GWEN WHITE SCREEN
Heavy Snow falls. Crystal feathers drifting.
A soft light pushes from the apartment window
with Burning Joan's urgent cry following close behind.
'Doors are all locked, shades are pulled down. Cold outside. Nobody's home.'
Moving through the windless, wet snow, pulled
to the light.
'Grass is not green there's no rain in the air.
Peer through the window. Nothing's in there.'
A sparsely furnished room. A futon with lots of
blankets and over sized pillows. A cat with long orange
fur curled up in the covers. A littered coffee
table, a cheap couch, and a couple chairs. The place
hasn't been cleaned for quite some time.
Gwen sits cross-legged on the floor by the messy mattress.
'And he wants what he wants, and she wants it too...
And nobody's certain who has been used...
The battle with life will be over soon...
We are the ones who will lose.'
She reaches over and shuts off the boom box. Now
she can hear the snowflakes thudding against
the window.
There's a semi-circle of empty liquor bottles and
full ashtrays surrounding her. She's arrived at
Critical Mass.
Taking a swig of Everclear, lighting a cigarette,
she picks up the receiver and punches in a
number.
She drags on her cigarette as it rings once,
twice. She drops the phone and cries.
She wipes away tears and snot, lights another
cigarette, another gulp of death, takes a deep
shuddering breath and redials the phone.
"Hello, Mom? It's me! I need…"
"For Christ's Sake, Gwen! It's almost four o'clock! What on earth are you doing…"
"Can I talk to Daddy?"
"Of course not! He's sound asleep!"
"But Mom, I need help! I'm in trouble, Mom!
I need to come home!"
"You need to stop drinking is what you need to do!"
"Please, Mommy! Bring me home! I'm
scared!"
"Now? If you haven't noticed, there's a blizzard out there!"
"But Mom, I need help NOW! I'm so alone!"
Silence
Gwen lights a smoke. Drops it, can't find it.
"Gwen! Gwen! Are you still there? Gwen?"
"I'm here. Please Come Get Me! I Can't Be
Alone Any Longer!
I'm DYING…"
"Stop being so dramatic! You're not Dying! It's four o'clock in the morning. The sun will be coming up in a couple hours. Lay down with Fluffy and get some sleep."
"I know, Mom! I have a great idea! Come get me, and we can make waffles for Daddy the way we used…to…with Jimmy…"
Very Long Silence
"I can hear the waves, Mom. Are you
at the... beach with Jimmy?"
Jimmy is Gwen's little brother.
Jimmy is dead.
Gwen and Jimmy are on a Mexico beach with their
tie-dyed parents who are nearby...somewhere.
Meanwhile, little Gwen and littler Jimmy are
frolicking in the gentle surf.
All is Good...until the kids drift out just a bit too
far. Far enough for Jimmy to encounter a riptide
that eagerly pulls him out and away from his sister.
Gwen and Jimmy, experiencing pure panic for the
first time, have predictable reactions.
Jimmy frantically grabs at Gwen, pulling her
down. Gwen frantically fights back, escaping his
grasp.
And there is nothing left to do but watch his
stricken face disappear into the foamy darkness.
'Why did you let me gooooo?'
His face cries out.
Jimmy is gone.
Now she is alone.
'I couldn't hold on
He was pulling me down
I had to let go
I let go of jimmy
I killed jimmy
I killed him I killed him I killed him I killed I killed
my fault jimmy dead I let go my fault my fault
I
killed
my
little
brother'
But don't worry about Gwen.
She'll [certainly] [probably] [possibly] hopefully be
just fine.
"Do you remember what the counselor told us? It's time for tough love, Gwen!"
Gwen is sobbing, thinking about Jimmy, not
wanting to.
But mom isn't buying it.
"You're 25 years old, for crying out loud! We can't keep saving you every time you do something stup…"
'I almost forgot my homework...
No more Gwen shaming.'
"But Mom, I…please, Mom, help me!"
"It's time for you to handle your problems without our help! We can't coddle you anymore, Gwen!"
"Mommy?"
"I'm hanging up now! I'll tell your father you called when he gets up. You get some sleep! I'll call you in the morning!"
"Mom! Don't hang up! Please, Mommy! I…"
'CLICK'
She tried to forget.
Nothing worked.
Liquor. Pharmaceuticals.
Worshipful men.
Nothing helped.
Real love might have saved her, but
she lost it on that beach down in Mexico
and never found it again.
The wind picks up, creating snow devils outside
the window. Gwen drops the phone, crying into
her hands.
She takes her last drink, knocking over the last
bottle, snuffing out her last cigarette. In a
trance, she fumbles with the boom box until
finally finding the PLAY button.
'Shattered glass pressed in our hands.'
She stumbles to the front door, letting snow
spirits swirl into the room.
"Clenching fist blood to the sand"
Framed in the windblown doorway, she
steps naked into the night.
"Skin turns to foam on the top of the sea."
She disappears through the open door into the
white darkness, not concerned with the cold.
"In four directions away from me..."
A large owl, mantled in snow, looks down at a
small icy creek.
Gwen appears from the pale murk.
Walking to the stream bank, she casually steps
in, crunching the surface ice with her bare feet.
Like stepping into a freshly drawn bath, she lays
down and dies in the bitter water.
The owl watches the color drain from her eyes.
Her skin turns as blue as the
darkest ocean.
Hearing a mouse fifty yards southeast, the owl
lifts off and is gone, leaving Gwen with her
little brother, playing in the foamy surf.
Mom and Dad sit close by on colorful beach towels
watching Gwen and Jimmy's every move with a
strange mixture of primal bliss and parental fear.
And All is Good.
FADE TO BLUE
Burning Joan lyrics by Kim Treiber
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This is so close to being poetry. The lyrical quality is missing leaving the sentences feeling choppy instead. Keep at it, it’s almost there.
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Thank you, Veronica, for your excellent advice. Much needed and appreciated.
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Intense! A cry for help is a cry for help! Dealing with trauma is a life-long battle. The ending was rather cinematic. I could see the imagery clearly, but I could also see where it was going from the beginning. As the reader, we want to see Gwen safe, but life isn't always like that. Thanks for dealing with such a difficult subject, even though it ends tragically.
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Thanks again, David, for your feedback. I'm new at this and your observations make my day.
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