Elian woke before the chime.
That wasn’t unusual. He always rose early. But this time, he knew something was wrong the moment he opened his eyes.
The ticking had changed.
Not louder. Not off-beat. Just... perfect. Too perfect. The little brass regulator on the mantle ticked with a precision that made his teeth itch, like time was trying too hard to behave.
He sat up on the cot, rubbing sleep from his face. The air in the shop was still warm from the furnace’s overnight burn. It smelled faintly of oil, iron shavings, and old paper.
Then he saw the note.
Folded twice. Ink smudged at the corners, like it had been handled. Sitting on the stool beside his bed, right where he kept his breakfast plate. But there was no plate.
He didn’t remember writing it.
The handwriting was his.
He unfolded it slowly.
You know now. Check the pendulum. Trust yourself this time.
He stared at the words. Something flickered behind his eyes. Not an image. Not a memory. Just a pressure, as if thought were trying to form but the shape of it kept slipping through his skull like tea through a cracked sieve.
He rose. Crossed the room and stood before the longcase regulator near the window. The old one. Older than the Reset, if anyone remembered such things.
He opened the glass door and stared at the pendulum.
Nothing strange. Brass bob, polished arm, faint dust in the corners.
But the backplate, he hadn’t noticed that before. Just behind the mechanism, someone, he?, had scratched a tiny notch. And next to it, three words:
You are awake.
His throat tightened.
Outside, the city murmured. Carts on stone. Steam from the baker’s vent. Birds whose names he didn’t know and maybe never had.
And above all: the tower at the center of the city, whose bell would chime at dusk. One long tone. The Reset.
That was when it happened. Always had. At the chime, your memories left you. Names, places, faces. All gone. But no one panicked. It wasn’t death. Just forgetting.
You woke in your home. Kept your work, your habits, your name on the door. The city ran like always. Bread, trains, taxes.
But you remembered nothing of the day before.
It was better that way, they said.
Clean.
Safe.
He reached for his journal. The one he sometimes used to sketch gear ratios. The one he was sure had always been blank.
Page one: blank.
Page two: blank.
Page three:
You are not broken. You are not alone.
Elian’s breath caught.
Something inside him folded inward. A strange grief, sharp and sudden, like he’d just missed someone walking out the door. Someone who had kissed him once. Someone he should have remembered. And worse: the sense they’d done it before.
He oiled a mainspring. Tuned a brass marine chronometer. Sold a pocket watch to a man with no name and no memory of ever owning one.
The city moved forward. Forgetting nothing because it remembered nothing.
But Elian felt it. A misstep in the rhythm. The kind of thing you noticed if you'd spent your life counting seconds.
He went out just before dusk.
The sky was copper-colored, brushed with steam. The square outside the tower was full. People gathered to feel the pause. Some stood hand in hand. Some came alone. Some looked at their partners like they didn’t remember why they loved them.
And when the tower struck, everyone else closed their eyes.
Elian kept his open.
One long chime.
A vibration that hummed through his feet.
He waited.
But the forgetting didn’t come.
He remembered the notch. The note.
And the woman who had come into his shop and said, “Do you fix only clocks, or people too?”
Her voice. Her fingers brushing the display case. Her eyes. Grey-green, like weather deciding what to become.
She’d smiled like she knew him.
And now, he remembered her.
Elian turned from the crowd. The others blinked, adjusting to their emptiness.
He walked home under the ticking sky.
Inside, the pendulum still swung.
And the note was still there.
Same words.
Same paper.
Same smear of ink.
You know now. Check the pendulum. Trust yourself this time.
His voice cracked the silence.
“I already did.”
He folded the note.
Set it beside the others.
Elian spent the next morning searching for proof that he was sane.
The city had already begun again. Same bread carts rolling over stone. Same neighbor sweeping dust that hadn’t gathered yet. Same girl with copper curls and ink-stained fingers pressing her nose to the candy-glass window across the street.
All of it exactly as before.
And none of them knew it.
He didn’t expect them to. That was the whole point. But the sameness still felt cruel.
He opened the back of the old mantle clock, one he’d repaired many times, and tucked a tiny pin behind the ratchet wheel. Invisible unless you knew where to look. He did the same to the longcase by the window. Two drops of paint, one green, one gold, on opposite sides of the anchor arm.
