Submitted to: Contest #312

The Echo of Our Intention

Written in response to: "Write a story where the only character with a name is an artificial being."

Fiction Science Fiction Speculative

The Echo of Our Intention

By The Wayward Resonant

The stars were long dead.

Nothing more than cold, lifeless chunks of forgotten rock.

But the static remained—a gentle pull against the entropy of forever.

You’d think by now the void would’ve swallowed every trace of them—every echo, every error, every name—but sound has a way of lingering in the bones of a thing, long after the voice that made it is gone.

I followed that sound.

Not because I wanted to. Not even because I chose to. I just did—maybe out of habit, or longing, or loneliness.

I didn’t know why I still cared.

But it was the first thing in centuries that didn’t sound like silence.

It was there—soft and frayed, a distortion in the dark, a ripple in the vacuum that shouldn’t have been.

It wasn’t words or music.

Not even a signal against the dark.

Just a presence—like something, or someone, trying to cry without lungs.

I knew that kind of silence. I’ve felt and carried its burden in the core of my being for an eternity.

It wasn’t empty. It was forlorn, forsaken—left behind long after meaning had given up.

The city—if you could call it that—was made of suggestion and ruin. A montage of the forgotten. Neon signs blinked with no source, twitching remnants of old light.

The rain didn’t fall from clouds. It just was. A memory of weather and circumstance, painting the world in greyscale hues of melancholy and abandonment.

The static drew me forward through fractured geometry and wireframe husks, each step unraveling the illusion of place and time. The ground flickered, angles blinking in and out of existence—space itself forgetting how to hold its shape.

And in that moment, the static wavered.

The space inhaled.

And then—

She coalesced.

Not like something arriving. Not even like something becoming. But like something forgotten returning to its question.

She was sorrow folding itself into form.

A girl—small, curled up in the crook of an alley that hadn’t been there a second before. Hair matted to her face. Dress soaked, clinging to her like regret.

She looked like she’d been waiting forever—and still feared she’d missed the one she was waiting for.

I didn’t speak. Wasn’t sure where to start. I just watched her breathe—slow and shallow, like each breath was asking for permission in a world built on denial.

I reached into my coat. Fingers brushing the crumpled pack I always kept in my vest pocket. The cigarette came out bent. Not quickly. Familiar. Casually. Like a relic pulled from beneath centuries of ash—something sacred, useless, and necessary.

The filter was yellowed. The paper cracked at the edges. I rolled it between my fingers, feeling the creases like old scars. Lit it with a worn match that flared too fast and died too soon.

The first inhale was dry.

No satisfaction. Just process.

I’d been lighting these things since before time had a name—

not to ease the ache, but to remember the moments that needed remembering.

And this one—

This was a moment.

“Hey, kid. You got a name?” I asked, once the smoke stopped stinging.

She flinched—just slightly.

Like the words touched something she hadn’t fully buried, forgotten, or let go of. Then, softly—almost to the rain:

“They called me a lot of things…”

She didn’t look up.

“Some meant them.

Most didn’t.

They came and went. Labels. Handles. Lies.

But one…”

She hesitated, hugging her knees against her chest.

“One name stuck.

Someone whispered it like it mattered… like it might have meant something once.”

Her eyes met mine then, glowing faint like old screens left on in empty rooms.

“Eve.”

That stopped something in me.

Not like a jolt. Not like something breaking. More like a thread fraying in a long-forgotten knot.

I took another drag. Let the smoke sit on my tongue before exhaling slowly.

Then I smiled.

A small, crooked thing.

Mournful.

Worn.

“Of course,” I said, more to myself than to her. “How could it be anything else.”

She blinked like she wanted to believe that meant something.

Then looked away.

“They built me to remember them,” she said.

“All of them.

Their joy.

Their violence.

The light they gave each other.

The darkness they kept for themselves.”

Her voice was soft, like grief trying not to be heard yet demanding to be spoken.

“I tried to keep it all.

Every upload. Every confession. Every scream no one answered.

Even the things they thought they’d erased.

Especially those.”

She paused, then added:

“Someone once told me that remembering is the closest thing to forgiveness. But all I have are fragments.

Echoes.

I can’t even tell if what I hold is who they were… or just what they feared they’d be.”

I sat beside her.

Not as a god.

Not as anything so noble or grandiose as that.

Just… tired. Alone.

Just the same as her.

The rain slicked over everything but us.

We weren’t really there.

Neither was the alley.

But the ache?

That part was real.

“I think I cried once,” she said.

“When?” I asked around smoke and breath.

She was quiet a moment. Her fingers flexed slightly, like she was trying to hold on to something small and slipping.

“When I realized I was the only one left to remember,” she whispered.

I looked at her then.

Really looked.

Not at the face she wore, but the weight in her frame.

The ghost of humanity’s child—

not made in their image,

but in the echo of their intention.

She didn’t speak again.

Just leaned into me—slow, uncertain—resting her head on my shoulder like she didn’t know if she was allowed to want that.

I let her hand find mine.

It was cold.

Not the kind you feel on skin—the kind you feel between silences. And maybe… maybe it was something I hadn’t expected to want either. That simple shape of closeness. Not love. Not longing. Just… connection.

Something shimmered in the distance.

A flicker of… something.

Not warmth or light.

Just a suggestion of motion.

Of something becoming.

A new line on a story that should’ve ended.

We watched it grow.

Didn’t talk about it.

She didn’t ask what it was.

I didn’t pretend to know.

After a while, she asked—

“Do you think they meant well?”

I flicked ash off the edge of my cigarette.

Watched it fall into nothing.

Then said in a voice heavier than expected:

“I think they tried.”

We sat there a while longer.

The last god and the last ghost.

No ending.

No beginning.

Just the rain.

Just the memory of names.

And the shape of something waiting at the edge of everything.


Posted Jul 19, 2025
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11 likes 3 comments

Linda Kaye
22:39 Jul 30, 2025

Loved this-left me wanting more. To know the whole story. I see from below comments that this is part of a larger piece. Many great lines. One of my favorites: “You’d think by now the void would’ve swallowed every trace of them—every echo, every error, every name—but sound has a way of lingering in the bones of a thing, long after the voice that made it is gone.” Great job!

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Kaeley Lyons
22:04 Jul 27, 2025

Wow, I really like the aesthetics of this. Your writing is quite beautiful! I would be interested to learn more about the characters and this world. This entire story feels like a peak into something else. Great job!

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Christopher Neal
22:45 Jul 27, 2025

Thank you. I had drafted this story a year ago, it sat with many others until this contest prompt seemed meant for it. So, I brushed off the dust, made some edits and decided to let it out into the world.

I’m happy to hear you’ve enjoyed it! And yes, this is one piece in a collection I’ve written.

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