I loved the character of Kat - it was such an interesting idea to have someone as young as her as the monster slayer. And the narrative voice was so fitting and enjoyable to read. I love the sense of humor throughout. It makes the story so much more lighthearted which makes sense since it's being narrated by a 13-year-old but also helps me not be haunted by images of Belinda and her creepy lair when I go to sleep. The dialogue was really great and so were the twists - I did not see either Santa or David being villainous ...

Reply

Daniel Hayes
19:55 Jun 17, 2021

Hi Natania, thank you so much for those wonderful comments!! I'm so glad you liked the story, I had a lot of fun writing it :) Kat The "Iconic" Monster Slayer... that's a fantastic title, why didn't I think of that? LOL :) I look forward to reading more of your stories! Thanks again!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Ian Mitchell
12:50 Jun 17, 2021

An electrified sledgehammer? Nice. Had to have been a bit heavy for a kid, though. :P

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:47 Jun 17, 2021

Ha!! Not for a true bad-ass ;) Thanks!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Kelly Dennison
15:44 Jun 16, 2021

"...the ripe old age of twenty." OUCH. Ha! This was great, Daniel! Super creative. You did an excellent job of writing in a different voice (a 13 year old, too!) and keeping that tone throughout. The action, as always, was fantastic! And you tend to leave us with an ending that could be taken a bit further (if/when you so choose)! Have you ever thought about doing something similar to that other guy? With the non-linear stories about the book? Just saying, you totally could. And you know what? Santa's creep factor has alwa...

Reply

Daniel Hayes
16:05 Jun 16, 2021

Ha, ha!! The old age of twenty, sounds like something a 13 year old would say :) I didn't like the prompts this week, and I wasn't planning on writing anything, but this idea came to me, and I decided to write it :) I never planned on it being a series, but it totally could. I guess time will tell... The Santa part was cool, I could write a whole story with that idea and really make him suffer :) :) (cue the evil laughter... lol) As always, thank you so much for the wonderful comments, I really appreciate them. Have a great day!!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Aisha Khan
16:21 Jul 01, 2021

The twist about David was one of the best things! The humor was another great thing and if well made, this could be a really great series or even adaptation!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
18:48 Jul 01, 2021

Thank you again Aisha! I'm glad you liked this one. I usually write stories like this, and I have a lot of fun with them. I look forward to reading more of your stories :) Thanks again!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Melody Frost
08:43 Jun 26, 2021

I really enjoyed this story.

Reply

Daniel Hayes
14:48 Jun 26, 2021

Thank you so much Melody, I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Kristin Neubauer
18:33 Jun 24, 2021

Your writing is unlike anything else I read on Reedsy! I keep calling it hilarious, but it's also super-original, vibrant, layered and such fun. I am sorry I have missed so many of your stories - I haven't been able to read much Reedsy over the past several weeks - but this one was great to land on. First, such an interesting character - a 13 year old girl! You developed her voice so well and laid out the plot in such a clear way, even with so much going on. Horror, fantasy, history and fiction all rolled into one - impressive. So many...

Reply

Daniel Hayes
22:01 Jun 24, 2021

Thank you so much Kristin!! Wow, what a wonderful compliment to read! I really appreciate those kind words. This story came from nowhere really, I didn't like the prompts very much but I did have a tiny spark that turned to flame... lol :) I always enjoy your comments and your stories as well. Don't worry about missing some stories I think everyone is so busy these days. I need to slow down anyway, I write way to much... lol. I see you have a new one!! I'm so excited to read it tonight. Again, thank you so much, I really appreciate it :)

Reply

Kristin Neubauer
22:10 Jun 24, 2021

That's funny you weren't particularly inspired by the prompts for that story....you sure made it sound like you were. I think that is the mark of an excellent writer 😊 Don't get your expectations too high for mine....it's a little clunky and needs some work. I just don't really know how to make it better yet.

Reply

Daniel Hayes
23:19 Jun 24, 2021

You're to hard on yourself... lol :) You're a great writer, I'll read it tonight and let you know what I think :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
Anna Kerr
22:32 Jun 23, 2021

This was so good! I love the concept here, especially with people over 20 not seeing the evil in the world. Really cool story! :)

Reply

Daniel Hayes
04:29 Jun 24, 2021

Hi Lindsay, I'm so glad you liked this story. I had a lot of fun writing it. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it. Thank you :) :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Alun Williams
13:07 Jun 23, 2021

Very well written. Loved the touches of humour the character had.

Reply

Daniel Hayes
17:48 Jun 23, 2021

Thank you so much Alun! I'm glad you liked the story. I always try to add some unique humor in my horror stories to lighten things up :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
22:35 Jun 22, 2021

I want to comment to say that this story seriously reminds me of Percy Jackson! I loved how you gave each of the monsters a bit of a funny element, like Santa being a monster or Dracula having OCD. Nice characters, great story :)

Reply

Daniel Hayes
00:03 Jun 23, 2021

Hi there!! Thanks a lot for those wonderful comments. Being compared to Percy Jackson is an amazing compliment! Thank you!!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Shirley Medhurst
12:38 Jun 22, 2021

Fabulous story - you built up the world really well. I thoroughly enjoyed reading - Bravo!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:18 Jun 22, 2021

Thank you so much Shirley :) I really appreciate those amazing comments!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
J B
12:04 Jun 22, 2021

When I was reading this, I felt like I was reading from a story book although this isn't the kind of story I would read to children. "The last creature my mom killed was Santa Clause. Yeah... he’s not a jolly old fat guy that brings you presents every year. Nope, he’s an evil soul sucking demon who preys on young boys and girls on the most sacred day of the year." This made me laugh out loud.