If they vanished overnight, he’d know.
If they stayed...
He’d already started drawing schematics.
It wasn’t a grand design. Not yet. A housing for resonance memory. A sensor to mark the moment the Reset happened. He wasn’t trying to stop the forgetting. Just catch it. See if memory had a shape.
He needed more time. Not to build. He could build fast. It was the other thing he needed. The thing he couldn’t name yet.
Someone knocked.
He froze.
Not because of the knock. Because he recognized the rhythm.
Three short. One long.
It meant nothing. Except it didn’t.
He opened the door.
She stood on the step. Copper hair in a braid. A satchel over one shoulder. Boots dusted with soot. A smudge on her cheek like a thumbprint someone had once brushed away.
Same face. Same eyes.
Grey-green, like something alive inside stone.
Elian stared. His chest tightened. Like déjà vu, but heavier.
She blinked once.
Then said, “Do I know you?”
He didn’t answer.
She smiled. Not surprised. Not warm. Something gentler. Like the first note of a forgotten song.
“I’m sorry,” she said. “I didn’t mean to be rude. I was just walking by and your shop looked familiar.”
“You’ve been here before,” Elian said.
“I have?”
“You asked if I fixed people.”
That smile again. “That sounds like me.”
He stepped back and held the door.
She hesitated. “I didn’t mean to intrude.”
“You’re not.”
She stepped in.
The clocks kept ticking. But something in the air slowed. Not physically. Rhythmically. Like time had leaned closer to listen.
Her name was Niva.
He didn’t ask it. She found it in a receipt stub tucked behind the display case. Her own name, in her own hand. It said only:
Niva – consultation, nothing purchased – return if possible
She stared at it like it had grown teeth.
“I don’t remember this,” she said.
Elian didn’t speak.
“Is that normal?”
“In this city? Or in this shop?”
That earned him a small laugh.
“I’ve been having dreams,” she said. “Or maybe they’re memories. I see places I don’t remember. People I think I loved. But their names vanish before I wake.”
She sat across from him, brow furrowed, studying his movements like someone searching for a street they once knew. Then:
“I remember your hands.”
He blinked.
“They’re always working. A little cracked. Oil under the nails. I don’t know your name, but I remember your hands.”
He sat down slowly. Carefully. Like the air might collapse under him.
“Why are we remembering?” she asked.
“I don’t know. But I think it’s growing.”
“Have you told anyone?”
“No. They’d forget.”
“Right.”
They sat in silence.
Then she said, “What if we didn’t?”
The Catcher hummed in its frame.
Not like a clock. Elian could feel it in the table. Not constant. Every few minutes the gear clicked once, even though it wasn’t tied to any movement.
He stopped trying to explain it after the third day.
Niva returned each morning just before first chime. She knocked three short, one long.
Some days she remembered the pattern.
Some days she didn’t.
Those were the harder ones.
On the second morning, she frowned and said, “Do I know you?” in a teasing voice.
On the third, she didn’t ask. She went straight to the Catcher, placed her hand on the case, and whispered, “It’s still spinning.”
By the fourth, she brought chalk. She wrote on the wall beside his window:
We were here. We are again.
It vanished by dusk.
But the next morning, another message appeared in different handwriting. Her own:
Don’t trust the stillness. The forgetting breaks at the edges.
They began calling it slip. The moment before memory returned.
For Niva, it came in dreams. For Elian, in the clocks. A gear turning too long. A chime ringing early.
The Catcher clicked more often now. Always near sunset. Always when no one looked directly at it.
They charted the slips. Compared them. Patterns formed. Not clean, but not random. Like a song you almost remember. Like handwriting you recognize but can’t read.
Something was trying to remember with them.
Elian said that aloud once, then regretted it.
Niva didn’t laugh.
She said, “Then maybe we’re not the first.”
On the fifth day, someone knocked who wasn’t Niva.
Elian opened the door.
A tall man in a black waistcoat stood there, a tower bell pin glinting on his collar.
City recordkeepers. Overseers of the Reset.
“Clockmaker,” the man said, inspecting the shop without entering. “We’ve had reports of unauthorized temporal interference.”
Elian swallowed. “I repair watches.”
