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Submitted into Contest #40 in response to: Write a story about someone turning to a friend in a time of need.... view prompt
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While I absolutely love your message in this story, I have to point out a few things that could use improvement. 1. Your whole story was in bold. I'm not sure if this was on purpose, but it made it very intense for me as a reader. 2. You have a few spelling errors and some typos. 3. Sometimes you switch between past and present tense. 4. This would flow better if you had more paragraphs. Again, this story has a really great message behind it. The story line is very inspiring. The characters are interesting but they could be fleshed...
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Thank you so much 🙂 I will surely try improving my work. I appreciate you for time you took to read my story, correct me and suggest me. 💕 I always look forward to reviews.
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