Dead Girls Don't give Comfort

Written in response to: Write a story that includes the line “Better late than never.”... view prompt

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Horror Crime Teens & Young Adult

This story contains sensitive content

TW: Blood and death, Toxic relationships, Violence and suicide



“Are you sure this is legal?” Tessa sighed, pulling her jacket up to her chin.

    “Of course, it's legal Tess! Have I ever lied to you?” Tyler laughed, as he cut the wire fence, creating an opening big enough for the four teens to squeeze through. 

    “Yes, many times,” Tessa answered flatly, following him into the abandoned carnival. She stumbles over a rock and groans, “Who’s idea was it to go to old Barns? This place has been abandoned for years!” 

“Oh come on Tessa, it'll be fun!” Vivian says as Noah wraps his arm around her shoulder, smiling his big cocky grin.

 “You scared Tessa?” He chuckles 

Tessa scoffs, glaring back at him “You wish Mr. ‘I can’t watch “Halloween” because my mommy won't let me.’’’ She snickers as Noah turns bright pink. 

“Look guys, the house of mirrors is still here! Let's go there first.” Tyler said changing the subject, noah let go of Vivian’s hand, joining Tyler. 

“Your sister's crazy, Ty” Noah laughs as they run off ahead. Tessa rolls her eyes, and takes Vivian's hand, smiling “Come on vee vee”

The Group walks over, looking around. What used to be a carnival full of lights, people, and delicious smells, had transformed into a dump, strung with spiderwebs adorning every Corner. It gives off an Eerie vibe, they would send chills down anyone spine, the perfect hangout for bored teenagers. 

“I remember when this place was still in action” Vivain laughed as she held the little tent flap up for the others. “It's so icky now!” 

 Noah smiled, kissing her cheek as he walked in. “It's ok, I’ve never been here when it opened. Now we own this place” A creepy grin spread across his face. 

She laughs and pushes his face. “Ew! Don't look at me like that, you weirdo!” She playfully bumped him with her hip as they walked into the darkness. But you’re right. I guess it's better late than never,” she laughed.

“Hey guys! Come on, let's race to see who can make it out first!” Tyler said. He looks at Tessa and they both narrow their eyes, speaking without words. The siblings take off, leaving the couple in the dust. 

“Whelp, that's the Garcia’s for you” Noah sighed, with a smile “Always turning things into a competition. I-” Before he could finish, Vivan took off down a different path, laughing. Noah smiles to himself. “Geez…I love that girl”

“Come on slowpoke!” She called as she disappeared out of sight. Panting and bumping into mirrors, she disappeared down the maze. “WOOOOOOOOOH!!” she laughed, turning the corner and running right into a dusty mirror. Her face smashed against the dirty glass, leaving behind a print where her face once was.

“Aw-” She rubs her face and laughed, but the pain was cut short by Noah's ear-piercing scream. She stopped, jerking her head in the direction of his cry. “Noah?....” Vivian started walking back when Noah screamed again, his voice full of pain. Vivian's eyes widened. 

“NOAH!!” Vivian sprints back down the maze, bumping into the mirrors in her panicked haze. “NOAH?? WHERE ARE YOU!!?” Vivain screams, panting. She turns the corner running right into Tessa and Tyler. 

“Vee! What's wrong?” Tyler pants, startled. Vivan stutters, hysterical, unable to express herself. Tessa grabs her shoulder searching her eyes, and she looks back at Tyler. 

“Vee are you-” Tyler's voice trails off and his face turns a pale white. “Oh….” Vivian and Tessa's eyes follow where Tyler was looking and Tessa screams, stumbling back. 

“NOAH!” Vivan suddenly sobs, running to his side. Noah lays on the ground, his flesh ripped open, all bloody and massacred. Shards of glass remain in his wound, making the whole scene terrifying. Tyler stumbles back, supporting himself on a mirror, as Tessa runs to Vivan’s sobbing side, trying to pull her away from Noah's body. 

  “We should get out of here,” Tyler said with urgency as he grabbed Tessa's hand, trying to pull her away. He looks at her with wide, sick eyes, his voice shaking “Now.” Tessa yanks her hand away from Tyler, and she wraps her arms around Vivan 

“Tyler we can’t just leave him…” Tessa tries to comfort a hysterical Vivan, her eyes locked on Tyler. Tyler shakes his head, grabbing both of the girls and dragging them away with a surprising strength

“NO! Tessa! Noah is dead! We need to go! Now” Tyler shouted as he pulled the girls out of the maze, his hands shaky but strong.

“Wait shouldn't we call the police??” Tessa asked. 

“No,” Tyler said firmly. “If we call the police, we’ll be interrogated and our parents will get involved, and it will-” Tessa narrows her eyes, moving out of Tyler's grasp once they are outside. Vivian falls to the ground, holding her face as she sobs. Tyler puts his hands in his pockets, looking sick and panicked.

Tessa glared back at Tyler then straightened her back. “Fine… Vee come here” Tessa crouches down to Vivian, helping her up and holding her close. Tessa eyes Tyler, her gaze cold. “Get us out, Ty”

 “W-we’ll just go out the way we came,” Tyler says with false confidence as he quickly walks off, leaving the girls alone. Tessa narrowed her eyes and rubs Vivian's shoulder, leaning down and lowering her voice so Tyler couldn’t overhear them.

