Contest #252 shortlist ⭐️

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Fiction Funny

Jack Thompson’s fingers drummed a chaotic symphony against his cluttered desk, surrounded by the remnants of unrelenting perfectionism—crumpled paper mountains, an army of empty coffee cups, and the flickering screen of his laptop displaying the solitary bulwark of his creative struggle: one stubborn sentence. This single line of text, which he revised with the same unyielding dedication some might reserve for disarming a bomb, had been his nemesis and companion for five torturous years. “The sun erupted over the horizon like an overzealous teapot, splattering light in reckless abandon.”

This manifestation of his literary pursuit was a prison of his own meticulous design. Jack, a tall and lean figure with an unruly mop of dark brown hair, was once described as having the ‘laser focus of a cat watching a very philosophical mouse.’ He clocked every tick of the clock with a writer’s mania, each second a mocking reminder of his stagnant craft.

Jack’s friend Sarah, perceptive as always, dialed his number from her brightly lit kitchen, her intuition insisting that Jack was neck-deep in his cyclical ritual of create-delete-repeat. “Jack, it’s Friday night,” she said as soon as he picked up, her voice a blend of warmth and sternness. “And no sentence, no matter how perfectly wrought, should rob you of your twenties. Well, thirties now.”

Jack chuckled dryly, pushing his glasses back up the bridge of his nose—a nervous tic that peaked during these calls. “I’m close, Sarah. I can feel it,” he lied, the glow of his screen illuminating his tired blue eyes and the stark white walls of his small New York City apartment.

“You need a break,” Sarah insisted, her tone brooking no arguments. “A drink, some fresh air, and a reminder that there’s a world beyond the comma.”

Despite his protests, a small part of him—the part not wholly consumed by literary quests—knew she was right. Yet, he remained seated, chained to his chair by invisible shackles of his own obsessive quest for perfection.

As the night crept deeper, and the city’s cacophony dwindled to the occasional car horn or distant siren, Jack’s exhaustion waged war against his compulsion. In a moment born from equal parts desperation and weariness, he drafted an email to his publisher, Lila Harper. The subject line read, “Submission: One Sentence.” It was ludicrous, preposterous even, but the cursor blinked mockingly, and with a sigh heavier than the sum of all his discarded drafts, Jack clicked ‘send.’

His apartment, usually steeped in the tangible silence of solitary toil, hummed softly with the vibration of his sent email—a missive containing nothing more than a single, painstakingly crafted sentence and a shard of Jack’s soul. Drained, he rested his head against the cool surface of his desk, allowing the quiet darkness to envelop him, a welcomed respite from the bright tyranny of his screen.

Lila Harper, Jack’s publisher, had developed an almost mythical ability to spot potential in places others overlooked. When the one-sentence manuscript titled “One Sentence” landed in her inbox, it was with a blend of skepticism and curiosity that she opened the document. On her screen flashed Jack’s single line, standing solitary but bold. Lila leaned back in her high-backed leather chair, her office walls adorned with the first pages of bestselling novels, and allowed herself to contemplate the audacity of publishing a book that contained just one sentence.

Meanwhile, Jack woke to the harsh light of morning filtering through his blinds, casting lines across his face like a zebra’s stripes. The memory of what he’d done—the email sent in a fit of exhaustion—washed over him in a cold wave. He scrambled to his feet, his heart drumming a frenzied beat as he checked his email, half-hoping, half-dreading a response from Lila.

“Jack, let’s talk. - L,” the reply read, ominously short. Jack’s pulse quickened as he dialed Lila’s number, his finger hovering momentarily as he braced for the worst.

“Jack, this is quite the… minimalist approach,” Lila began, her voice a concoction of amusement and intrigue. “But it’s bold, and there’s something magnetic about this sentence. I want to run with it. Let’s publish it.”

The world seemed to tilt slightly under Jack’s feet. “Publish… one sentence? Just like that?”

