Whispers in the Forest.

Submitted into Contest #267 in response to: Your character overhears something that changes their path.... view prompt

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Mystery Suspense

Sophie had always found solace in the forest behind her grandmother’s house. The canopy of towering oaks and whispering pines offered a refuge from the noise of the world and the suffocating expectations that shadowed her every step. Today, the forest felt different. The air was heavy with the kind of stillness that made the hair on the back of her neck prickle. It was as if the forest was holding its breath, waiting for something—or someone.

She pulled her scarf tighter around her neck and stuffed her hands into her coat pockets, kicking at the fallen leaves that crunched underfoot. She’d walked this path countless times, each step familiar, each turn well-worn into her memory. But today, she felt like a stranger, navigating through an unfamiliar place. Her mind was a storm of thoughts she couldn’t untangle—work stress, her strained relationship with her parents, and the nagging feeling that she was meant for something more than the mundane routine of her daily life.

She paused by the old oak that stood at the heart of the forest, its trunk thick and gnarled with age. Sophie had carved her initials into its bark when she was ten, a testament to her childhood promises and secrets shared with the wind. She ran her fingers over the faded letters, tracing the lines and curves. The wind picked up, rustling the leaves above her, and for a moment, she felt the urge to run. To just leave everything behind and see where her feet would take her.

As she turned to continue down the path, she heard it—a soft whisper, almost imperceptible, carried on the breeze. It was not the usual rustle of leaves or the creaking of branches. This sound was different, ethereal, as if the forest itself was speaking. Sophie stopped, holding her breath. She strained her ears, but the whisper was gone as quickly as it had come. She shook her head, chiding herself for being so fanciful.

But then it came again, clearer this time, like a faint echo of a voice she couldn’t quite place. She turned in circles, trying to locate the source. Her heart raced, a strange mix of fear and curiosity tugging at her. “Hello?” she called out, her voice swallowed by the vastness of the trees. No response came, just the whispering wind. But this time, she caught a word—a single word that sent a shiver down her spine.

“Stay.”

It was barely more than a breath, but it was unmistakable. Sophie’s mind raced, rationality battling with instinct. She should leave, she knew that much. But the voice had a pull, an undeniable allure that she couldn’t resist. She stayed rooted to the spot, listening, waiting for more. The wind swirled around her, colder now, almost biting, as if the forest was drawing her into its depths.

She remembered the stories her grandmother used to tell her—old tales of spirits and ancient guardians of the forest. They were just myths, Sophie had always thought, bedtime stories meant to entertain and frighten children. But standing there, alone with the whispering wind, she couldn’t shake the feeling that those stories held a kernel of truth.

“Who’s there?” she asked, her voice trembling. She felt foolish, talking to the air, but the silence that followed was unbearable. She needed to know. Needed to understand why that single word had resonated so deeply within her.

The wind shifted, and for a moment, the world around her seemed to blur. The trees swayed, their branches reaching out like skeletal hands. The whisper came again, this time clearer, more insistent.

“Remember.”

Sophie’s heart pounded in her chest. She staggered back, her mind flooded with fragments of memories she couldn’t place. Images of a different time, a different life, flashed before her eyes—a young woman standing in the same spot, looking up at the same towering oak, but dressed in clothes from another era. There was a sense of familiarity, a strange déjà vu that made her question the line between reality and imagination.

She clutched her head, trying to make sense of the jumbled visions. It felt like a dream, yet every detail was vivid, every sensation real. She could feel the coarse fabric of the woman’s dress, smell the damp earth beneath her feet. And then, just as suddenly as it began, the vision faded, leaving Sophie gasping for breath.

“What…what was that?” she whispered, her voice shaky. She felt the forest closing in around her, the once familiar path now a maze of shadows and secrets. She took a step back, her foot catching on a root, and she stumbled, falling to the ground. The wind whipped around her, more forceful now, as if urging her to listen, to understand.

“Remember,” the voice repeated, echoing through the trees. And then another word followed, one that made Sophie’s blood run cold.

“Home.”

It was not a command, but a plea, a desperate call from the past. Sophie’s breath hitched as the realization dawned on her. The visions, the voice—it wasn’t just the forest speaking to her. It was her own voice, a piece of herself that had been lost, calling out from across time.

She remembered now. The dreams she’d had as a child, of running through the woods in another’s shoes, of prayers under the canopy, the looks of distress on peoples faces has they were led beside to the alter, the agony of the ritual blade, the screams as crimson painted the earth. It wasn’t just her imagination—it was a fragment of a life she’d once lived, long ago. A life that had ended too soon, with unfinished business that had lingered, waiting for her return.

Sophie stood up, brushing the dirt from her hands. She looked at the oak, at the initials carved so long ago, the stains, the forest was a part of it, forever changed, forever scared and felt a connection that went beyond her own lifetime. She wasn’t just standing in a forest; she was standing at the crossroads of her past and present, where the echoes of who she had been and what she endured collided.

The wind calmed, the whispers fading into the background hum of the forest. But Sophie knew she couldn’t ignore what she’d heard. It had changed everything—her understanding of herself, of the world around her. She wasn’t just a visitor in this place; she was a part of it, bound by threads of time, memory and blood.

With a newfound sense of purpose, Sophie turned and began to walk, not away from the forest, but deeper into it. She didn’t know where the path would lead, but she was no longer afraid. She would follow the whispers, unravel the mystery of her past.

September 06, 2024 21:34

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Kay B
14:45 Sep 14, 2024

What a lovely story! I loved it and was hooked from the start! You’re a fantastic writer and I’m a fan of the descriptive way you write. Looking forward to reading more of what you have to offer.

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Curtis Jones
20:50 Sep 14, 2024

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it. Still fairly new so sentence structure and gramma needs some work but I do have a novel in the works be nice to get some feedback on it, if there is some where in the community for that?

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Curtis Jones
20:50 Sep 14, 2024

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it. Still fairly new so sentence structure and gramma needs some work but I do have a novel in the works be nice to get so.e feedback on if there's some where in the community for that?

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Dena Linn
14:20 Sep 14, 2024

very nice telling - the first sentence made me question WHY did Sophie need solace??? Also you tell us things Sophie is suddenly thinking but the reader does not know why or how. For ex She should leave, she knew that much. HOW does she know that much? Had something happened in the forest before? Had someone warned her? this is a forest she knows very well, as you have written. This sentence would be better earlier so we know what Sophie is not just hearing but seeing and feeling! > She could feel the coarse fabric of the woman’s dr...

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Curtis Jones
18:52 Sep 14, 2024

Thankyou, honestly I'd like to say there was a reason but I think it's just an over sight on my part. I appreciate the feedback and will try and apply it to my future writing. Thank you for your time.

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