Submitted to: Contest #293

Bebe's Lost His Way

Written in response to: "Set your entire story in a car, train, or plane."

African American Fiction Romance

Chapter 1: Lost in Thought

Bebe's car hummed softly as he navigated the bustling streets of Richmond, VA. The sun hung high, casting a warm glow on the asphalt, which shimmered like a mirage. He glanced at the GPS on his phone, its screen glowing with a map that seemed to mock him. “Turn right in 300 feet,” it chirped, but Bebe was already thinking about the way Tamara laughed when he made her pancakes. He smiled, picturing her bright eyes and how they sparkled when she teased him about his cooking skills.

“Uh, right. Right!” he muttered, almost to himself, gripping the wheel tighter. He took a left instead. The GPS recalibrated, its voice now tinged with impatience. “Recalculating route.”

“Yeah, I can see that,” Bebe said, rolling his eyes. He loved Tamara, but her directions were nowhere near as clear as the way she melted when he kissed her.

He cruised through a neighborhood that looked vaguely familiar but somehow foreign, the houses leaning together like old friends sharing secrets. He squinted at the street names. “Is that… Lotus? Or was it Grove?” He tapped his fingers on the steering wheel, caught between his thoughts and the task at hand.

A loud honk jolted him back to reality, and he jerked the wheel. “Whoa!” He swerved, narrowly missing a parked car, the tires screeching in protest. “My bad!”

“Bebe!” he chided himself. “Focus, man! Focus!”

He glanced at the GPS again, and it blinked with a new route. “In 500 feet, turn left.”

“Right, left, got it. I’m on it!” he called out, as if the phone could hear him. He was in a race against time to reach Tamara's house, where a special dinner awaited. It wasn’t just any dinner; tonight was the night he would finally ask her to be his girlfriend.

But first, he had to find his way.

Bebe turned left again, but as he drove, the houses began to look more and more like a complex puzzle he was destined to solve. Each street sign seemed to laugh at him, taunting him with unfamiliarity.

“Why is it so hard to find this girl’s house?” he groaned, running a hand through his hair. The thought of Tamara's smile kept him going, even if he was losing his way. He imagined her saying, “You got lost again? Classic Bebe!”

“Exactly!” he agreed aloud, glancing at the empty passenger seat. “I’m classic! Like a good vinyl record on a cold winter's day.”

Suddenly, his phone buzzed—Tamara’s name lit up the screen.

“Hey, Baebae! Where are you?” Her voice was bright, yet he could hear the hint of concern lurking beneath.

“I’m, uh… just around the corner!” he lied, whooshing past another street that didn’t look at all like hers.

“Are you lost?” she laughed, and he could picture her shaking her head.

“No, no! I’m just… taking the scenic route!” He chuckled nervously, his heart racing.

“Scenic route? You mean the one that leads to to you stuck in yety another neighborhood you don't have any business being in?”

“Exactly! You know me too well!” He could almost hear her rolling her eyes. “But I’ll be there in two shakes! Just hold tight!”

“Okay, just… hurry up! I’m starving!”

“Starving?! I’ll be right there!” He hung up, determination flooding through him. He had to make this work.

Bebe turned down another street, and his heart sank as he realized he’d entered a maze of identical houses. Each one looked like a clone of the last, as if someone had played a prank on the neighborhood.

“Where’s the creativity, people?” he muttered, glancing towards an elderly woman watering her garden. She peered at him over her glasses, eyebrows raised.

“Lost, dear?” she asked, her voice dripping with sweet sarcasm.

“No ma’am! Just… on an adventure!”

“An adventure, eh? Well, good luck with that.” She chuckled, shaking her head as he drove away.

Bebe sighed, gripping his phone again. “Okay, GPS. Let’s try this again.”

As he fiddled with the screen, he muttered, “Maybe I should’ve just asked for directions like a normal person.”

“Turn right in 200 feet,” the GPS said, its tone now almost condescending.

“Right! I can do right!” He turned, hopeful. The street opened up, and the trees swayed gently, whispering encouragement.

Then, in the distance, he saw a familiar sight: the coffee shop where he and Tamara had shared their first date. “Yes! I’m close!”

He could almost taste the sweet aroma of her laughter mixed with the rich scent of freshly brewed coffee. But as he turned onto the next street, his excitement crashed.

“Uh oh. This doesn’t look right…”

The cars were parked in strange angles, and Bebe could swear he saw a cat eyeing him suspiciously from a fence. “Man, you’re not helping,” he said, shaking his head. “I need to get to my girl, though.”

