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African American Coming of Age Fiction




Ahmed always dreamed of becoming a doctor. As a child, he spent hours daydreaming about wearing a white coat and helping people. He promised himself that one day he would put himself through school and become the first in his family to truly make something of himself.

For most of his life, Ahmed had been bounced from one family member’s home to another. His mother, caught in the streets, spent much of her time hustling or serving short stints in jail. His father? He was just a name Ahmed had never met. But Ahmed knew from an early age that he didn’t want to follow in their footsteps. He wanted more.

The dream of becoming a doctor came to Ahmed when he was about eight years old. His grandmother had taken him to the community clinic after he fell and cut his knee open on the pavement. While they waited, Ahmed watched the doctors moving briskly between patients, their white coats fluttering like capes. One doctor knelt by a crying boy, his voice gentle but firm. The boy stopped crying, holding his arm out to be bandaged.

Ahmed tugged on his grandmother’s sleeve and whispered, “I want to do that one day.”

Her smile was warm as she said, “Then you will, Ahmed. If you work hard, you can heal people too.”

That moment stayed with him, even as life grew harder.

Now twenty two, Ahmed sat on the edge of his bed, staring at the acceptance letter in his hand. The paper was slightly creased from the number of times he had read it, each word feeling more surreal than the last. Pre-med. He was finally on his way.

But as excitement swelled, reality pressed in harder. The bedroom around him felt suffocating. The twin bed he shared with Malik barely fit in the corner, wedged between a dresser bursting with clothes and a window with blinds that didn’t quite close all the way. The walls, once white, were a chaotic canvas of chipped paint and crayon scribbles, with dirty streaks from years of wear.

He glanced over at Malik and Jamal, who were arguing over the controller to their old game console. Their laughter was loud, their voices filling the small space. Ahmed had spent countless nights here, poring over anatomy books under the faint light of a desk lamp, trying to block out the noise.

He folded the acceptance letter carefully and placed it on the bed. “It’s time,” he said to himself, standing up and pulling out the battered suitcase from under the bed.

The suitcase wasn’t much—faded blue with a broken zipper on one side—but it was all he had to carry the pieces of his life.

He opened the small dresser that held most of his clothes, though there wasn’t much worth taking. A few shirts, a pair of jeans, and his only good sneakers went in first. The rest—faded hoodies and hole-riddled socks—he left behind.

Next, he reached for the shoebox that held his most treasured possessions. Inside was a photo of his grandmother, smiling in her Sunday dress. She was the anchor of his life, the one who believed in him when no one else did. He slid the photo into the suitcase carefully, her soft smile almost whispering encouragement as he packed.

Then came the letter she had written him at fifteen. Before his grandmother passed away, she had written him a letter. She knew that one day he would still need words of encouragement that he would never get from his mother. Ahmed read the first few lines again, feeling her words steady him like they had so many times before.

Finally, he picked up the stethoscope he had saved for after his acceptance into pre-med. Holding it now, he felt a flicker of pride. This wasn’t just an object—it was the life he’d dreamed of, the hope he clung to, and the future he was about to fight for.

Behind him, his cousins sat on the floor, watching him. Twelve-year-old Jamal fiddled with a game controller, while eight-year-old Malik stared with wide, curious eyes.

“Where are you going?” Malik asked, his voice small.

“I’m going to college,” Ahmed said, crouching down to meet his cousin’s gaze.

“For how long?” Malik whispered.

“I don’t know,” Ahmed replied, struggling to find the right words. “A while. But it’s for something good, I promise. I’m going to be a doctor, just like I’ve always talked about.”

“But who’s gonna help me with my math homework?” Malik’s voice cracked, and his lip quivered.

Ahmed’s chest tightened. He ruffled Malik’s hair gently. “You’re smart. You’ll figure it out. Besides, you’ve got Jamal, right?”

Jamal rolled his eyes. “Yeah, sure. Like I don’t have enough to do already.” He hesitated, then said quietly, “You’re really not coming back, huh?”

Ahmed felt a lump rise in his throat. “I’ll visit when I can. But this is something I have to do. For me, for Grandma, for all of us.”

Malik clung to his sleeve for a moment before letting go, his tearful eyes fixed on Ahmed. “You promise you’ll come back?”

“I promise,” Ahmed said, though his voice wavered.

As Ahmed zipped the suitcase shut, his thoughts drifted to his mother. He hadn’t told her he was leaving—not directly. The last time they spoke, she dismissed his plans with a wave of her hand.

“You think being a doctor will fix everything? You’re wasting your time,” she’d said, her voice as sharp as the look in her eyes.

He had tried for years to earn her approval, to prove her wrong, but now he realized he didn’t need it anymore. Her doubts no longer mattered. He wasn’t running away from her words—he was running toward the future his grandmother had always believed in.

He picked up the suitcase and took one last look around the room. The crayon scribbles on the walls, the cluttered floor, the sound of his cousins bickering—it was all so familiar. It was home, but it wasn’t where he belonged anymore.

Ahmed paused at the doorway, suitcase in hand, and glanced back one last time. For a fleeting moment, he hesitated, his mind flooded with memories: his grandmother’s voice urging him to follow his dreams, Malik’s giggles when they played games together, Jamal’s sarcastic quips.

Then he saw his grandmother’s smile in his mind, as clear as the day she’d taken him to the clinic. “You’re going to heal people, Ahmed. I believe in you.”

He stepped into the hallway, each step heavy with the weight of his decision but filled with the promise of what lay ahead. The cool evening air greeted him as he stepped outside, where the streetlights cast long streaks of light across the pavement. For a moment, he stood still, the suitcase heavy at his side, and let the quiet envelop him.

Ahmed glanced up at the night sky. The same stars he used to look at from this doorstep now seemed like a map, pointing him toward the future he’d dreamed of for so long.

With one firm grip on the suitcase handle, he started walking. He wasn’t just leaving behind a home or a family. He was walking toward everything he’d fought for—the dream his grandmother had always believed in, the life he knew he was destined to build.  Every step felt lighter than the last.


January 18, 2025 07:27

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Steve Mowles
18:47 Jan 25, 2025

Great story Aminah. We all need at least one person who believes in us. Ahmed may have left his home but he brought is grandmother with him.

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Aminah G
22:02 Jan 25, 2025

Thank you Steve,

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