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Christian

In the quiet of the evening, when the world outside hummed softly with the sounds of life, a man sat alone in a dark room. The air was thick with tension, his mind swirling in a whirlpool of questions, doubts, and brokenness. His hands, once steady, now trembled slightly as they gripped the sides of the wooden chair, the only solid thing in his existence. He could feel the weight of the chair beneath him, the coolness of its surface grounding him in a world that felt too distant to touch.

The room was nearly suffocating in its stillness. He had long lost track of time. How long had he been sitting here, trapped in his thoughts, wrestling with demons that never seemed to let go? It was as if the walls themselves had drawn closer, pressing in on him with each breath he took. He could hear nothing. No voices, no distant laughter, no footfalls on the floor above. Only the gentle rhythm of his own breath, each inhale a desperate gasp for understanding, each exhale a plea for release. The air felt heavy, like a storm was brewing just out of sight, its presence unseen but impossible to ignore.

And then, the stillness deepened. It wasn’t just the absence of sound—it was something deeper, more tangible, more profound. It was as though time itself had stopped, as if the very essence of the universe had paused to watch him, to listen. A strange sensation began to crawl over him, slow and relentless, like fingers brushing against his skin, though there was no one there to touch him.

Without warning, the room seemed to shift. No change in the air. No light, no warmth. But something—someone—was there. It was not a figure, not a person he could see, but something more elusive, something far more ancient. There were no eyes or hands, no familiar shape. It was a presence, vast and unmeasurable, filling every corner of the room. It was as though the very space around him had been infused with a consciousness, a force that had always been there, waiting, watching. And the most unsettling thing was that it wasn't coming for him—it had always been there, patient as a shadow, biding its time, as eternal as the stars.

The man closed his eyes, trying to shut out the rising tide of his thoughts. His mind screamed, begging for release from the flood of emotions, the questions, the broken fragments of memories that threatened to drown him. Why this? Why now? Was any of it real? The doubts churned within him, pulling him under like a riptide. But in that moment, as his heartbeat thundered in his chest, something else took hold. Something quieter, deeper.

In the stillness, the questions began to pour in—not in words, but in pulses, waves of emotion that rocked his soul, sending tremors through his chest. Each wave crashed harder, each pulse clearer, until he could feel them in his bones, shaking him to his core. They weren’t questions of reason, but of the heart, of the deepest part of him, where truth had been buried for so long that it was nearly lost. The sensation grew more intense, like whispers in an ocean of sound, each wave crashing louder, urging him to listen, to understand. He felt as though he might drown in it.

Then, it came. The urge to speak, to demand answers. His throat tightened, and he opened his mouth to shout, to ask the questions that had been tearing him apart. Why had he been left to suffer alone? Why had he fallen into despair when once he had been so sure of his faith? Was there any meaning in his suffering, or was it all just a cruel joke? His heart was a battlefield, scars of past wounds and failed promises marking every inch. Each mistake, each betrayal—his own and others—had left a scar, an open wound that he couldn’t seem to heal. But the warmth—this presence—began to stir something in him, something he hadn’t felt in so long: a flicker of hope, faint but undeniable.

The silence grew even deeper, suffocating in its vastness. It was then that the warmth touched him. It was subtle, like a candle flickering in the dark, but it wasn’t a flame. It was something far more profound, something more difficult to define, yet he could feel it so deeply within him that it seemed to reach past his mind and into his very soul. The warmth wrapped around him, not like a blanket, but like a truth he hadn’t yet fully grasped. And then, as though it were not just a presence but a force, it reached him—not through touch, but through thought. No words, no explanations—just a feeling, an impression. A deep knowing that he was not alone.

You are here, the feeling seemed to say, because you are not alone. And you were never meant to be.

His heart trembled. Could it be true? Could it really be true? That all of this—the confusion, the pain, the weight of his own guilt—was part of something greater? Something beyond him, something beyond his understanding? He wanted to reject it, to deny it, but the warmth kept coming, gentle but firm. It did not scold him, did not tell him he was wrong. It simply existed, quietly, with a certainty that he couldn’t escape.

He thought of the years of struggle—the sins he had committed, the mistakes he had made, the people he had hurt, the empty spaces in his life where love should have been. He thought of the years he had spent waiting for an answer, for a sign, for some grand revelation. Was it too late for him? Was there still time to change, or had he already gone too far, fallen too deep?

The warmth did not judge. It only held him, without question, without condition. It was as if it had always been there, patiently waiting for him to notice it. He thought of the lies he had told himself, the guilt he had carried like a stone in his chest, and the shame that had kept him locked in the dark. But this presence—this warmth—it didn’t abandon him. It didn’t condemn him. Instead, it flooded him, filling the empty spaces he had denied for so long. He could feel something inside him stirring, like a dormant seed finally breaking through the soil, reaching for the light.

Is this forgiveness? he thought, his mind too full to focus on anything but the overwhelming sensation of being held. Is this what it feels like to be forgiven?

But the warmth did not answer. It didn’t need to. It was not about the words. It was about something deeper, something beyond answers and conclusions. The presence wasn’t a solution—it was an invitation.

And in that invitation, there was a question—unspoken but clear: Will you believe, even when you cannot see?

The man opened his eyes, though the room had not changed. The shadows still clung to the corners; the silence still stretched out before him like an endless ocean. But the presence remained, quiet and certain, as though it had never left, as though it had always been there, waiting for him to notice. His mind rebelled, struggling to reconcile what he felt with what he understood. He couldn’t explain it. He didn’t have the answers. And yet, for the first time in years, he felt a flicker of something he had lost: faith.

He didn’t have the answers. He may never have the answers. But in this moment, he realized that it wasn’t the answers he had been waiting for. It was the presence. And the presence was enough.

In the depth of his silence, the man leaned back in his chair, feeling the tension slowly start to ebb away. His eyes remained open, but his mind was no longer racing. For the first time in a long while, he didn’t feel entirely alone.

And so, in that silence, in that moment of uncertainty, the man waited—not for an answer, but for the flicker of faith to rise again.

December 12, 2024 17:34

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Gabriel Schmitz
18:22 Dec 15, 2024

I enjoyed this interpretation of the prompt. Faith really is a conversation held without words, I think you captured that feeling well here. Very well written, you captured the enormity of two very intense and opposite emotional states.

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Viking Princess
17:09 Dec 19, 2024

I thank God for your talent, and I thank you for allowing Him to use you. This was so perfectly expressed, something I myself have experienced. Simply beautiful. You win in my book, sister

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Savannah Hoover
17:59 Dec 19, 2024

Thank you! This was a difficult story to put out there because I relate to it so heavily. Faith really is a roller coaster, and as someone who has always needed all of the answers, I have learned that God's presence and my faith in Him is all I need. I hope this story captured that in a way.

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Viking Princess
18:35 Dec 19, 2024

There is nothing like His comfort and peace. You really did express that perfectly, especially when it's so hard to put feelings into words (for me.) The Spirit in me was moved.

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Brutus Clement
03:53 Dec 22, 2024

good writing---very deep and thoughtful

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S. Hjelmeset
07:37 Dec 19, 2024

Great take on the prompt, all though there was little dialogue it was exactly what the story needed. I was sent to your story via that Isabella-mail, and if I have one writing tip it is to change from "could feel" to "felt" - but only if you find yourself with a few too many words (not a problem here). This is a simple way to shorten stories without loosing its nerve. I absolutely loved your first line: "In the quiet of the evening, when the world outside hummed softly with the sounds of life, a man sat alone in a dark room." It elegantly...

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Savannah Hoover
15:46 Dec 19, 2024

Thank you for your advice and praise!

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