“Yes, Jack,” Lila’s voice was firm, her decision made. “This could be revolutionary or it could flop spectacularly. But it’s a risk I’m willing to take.”

As the days spiraled into weeks, Jack found himself thrust into a reality he could have never anticipated. “One Sentence” was released digitally on LitLink, stirring a storm in literary circles and beyond. The sentence was projected onto billboards, shared across social platforms, and dissected in book clubs. It was less about the words themselves and more about the spaces between them, the echo of unsaid thoughts and unexplored narratives.

Critics hailed him as a pioneer of a new literary minimalism. “A brave exploration of literary constraint and the evocative power of simplicity,” one review read. Debates raged about the implications of minimalism in an age of information saturation. His one sentence had become a canvas, on which readers painted their diverse interpretations, finding meanings he had never envisioned.

Yet with his newfound fame came an unexpected burden. As Jack attended panels and interviews, he couldn’t shake the feeling of being a fraud. His imposter syndrome gnawed at him; his success felt unearned, an accolade for what he viewed as his greatest failure in verbosity.

Then, came the apex of his surreal journey: a live interview on a major talk show. The host, Carla Rivera, was known for her sharp wit and sharper interviews. As Jack sat across from her, under the glaring studio lights, he felt like an ant under a magnifying glass.

Carla’s voice snapped Jack back to reality. “So, Jack, your sentence—let’s see it up on the big screen,” she announced, and there it was, enlarged for all to scrutinize. “Tell us, was this an artistic choice or a writer’s block that paid off unusually well?”

Jack opened his mouth to respond, just as Carla pointed out something he had overlooked. “There’s a typo here, Jack. Did you see this before?”

Gasps filled the studio. Jack’s face turned a shade reminiscent of the red exit sign looming mockingly in his peripheral vision. His career, he was certain, was over.

In that moment of absolute mortification, Jack’s thoughts ran wild, each more catastrophic than the last. However, as he braced himself for a deluge of ridicule and scorn, something unexpected unfolded. Instead of derision, the audience erupted in murmurs of intrigue and curiosity. Tweets flashed across the screen, live reactions that speculated, not condemned, the presence of the typo.

“Perhaps it’s a deliberate flaw,” one viewer suggested, “a reflection on human imperfection in an increasingly digital, perfection-seeking world.”

“Or it symbolizes the raw, unfinished nature of life,” another chimed in, their words cascading through social media like a literary waterfall.

Carla, ever the provocateur, turned these speculations into a discussion. “So, Jack, is this typo an intentional stroke of genius or a happy accident?” Her eyes twinkled with a mix of challenge and amusement.

Jack swallowed, his mind racing. Transparency, he decided, was his only refuge. “To be completely honest,” he began, his voice steadier than he felt, “it wasn’t intentional. But that’s the beauty of art, isn’t it? It evolves with interpretation. Maybe it’s not just about the sentence I wrote but how it’s read and perceived.”

The response was unexpectedly positive. What could have been his downfall became, strangely, a testament to the organic, unpredictable nature of creative expression. The typo discussion only deepened the intrigue around “One Sentence,” propelling Jack’s minimalist experiment to legendary status.

In the weeks that followed, Jack returned to his previously solitary existence, though it was solitary no more. His inbox was flooded with invitations for guest lectures, book signings, and even proposals for adaptations of his sentence into various media. LitLink, the platform that first hosted his work, now featured a dedicated section where readers continued to debate, elaborate, and remix his sentence, each interpretation branching out into its own narrative vein.

As Jack observed this phenomenon, he found himself visiting LitLink not as a creator but as a spectator, watching as his single sentence took on a life far beyond his original, isolated intent. It was no longer just his; it had become a part of a larger, communal tapestry of creativity.

This realization sparked something within Jack—a shift from his introverted inclinations to a somewhat more open perspective on life and art. He began to understand that perhaps the value of one’s work lay not only in its original creation but in the ripples it created in the wider world.

