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When the Moon Shines
Written in response to: "End your story with a character standing in the rain."
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Hey Dhwani! I loved this story and the observations. A message to all of us to sometimes just stop running and slow down to look at the things which blurred as we ran. The format reminded me a lot of a short story I read recently, 'Who Moved My Cheese'...All in all, wonderful job! No critique! (Sorry, I'm bad at critiquing lol-)
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Thanks a lot Queen!
I am so grateful for this comment.
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What's this for?
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=D
Thank you, Sienna!!!!!
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That's very kind of you!
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Wowza. I really liked this one, DJ. Stars, the moon, nighttime, 2nd person, details, what else could one ask for? It flowed super well, and I love the observations that ‘you’ make :) the pic is supa coolio!!!
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Thanks a lot Flow!
I thought that this was a Flow- typa story...with all the references, as you mentioned!
This is really the best comment I have received for any of my stories. I am trying to improve my writing and this comment of yours is helping me to do so (+ a certain TedEd video too).
Thanks again (for the pic thingie)
Um, RANDOM QUESTION TIME
As I mentioned, this was a 'Flow' type story. Which genres do you think are YOUR cup of tea, mah darlin'?
and which ones are mine, deary Flowy?
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Np, glad I could help :)
I like writing fantasy, inspirational, descriptive, and fiction.
As for you, I’d say you write great descriptive, contemporary, and Disney stuff lol
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=D
Noice...
You're good at this!
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Lol what can I say?
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except....You're Welcome!
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Well done, Dhwani!!
The story was so amazing and I loved it so much!! Especially this part: You think upon this more and more, as you begin to see more and more of the moon, coming out of the shadows like Simba, waiting to be crowned the king again!
I loved it so much when you did a Disney reference <3!!
Loved your Aladdin Fanfic too!! It was pretty awesome!! Hope that Disney would make this a movie <3!! I'll be the first person to watch it if they make this a movie.
Who do you think is the best person for playing Lian and Prince Ali?
Also, waiting for your Spiderman Fanfic. :D
I'm doing a Avengers fanfic too!!
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Thanks, Ash!
Yeah, I mean, there is nothing better than a Disney reference.
<3 !!!
Um, I have no idea....any actors up for the role?
Yeah, I will write it AFTER No Way Home is released...so that it does not 'hamper' the story of my idea.
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It is Robbin Williams only, he dubbed the whole genie part and he modulated his voice very well!
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Okay....will check it out!
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I really like this one! This was such a beautiful piece of writing, the flowing was wonderful and I loved your observations! I loved this, just like I loved reading your Aladdin Fanfic. It was amazing! Hoping that Disney would make it into a movie! 👏🏻👏🏻
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You got any critiques?
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Okay...thanks =D
Also, I know you were not able to see the photo, so here it is:
https://djdhwanijain.files.wordpress.com/2021/09/moon.jpeg?w=768
(try to open it this way)
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SPEED CHALLENGE
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Can we do it here?
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YEah...+1
That's right, but I want the person who voiced him, originally
Yeah, it was. Even I HATED it!
So, +2 for you!
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Yeah....
I can write 1000 words for it's 'badness'...
Also, new story!
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