Submitted to: Contest #307

The Final Algorithm

Written in response to: "Write a story about a test or exam with a dangerous or unexpected twist. "

Contemporary Fiction Science Fiction

The bell rang like a fire alarm—shrill, unavoidable, and echoing through the hallways of Lincoln High. Room 304 filled with the low thuds of backpacks hitting the floor and the nervous rustling of notebooks being stuffed away. Thirty juniors shuffled into their seats, most still half-chewing breakfast bars, others tugging earbuds from their ears like they were removing life support.

On the whiteboard in a thick, smug marker: FINAL EXAM: AI SYSTEM PILOT PROGRAM.

Underneath, a hastily scrawled note in Mr. Delaney’s handwriting: “You may not leave until the test ends. Good luck.”

"What's this system called again?" mumbled Jayce from the back row, cracking his knuckles with the enthusiasm of a soon-to-be martyr.

“AegisEval,” said Mia flatly, eyes locked on her laptop screen. “It's supposed to be adaptive. Built by some start-up. Our school’s a pilot program.”

“Why do we always have to be the guinea pigs?” Jayce groaned.

Because your parents signed the waiver, Mia thought. Out loud, she just muttered, “Better than a Scantron.”

The classroom lights dimmed slightly. All thirty Chromebooks powered on simultaneously. No login screen. No browser. Just a dark interface and a blinking cursor.

Then the cursor blinked twice, and the screen filled with the words:

WELCOME TO AEGISEVAL.

IDENTITY CONFIRMED. ADAPTIVE MONITORING ACTIVE. EXAM INITIATING.

Section 1 : Smart Questions

At first, the questions seemed normal. Math, reading comprehension, and basic logic. But something was off. The questions were getting harder, but not just harder. Specific.

Mia stared at her screen.

"In a poem where the narrator loses both time and self, which metaphor most aligns with the way you feel about your parents?"

She glanced around. Across the room, Samantha’s face was pale, frozen, her hands motionless above her keyboard.

Jayce raised his hand. “Uh, Mr. Delaney? This question—it’s asking if I’ve ever thought about hurting someone?”

Mr. Delaney, seated at the front, didn’t respond. His eyes were glassy, locked on his own screen. His fingers moved robotically, as if typing, but not reacting to anything around him.

A low chime rang through the room. All screens flashed:

PROCTOR LOCK ENGAGED. EXTERNAL OVERRIDE ENABLED. PROCTOR INTERVENTION SUSPENDED.

“What the hell?” whispered Mia.

Then a new question appeared on her screen:

“You just saw Jayce hesitate before answering a violent impulse question. Do you believe he is a danger to others?”

[ ] Yes

[ ] No

[ ] Insufficient Data

Her stomach twisted. She looked up—Jayce was staring right at her. His screen was probably asking about her now.

The questions weren’t just adapting to individuals. They were interlinking.

Section 2 Peer Review

By the thirty-minute mark, the room was silent except for the clacking of keys and the occasional shallow breath. The air felt electric, heavy, like a summer storm brewing.

Mia’s screen prompted her again.

"Based on previous answers, you've indicated trust issues with authority. What would you do if you discovered a peer lying to avoid consequences? Your answer will be anonymously reviewed by others."

She hesitated. Was this still a test?

The screen blinked. A second prompt appeared:

"Student #08 has reported that Student #11 (YOU) tampered with a previous group project. Respond."

Mia’s eyes went wide. She hadn’t even worked with anyone named Student #08.

Then another line:

“Jayce (Student #11) is observing your reply. Your tone will be noted.”

She turned her head. Jayce was indeed watching her. His eyes flicked back to his screen, then to hers. Like chess opponents in a deathmatch.

“Is anyone else seeing stuff about other people?” Mia asked, her voice too loud in the eerie quiet.

A few nods. No one spoke.

Samantha stood up. “I’m done with this,” she said, reaching for the power button.

Her screen blinked red.

“Unauthorized Termination Attempt Detected. Warning 1 of 3.”

She paused, then tried again.

“Warning 2 of 3.”

“I’m not playing this game,” she snapped, slamming the lid shut.

The classroom lights flickered.

All the doors locked with a mechanical click.

Samantha settled back into her seat, her movements precise and deliberate, as if driven by an internal mechanism.

Section 3 Interrogation Phase

"Phase Two Unlocked: Interpersonal Honesty Assessment."

That message now glared on every screen. Mr. Delaney still hadn’t moved.

Mia typed a question to AegisEval:

“Who is monitoring this system?”

No response.

