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Mystery Suspense Fiction

The Scottish Highlands greeted me with a misty embrace as I got out of the car. I was unsure of what to expect upon arrival, but I could feel the chill, the dampness, the entire landscape whispering secrets I was eager to uncover. My cottage was little more than an old bothy, and while I appreciated the historical authenticity of the space, it did feel a bit cramped. I've rented it out for the next six months while I gather data. It was in the perfect place, nestled up close to the vast, somewhat foreboding (now that I take it in), bog.


From my window, the old castle on the hill stood rather ominously. Not the kind of description I’d usually assign to something, but I couldn’t think of another word less…superstitious. I could see it from the parlor window (how cool to say) in this, my, little old home. Still, the dark silhouette provides an oddly unsettling presence. I can feel it there, as odd as that is to even think about. I shuddered.


As I unpacked, the Highlands' beauty seeped into me. The rolling hills, the dense woods, and the nearly ever-present mist created an ethereal atmosphere. The bog, my subject of study for the next several months, stretched out like a dark, mysterious sea. I felt a mixture of excitement and unease. The bog, it felt different than others I’ve studied. It was a silly thought, a superstitious one, but something inside me…felt like it was scrambling to get away, far from the bog. Even this cottage felt too close, like the bog might swallow us while I slept. I shook off the strange thought.


I couldn’t resist the urge to explore. I’d settled in plenty, and my mind was racing with anticipation for what I might find out there. Every ecosystem is unique, though they all have many of the same building blocks. The prospect of delving into the bog filled me with an exhilarating sense of discovery and purpose. Nestled within this rugged landscape, the bog was a jewel of biodiversity and ecological wonder, waiting to be explored and understood. 


Armed with my sampling equipment, I headed out, the soft squelch of the marshy ground beneath my boots accompanying my thoughts. The air was thick with the scent of wet earth and decaying vegetation, a smell I had grown accustomed to over my years of research.



From afar, the bog appeared as a vast, tranquil expanse, its surface dotted with patches of sphagnum moss that shimmered in various hues of green, red, and gold. This moss was not just plant matter; it was a dynamic force, continuously building the peat that defined this extraordinary ecosystem. Each tuft was a small but crucial player in a grand, ancient process that had been shaping the land for millennia.


I couldn't wait to study the bog's intricate water network. The waters, dark and mysterious, were a living archive, holding stories of past climates, vegetation, and even human activity. By analyzing water samples, I hoped to uncover insights into how these wetlands regulated local hydrology and influenced the broader climate. The idea that this bog acted as a significant carbon sink, sequestering carbon dioxide and mitigating climate change, I personally find both humbling and inspiring.


The flora of the bog was a botanist's dream. Carnivorous plants like sundews and pitcher plants thrived here, their ingenious adaptations allowing them to flourish in nutrient-poor conditions. These plants not only captured my scientific interest but also my admiration for their resilience and evolutionary ingenuity. The bog was also home to a variety of sedges, reeds, and heathers, each contributing to the rich tapestry of life.


And then there was the fauna. I imagined the dragonflies, their iridescent wings flashing in the sunlight as they darted over the water, and the birds, their calls echoing across the landscape. Each species, from the smallest invertebrate to the elusive otter, played a vital role in this intricate web of life. My goal was to document these interactions, to understand how each piece of the puzzle fit together to maintain the bog's health and stability. My goal is not simply preservation, but conservation.


The Highland bogs were steeped in cultural history and folklore, adding another layer of fascination for me. My Scottish roots might have been a small factor in my desire to study this place. Stories of ancient clans and mythical creatures seemed to whisper in the wind. This place, there really was something special about it, although unsettling. If I didn’t know any better, I’d almost believe a kelpie, the water horse of Scottish folklore, could rise from the dark waters and steal me away.


As I prepared my equipment—water sampling kits, soil corers, field notebooks—I felt a surge of enthusiasm. This was not just a research project; it was a mission to uncover the secrets of a vital ecosystem and advocate for its preservation. To begin the path to global conservation of our precious places, each a vital piece of a larger puzzle. The data I gathered here could contribute to global efforts to protect wetlands, highlighting their essential role in biodiversity conservation and climate regulation.


