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Steam curled from the kettle’s spout, a ghostly ribbon dancing in the dim morning light. Orion Carter traced its path with failing eyes, remembering how he once tracked the trajectories of distant comets with that same careful attention. The familiar ritual of making tea had become a treacherous dance, his fingers seeking the counter’s edge, measuring distances by memory rather than sight.

The kettle’s whistle pierced the quiet apartment. He reached for it, muscle memory betraying him as his hand missed the handle and brushed against the scalding metal. Pain flared, sharp and immediate. The kettle clattered against the stovetop as he jerked back, a curse escaping through clenched teeth.

“Damn it all,” he whispered, cradling his burned hand against his chest. Water sloshed over the counter’s edge, pattering onto the floor like rain. The sound echoed in the stillness, each drop a reminder of his growing helplessness.

Through the kitchen window, dawn painted the sky in shades he could barely distinguish. The city’s star zone stretched before him, its buildings designed to welcome darkness rather than fight it. Special shutters and dimmed lights would transform the urban landscape come nightfall, but for Orion, the stars had already begun their slow fade into memory.

He fumbled for the faucet, holding his throbbing hand under cool water. The burn pulsed in time with his heartbeat, each throb carrying the weight of Dr. Morrison’s words from yesterday’s consultation: “Experimental procedure… significant risks… potential complete loss of vision… but also a chance…”

The morning light strengthened, casting long shadows across his worn astronomy texts. A lifetime of study lined his shelves—star charts, cosmic theories, and observation journals. His own handwriting grew progressively shakier in the most recent entries, until the final page remained blank, a surrender he hadn’t been ready to acknowledge.

Orion pressed a damp cloth to his hand, the cool relief momentary. His gaze drifted to the letter from the hospital, still unopened on his kitchen table. The deadline for his decision loomed: take the chance on experimental surgery, or accept the inevitable descent into darkness. The burn on his hand seemed to mock him, a harsh reminder of how quickly remaining senses could betray.

He moved to the window, pressing his forehead against the cool glass. Somewhere beyond the morning haze, stars wheeled in their ancient patterns, indifferent to his dilemma. The city had crafted its star zone out of reverence for the cosmos, dimming artificial lights so its residents could witness celestial glory. Yet here he stood, a man who had spent decades unraveling stellar mysteries, now struggling to pour his morning tea.

The irony tasted bitter as the cooling drops that had splashed into his empty cup.

***

The specialist’s office buzzed with fluorescent harshness, each flicker a needle against Orion’s sensitive eyes. Dr. Morrison’s voice floated across the desk, clinical yet kind, as she reviewed his test results. The shapes on the eye chart behind her had become abstract art, a blur of black against white that mocked his former precision.

“The degradation is progressing faster than we anticipated,” she said, her words cutting through his thoughts. “Without intervention, you’ll likely lose most functional vision within six months.”

Orion’s fingers found the arm of the chair, tracing its worn leather. “And the surgery?” His voice emerged steadier than he felt. “What are the exact odds?”

Papers rustled as Dr. Morrison leaned forward. Through the fog of his vision, he could make out her white coat, a ghost against the darker walls. “Sixty percent chance of significant improvement. Twenty percent chance of no change.” She paused, and in that silence, Orion heard what came next. “Twenty percent chance of complete loss.”

The numbers danced in his mind like stellar coordinates, cold and precise. He’d spent his career calculating the probability of celestial events—meteor showers, planetary alignments, solar flares. Now his own future had been reduced to clinical percentages.

“There’s something else you should know,” Dr. Morrison continued. “The procedure is time-sensitive. The deterioration of your optical nerve means we have a narrow window. Two weeks, at most.”

Two weeks. Fourteen days. The same time it took for the moon to wax from new to full, a cycle he’d observed countless times through telescopes of increasing power and precision. Now he could barely make out Earth’s satellite as more than a smudge of light in the evening sky.

His burned hand throbbed beneath its bandage, a reminder of yesterday’s mishap. How many more accidents lurked in his future? How many more times would his weakening vision betray him?

“I’ve watched stars die,” he said quietly, more to himself than to Dr. Morrison. “Through my telescope, I’ve seen them fade, collapse, transform. But I never imagined…” His voice trailed off as emotion threatened to overwhelm his carefully maintained composure.

Dr. Morrison’s chair creaked as she shifted. “The consent forms are here if you’re ready. We can schedule the procedure for next week. But Orion,” her voice softened, “this has to be your decision.”

The weight of choice pressed against his chest like gravity. Beyond the office windows, the city prepared for its nightly transformation, light sensors adjusting, special shutters closing, the star zone awakening to its purpose. Soon the urban sky would reveal its celestial treasures to everyone except him.

He reached for the forms, his fingers finding the smooth paper. “I’ll need you to indicate where I should sign,” he said, his voice rough with resolution. The pen felt heavy in his grasp, like the first telescope his father had given him, like the weight of all the decisions that had led him to this moment.

***

The night before surgery arrived with an unexpected silence. No hum of electricity, no distant drone of climate units. The city-wide blackout had plunged everything into a darkness deeper than any planned dimming of the star zone.

Orion stood at his window, a half-melted candle throwing wild shadows across his living room. The flame’s dance reminded him of solar prominences he’d once photographed—tendrils of fire reaching into space, defying the void. Now, in this unplanned darkness, the stars emerged with startling clarity, as if bidding him a final farewell.

His hands trembled as he opened the window, letting in the autumn air. The scent of rain-washed concrete drifted up from seven stories below, mixing with the earthier smells of the city’s rooftop gardens. A meteor streaked across the sky—or perhaps it was his imagination, his mind filling in details his eyes could no longer trust.