 “Listen, Vee…don’t you notice how Tyler is acting? He’s usually not like this. I lost him in the maze, and ran into him a few moments before you found us…I think it was him…” Tessa looks down at her devastated friend. Vivian sniffs, looking up at Tessa. “W-what?...you..you think so?” Tessa nods slowly. “ it’s not like I want to blame him, he’s family. But- Just..keep an eye out, ok? And stay close to me” 

“Girls!! The gate has been closed! We need to go around, come on!” Tyler's voice rings out from somewhere ahead of them. He ran around towards the entrance, not stopping for the girls. Tessa takes a deep breath.

“Let's go, vee vee,” Tessa says softly as they watch Tyler disappear into the ticket tunnel. Tessa stops by the entrance and looks at Vivian. “Wait, stop. I’ll go first to make sure it's safe. I don't like this setup, it's too dark and enclosed. Tessa kisses Vivian's forehead and gives her a soft smile. 

“Just wait here, ok?” Tessa says softly. Vivian blinks, watching as Tessa disappears into the dark tunnel after Tyler. Vivian sinks to the floor, looking at the tunnel as tears run down her face. She shakes, her mind still stuck on the image of her boyfriend massacred in the maze. She swallows, gets up, and slowly walks towards the tunnel.

“G-Guys?” she sniffs, holding herself as the dark envelopes her. She ambles down the tunnel, her eyes scanning for anyone, her heart pounding at the eerie silence. Her foot catches on something and she goes spiraling to the floor. Vivian takes a sharp breath in, but exhales.

“Oh…it's just a Ticket taker.” Vivian kicks the ticket taker aside, notices how dented it is. Her eyes perk up as she hears a little shuffle. She tenses and turns her head towards the sound, her eyes adjusting to the dark just well enough to see tyers figure standing a little ways away. 

“Oh geez! Tyler you gave me a heart attack-” She stops as Tyler abruptly falls to the ground, gasping lightly. Her eyes widen and she scrambles to his side.

  “Tyler! What's wrong??” she turns him around and screams, scrambling back into the wall. Tyler's face is bashed in, the force of the impact sending his eyes somewhere that Vivan didn’t want to find. Blood pours out of the empty sockets, and Vivian doesn’t need to check him again to know he is dead. 

She covers her mouth, starting to hyperventilate, bile rising in her throat. She pants, pressing into the wall, a horrible feeling spreading through her stomach

“Aw…there there Vee…” Tessa's soft voice floats through the tunnel. Heavy steps follow, along with the scraping sound of metal on metal. Vivan whimpers, trying to find Tessa in the darkness. 

“Sorry you had to see them…that wasn’t my intention, but I had to get them out of the way….” Tessa shows herself, crouching in front of Vivian. “

“I love you, I know you know that just like you love me!” she smiles, the blood on her face more vibrant up close. “They were taking you away from me…nobody loves you like I do…and now we can be together, forever! You're my best friend! no one cares about you like I do!” She giggles, taking Vivian's hand. Finding her strength and courage, Vivian screams and shoves Tessa off her, standing on her feet. 

“YOU SICK MONSTER! YOU MURDERED MY BOYFRIEND…AND YOUR OWN BROTHER! I could NEVER love someone like you!!” she pants, her fist curling. “I loved THEM! They meant the world to me! I-i I thought you did too! But - BUT NO! I HATE YOU!!” Vivian pants, furious, backing away from Tessa. 

Tess frowns, and calmly stands up, before she rushes and grabs Vivian’s face, slamming her into the wall. Vivian gives a cry of pain and surprise, and her eyes widen as Tessa smiles and leans in towards her face. 

“Aw…I know you don't mean that…” Tessa squeezes Vivian's jaw “Say it, tell me you don't mean that. Tell me you love me. Tell me that I'm the only one you care about, and we’ll leave, and be happy… forever” She stares into Vivian's eyes, her gaze cold and unhinged. Vivian spits in her face

“I ... .Don't…Love…you” Vivian says slowly, her voice shaking with fear and anger. “Burn in hell, Tessa.” Tessa laughs, squeezing Vivian's face, before she quickly grabs a knife from her pocket, jamming it into Vivian's torso before she can say anything else. 

“Liar…” she twists the knife and Vivian screams, her head leaning into Tessa's chest as she pants. Tessa smiles wide, yanking the blade out as she steps back, watching Vivian sink to the floor

“W-why…” Vivian whimpers, weak. “Would….y-you do this? I-” She lays on the floor, Watching the fatal amount of blood pouring from her wound. Tessa crouches down. Smoothing her hair. 

“Shh…Don’t talk Vee Vee” she smiles. Vivian doesn't return the smile, she arches her back, giving a small painful squeak, before her body goes limp, the life leaving her beautiful hazel eyes. Tessa looks at her for a moment, before she starts laughing.

Soft at first, her laughter grows into a hysterical fit of insanity. She falls back and pulls at her hair, her laughter turning into tears. Clutching her chest, she heaves and leans over. looking at her bloody hands, the faces of her brother and Noah racing through her mind. She coughs, choking on her saliva as she looks at Vivian's dead body.

“W-what have I done?...” she sobs. “WHAT HAVE I DONE!? ”. She Pants, taking the knife, and with a scream, she plunged it into the chambers of her stomach. Her scream melts to a slowly choked sob, full of pain. She rips the knife out and throws it across the tunnel.

Coughing, she crawls over to Vivian's limp body. Tessa touches her face, whimpering as she grabs her dead hand and kisses it. She shifts, causing a spike of pain to shoot through her, and she doubles over. Her breaths are shaky and labored, and she moves into Vivian's arms.

Nuzzling her face into Vivian's chest, she cries. “Sorry… I'm… I'm so so…” her words and sons melt together, as she tries to seek comfort. But she won't find it,


you don’t receive comfort from a dead girl. 


November 01, 2024 17:15

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