One crisp autumn morning, Jack sat back at his cluttered desk, now somewhat less chaotic, reflecting on the wild journey his single sentence had spurred. Emboldened by this saga of unexpected outcomes, he started typing a new project. This time, he felt free from the shackles of perfectionism that had once bound him.

He typed, deleted, and retyped—not in search of the perfect sentence, but accepting each iteration as a step in his creative process; a process he now respected as inherently imperfect. Sarah popped in occasionally, her visits forming a rhythm to his newfound approach to work and life. They laughed more on these visits, the air around them lighter than it had been for years.

In a world keen on crisp endings and neat narratives, Jack’s story stood out as a reminder of life’s inherent messiness and the beauty found therein. His journey of obsessive precision had led him not to a flawless masterpiece, but to a living, breathing dialog between his intentions and the world’s interpretations.

As the sun set, painting his wall with hues of orange and pink, Jack leaned back, a content smile playing on his lips. His gaze settled on a fresh page, a new beginning marked not by the quest for perfection, but by an embrace of potential and possibility.

“The adventure,” Jack murmured as he started a new sentence, “begins anew.”

May 26, 2024 14:11

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Trudy Jas
11:47 May 28, 2024

The madness of claiming to know another's thoughts. Great stuff.

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Jim LaFleur
11:52 May 28, 2024

Thanks, Trudy!

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Mary Bendickson
01:32 May 28, 2024

Okay. What was the word count? The character arc? The plot? The protagonist? The antagonist?The main conflict? The denouement? The... Congrats on 🥳 the shortlist! Thanks for liking my 'Follow Me'. Thanks for liking my 'Not Another One'.

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Jim LaFleur
11:30 Jun 03, 2024

I enjoy your work!

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Mary Bendickson
12:50 Jun 03, 2024

Thank you. Yours is exceptional. I enjoy it immensely.

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Alexis Araneta
17:21 May 27, 2024

Writing about writing !! And smoothly, with lovely descriptions too ! Wonderful work !

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Jim LaFleur
18:12 May 27, 2024

Thanks, Alexis!

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Martin Ross
16:42 May 27, 2024

I love it! Great social and cultural satire, but with a satisfying personal dimension. “Jack, a tall and lean figure with an unruly mop of dark brown hair, was once described as having the ‘laser focus of a cat watching a very philosophical mouse.’ He clocked every tick of the clock with a writer’s mania, each second a mocking reminder of his stagnant craft.” Damn, son — that is such a perfect character capsule and captured the tension of writer’s block. I recently saw the great Jeffrey Wright movie American Fiction and revisited Stephen K...

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Jim LaFleur
16:53 May 27, 2024

Martin, thanks for the kind words!

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VJ Hamilton
21:10 May 26, 2024

Oooh, I love the "meta" here! Writers discussing a story about writers discussing writing! Thanks for the mind-twisting read!

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Jim LaFleur
21:11 May 26, 2024

Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks, VJ!

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Hannah Lynn
17:49 May 26, 2024

How we agonize over our writing! This definitely struck home. Great read.

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Jim LaFleur
19:38 May 26, 2024

Thanks, Hannah!

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Darvico Ulmeli
14:39 May 26, 2024

All you need as a writer is one right sentence. Nice work.

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Jim LaFleur
14:51 May 26, 2024

Thanks, Darvico!

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10:13 Jun 08, 2024

It seemed preposterous that he became famous over a flawed sentence. All the way through reading I was looking for this perfectly flawed, enigmatic sentence. But the point he learned from the publicity generated by the publishing of this one sentence had taught him that the creative process is like an adventure that you have to run with. Not bog yourself down worrying over perfection. The minimalist approach. What a laugh. Sometimes, if you offer people something 'spectacular', they'll believe you even if it isn't that good. Congratulation...

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Jim LaFleur
12:51 Jun 08, 2024

Your insight is spot-on! The beauty of creativity lies in its imperfections and the journeys it takes us on.

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