When the Moon Shines

Written in response to: End your story with a character standing in the rain.... view prompt

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Inspirational

https://wp.me/pd3y1A-dP


September 20, 2021 09:49

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Philia S
06:40 Sep 23, 2021

Hey Dhwani! I loved this story and the observations. A message to all of us to sometimes just stop running and slow down to look at the things which blurred as we ran. The format reminded me a lot of a short story I read recently, 'Who Moved My Cheese'...All in all, wonderful job! No critique! (Sorry, I'm bad at critiquing lol-)

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Dhwani Jain
09:26 Sep 23, 2021

Thanks a lot Queen! I am so grateful for this comment.

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01:54 Sep 21, 2021

And.....3.....2...........1 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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Dhwani Jain
02:43 Sep 21, 2021

What's this for?

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02:49 Sep 21, 2021

YOUR AMAZING STORY

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Dhwani Jain
03:06 Sep 21, 2021

=D Thank you, Sienna!!!!!

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02:49 Sep 21, 2021

And.....3.....2...........1 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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Dhwani Jain
03:06 Sep 21, 2021

That's very kind of you!

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03:34 Sep 27, 2021

WAIT! DHWANI THE ANSWER TO YOUR SECOND QUESTION IS GENIE!!! A.K.A ROBIN WILLIAMS AND THIRTY THOUSAND OTHER PEOPLEEEE

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Dhwani Jain
04:20 Sep 27, 2021

It is Robbin Williams only, he dubbed the whole genie part and he modulated his voice very well!

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04:37 Sep 27, 2021

I know! He was very talented! (Scarlet Thread pt 2 is out as well!!!)

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Dhwani Jain
05:31 Sep 27, 2021

Okay....will check it out!

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Abi Bean
16:40 Sep 20, 2021

this is amazing and heartfelt and i love it

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Dhwani Jain
16:40 Sep 20, 2021

You got any critiques?

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Abi Bean
16:44 Sep 20, 2021

ack im horrible at critique- i have none. this is just so amazing and beautiful like i have no words-

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Dhwani Jain
16:46 Sep 20, 2021

Okay...thanks =D Also, I know you were not able to see the photo, so here it is: https://djdhwanijain.files.wordpress.com/2021/09/moon.jpeg?w=768 (try to open it this way)

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Abi Bean
16:48 Sep 20, 2021

still blocked grr TvT

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Dhwani Jain
16:47 Sep 20, 2021

SPEED CHALLENGE

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Abi Bean
16:48 Sep 20, 2021

OH GOSH OK UM MAKE A GOOGLE DOC AND SEND ME LINK SO WE CAN DO IT ON THERE LOL

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Dhwani Jain
16:49 Sep 20, 2021

Can we do it here?

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Wowza. I really liked this one, DJ. Stars, the moon, nighttime, 2nd person, details, what else could one ask for? It flowed super well, and I love the observations that ‘you’ make :) the pic is supa coolio!!!

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Dhwani Jain
15:55 Sep 20, 2021

Thanks a lot Flow! I thought that this was a Flow- typa story...with all the references, as you mentioned! This is really the best comment I have received for any of my stories. I am trying to improve my writing and this comment of yours is helping me to do so (+ a certain TedEd video too). Thanks again (for the pic thingie) Um, RANDOM QUESTION TIME As I mentioned, this was a 'Flow' type story. Which genres do you think are YOUR cup of tea, mah darlin'? and which ones are mine, deary Flowy?

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Np, glad I could help :) I like writing fantasy, inspirational, descriptive, and fiction. As for you, I’d say you write great descriptive, contemporary, and Disney stuff lol

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Dhwani Jain
17:12 Sep 20, 2021

=D Noice... You're good at this!

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Lol what can I say?

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Dhwani Jain
02:42 Sep 21, 2021

except....You're Welcome!

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Abi Bean
13:07 Sep 20, 2021

🎊 ack I know this one- it's Anthony something, it was a spanish name- Gonzales i think but idk if i spelled it right lol 🎊 I have absolutely no idea lol, i think you're referring to genie but im not 100% sure XDDDD 🎊 I think it was Mulan, but honestly I didn't like the movie it strayed so far from the original TvT and MUSHU WASNT THERE LIKE AKHJCBAUIHCKJABCNI i didnt use google cuz i didnt know if it was allowed, gosh this was hard XDDD

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Dhwani Jain
15:52 Sep 20, 2021

YEah...+1 That's right, but I want the person who voiced him, originally Yeah, it was. Even I HATED it! So, +2 for you!

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Abi Bean
15:56 Sep 20, 2021

NICE YESSSS ajklchnsackjach gosh uhhh- in the original movie, which i believe is the 1992 one, was voiced by Robin Williams, but honestly I prefer Will Smith in the live action LOL see?! it was HORRIBLE it wasn't even Mulan just another chinese war story- yay!!

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Dhwani Jain
15:57 Sep 20, 2021

Yeah.... I can write 1000 words for it's 'badness'... Also, new story!

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Abi Bean
16:00 Sep 20, 2021

XDDDD ooo!

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Ashlynn S
10:47 Sep 20, 2021

Well done, Dhwani!! The story was so amazing and I loved it so much!! Especially this part: You think upon this more and more, as you begin to see more and more of the moon, coming out of the shadows like Simba, waiting to be crowned the king again! I loved it so much when you did a Disney reference <3!! Loved your Aladdin Fanfic too!! It was pretty awesome!! Hope that Disney would make this a movie <3!! I'll be the first person to watch it if they make this a movie. Who do you think is the best person for playing Lian and Prince Ali? Als...

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Dhwani Jain
15:50 Sep 20, 2021

Thanks, Ash! Yeah, I mean, there is nothing better than a Disney reference. <3 !!! Um, I have no idea....any actors up for the role? Yeah, I will write it AFTER No Way Home is released...so that it does not 'hamper' the story of my idea.

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Akshara P
14:42 Sep 21, 2021

I really like this one! This was such a beautiful piece of writing, the flowing was wonderful and I loved your observations! I loved this, just like I loved reading your Aladdin Fanfic. It was amazing! Hoping that Disney would make it into a movie! 👏🏻👏🏻

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