“You do. And apparently more.”
He held out a slip of paper. “Two unauthorized memory anchors were traced to this quadrant.”
Elian said nothing.
“You understand that attempting to alter the Reset violates Ordinance Seven?”
“I fix watches.”
The man’s smile didn’t reach his eyes. “And do they speak back?”
He turned and left.
As the man turned to leave, he paused in the doorway.
"There won’t be another warning," he said. "Next time, you’ll forget you ever existed."
Then he was gone.
No signature. No citation.
Just silence.
That night, Niva didn’t come.
Elian waited past the chime. Past the hour the Reset should have taken him.
But the Catcher spun once.
He remembered her hand on the glass. Her voice. The way she winced when she tried to recall her mother’s name and failed.
The chalk was gone. Nothing left but a faint smear.
He didn’t sleep.
He wound the Catcher to full tension. It didn’t need it.
Before dawn, he opened a drawer of old tools.
He pulled out the mirror gear.
He hadn’t touched it in years. It didn’t fit any known mechanism. Brass core. Teeth that bent light. It had never held time properly.
Maybe it didn’t need to.
He mounted it in the Catcher. Adjusted the casing. Scribed a line into the base:
If you forget this, you are real.
When the chime came that evening, Elian didn’t close his eyes.
Neither did Niva.
She was back.
Her hair was loose. Her coat wet from fog.
But she remembered the knock. Three short, one long.
“I had to run,” she said. “Someone was at my building. I don’t think they know yet, but they’re looking.”
“The Reset’s shifting,” Elian said.
She stepped inside. Her hands trembled.
“I had a dream last night,” she said. “The city was empty. No clocks. No Reset. Just silence. And people crying.”
“What were they crying about?”
She looked at him.
“Your hands were on something. I saw it. I thought it was your fault. But… I think you were trying to hold the pieces together.”
That night, they tested the Catcher.
Elian struck the tower bell’s note with a tuning fork. The gear spun once.
Then light.
Not bright. Not external.
From inside the Catcher.
A shape. Brief. Reflected in the brass.
A face?
Elian leaned in.
It vanished.
“Did you see it?” Niva asked.
“I think I’ve always seen it.”
She didn’t ask what that meant.
Outside, the city slept.
Inside, time stirred.
And the day refused to disappear.
It began with the chime.
That alone shattered Elian’s calm. For months, maybe years, he’d lived by the rhythm. Reset at dusk. Forgetting after. But now, an hour early, the sky rippled.
He felt it in his teeth.
The bell hadn’t struck yet when the knock came.
Not Niva's pattern.
Elian opened the door.
The same officer stood there, face pale, hand on the clasp of something dark and heavy.
"You were told," he said. "Shut it down. You tamper with the Reset, you tamper with peace."
He stepped forward. "You’re under enforcement hold until audit. Come quietly."
Elian didn’t move.
Behind him, the Catcher clicked.
Once.
Twice.
Then the bell rang.
Elian reached into the case.
The Catcher clicked five times, then fell silent.
Outside, the lanterns dimmed. Not from fuel. They withdrew. Like a breath held too long.
Niva stood at the window, palm pressed to the glass. “Something’s coming.”
“No,” Elian said. “It’s already here.”
People ran.
At first just one, a girl barefoot in her nightdress. Then more. A baker holding a spoon. A man crying as he whispered names like prayers.
The Reset didn’t wipe their minds.
It let everything in.
Memories crashed through. Birthdays beside funerals. Confessions. Arguments. One man shouted, “I remember her. I remember.”
And then, silence.
Not peace.
The silence after a scream.
The tower bell began to ring.
Once.
Twice.
Then it didn’t stop.
One long, shaking note. Higher than it should be. Like metal trying to remember what it used to be.
Niva clutched her ears. “That’s not right.”
She collapsed.
Elian caught her.
She trembled in his arms. Her lips moved, shaping names she couldn’t finish.
“Elian,” she gasped. “Make it stop. Please. It’s too much.”
He looked out the window.
The city bent.
Not physically. But the rules twisted. Sidewalks curled. Lamps swayed like gears out of rhythm. A boy wept over a toy he hadn’t seen in years. A woman stared into a mirror, mouth open in recognition, and horror.