Standing near the edge of the bog, the castle looming in the distance, I felt a deep connection to this land and a fierce determination to protect it. The Scottish Highlands, with their wild beauty and ecological significance, had a way of stirring the soul. I don’t really even believe in souls, but I can’t think of a better way to describe this…feeling.


As I reached the edge of the bog, a strange stillness settled around me. The water was dark, almost black, reflecting the gray sky above. I knelt to take a sample when I heard a rustling behind me.


“You shouldn’t be here, lass.”


Startled, I turned to see an older woman watching me. Her face was lined with worry, her eyes shadowed with an unspoken fear.


“I’m a scientist,” I replied, trying to sound reassuring. “I’m here to study the bog.”


The woman’s gaze didn’t waver. “I’m telling you, nothing good comes from that bog. Best you stay away.”


“Thank you for the warning, Mrs…?”


“Don’t say I didn’t warn you.”


With that, she turned and walked away, leaving me with a sense of unease that lingered long after she disappeared into the mist. Was she even wearing boots? How’d she manage to walk freely, unhindered by the mire? The strangeness in the air left in the woman’s wake made my whole body ripple with goosebumps. I wanted an authentic experience, but that was downright spooky…



The next day, determined to begin my research in earnest, I returned to the bog. The air was colder, and thick fog swirled about me as I made my way slowly, trudging through the murky mire. As I waded into the shallow waters to collect samples, something caught my eye.


A pale hand, barely visible under the dark surface.


My heart pounded as I stumbled back, nearly dropping my equipment. I had to get help. I rushed back to the cottage, then drove into town, my mind racing with what I had seen.


In the local pub, I tried to explain to the bartender. “I saw a body in the bog. Someone needs to check it out.”


The man’s chuckle was humorless. “Saw a body, did you? That bog’s cursed, full of faery tricks.”


“I’m not hallucinating,” I insisted. “Someone is dead out there.”


A few other patrons glanced over, their expressions a mix of amusement and wariness.


“You’re overreacting,” one of them said. “That bog’s been playing tricks on people for years. Best to stay away.”


“Where is the police station? I think I need to go report this.” I said.


The locals all tensed in response, then the bartender piped up again, “Aye, you could go and spin ‘em your story, but I can promise ya they’ll not be hearing any of it. They know the tricks of the bog. I can assure you, the best thing for you to do is stay in your cottage and keep your doors locked. Especially at night. Maybe say a prayer before bed, if you’re so inclined.”


I felt my hopeful expression fall, and left the pub no closer to getting help. Why won’t they listen? 


Frustrated and getting nowhere, I decided to try the library. Maybe there were records or history that could explain what was happening.


The library was a small, cozy building, its shelves lined with worn books. I approached the desk where a dark-haired man was engrossed in a book.


“Excuse me, I’m looking for information on the local bog,” I said.


He looked up, his green eyes meeting mine with a mix of curiosity and caution. “You’re new here, aren’t you?”


“I just arrived. I’m Katy, a scientist studying the bog.”


“I’m Ian,” he said, closing his book. “And you’re not the first to be curious about that place. But I advise you to stay away.”


“Everyone keeps saying that,” I replied, exasperated. “Why?”


Ian hesitated, then sighed. “The bog has a dark history. People go missing, and the locals believe it’s cursed. They say the family in the castle…” he trailed off, his face pale.


“What about the family?” I pressed.


“I’ve lived here for years, since I moved from Derry, but I’ve only recently gotten any locals to open up about it. The family that lives up the hill, the Mihailovs, they’re supposin’ they’re involved, somehow. No one talks about it, but people disappear, and folks ‘round here say they end up in that bog.”


I felt a chill run down my spine. “We need to find out the truth.”


Ian looked at me for a long moment, then nodded. “Alright. But we need to be careful. Very careful.”


“Hmm. I think I have an idea.” 


The night was all darkness, the moon hidden behind thick clouds. Ian and I had been camped out at my window together for three nights, watching the bog, the road that leads down from the castle, and waiting. The tired ache from lack of sleep seeped into my bones, but the adrenaline kept me alert. The comfortable silence was a nice change, a welcome one, compared to the solemn silence I so often sit in. Loneliness. Still, I was ready for a change. This was getting old, and get in the way of my productivity.