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:15 Jun 22, 2021

Hi Jessica, thank you so much for those wonderful comments! This story was super fun to write and I'm really glad you enjoyed it! :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
17:24 Jun 21, 2021

I didn't know what I'd find when I started reading...but my goodness, this was hilarious. I think you could add the "funny" tag without a problem, if the site allows you to edit at this point. Kat is one of the spunkiest monster slayers I've ever had the pleasure of meeting. But the nerve of her parents, grounding her after she killed Belinda! (Maybe they're just mad that she did it and they never got to. That's it.) :)

Reply

Daniel Hayes
19:50 Jun 21, 2021

Hi there, thanks for those wonderful comments!! I'm so glad you liked the story. I had fun writing it. I think her parents grounded her because she took the car and she is only 13... lol :)

Reply

19:51 Jun 21, 2021

Oh, right. That...definitely qualifies as grounds for grounding. :) And it was a pleasure to read!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
K. Antonio
19:06 Jun 20, 2021

"The last creature my mom killed was Santa Clause. Yeah... he’s not a jolly old fat guy that brings you presents every year. Nope, he’s an evil soul sucking demon who preys on young boys and girls on the most sacred day of the year. He would sneak into people’s houses and transfer the children's souls into sugar cookies and eat them. " - I started laughing here and I couldn't stop! This was so much fun! Kat The Monster Slayer xD This story was wicked!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
20:21 Jun 20, 2021

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you took the time to read this and comment. Writing is hard work, and I've been trying to improve with each new story. Thanks again :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Anneliya Lydia
18:49 Jun 19, 2021

This was fun to read! I love all the twists: evil Santas and witches whose enemies are their cats! Incredibly creative response to the prompt!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
19:07 Jun 19, 2021

Thank you so much Anneliya! I'm so glad you liked this story. I worked hard to add a lot in this story and I'm very happy about it :) Thanks for those wonderful comments. I'll be sure to read and comment on your stories soon :) Thanks again!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Gemma Mc Donald
16:55 Jun 19, 2021

This was so good! I could really understand what was going on, and the lycan monster, I had never even heard of it before! I really liked how it flowed, and the idea behind it. I would just like to add that you said ‘ass’ too much? Like I don’t know, Kat was a young kid and she used it a lot. But regardless this was wonderful!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
18:43 Jun 19, 2021

Thanks Gemma, I really appreciate those wonderful comments! I worked hard on this story, but it was really fun to write! Thanks again :)

Reply

Gemma Mc Donald
17:58 Jun 23, 2021

It was quite wonderful

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
08:45 Jun 19, 2021

Now I know the truth about Santa! XD I really love this story, I couldn't take my eyes off the screen. Really good job on the story!!! :)

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:17 Jun 19, 2021

Hi Kirrtanaa, I'm so glad you liked the story! I could probably write a whole backstory with the Santa thing... lol :) Thank you so much for reading this, and the wonderful comments, I really appreciate them!!

Reply

04:33 Jun 20, 2021

You're welcome, Daniel :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
Beth Connor
21:15 Jun 18, 2021

I loved this, Kat was such a fun character. I laughed and cried at 20-year-olds being old (they are still kids, buahaha!) I am old... I hope you keep playing with this younger perspective, you do it well!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
22:46 Jun 18, 2021

Thank you Beth! I had a lot of fun writing this one. I think the 20 year old line just sounds like something a 13 year old would say... lol :) I like stepping into the characters shoes and giving them some personality. I hope to write more like this :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Mia Wilson
11:37 Jun 16, 2021

This is amazing!! It really shocked me that David was a shapeshifter..... The way this was all written, just kept me on my toes, and it really did make me laugh!! Y’know, this would be an amazing series!!! And I agree!! Evil porcelain dolls, YES!!!! Oh, and maybe like actual stories of ghosts or haunted houses!! That would be really cool!!! Like Annabelle!!!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:28 Jun 16, 2021

Hi Mia, I love your ideas for where the story could go. I originally planned on David and Kat to have a spark of love, but the word limits here prevented that from happening. So I was like what do I do with David's character now? I thought about it, and decided to kill him off... lol ;) We can blame that on the word count:) Thank you so much for the wonderful comments, I really appreciate them, have a good day! :)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Blue Green
06:05 Jun 16, 2021

Hi Daniel, this is a really cool story, it had me hooked right from the start! The plot flowed at a really great pace which you carried all the way through, with a nice twist at the end. I love these "monsters living amongst us" type of stories, and you've created a firm premise to carry on. I'm looking forward to reading more of Kat's adventures! Good stuff!

Reply

Daniel Hayes
15:23 Jun 16, 2021

Hi B.G. I'm so glad you liked this one. I had so much more I wanted to write in this one, but the word limits held me back. I'm not sure why, but I think the first person POV is easier to write for me. I can really put myself into the shoes of the character and just go wild :) Thanks again, I always look forward to your wonderful comments on my stories, hope you have a great day! :)

Reply

Blue Green
18:53 Jun 16, 2021

Writing in the first person gives the story a great dynamic - it felt like I was really there with Kat :-)

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply