Submitted to: Contest #321

Chalk Room

Written in response to: "Write a story that includes the line “You can see me?”"

Coming of Age Romance Urban Fantasy

The day the moving truck coughed into the cul‑de‑sac, the old house woke like a dog hearing keys. Pipes clanked, the stair rubbed its aching knee, the front door pulled a draft across the hall as if sniffing. Poppy knew its moods better than she knew her own. She had grown up here, grown invisible here, and learned to read the house the way abandoned people learn to read weather.

She sat on the bannister and watched through the lace of the window screen. A boy swung down from the truck, headphones around his neck, a thin scar splitting one eyebrow. He took the porch steps of the house next door in two jumps, then doubled back to study her place like it had whispered. He cupped a hand to his eyes and peered through the skein of sunlight and dust toward the dark front parlor where she sat.

He flinched. Not as if he’d seen something terrible. As if he’d been startled by being seen back.

“Hello?” he said, testing the word at the fence line.

No one spoke to Poppy. People spoke around the house, at the house, about the house. They called it haunted, condemned, full of rats, a bargain. They taped notices to the door when they wanted money. They never addressed the air and expected it to answer.

Poppy didn’t move. Stillness was her one trick. Even the cat on Mint Street had learned to stare right through her.

“Hello?” he tried again. He shifted, picked a paint chip from the fence, and then—calm as anything—looked directly at her.

“You can see me?” Poppy said.

He blinked once. “Yeah.”

The word broke something brittle inside her. “How?”

He shrugged. “I just can.” He tapped his headphones with a knuckle. “I hear weird stuff too. Maybe the settings are off.” A small grin made the scar jump. “I’m Evan.”

She climbed down from the bannister, aware of the weightless way the air took her. “Poppy.”

“It’s a good name,” he said.

“It’s a flower,” she said.

“And the part of the eye that lets light in.”

He stayed where he was. He didn’t try the gate. She loved him for that before she knew what to call it. The last person who’d touched the gate had been a city man with a clipboard. The gate bit anyone not born to it; the curse liked its manners.

“Do you live there?” Evan said.

“I don’t live anywhere else.”

He weighed that. “Want company? I could sit on your steps. I won’t open anything.”

The house huffed. The threshold tugged her ankles like a toddler who hated goodbyes. “You can sit,” she said. “Don’t touch the latch.”

He came with a peach soda and a bag of chips and sat two boards down, hands visible, as if approaching a wary dog. He placed the bottle between them and nudged it with a fingertip. “It’s cold.”

She lifted it. The beads of condensation clung to her knuckles, which meant the world still agreed she had edges, if not a face. She tasted the fizz and coughed. Lightning unfurled in her mouth. He grinned, surprised the way he was when weather changed in front of him.

“It’s wrong that something that good is just… out there,” she said.

“It’s at the corner store,” he said, then caught himself. “Right. Store.”

“I tried when I was seven,” she said. “The gate closed on me like teeth. I forgot my name all day.”

“Who did that to you?”

“A woman who rehearsed kindness until she could wear it,” Poppy said. “She married my father and made a promise for me. Every promise is a little door.” She nodded at the threshold. “This door locked.”

He looked at the house as if it were a person he might have to shake hands with later. “What if there’s a counter‑promise?”

“People tried,” she said. “Salt. A mirror. Whispered prayers. The house swallowed all of it like aspirin.”

He set the chip bag between them, opened. “Do you get lonely?”

“I had a father,” she said. “He left nickels under the rug to see if I’d find them. When I disappeared, he held a funeral without a body. I watched from the stairs. He moved away because grief is heavy. I can’t lift that for him.” She took another sip of soda to push the words down. “Is that the same as lonely?”

“It counts,” he said.

He came back the next day with chalk. He knelt and drew a square on the porch and a little window and a plant with ridiculous leaves. “If you can’t leave,” he said, “we can make a room.”

She stepped over the chalk line. The air tensed, then eased. He drew another line closer to the top step. She tried it and felt a wire tighten behind her sternum.

“Nope,” he said, reading the shift in her breath. He redrew the line where she hadn’t winced and made the room there. He added a crooked rug and wrote TABLE and set the peach soda inside the letters. “We can decorate.”

“What happens when it rains?” she said.

“Then our furniture dissolves and we start over,” he said. He rubbed chalk dust off on his jeans and left blue handprints like a brand. “I’m good at starting over.”

