Sasha rushed through the airport, swerving and weaving through the crowds of people waiting for their flights. She kept looking at the gate numbers over hoards of people, standing on tip toes. Ugh, this would probably be easier if I wasn't so friggen’ short! She huffed to herself. This last-minute decision to fly home for her aunt's funeral was becoming much more stressful than need be. She was already feeling overwhelmed about the next several hours, let alone the next few days home. The thought of missing her flight was almost as nerve-wracking as thinking about the flight itself.
Although it had been years since she visited her hometown, she had always kept in contact with her dear Aunt Em. She was one family member that she felt closest to. Aunt Em’s passing was sudden and Sasha hadn’t been planning a trip across the country for at least another few years. However, when Sasha received that terrible middle-of-the-night call from her mother, she immediately booked the next flight home. Unfortunately, this meant she had to take the quickest and last seat available; an economy seat that only included a carry-on bag, on a flight that left in 4-ish hours. Sasha only had about 2 hours of sleep before booking. Hazel eyes bloodshot and puffy, she pulled out her backpack . Weary and shaken from the loss she packed up what she could fit, taking only the essentials (she wasn’t even sure if she packed enough underwear for the week).
As Sasha rushed to her gate she tried to make a mental list of what she may have forgotten, but realized it was beyond too late now. If she didn’t have time to shower before leaving, she certainly didn’t have time to worry about what she forgot. She did her breathing exercises, tied back her uncombed, auburn hair, and wiped away the tears that were starting to roll down her cheeks. Making it just in time to hear her name being called over the intercom, she scanned her ticket at the gate and walked down the corridor that connected the airport to the airplane.
A nervous flyer, Sasha wasn’t looking forward to the flight. Hoping to have a seat next to someone who would leave her be to enjoy her podcast in peace and possibly nap. She walked towards the back of the plane looking for her row, starting to wonder if she was going to be sitting in cargo as her seat seemed a mile from the door. Finally, she found her place. Exhausted, she squeezed past her seatmates. Luckily, she managed a window seat, giving her a little bit of extra room and something to lay her head upon if she managed to doze. She sat down, pulled out her earbuds, and buckled up.
Lost in a dream of waves rolling up the cliffs. Innocently picking up urchins and looking for little crabs in tidal pools with her cousins as a child, Sasha bolted awake to a sharp pain on her forehead. Over the PA she heard “Attention passengers we are experiencing some slight turbulence. Please stay seated and buckled up until the seatbelt light is turned off”.
Sasha touched her head, feeling a bump. Slight turbulence, my ass. She thought to herself. I haven't been home in over a decade and their first impression will be I've turned into some kind of scrapper. Stuffing her sweater between her head and the wall, she hoped her makeshift pillow would ease the throbbing. Closing her eyes drained of energy, she fell back to sleep straight away.
“Ma’am, excuse me…” a stranger tapped on Sasha’s arm.
Exasperated, “What do you need?” Sasha snapped, then turned to look at him, “Sorry, I haven’t had much sleep in the last day. What can I help you with?”
“The snack cart is coming our way and I just thought I’d let you know.” the young man replied. “I didn’t mean to startle you.”
“Oh, thanks. I’m good. I’ve got a long few days ahead, just tryin’ to grab a spell before I get back home.” Sasha put her earbuds back in and curled back towards the window.
“Ok, no problem. Sorry.” the young man continued, “Where are you headed? You have a bit of an accent.”
Seemingly oblivious to Sasha’s obvious body language of wanting to be left alone. She closed her eyes and didn’t respond. Just don’t engage and he’ll get the hint.
The guy turned towards her a little more and continued, “I’m heading to the Corner Brook area. I’ve never been there, but I hear it’s a beautiful little city. I’m hoping I’ll have time to get up to the northern part of Newfoundland. I've never seen an iceberg and that L'anse aux Meadows place looks really cool. I loved that show about Vikings!”
Sasha realized he wasn’t getting the hint. Might as well make the best of it, she thought while taking out her earbuds. Turning towards him, “I’m Sasha”. Noticing his freckles reminded her of her little brother. Her shoulders dropped, perhaps this small sense of familiarity gave her some calm from the turbulence they'd just encountered. Could be a good way to pass the time havin' a chat, I ‘spose. He seems friendly enough, could be worse. “I'm originally from Newfoundland, my accent isn't as thick as it was 20 years ago. You'd have never understood me then!” She laughed. “What’s your name?”
Extending his hand, “I’m Liam, nice to meet you. I’m sorry for bothering you, I’m just nervous about this trip. When I’m nervous I can’t shut up.” Liam chuckled.
