It is the story of a long past. In a village, there lived an old couple. They had a single daughter. They did not have any sons. As they wanted a son, they performed various religious rituals and duties and went on fasting as believers. Wherever they went, whichever temple they visited, they sought a blessing from God and that was for a son. In hope of a son, their youth passed and they started getting old. Yet they had no son. As their daughter got young, they arranged her marriage to a man far away from their village. After her marriage, the old couple was left alone. The agony of not having a son ever left them.
On a night the old woman had a dream. In the dream, she was told that she would have a son. She shared this dream with her husband and they both felt happy at the thought. They thought that their devotion to God is going to yield good results. The dream turned true. The old woman conceived a baby and had a son. But the son was born with Mula (planetary positions in such a place according to astrology that the newborn baby's birth would invite death to the parents). The parents were worried. They asked the astrologers about what to do and did many things to avert death, but nothing would work. They were after all destined to die. They, however, consoled themselves thinking that even if they die, their son would help them cross the river in the underworld after their death. They will not be forced to remain in hell as they had a son to lead them through. (Hindus believe that only the son can help them cross the deadly river and free them through the rituals from the cycle of rebirth and redeem them from sins they have committed in this life).
Time passed and my parents died away. The son was left alone as an orphan. As he was an orphan and was small, his relatives (uncles and cousins) tried to chase him away from his house. They wanted to drive him away and capture his property. Therefore, they started ill-treating him. In a long time run, the boy could not tolerate their treatment. He started keeping away from home. He looked after the cattle of some other villagers and thus made his living. The villagers told him that he had a sister who was married to a man of a far-off village. They told him to go to his sister. The boy grew up in the village by looking after the cattle of other villagers and when he was young, he went to his sister's place.
As he reached her house, he called her sister. His sister's sister-in-law came and asked him who he was. He told about himself and asked about his sister and whereabouts. The sister-in-law went in and informed that her brother's arrival. But she said that she did not have any brothers. She evaded his call for a long time, but finally, she came and asked who he was. She told that she had no brother and her parents were dead.
The boy took the name of their parents and revealed about his birth. Yet the sister did not trust. Finally, she let him stay in her house as he had called her sister.
The boy now started staying in his sister's house. She used to cook delicious food for her in-laws, but she did not give good food to him. She told him to go to the rice mill to bring rice dust. Every day she would give him the bread of rice dust and send him to look after the cattle. In the pasture, all the other boys would call him an orphan and ridicule him.
One day his sister baked bread of rice dust. It was thick and not cooked properly. She threw this thick and uncooked bread at him and it dropped in his chest and rolled down. He tried to catch it as it rolled. Thus the boy ran after the rolling bread. The bread rolled down and the orphan ran after it and it happened for a long time. Finally, the rolling bread fell on a milk pond of the wild buffaloes. He reached the millpond, ate the bread, and drank the milk. After eating the bread and drinking the milk, he went to a hollow tree nearby and took a rest. In the evening the wild buffaloes came, filled the pond with milk again. They slept in the land nearby. Early in the morning, they got up filled the pond with milk, and went to the wilderness to graze. In the evening, when the buffaloes came back, they found the milk pond empty of milk and the field they slept on clean. They were surprised and wondered who would have drunk the milk and cleaned the field they slept. They did not know that the boy drank the milk and cleaned the dung from the field.
Every day the boy would repeat this: he would drink the milk from the pond and clean the dung from the field where buffaloes slept and spent the night. The wild buffaloes doubted that someone was there to do all this. Therefore, one day, one of the oldest of the buffaloes did not go for grazing. It kept hidden at the place in order to see who was there to drink their milk and clean the place they slept on.