They made a life in the chalk room. He read library books aloud because the library wouldn’t know where to shelve her. He told her his new school smelled like bleach and oranges, that his homeroom teacher wore a paper clip as a tie bar, that a girl with glitter eyeliner sketched vines up the margins of her math tests. He said his mother slept in her uniform pants so mornings couldn’t ambush her, and that they had moved here because quiet felt like a luxury you could maybe afford if you chose the right block.

Poppy told him the house’s language: the pantry’s November breath, the stair that clicked warnings, the smell that rose some Saturdays like her father’s shaving cream and vanished before she could chase it. Evan never asked to go inside. He laid his palm on the door once and said, “Hello,” like a neighbor who knows boundaries keep people decent.

When a thunderstorm ripped the afternoon, he arrived damp to the knees and pulled a Ziploc from his backpack. Inside, frosting smudged the lid of a slice of supermarket cake. “My birthday,” he said, sudden shy. “Seventeen. I wanted to share.”

“How old am I?” she said, and the question startled her. She’d been cutting notches into the basement beam with a nail, but the beam didn’t do math, only history. “Sixteen,” she decided, and then smiled because deciding felt like an age in itself.

They ate on the steps. The candle guttered and made a small cathedral in the wax. She wanted to leave a kiss somewhere any eyes could find it. The thought came like a cat and sat with its back to her, pretending it hadn’t chosen her already.

Two days later, men in suits rattled the knob and left a packet under the brick by the mat. “Tax sale,” Evan said, reading. “Delinquent. The city thinks this house is asleep.”

“It’s awake,” she said.

“Then we need a plan,” he said.

“You can’t save it,” she said, and tried to make that kindness. “It doesn’t want saving, only company.”

That night his mother came with a plastic tub of arroz con pollo. She was tired around the edges and beautiful in a way that made you think of uprights holding a roof. She blinked, saw Poppy in the angle you see a star, nodded once, and set the food down. “Evan says you like peaches,” she said, and left it at that. Some people, Poppy learned, could believe without insisting on proof.

On a Sunday morning he strung paper cranes along the splintered railing, each one folded from a page torn from a magazine. “Sixteen,” he said. “We’ll count from here.”

They were laughing at the way the cranes turned to follow the wind when the gate latch clicked. A woman in a cream blouse stood there without dust on her shoes. The air tightened around Poppy’s ankles in the old way, the way of hands that wanted to drag.

“You,” the woman said to the house, voice clean as glass. “This has gone on long enough.”

Evan straightened. “Can we help you?”

She looked through him. People did that; they made boys transparent and left them furious. “Where’s the owner?” the woman said.

“I am,” Poppy said, before she could choose silence. Her voice surprised the doorway. “Or I might as well be.”

The woman’s eyes found the shape of Poppy and tried not to. Her mouth pinched—yes, that mouth. It had sipped tea and said it was for the best. “You should not be heard,” she said, and there was the old music, the lullaby sharpened to a knife. “You were never meant to anchor anyone.”

Poppy tasted lemon cleaner and porcelain. She stood. The chalk line lay at her toes like a thin shore. “You made a promise on my crib,” she said. “You left a circle and put me in it. I’ve learned its curves by heart.”

The woman lifted her hand. A ring flashed a clear lie. The porch shuddered.

Evan took one step, then stopped. He looked at Poppy, asking without sound, and she shook her head. “If you pull me,” she said to him, quiet, “I won’t learn anything except how to be pulled.”

He breathed once, once more, and became still in a way she trusted. He placed himself where he could break a fall and swore with his eyes he wouldn’t.

Poppy set one foot across the chalk.

The first ache closed around her ribs. The second bit her calves. The third tried to name her for her and failed. She put her other foot down, step by step, her body remembering weight in a world that had tried to take it. The smell of her father’s aftershave moved through the stairwell and out the door like a blessing that didn’t ask to be called that.

At the bottom she rested her palm on the post. Paint flakes clung. They looked like proof. The gate waited. She lifted the latch. It stung her palm, tasted her, and let go.

“I am not your problem,” Poppy said to the woman who had made cruelty look like tidiness.

The woman stared, and for a sliver of a second Poppy saw a girl who had been terrified of being needed and had chosen to be necessary instead. Then the woman adjusted her blouse, rehearsed her face back into place, and left. The sidewalk took her as if she had always meant to be elsewhere.