“One last show,” he whispered to the cosmos, his breath fogging the glass. The constellations of his namesake, Orion, would be rising soon in the eastern sky. He pressed his forehead against the cool window pane, straining to separate starlight from the afterimages that now haunted his vision.

The candle guttered in a draft, nearly extinguishing. Orion turned, heart pounding, and steadied the flame with cupped hands. The thought of total darkness—real darkness, not this temporary blackout—sent a shiver through him that had nothing to do with the cooling night air.

His phone lay dark and useless on the coffee table, its battery dead. The hospital would expect him at dawn, whether power was restored or not. Nine hours remained until he would submit himself to the surgeon’s knife, to the possibility of eternal night or renewed sight.

The leather armchair accepted his weight with a familiar creak as he settled in for his vigil. He’d kept many night watches in this chair, tracking comets, recording meteor showers, sketching lunar maps. Now he watched the stars with the desperate focus of a man memorizing the face of a loved one before a long journey.

“I’m not ready to lose you,” he confessed to the night sky. The words fell into darkness, absorbed by the silence of his apartment. A distant car’s headlights swept across his ceiling, mimicking the movement of celestial bodies. In the street below, voices rose and fell as people gathered to marvel at the unusually clear sky, their excitement carrying up to his window like an echo of his younger self’s enthusiasm.

The candle’s flame cast his shadow against the wall—tall, distorted, reaching toward the ceiling like the astronomer he used to be, back straight and eyes sharp. But the shadow wavered, uncertain, just as his future trembled between sight and darkness.

Tomorrow would bring either renewal or ending. For now, he kept his vigil, counting familiar stars until they blurred into dreams, the candle burning lower as the night wheeled overhead.

***

Three months after the surgery, Orion sat in his study, surrounded by cardboard boxes from decades of research. His partially restored vision, though far from perfect, allowed him to distinguish shapes and movement—enough to sort through his past without assistance. The doctors had called it a qualified success. He called it a compromise with fate.

Dust motes danced in the afternoon light as he lifted the lid from an old trunk, its brass hinges protesting with age. The scent of preserved paper and leather bindings wafted up, carrying memories of late nights at observatories and eager students clustered around telescope eyepieces.

His fingers brushed against something unexpected—cool metal, smooth curves, unfamiliar contours. Frowning, he lifted the object from its nest of old papers. A note fluttered to the floor, the handwriting large enough for him to make out: “For when the stars seem distant. —Elena.”

Elena Zhang. His colleague from the Beijing Observatory, brilliant and forward-thinking. She’d passed away five years ago, but he remembered their last conversation about adaptive technology in astronomy. He’d dismissed it then, secure in his perfect vision.

The object in his hands was a telescope, but unlike any he’d seen before. Its design was elegant, almost organic, with additional panels and interfaces along its length. His heart began to race as he recognized the manufacturer’s mark—the same company that developed assisted vision devices for deep space imaging.

With trembling hands, he carried it to the window. The sun was setting, painting the sky in colors he could now only partially distinguish. He waited, watching the star zone’s automated systems engage, dimming the city lights in their choreographed dance with darkness.

The telescope’s power switch illuminated with a soft blue glow. Through the eyepiece, he saw only darkness at first, then—

“Oh,” he breathed.

The stars exploded into his vision, not as the dim points his damaged eyes now perceived, but as brilliant bursts of color and light. The telescope was translating the stellar radiation into enhanced patterns his compromised vision could process. Tears blurred his eyes as he watched familiar constellations emerge in new forms—Orion’s Belt pulsing with shades of blue and gold, the Pleiades dancing in spirals of purple and white.

He found his notebook, began sketching what he saw. His hand moved with certainty now, recording not just positions and magnitudes, but new patterns of light his mind was learning to understand. The universe hadn’t abandoned him; it had simply been waiting to speak a new language.

A tap at his door interrupted his observations. “Dr. Carter?” His neighbor’s grandson, Tommy, stood in the doorway. “Mom wanted to know if you’re still doing the star walks this weekend.”

Orion looked at the telescope, then at the boy’s expectant face. “Yes,” he said, surprising himself. “But this time, we’re going to see the stars in a whole new way.”

He turned back to the window, where the city’s star zone spread out below like a dark canvas waiting to be painted with light. The telescope had been waiting here all along, he realized, while he’d been facing his darkness alone. Elena’s final gift wasn’t just the instrument itself, but the reminder that there were always new ways to view the infinite.

January 25, 2025 13:54

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7 comments

Martha Kowalski
03:48 Feb 02, 2025

Jim - you have such a beautiful writing style, each time, always a pleasure to read

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Jim LaFleur
09:11 Feb 02, 2025

I'm happy you enjoyed it. Thanks for your inspiring words!

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Elizabeth Hoban
03:39 Feb 02, 2025

Stunning writing. I absolutely love this - poetic and melancholy. I enjoyed how you brilliantly weaved astronomy into the realities of life. So well done. All the best.

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Jim LaFleur
09:08 Feb 02, 2025

Thank you, Elizabeth!

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Darvico Ulmeli
15:42 Feb 01, 2025

As always, Jim, a pleasure to read.

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Mary Bendickson
19:41 Jan 27, 2025

New eyes, a new horizon.

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Alexis Araneta
17:16 Jan 25, 2025

As usual, Jim, incredible use of imagery here. The use of such vivid detail really makes this story. The ending was just perfect. Lovely work !

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