He glanced at the clock—time was slipping away. He had to decide.

“Okay, Bebe. You can do this. It’s a simple ‘left or right’ situation.” He gripped the wheel tighter, tapping his fingers nervously, as his legs were shaking underneath him.

“You know what? I’ll just trust my instincts.”

As he turned left once more, the road opened up into a park. Children laughed, their carefree joy ringing through the air. Bebe slowed down, absorbing the moment.

“Hey, Mister!” a girl shouted from her bike, her voice bright and cheerful. “Are you lost?”

Bebe chuckled, the weight of his situation lifting slightly. “You could say that! Which way to the cool kids’ house?”

“Just follow the path to the end and take a right!” she shouted, pedaling off with a grin.

“Thanks, kid!”

With renewed energy, he followed her directions, the trees lining the path like old friends guiding him home. The laughter of children faded as he neared the end of the park, and he could almost feel Tamara’s presence.

“Here goes nothing,” he whispered to himself. He turned right, anticipation bubbling within him.

But as he drove, the street began to twist and turn, veering into a neighborhood that looked suspiciously like the one he’d just left.

“Are you kidding me?!” He groaned, slumping in his seat. “I’m trapped in a loop of lostness.”

Bebe squinted at the GPS again, frustration bubbling over. “You better not be leading me to some kind of GPS Bermuda Triangle.”

“Turn left in 100 feet,” it said, as if mocking him.

He took a deep breath, determined to make this work. “Okay, left it is.”

As he made the turn, a wave of hope washed over him. He was close—he could feel it. The streets began to take shape, and he recognized the familiar landmarks.

“Yes! This is it!”

His heart raced with excitement. He could almost see Tamara’s face lighting up when he finally arrived.

But first, he had to make it through the labyrinth of Richmond, one more left turn at a time.

Chapter 2: The Final Turn

Bebe’s heart thumped like a bass drum as he followed the winding streets. The GPS chirped directions he barely registered, his mind racing with thoughts of Tamara. He could already imagine her face lighting up when he finally walked through the door.

“Okay, Bebe, this is it!” he encouraged himself, his voice echoing in the emptiness of the car. “No more wrong turns. Just a straight shot to love.”

The trees lined the street like an audience, and as he drove, he imagined them silently rooting for him. “You got this!” he said, throwing a thumbs-up to an unsuspecting squirrel on the side of the road.

But the GPS had other ideas. “In 300 feet, turn left.”

“Left!” he repeated, his voice rising with enthusiasm. But as he turned, he spotted a sign that read “Dead End.” Panic washed over him like cold water.

“Seriously?!” he groaned, running a hand through his hair. “This isn’t happening!” He gripped the wheel, trying to breathe through his frustration.

His phone buzzed again. “Bebe! Where are you?” Tamara’s voice crackled through, laced with concern.

“Hey! Just… exploring the area!” he replied, his tone overly cheerful. “You know me, always finding new adventures.”

“Adventures, huh? You’re not lost again, are you?”

“Who, me? Never!” He laughed nervously, the sound echoing in the car. “I’m just… on a little detour.”

“Uh-huh. Well, I’m starving, so please don’t take too long. I might just eat the dinner you made for me!”

“Not if I get there first!” He hung up, determination surging through him.

Bebe sighed and turned the car around, the tires crunching on gravel as he retraced his path back to the main road. “Okay, think, Bebe. Where would Tamara be if she were waiting for you? Probably at home, probably wondering why you’re late.”

He drove with purpose, his eyes scanning the street signs more carefully this time. “That’s it! Just keep it simple.”

Glancing at the GPS, he noticed a new route had appeared. “In 500 feet,” it announced, “turn right.”

“Right! Got it!” He turned, hope swelling in his chest.

Bebe took a deep breath, focusing on the rhythm of the engine. “I can do this,” he whispered, feeling a rush of adrenaline. “Just one more turn, and I’ll be at her door, ready to sweep her off her feet!”

He approached a stop sign, and as he waited, he caught sight of a couple walking their dog. The man glanced at him and raised an eyebrow, as if questioning Bebe’s sanity.

“Yeah, yeah, I’m fine!” Bebe called out, waving dismissively. “Just a little lost in the adventure of love!”

The couple exchanged amused glances, and Bebe felt a wave of embarrassment wash over him. “Ugh, not my best moment,” he muttered as he rolled through the intersection, ignoring the chuckles behind him.

The road opened up, and he spotted a familiar landmark: the coffee shop where he and Tamara had shared countless lattes and laughter. “Yes! Almost there!”