The neighborhood exhaled. A trumpet down the block found its key. A stroller squeaked. The cranes nodded like judges who had heard enough.

Evan laughed once, then lost it in his throat. “You did that,” he said.

“I did,” she said, and let herself feel how the world sat differently on her bones.

“Want to walk?” he said, tentative, a hand held out without reaching.

“Give me a moment,” she said. She went up one step and down again because she could, then closed the gate so she could practice opening it later. She touched the fence, the roughness like a map she had already memorized, and turned to the street.

They walked as if the concrete might slant without warning. At the corner the coffee shop’s sign said OPENISH. Inside the bell chimed and the room smelled like burnt sugar and nerves. The barista looked straight at Poppy and said, “What can I get you?”

“Something sweet,” she said, “with too much milk.”

Evan leaned on the counter, steadying her without touching. “She’s brave,” he said, not to the barista but to the air, in case the house had followed and needed to hear it.

The barista wrote Poppy on the cup in thick letters and added a star for no reason. The milk made the coffee velvet. The first sip felt like a small country inviting her to stay.

Outside, the sycamore scraped the clapboard, curious. Chalk had washed from the porch in last night’s rain, but the room remained, portable now: a blueprint she could carry in her body. She would call her father. Not today, but soon. She would ask the librarian how to get a card when you have a name but no proof of it. She would show Evan the notch‑scarred beam in the basement where she had taught time to listen.

“Home?” he said, and did not define which house he meant.

She looked down the block, past the cracked sidewalks and the bottle caps shining like coins, past the cranes tugging at their string. The house waited in the sun like a beast after a meal—alert, watching, not hungry. Maybe it had been protecting her badly. Maybe it had been obedient to a promise that had calcified. Either way, it had loosened its jaw when she pushed back.

“Home,” she said.

They stepped into the street. Cars sighed by, uninterested. A dog refused to walk and then did because that’s what dogs do. The city didn’t make room; it merely kept moving. Poppy found she liked that. Miracles were loud and exhausting. This was a quieter thing: being a person in the middle of other people.

Evan bumped her shoulder with his. It was an accident, an overture. She bumped him back. He pretended to be offended and failed. The day had edges again, and she fit inside them.

On the porch she paused at the post and pressed her palm flat where the paint had peeled. “Thank you,” she said to the wood, to the house, to the part of herself that had stayed alive out of sheer stubbornness.

At the boundary the air no longer grabbed. It noticed and let her through. She lifted the latch one more time and heard the small, satisfied click that meant: yours.

In the evening, when the cranes turned like a constellation settling into the shape it meant all along, Evan sat on the step and shook his head, still incredulous. “How can I see you?” he said, finally asking the first question over again.

Poppy sipped the last sweet coffee gone lukewarm and thought about the Poppy, the bit of the eye that governs light. “Maybe you don’t,” she said. “Maybe you just looked until I could.”

He took that in. He nodded, as if filing it. He did not say anything large. He didn’t have to. He sat beside her until the streetlights forgot to turn on and then flickered awake all at once. The porch settled. The house held. The night came with ordinary noises. Poppy let them happen.

She had a gate to practice. She had a father’s number to dial. She had a boy who could see her and a city that might learn the trick. She had a life that could be counted now without a nail and a beam.

When the first moth tapped the bulb above them and spun away unhurt, Poppy laughed. It sounded like soda fizzing in a glass and then quieting. She curled her toes against the porch board where the chalk once made a room and felt that room open inside her, doors unlatched, light finding its way through.

Posted Sep 25, 2025
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Mary Butler
10:56 Oct 01, 2025

Aiden, what a gorgeous, aching story—equal parts ghost tale and quiet coming-of-age. I was completely taken in by your opening line: “The day the moving truck coughed into the cul‑de‑sac, the old house woke like a dog hearing keys.” That line alone promises a story where even walls have memories, and you absolutely delivered.

Poppy’s stillness, her wary bravery, and the tenderness of her connection with Evan were all so beautifully drawn. I loved how you made the house a character in its own right—protective, possessive, maybe even misunderstood. The image of chalk rooms on the porch, dissolving in rain but rebuilt with care, hit me hard. And that ending—“Maybe you don’t. Maybe you just looked until I could.”—was the kind of soft magic that lingers.

Thank you for this. I’ll be thinking about Poppy, Evan, and that gate latch for a long time.

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Mary Bendickson
20:19 Sep 26, 2025

Accepted.

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