When the boy saw all the buffaloes going to the forest for grazing, he quietly came out of the hollow trees. As usual, he drank the milk and cleaned the field of dung. When he was ready to go to hide in the hollow tree, the buffalo which was hiding came to the boy. The boy was scared. The buffalo asked him who he was, how he found this place, why he drank their milk. The boy narrated the whole story of his birth, the death of his parents, his orphan state, the treatment of his relatives, his ordeals of life, and his final shelter in his sister's house, the treatment she gave, the bread that came rolling to the pond and his final arrival to the pond to drink milk. The old buffalo was moved on hearing his story. By the time, it was evening and all the buffaloes came to their shelter. The old buffalo then told about the boy to all of them. All the buffaloes were equally moved. They all became happy that the boy was there. Now they told the boy to live there, drink their milk, and use their milk in any other ways for his profit-- for making butter or ghee.
From that day, the boy decided to live there forever. He drank the milk of the buffaloes and cleaned their shelter. He also started making butter and selling it. By doing so he earned a lot. He built a beautiful house and used all the land around. The buffaloes were merciful to him. Using their milk, he made a good earning and eventually was rich. He became healthy and handsome as well. A nearby king heard about his wealth, the number of wild buffaloes he had and thus he gave his daughter to him. The orphan now got married to the princess. However, he continued his service to the buffaloes.
One day his sister heard about his wealth and beauty, his marriage to a princess, his children, his land and house, the number of wild buffaloes he had. Someone told her that her brother had become a great man. When she heard it, she went to her brother's place. He received her respectfully and offered the most delicious food. After staying at her maternal home for some days, she was ready to go home. Her brother asked her what she would love to take with her from his house. She asked for a buffalo. He told her to choose the buffalo she would like to take. But before that, he made a bell for the buffalo, and around the bell, he wrote. "The bread of the rice dust rolled, and the orphan tried to catch it. Dong-- Dong, Dong--Dong". He put the bell around the neck of the buffalo and stuffed the bell so that it would not ring there. He told his sister to take any other thing that she liked. He put a condition to clear the stuffed bell any time after she crossed the seven hills and reached near her village. He said, "Sister, I am your only brother. Take anything that you like as my gift. Thus she took what she wanted and went home with the buffalo. After crossing the hills, she unstuffed the bell, and it rang. The ringing bell resounded the words written on it: "The bread of rice dust rolled and the orphan tried to catch it…."
The sister heard the sound and was reminded of her treatment of the brother. Full of remorse for her own act, she committed suicide by hanging herself in a tree on the way. The boy lived happily unaware of what had happened to his sister after she heard the sound made by the buffalo bell.
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Okay firstly, I loved this story for its magical realism, where fantastical and magical elements blended in seamlessly with 'reality'. Secondly the story was well built, focusing on karma and the consequences of actions. What initially drew me into this well written and fascinating story was the desire of the old couple to have a sun. It's so common in so many cultures to prioritize sons over daughters and I was interested in seeing how the story goes. Well done and I will be sure to check out your next story! -Moon
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THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! I'm not really a writer. I'm much more of a reader but trying this story on reedsly was the best site to try it on.
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I liked how soft this story was while it still kept its heavy message. I also liked the fantasy parts you added to it it gave it a better visual for me. With that being said, I did see some inconsistencies with your writing. You changed tenses quite a lot and I don't think you needed to put the explanations in parentheses, it's redundant. And there was some other stuff too (I forgot while I was reading 😭) And I normally criticize the use of paragraphs in the story but as I was reading it it didn't bother me because I was so lost in your stor...
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it was a good story. The only thing is that it was hard to imagine the boy because he had no name, non of the characters have names. I also like the reality check the sister gets, but suicide just feeling like an easy way out (only mu opinion). otherwise the story was really good
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That was the whole point of the story
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This was a great story!! I really enjoyed reading it. Can't wait to read more from you!!! :)
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Nice story, Swagger Girl. I do have some critiques for it: --> Time passed and my parents died away. {In the whole story, you have used 3rd person POV but this line is an exception, you might want to check on this.} --> The story was really sweet, but maybe instead of the ending you chose, you could have gone with something like the sister feeling guilty and apologizing to her brother. {This is just my opinion.} --> The paragraphs were a bit too long. Maybe try to cut them down in the future? By the feel of the story, I am guessing that ...
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No, i am not from India. I just love to travel to different places
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