Submitted to: Contest #298

895: Becoming More

Written in response to: "Write a story about someone hoping to reinvent themself."

Drama

This story began when he was young.

Oh, he was wild—full of fire, full of charm. There was something untamed in him, a spark that made you look twice. When he started his career, most people didn’t take him seriously. Too much laughter. Too many parties. Too much life swirling around him like he was the center of it all.

He was tall. Strong. Magnetic. Girls liked him, and people just seemed to orbit him naturally. And he welcomed them all with that smile—kind, easy, present. Even when he had nothing, he gave attention like it was everything.

I remember him as a boy with that spark. A boy with passion. He didn’t want to be famous—no, not that. He wanted to matter. To be remembered. Not for trophies or headlines, but for grit. For being the guy you could count on. For being fearless. Reliable. A team player, through and through.

To him, this wasn’t just a sport. It was family. Purpose. Discipline. He wasn’t in it for flash. He was in it to become someone solid. Someone unforgettable.

He worked harder than anyone I knew. Day in, day out. Rain, snow, holidays—he was out there on the ice, sometimes long after everyone else had gone home. While others labeled him too playful—a joker, even—he kept showing up. That big, funny clown had steel beneath the grin. He could be silly and strong in the same breath, and that made him dangerous in the best way.

He knew from the beginning: if he wanted anything, he’d have to earn it himself. No handouts. No shortcuts. Nothing given—everything earned.

And he was better than the rest. Quietly. You wouldn’t know it by watching him talk—he never bragged, never walked into a room like he owned it. But put him on the ice, and suddenly the whole world bent around him. He believed that if he worked hard and found joy in the grind, it would take him far.

And it did.

Eventually, his work took him somewhere new. A new country. A new language. A new climate. He packed up everything he knew and left it behind. People think that kind of move is glamorous—but it’s lonely. Humbling. Cold in more ways than one. He went from being surrounded by familiarity to feeling like an outsider overnight.

Would he be welcomed? Would he fit in? He didn’t wait to find out. He just put his head down and got to work—harder than ever. He became a light for the locker room, even on the darkest days. Smiling through the struggle. Tough, but never cruel. He let his game do the talking, and when it did, people listened.

He showed them he could lead.

He didn’t chase glory. He wasn’t in it for headlines. On the ice, he played for the crest on his chest, not the name on his back. He was in it for the team. For the ones beside him. For every pass, every block, every huddle, every bruise. He showed up. Over and over again.

As the spotlight found him, he stayed grounded. Journalists called him a star. Broadcasters called him a legend. He just smiled and said, “Not a legend. Just a good leader. A friend. A husband. A dad. A son.”

That was his core. No matter how high he climbed, he stayed close to where he started. He had what mattered: his passion, his people, his purpose.

There was a record—an impossible one. A number so high, it felt untouchable. He was asked about it more times than he could count.

“Do you think you could break it?”

He always shook his head. Said it wasn’t likely. He deeply respected the man who held it. Had studied his moves. Followed his career. Quietly admired him. Of course, somewhere inside, he dreamed. But he never chased numbers.

He chased better.

Better practices. Better plays. Better leadership. Better choices. He focused on the day-to-day, on lifting up the people around him, on being there when it mattered most.

And then—it happened.

Yesterday, he shattered the record. 895 puck shots. A number etched in history.

The crowd stood. Roared. Applauded. Generations of fans held their breath and then released it in joy. Cameras flashed. Reporters scrambled. His name was already being inked into the books.

And him?

He stood still.

Not because he didn’t feel it, but because he felt everything at once. The weight of his past, the faces that shaped him, the long, cold mornings on the ice when no one else was watching. He looked into the stands—and there they were. His people. His anchor.

He skated to them first. Not to the cameras. Not to the mics. But to the ones who knew him before the numbers.

His wife. His kids. His parents. His first coach. The old teammate who never stopped believing. The friend who saw past the clown. The people who reminded him who he was when the world only saw what he could do.

We didn’t just witness a record.

We witnessed the rise of a real man. A man who never asked to be celebrated. A man who once felt like he didn’t belong. A man who dared to grow anyway.

Strong. Humble. Unforgettable. 895. You did it.

But you’d never say that like it was the end. You’d say it was just a checkpoint. A mark. A thank you.

You’d go back to the rink the next morning—same routine, same quiet focus, same worn-out stick taped just the way you like it.

Because to you, the work isn’t done.

Records break. Time moves. New names rise. You know that. You welcome it. You always said the real record was staying in love with the game long after others burned out.

And you did.

Through the injuries, the doubts, the whispers about being too old, too different, too something—you stayed.

You stayed when others left.

You stayed when it was no longer cool to believe.

And now, kids wear your number. Coaches tell your story in locker rooms. Parents point to you and say, “Look. That’s how you lead.”

But if someone asked you what you’re proudest of, you wouldn’t say the goals.

You’d talk about the teammates who became brothers. The cities that became home. The little routines that kept you grounded—coffee in the same mug, tape in the same pocket, music the same before every game.

You’d talk about your boys—how they run to the glass when they see you. How their eyes look up like yours once did. You’d talk about how you hope they find something they love like you loved this.

Not to win. Not to be remembered. But to feel it fully. To give it everything. To stand one day, like you did—shoulders straight, heart open—and know: you became exactly who you were meant to be.

Posted Apr 18, 2025
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Jo Freitag
01:25 Apr 24, 2025

Oh I love this story, Julia.He is the faithful one who always turns up and keeps working, is a great team player and leader, and then is rewarded with the record; but is not changed by the fame - just has the contentment of knowing he had developed into exactly the person he was meant to be.

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11:00 Apr 24, 2025

Thank you!

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