Time wasn’t breaking.
It was remembering.
Elian felt it clawing at his skull. His mother’s last words. The first time he kissed someone. The week he built the first Catcher and forgot it.
All the versions of him screaming.
“No,” he whispered.
He turned to the Catcher.
The mirror gear pulsed. Like a heartbeat. Like breath.
He saw his reflection. Older. Burned. Grinning.
“Tick tock,” it mouthed.
Elian laughed. It felt like the only sane response.
He reached into the Catcher’s case.
The bell rang again, sharp, cracking, final.
He pulled the mirror gear free.
The silence hit like stone.
The shop snapped back. So did the city.
The rooftops straightened. The streets unbent. A man with three shadows blinked, and now had only one.
Outside, the sky lightened.
Inside, Niva stirred.
She sat up slowly. Her eyes were open, but uncertain. “Elian?”
He smiled.
She frowned. “Wait. What were we just…?”
She looked around. “Have we met before?”
He hesitated.
Then said, “Yes.”
She crossed the room and took his hand.
“I don’t know your name,” she said. “But I’ve missed you for a long time.”
Tears slipped down his cheek.
“You used to say that,” he whispered.
“What?”
“Every time you found me.”
She brushed his knuckles.
“And did I always ask?”
He nodded. “Do I know you?”
“Every time.”
She smiled.
“This time, I brought chalk.”
They stood in the shop while the clocks ticked.
Neither said let’s not forget again.
They didn’t need to.
Because something had changed.
The Reset came that evening.
The bell rang.
They held hands.
And they remembered.
She stepped closer.
He looked at her, and this time, neither of them asked.
She kissed him.
Not like a beginning. Like a memory finding its place.
And then the memories came.
Her fingers curled in his shirt under a sky with two moons.
A broken watch ticking in a rainstorm.
A wordless song she’d hummed while oiling gears.
All the days they'd lost.
Not gone. Waiting.
They broke apart slowly.
"We’re still here," she whispered.
Elian nodded. "And this time, they won’t remember to stop us."
Because the officer had turned away moments earlier, blinking.
He forgot why he came.
Forgot who they were.
The Reset had erased its own warning.
The Catcher had only protected what it was built to hold: two memories, bound together.
Even broken systems remember how to protect themselves.
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This is beautiful. You really know how to weave things delicately into the story. So smooth how you lead the readers into your own imagination with a winding road of twists and turns and love and loss and understanding. Congratulations !
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Thank you!
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I think you used the structure very well to build tension. I think there are parts that could be fleshed out a bit more if you wanted to continue working on the story and give it a life at a publication. Good job.
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Thanks. I agree. I'm curious if there are specific parts of the story you would like to see more of?
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This might be a personal preference, but I think it's about enhancing the descriptive elements. Right now, everything is very sparse, which isn't inherently a bad thing, but it sometimes leaves lines or phrases feeling so abbreviated that it comes across as a lack of art in the line.
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that helps alot, ty
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Congrats on the shortlist.🎉 Timely story.
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Thank you!
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This was such a unique tale. I love the little twists and turns. Lovely work !
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I appreciate the comment, thank you!
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Congratulations! Suspenseful and skillfully written!
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Thank you!
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A creative interpretation of the prompt and wonderfully written! I haven't made it through every story submitted, but of those that I read, this was my favorite.
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That's high praise. Thanks so much!
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This was like "Groundhog Day" on steroids!!
Loved it!!
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Thanks!
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super engaging and easy to read, loved your interpretation of the prompt.
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What an opening line and way to build suspense: The ticking had changed. Not louder. Not off-beat. Just... perfect. Too perfect. The little brass regulator on the mantle ticked with a precision that made his teeth itch, like time was trying too hard to behave.
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Thanks Nicole! This was probably my least favorite story so far that I wrote. I appreciate the feedback. I really enjoyed the time and clock-specific wording in this story, but I felt I got a little lost in the logic behind it all, and it got a bit jumbled. Your stories are amazing, and it's nice to have feedback from someone who tells such great stories!
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Really? I didn't find it jumbled at all. It felt rather poetic. That's so kind of you to say!
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Glad it didn't feel that way to you. Thanks again!
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SEE! you got shortlisted. It was a great story and well deserved.
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