Christmas Fiction Holiday

Thanksgiving dinner had just wrapped up at the Taylor household. Tom and his grandson, Bob, get out of their seats. They head to the living room and sit beside each other. They are getting ready to watch the Detroit Lions take on the Dallas Cowboys on TV.

Bob engages in conversation with his grandpa, Tom. 

“Another year is almost over. Can you believe it, grandpa. Christmas is only 4 weeks away.”

“Yes, it is, Bob. I can hardly believe it.”, replies Grandpa Tom.

“I have to ask you something, Grandpa”, inquires Bob.

“What was the best present you’ve ever gotten at Christmastime?”

Grandpa Tom replies: “Goodness, let’s see. Oh yes, now I remember. It was in 1942 when I was 5 years old.”

“What was it, Grandpa?”, asks Bob.

“I got a red colored toy fire engine, with a banner that read, ‘1942 Fire Engine of the Year’ banner painted on it’s side. I remember that it was a unique product that was only available that year. Boy, just thinking about it makes my eyes light up!”

“Do you still have it?”, asks Bob.

Grandpa Tom replies: “Heck, no! One day, it accidently got thrown in the garbage by my mother!”

“I bet you were heartbroken, eh Grandpa Tom?”, replies Bob.

“I wish I still had it. In fact, I would be over the moon if I would ever get it again.”, reflects Grandpa Tom.

“Well, Grandpa Tom, you never know. Santa Claus may bring it to you this year!”, replies Bob, sarcastically.

“Grandpa Tom concludes: “Well, Christmas is the season of hope. You never can tell.”

The game is watched in it’s entirety by the whole family. The Dallas Cowboys fans in the family are happy to see their Cowboys won by a score of 33 to 27. 

All the family members greet each other before they head out to their respective homes. Bob knows now what to get his grandpa for Christmas.

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Bob gets home. He sits in the corner of his sofa in the living room. He picks up the computer pad that is resting on his coffee table. He boots it up. The purpose of using his computer pad is to search the E-Bay site for the toy truck his grandpa covets.

When he gets to the E=Bay site, he types in the words, “1942 Fire Engine of the Year toy fire truck in red color.”

Bob sits back in his sofa being confident that it may cost, at most, $ 500 to purchase off this site. Finally, after a minute, the item appears on his pad screen.

Bob is shocked. He way under-estimated the cost of this item. His eyes popped out of his head when he saw the price of it. If he is to bid on it, it would set him back $ 10,000. Bob realizes that he does not have that kind of money to spend on his grandfather’s Christmas present. He is disappointed, but not totally discouraged. He has to figure out a way to get that particular item but with a cost that is far less than $ 10,000.

On the coffee table, is a book he borrowed from the local library. He suddenly comes up with a bright idea. He realizes that the library has a 3-D printer. That would be the best way to get his grandfather his cherished Christmas present. He could have it replicated with a 3-D printer. It would be as authentic as possible without it being the genuine product.

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The next day, Bob visits the nearest bank with an ATM. He withdraws $ 300. This is the cost of doing a 3-D model from the library’s printer. He wastes no time driving to the library to have a replica toy firetruck printed from the 3-D printer at the library.

Bob hands the clerk his fee and gives her the USB device that contains the drawing to insert into the printer. The clerk informs him that the 3-D model will be ready in a week’s time. Bob is elated. He will have a present his grandfather relishes without breaking the bank, like he would have had to if he bought it from E-Bay.

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A week later, Bob gets an e-mail from the library that his model is ready to be picked up. He leaves for the library with great anticipation. He hopes that there are no flaws with the finished product. 

When he arrives at the library, he goes to the department where the replica is ready to pick up. The clerk passes it to him when he tells her what he’s there to pick up. He carefully examines it. It has no flaws. He thanks the clerk for her help and leaves the library to go home.

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Bob arrives home. He goes to the kitchen with the replica in a bag in his right hand. He takes it out of the bag, and places it on the kitchen table. He walks around the table meticulously examining the item in a 360-degree perspective. It is perfect! Not a flaw on it whatsoever. This is the first of many Christmas presents Bob will wrap. He will wrap other presents, but this is the most valuable one from an emotional aspect.

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Christmas Day has arrived. The gift giving exchange takes place amongst family members. It is Bob’s turn to give his grandpa, Tom, his present.

“Grandpa, this is an unexpected gift you will get from me. I think you will find it to be meaningful, also.”