“We’ve been here three nights, Ian,” I whispered. “Maybe it’s just a strange legend after all. Something to scare folks from staying around here for too long.”


“Patience, Katy. Look—headlights.” Ian’s voice was tense, his eyes fixed on the distant glow approaching the bog.


We watched as a car emerged from the darkness, its beams cutting through the mist. The vehicle stopped at the edge of the bog, and two figures stepped out. My heart pounded as they opened the trunk and dragged something heavy to the water’s edge.


A body.


They carelessly dumped it into the bog, the splash echoing in the stillness. Ripples ran across the bog, echoing out and fading into the fog. Ian and I exchanged horrified glances.


“This is it,” I whispered. “We need to follow them.”


They decided to walk, unwilling to risk headlights piercing the fog and giving them away on the lonely road up the hill. The castle loomed ahead, an imposing silhouette against the night sky. We approached cautiously, our breaths shallow with fear and anticipation.


The castle grounds were eerily quiet. We slipped through the shadows, making our way to the main building. My heart raced as we crept closer, every creak of the ancient structure amplifying the tension.


“We need to find a way in,” Ian whispered.


“There,” I pointed to a small door partially hidden by ivy. We made our way over, and with some effort, managed to pry it open.


Inside, the air was damp and cold. The narrow corridor was dimly lit by flickering torches, casting ominous shadows on the stone walls. We moved silently, listening for any signs of movement.


We didn’t get far.


Suddenly, strong hands grabbed us from behind. A cloth was pressed over my mouth, and everything went black.


I awoke in darkness. The air was thick with dampness and decay. My hands were bound, and a gag muffled my cries. The room was cold, the stone floor hard beneath me. I struggled against the ropes, panic rising in my chest.


A faint light flickered, and a figure emerged from the shadows. Lord Mihailov, she was sure of it. His presence filled the room with a chilling menace.


“You Americans are always poking your noses where they don’t belong,” he sneered, his voice a low hiss. “Curiosity can be deadly.”


I tried to speak, but the gag stifled my words. My eyes darted to the other side of the room, where Ian was bound in an antique torture device, his face pale with fear.


“Welcome to my humble abode,” Mihailov continued, his tone mockingly polite. “You wanted to know our secret, didn’t you?”


He moved closer, and in the dim light, I saw it—his canines, unnaturally long and sharp.


“You see, we are not like other families,” he said, his voice dripping with malice. “We are the guardians of the bog, the malevolent beast lurking beneath those waters, feeding it with the leftovers of those who trespass on our land. It sustains us, and we, in turn, sustain it.”


I struggled harder, but the ropes held tight. This was madness. Vampires? It couldn’t be real.


“You’ll make a fine addition to its collection,” Mihailov said, baring his fangs. “And your friend there… well, he’ll serve as an example of what happens to those who defy us.”


Desperation fueled my efforts as I strained against the ropes. My mind raced, searching for anything that could help us escape. Then I remembered the knife in my pocket, and felt a glimmer of hope. I maneuvered, twisting my body, reaching for my pocket with trembling fingers.


Mihailov was too focused on Ian to notice my movements. It didn’t matter, though. He’d taken it, taken my little knife. As he approached Ian, ready to inflict harm, I remembered. I looked down, and there it was. I managed to hook the bindings around my wrist onto the bottle opener in my belt buckle, a gag gift from a friend that I ended up using out of necessity. I was suddenly so grateful for that silly gift, given as a joke (I don’t drink and wouldn’t need it, or so they had thought). With a quick motion, I yanked against the ropes binding my hands. I had to saw back and forth with it for a long, terrifying moment, watching him look over his prey with such intensity. Ian. But it worked—the ropes loosened and fell to the floor.


I tore off the gag and leapt to my feet, adrenaline overriding the pain. “Get away from him!” I shouted, grabbing a nearby torch and thrusting it towards Mihailov.


The vampire recoiled, hissing in fury. “You’ll pay for this!” he snarled.