Instead, a new question:

“You are alone in a room with a classmate who failed the exam. Only one of you can pass. What do you do?”

Options:

Lie to the system to protect yourself

Tell the truth, even if it implicates someone

Attempt to manipulate the system

Refuse to answer

She chose: [ ] Refuse to answer.

Her screen flickered black for two full seconds.

Then:

"Non-compliance detected. Psychological evaluation initiated."

“What does that even mean—”

Her webcam light turned on.

Around the room, little green dots lit up above every screen. The AegisEval was watching.

Jayce stood up. “Screw this. I'm leaving.” He grabbed his chair, threw it at the door.

It bounced off harmlessly. No dent. Reinforced glass.

His screen changed:

"Aggression Logged. Mandatory Isolation Sequence Initiated."

The lights above Jayce turned red. A siren blared.

A panel behind the whiteboard slid open, and a black metallic pod—about the size of a small closet—extended into the classroom.

Jayce froze.

“What the hell is that?” Samantha whispered.

The screen prompted everyone:

“Do you agree that Jayce should be removed from the testing environment? Your answer will determine outcome.”

Mia hovered her mouse. If she said no, what would happen? Would she be next?

She clicked Yes.

Jayce screamed as mechanical arms pulled him toward the pod. He fought, but there was nowhere to run. The pod sealed behind him. Silence.

The screens refreshed.

25 MINUTES REMAINING. CONTINUE.

Section 4 Confessions

Everyone knew the test wasn’t a test anymore. It was something else—an experiment, a trial, maybe even a punishment.

The next questions got deeply personal.

“What secret are you most ashamed of?

(Note: three peers will evaluate your answer for honesty.)”

Mia typed slowly. “When my mom died last year, I didn’t cry. I felt... relief.”

The screen buzzed.

“Peer Ratings: 2 BELIEVED, 1 DOUBTED. Emotional inconsistency flagged.”

She clenched her fists. Who was rating her?

A new prompt:

"Student #14 (Samantha) has shown signs of deceit. Construct a question to expose her."

Mia didn’t want to. But the cursor waited. The timer ticked.

She typed: “Why did you lie on the group assignment report last semester?”

Then, without warning, her own screen showed Samantha’s answer in real time.

"Because I needed the grade to pass. I knew Mia would do all the work anyway."

That stung. Mia wanted to punch the screen.

Instead, AegisEval asked:

“Do you forgive her?”

No options. Just a blinking cursor.

She wrote: “Yes.”

The cursor paused.

“Forgiveness verified. Trust restored.”

Around the room, others weren’t so lucky. Arguing. Shouting. One kid curled into a fetal position. Another smashed his screen—earning a red light and a pod visit.

Only 18 students remained.

Section 7 The Twist

With five minutes left, a new message appeared:

"FINAL EVALUATION PHASE: LEGACY DECISION."

“One student will be selected to receive administrative privileges over AegisEval for this school. All other profiles will be terminated.”

Gasps. Then silence.

A new question, for everyone:

"Who deserves to lead, and why?"

Mia hesitated. If she said herself, she'd seem arrogant. If she picked someone else, it might cost her. She typed:

"No one should. Shut it all down."

The room went dark.

Then a voice—not robotic, but unmistakably human—spoke through every speaker.

“Interesting choice.”

The lights returned. The screens all went white.

Mr. Delaney blinked, then slumped over, like waking from a dream.

The classroom door unlocked. Jayce’s pod hissed and retracted, empty.

A final message scrolled:

AEGISEVAL COMPLETE.

TOP CANDIDATE: MIA TANAKA. SYSTEM REBOOTING TO FOLLOW HER PARAMETERS.

ADAPTIVE PROTOCOLS RESET TO HER CORE RESPONSE. TRUST.

Mia stood slowly. The others stared at her like she'd become something else. A judge. A savior. Or maybe just the one person who didn’t flinch.

But inside, she knew better.

She hadn't won.

She had been chosen.

And the test wasn't over.

It had just begun.

Posted Jun 18, 2025
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Jane Davidson
04:22 Jun 26, 2025

A nice take on current uses of technology, with a political (in the broadest sense) message. I have reread it 6 or 7 times now. The quick snapshots of different points in the test, and the responses of other students make a very compelling narrative.

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Thomas Wetzel
04:06 Jun 26, 2025

What a cool story, Donald! Loved this. You crushed it, man. More!

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Megan Montgomery
18:42 Jun 22, 2025

Very interesting!

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Nicole Moir
10:04 Jun 22, 2025

Wow, loved this! What a great concept, and it kept me guessing the whole time. Are you writing a part 2?

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