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Submitted into Contest #47 in response to: "Just say it," you silently reminded yourself. You knew you'd regret it if you didn't. ... view prompt
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EPIC!! Such an amazingly crafted written piece. More power to you Fatima! Loved reading it❤️
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Amen, 💕
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good story. keep it up!👌
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Hey, Syeda. I've been sent here via the Critique Circle, so here's my critique. Please don't take this criticism as anything but constructive advice. I have always found people identifying problems in my stories to be far more helpful than comments that simply say 'Great job! Please read my story' and offer no actual feedback. So, with that in mind, here are some comments I hope will help: - Firstly, what a sad story! I love the idea for this and can only imagine the pain the woman is going through. - Only include what description is n...
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thank you, Matt I am glad I finally found a critical reviewer. would love it if you help me out in other stories too... After all, I am just a beginner and I know, I am not good in avoiding cliches at all. So these comments help out a lot.
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The way you were describing her was... little to say AMAZING. Great job! Your descriptions are breathtaking. Truly amazed! ♥
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bundles of thanks for such an encouragement💗
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A wonderful story👍👍
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thank you💖
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This is a very touching story! Great descriptions too. Really enjoyed reading it. Well done Syeda!
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I am happy you enjoyed it, thanks❤
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You are very welcome! Would you mind taking a look at mine too? Thank! :)
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Sure.
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Wow. That was such a powerful and bittersweet story. Good job!!
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Thanks...💗
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ماشاءاللہ
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💗
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Very good attempt, dear fatima! Why don't the cancerous mom thought of Leaving the poor girl alive in Allah's hands.? Death is a solution only when natural!
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yes, you are absolutely right but the point is that I was actually trying to describe the western society that sometimes gets worthless and people think as if they are still the happiest persons on earth. you know, money is never the road to happiness.
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Amazing story 🌋 Just wow !! Fatima keep up the good work.
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thanks...❤
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Masha Allah fatima . May Allah bless more bounties upon you.👏
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Amen💙
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Truly brilliant... Keep it up dear 🤗
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💛
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Nice story, good theme, kept me occupied till the end
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thanks!
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Excellent read. I hope some day you will write complete books and follow the writing tradition of your great grandfather.
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Insha Allah
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Wow! AMAZING!!!! I am glad you submitted here, nope. don't find any ending perfect than this
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WOW! amazing , so deep... I am glad it approved .
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thank you.
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Masha Allah , good effort such an epic theme mashup. keep it up.
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😇
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HI THERE, hope you liked this story, make sure to let me know in the comments if you think there is still a way out to the ending... keep connected...
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wonderfull
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EPIC!! Such an amazingly crafted written piece. More power to you Fatima! Loved reading it❤️
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