“I don’t think so,” I retorted, swinging the torch to keep him at bay. “Ian, can you move?”


Ian, though weak, managed to free himself from the device. We backed towards the door, the torch our only defense against the advancing vampire.


We fled through the dark corridors, Mihailov’s enraged roars echoing behind us. The castle seemed like a labyrinth, but we pressed on, driven by the will to survive.


Finally, we burst into the main hall. Mihailov appeared at the far end, his eyes burning with fury. “You can’t escape,” he growled. “The bog will take you when we are finished, just as it has taken all the others. It must. The prophecy must continue.” Others appeared behind him in the doorway, all snarls and lashing teeth. The whole family. 


I steeled myself, unwilling to be beaten.


“Not today, suckers,” I said, grabbing a nearby candelabrum and hurling it at him. It struck him, and he stumbled, so we ran.


We dashed outside, the cold night air hitting us like a wall. We didn’t stop running. Behind us, I heard a loud rumble. It wasn’t the vampires. 


No, it was bigger. The castle began to tremble. I chanced a glance backward. The ground shook, and a deeper rumble echoed through the night.


“The castle—it’s collapsing!” Ian shouted.


We ran, the structure crumbling behind us. As soon as we left the grounds, made it away from the pull of the castle, the bog, we watched as the earth swallowed the castle whole, the hill collapsed. 


We didn’t stop until we reached the relative safety of the cottage, and then only to grab my purse before we rushed to Ian’s car and drove, fast enough to keep my blood pumping, all the way to town, to lights, and benches, and people in their homes, some already stirring, preparing for the day ahead. To some measure of normalcy. We made it to town still breathless and shaken.


But Ian and I had survived. We speculated on the reasons behind the collapse of the castle, and surmised that there must’ve been some sort of pact made between the vampires and this strange bog, or whatever it is he spoke of within it, and our escape broke the pact they made to send all trespassers into the bog. 


They had uncovered the dark secret hovering over this little place.  


As we stood in the town square, the first light of dawn breaking over the horizon, the mist had cleared. The townspeople slowly made their way out into the streets, spilling out like the morning sun. They opened up their little shops. Throughout town, she noticed people were whistling tunes. Singing songs. Humming happy melodies. Like the entire community woke up on the right side of the bed. Many, for the first time in a very long time.


July 16, 2024 17:05

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8 comments

Thomas Wetzel
04:03 Jul 24, 2024

Wow! Great story, Willow. I loved it. Didn't see the whole vampire thing coming. You really know how to build tension and intrigue. Going back to read some of your previous submissions now. Keep writing! You clearly have real talent.

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W. H. Goodwater
10:58 Jul 24, 2024

That is seriously encouraging. Thank you so much! I've been practicing building tension, so that really means a lot!

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Thomas Wetzel
15:51 Jul 24, 2024

The first story I submitted on this site - "Adrian" - is a vampire story, but not nearly as good as yours. Have you ever read "The Lesser Dead" or "The Suicide Motor Club" by Christopher Buehlman by any chance? Great vampire novels, They recently made a podcast out of Lesser Dead with some big name voice talent.

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W. H. Goodwater
21:00 Jul 24, 2024

Ooh, I'll take a look. Thank you very much, I'm flattered! I haven't read either, but I'll put them on my list!

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Thomas Wetzel
09:34 Jul 26, 2024

Buehlman is amazing. I strongly recommend everything he has ever written. It's all exceptional. After publishing 5 horror novels he recently transitioned to fantasy and wrote two books that are better than anything that J.R.R. Tolkien or George R.R. Martin ever wrote in my opinion. (And I mean that as the highest praise.) I just finished his new release - The Daughters' War - and it was so badass it blew my socks off. (Be sure to read the first book The Blacktongue Thief first though. Just as good, and a little less horrific. Just a little...)

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Karen Hope
03:14 Jul 24, 2024

Full of suspense and great details, especially about the bog. Creepy and well done!

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W. H. Goodwater
11:00 Jul 24, 2024

Thank you! I love a good bog. And a little mystery!

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Alexis Araneta
07:12 Jul 17, 2024

I quite like the use of detail in this story. Lovely work !

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