He turned onto a street lined with trees, their leaves rustling like whispers of encouragement. “This is it!” he exclaimed, excitement bubbling over. “Tamara, here I come!”

But just as he was about to revel in his triumph, the dreaded “Detour Ahead” sign loomed in front of him. “No, no, no!” he shouted, slamming his hands on the wheel. “Not now!”

A car honked, and Bebe glanced in the rearview mirror, realizing he was blocking traffic. “Oops! My bad!” He shifted into gear and cautiously maneuvered around the sign, praying he wouldn’t end up in another maze of wrong turns.

“Okay, just a little longer,” he whispered to himself, gripping the wheel tighter.

As he continued down the road, the familiar houses began to appear. “This is it! This is definitely it!” he cheered, his spirits lifting.

Finally, he spotted Tamara’s house, a charming little place with vibrant flowers lining the porch. Relief washed over him like a wave. “Yes! I made it!”

He parked his car and jumped out, almost tripping over his own feet in his haste. “I’m coming, Tamara!” he shouted, barely containing his excitement as he raced toward the door.

He reached the porch, breathless and exhilarated. “Alright, Bebe. You’ve got this.” He knocked on the door, the sound echoing in the quiet evening.

Moments later, the door swung open, and there stood Tamara, her hair cascading over her shoulders, eyes sparkling with surprise.

“Bebe! You actually made it!”

He grinned sheepishly. “Just barely! I took the scenic route… multiple times.”

She laughed, a sound that warmed him from the inside out. “I was starting to think you’d gotten lost in another dimension!”

“Maybe I did,” he replied dramatically, placing a hand on his heart. “But I fought my way back through the labyrinth of Richmond.”

“Sounds heroic,” she teased, stepping aside to let him in. “You must be starving after all that adventure.”

“Starving? You have no idea!” he said, following her into the cozy kitchen filled with the mouthwatering aroma of her cooking. “What’s for dinner?”

“Your favorite! Pasta with homemade sauce.” She gestured to the table, elegantly set with candles flickering in the soft light.

“Wow, you really went all out!” he exclaimed, taking in the scene. “I hope you left some room for my grand proposal.”

Tamara raised an eyebrow, leaning against the counter with a playful smile. “Proposal? What kind of proposal are we talking about here?”

Bebe’s heart raced, and he swallowed hard, pulling the small velvet box from his pocket. He’d practiced this moment countless times, but now, with her bright eyes on him, he felt a rush of uncertainty.

“Tamara, I know this might seem sudden,” he began, his voice shaky, “but I’ve been thinking about us and how much you mean to me.”

“Oh Bebe…” she started, her expression softening.

“I want you to be my girlfriend. Officially.” He opened the box, revealing a simple silver ring, glistening like a star. “What do you say?”

She gasped, her hand flying to her mouth. “You really mean it?”

“Absolutely! I know I’m a bit of a mess sometimes, but I’d be a mess with you any day.”

Tamara stepped closer, her eyes shimmering with emotion. “Of course, I will! Yes!”

Bebe slipped the ring onto her finger, a perfect fit. “Wow, I can’t believe this actually worked!”

“Neither can I,” she laughed, her voice bubbling with joy. “But it’s you, Bebe. You always manage to surprise me.”

“Even when I’m lost?” he teased, wrapping his arms around her.

“Especially when you’re lost,” she replied, her laughter ringing like music.

And as they stood there, enveloped in warmth, Bebe realized he’d found his way after all—not just through the streets of Richmond, but to the very heart of what he’d been searching for all along.

“Now,” he said, pulling back slightly, “how about that pasta?”

“Only if you promise to tell me about your adventures along the way.”

With a grin, Bebe nodded, feeling a sense of purpose surge within him. “Deal! But first, let’s eat!”

And just like that, amidst laughter and love, the night blossomed, a perfect beginning to their new adventure together.

Posted Mar 08, 2025
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9 likes 3 comments

Rese Coleman
16:30 Mar 20, 2025

Lovely piece, Shawanna! I especially loved Bebe’s personality and relatable sense of direction. His voice is distinct and charming. I did notice the pacing slowed a bit in the middle. Perhaps trimming some of the repetition could help keep it moving smoothly? A bit of tightening in the editing might have made the piece even stronger. Overall, a really great read!! Thank you for story!

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Rabab Zaidi
02:12 Mar 16, 2025

Interesting.

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Shawanna Hall
18:26 Mar 16, 2025

Thank you

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