Grandpa Tom accepts the gift from Bob. Then he opens it. He carefully takes it out of the box it is wrapped in. 

“Wow!”, was the first word Grandpa Tom said. A tear ran down his eye.

“Bob, this is the best Christmas present I’ve received in 80 years.” I feel like a little boy again!”

He hugs Bob, and says: “Thanks, Bob. I can’t thank you enough.”

Grandpa Tom walks over to the fireplace mantle and places his cherished gift on it.

He stands back and observes it. He is spiritually uplifted with this most treasured gift he received on this most special day of the year.

Grandpa Tom contemplates further about the gift. He remembers, although not fondly, how these were tough times because of the Second World War that was happening. He had a special friend who was a fire fighter that was a soldier in the war. He remembers that that friend never came home. Grandpa Tom knows he is truly blessed to be alive to experience this extraordinarily special moment.

Posted Nov 23, 2022
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11:03 Nov 29, 2022

Hi Joseph. This is a nice heart-warming story of a grandfather and grandson bonding. Thanks for writing it and submitting it for us to read.

Unfortunately there are a lot of grammar/syntax errors (mainly a weirdly changing tense - is this happening now, or then?) Even where there are no errors of those sorts, the conversation feels slightly unnatural because you signpost your speech marks with the name of the speaker a lot more often than is strictly necessary. Don't get me wrong, it's better having too many indicators-of-who-is-speaking than too few (generally.) But it does feel a bit clunky this way.
And talking about signposting, you fully gave away the what-is-going-to-happen almost at the very beginning! Again, in a way, this is better than leaving no hints or really veiled/confusing hints at the beginning, but in this story, when the big reveal comes at the end, it doesn't really mean anything. We already knew what was going to happen. When you tell us so clearly up-front what is going to happen, it kind of takes the mystery out of the story, you know?
Additionally, I'd like to know how old Bob is. I thought to start with that he was like 5 to 8-ish. But then he starts using a computer to develop a 3D printing program and going to the library on his own. Probably not the actions of someone that young... You don't always have to give your characters specific characteristics, but they often do help. (Stuff like name, age, gender, location, perhaps what they look like, their underlying temperament even - though you can 'show don't tell' that one generally.)
I think it might have been nice if you had made the gift more special by having young Bob surreptitiously research what Grandpa's favourite present had been, and then ask all his friends if they knew how to find one, and then explore the internet and the library before he finds a picture of the fire-engine? And then have him painstakingly paint the model once it had been printed... you know, all that sort of thing. This would have conveyed the fact that Bob really likes his grandfather to go to all that effort (not just to get the present, but to arrange it secretly so when the gift is received, it's an amazing surprise!)

You have quite a few unusual turns-of-phrase that made me wonder if English was a second language for you(?) Stuff like:

Bob engages in conversation with his grandpa, Tom.

“Another year is almost over. Can you believe it, grandpa. Christmas is only 4 weeks away.”

['Bob engages in conversation...' is an oddly elaborate/formal way of telling the reader the two are having a chat. They are family after all. I would suggest something like: Bob put the bowl of chips down on the coffee table near the tv, and sat next to his granddad. 'Well, this year's almost over, and it'll be my last year of school next year. Can you believe how fast the year has gone? And it'll be Christmas before you know it!' This tells us Bob's age, and we didn't need to tell the reader that it was Bob speaking, because the section leading up to the speech was describing Bob's actions, and included his granddad in the context too - so the reader automatically knows it's Bob talking to Grandpa Tom. (They know it from the words too.)

“Yes, it is, Bob. I can hardly believe it.”, replies Grandpa Tom.

“I have to ask you something, Grandpa”, inquires Bob.

[Don't need to keep including their names in the speech. If the two of us were chatting, Joseph, I wouldn't keep saying your name, Joseph. It feels, Joseph, like I'm trying to sell you something! See what I mean?]

There are quite a number of other slightly-odd ways of speaking, both as the speech of the characters, but also, particularly, the voice of the narrator.

You've definitely chosen a nice story to tell here, and the development of what happens in the story is good (other than your hinting so strongly that Bob was getting a replica fire-truck for his Grandpa that it was obvious that was where the story was heading right near the beginning.) I just think you need to do quite a bit more proof-reading before you submit your stories. I'd suggest getting a friend who has good English skills to help you proof-read if you think that might be something you'd find helpful.

Don't be discouraged. Keep writing. That's how you get better at anything - practice, practice, practice. All the best, and I'll keep an eye out for more of your stories in the future :-)

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