“No worries, me love” Sasha shook his hand. “I’m a nervous flyer myself, and this trip wasn’t planned so I'm feeling a bit off. I haven’t been home in almost 15 years, but if it’s anything like I remember, it is a beautiful area. If you do get up the Northern Peninsula to L’anse aux Meadows you won’t regret it. It was always a favorite trip of mine as a child. Just bring a warm jacket, the wind up there smacks ya like a paddle.” she continued, “As long as you don’t mind a long drive on roads with pot-holes the size of a moose” she chuckled. “I’m heading to a small community near Corner Brook, myself.” She sniffled, her eyes started to fill, the thought of saying farewell to a loved one flashed through her mind. “What made you decide to visit Newfoundland? If you don’t mind my bein’ nosey, it’s not on everyone’s tourist list.”
“It’s kind of a funny story”, Liam started, twiddling his thumbs, “I’m adopted and it was a secret to me, I only found out when my grandmother’s Alzheimers got bad. I was visiting her one afternoon and she started telling me how beautiful I was as a baby. How everyone was so excited to meet me at the airport. I figured she was just confused, because who meets a baby at the airport?!” He said with an anxious laugh. “When I went to see her a couple weeks later, she mentioned it again. So I asked her what she meant. She added that the flight for my parents to get me was quite long and she stayed with them for a couple of weeks to help. After that visit I went over to my parents house and told them about Grandma's story. They first tried to play it off, but I didn’t let up. Long story short, my parents admitted that I had been adopted from a distant family member in Newfoundland. My birth mother was just a teen and being in a small area, she didn’t feel like she could offer me the life I deserved.”
Sasha had leaned in closer. She loved a good tale and this one was quite intriguing, although not the first time she’d heard a similar story. Now curious and wanting more information, she stared straight into his hazel eyes. “That’s so wild! How come it took so long for it to come out? And, why are you heading to Newfoundland now?”
Liam shrugged, “I guess my birth mother was a bit embarrassed, maybe. I was told that she went to St. John’s when she found out about the pregnancy and stayed there until I was born. My parents had been trying to have a baby for several years with no luck. When they heard from a relative about Nina, my birth mother, they reached out to her. My parents had lived in Alberta for decades, didn’t know the family from Newfoundland well, and figured it’d be easier to just not tell me. After finding out all this I decided to look into my family tree. Turns out I’m my adopted mother's distant cousin. My grandparents moved out west for work 60 something years ago and never returned to Newfoundland. Since it wasn’t home to my mother and my father is from Alberta, we never came out this way.” Liam shifted in his seat, fiddling with his seatbelt, “I’m going there now for a funeral.”
“Oh, I’m so sorry.” Sasha grabbed his hand, “If it makes you feel any better, I’m heading home for a funeral, too.”
“Thanks, sorry to you too.” he half smiled. “It’s not the way I figured I’d meet this side of my family, but at least I’ll be able to meet everyone at once. I’ve been in contact with some relatives and my bio mom. They’ve been so great at helping me put the pieces together. When my newfound cousin mentioned his Aunt’s passing, he suggested now’s as good a time as ever to come meet them.”
“Where did you say you were headed?” Sasha’s mind was spinning.
“You might know the place if you’re from Corner Brook area, I’ll be heading to Lark Harbour”
“Um, I’m gonna go out on a small limb here, but, is this Aunt Em?”
Liam jolted in his seat. “How did you know?”
“I said small limb for a reason. There are like, 500 people in Lark Harbor. That’s where I’m going. Aunt Em is my mother’s sister.” Sasha laughed. “It might be easier to meet ‘em all with a friend beside ya. The family can be a bit much. Want to share a ride home when we land?” she grinned.
Over the PA system “Attention passengers, we will be starting our descent shortly. Please put your tray tables away and stay seated with your seatbelts on.”
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The coincident prompt this week would fit this scenario.
Thanks for the follow. have fun with the writing.
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It absolutely would! Thanks for the idea!
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This is cute! My only two cents, if you want it, is that I’m a little confused as to how Liam is related. At first I thought he was Sasha’s brother, but I would have thought there would have been a more surprised reaction from her if this were the case. Overall though, I enjoyed your story. I liked your take on the prompt.
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Thank you for the feedback! Yes, I want all two cents :) I want to improve my writing, and love constructive criticism, ideas, thoughts, etc.
This is the first story I've managed to submit on here (I normally write poetry, but am wanting to expand my skills).
After entering it, re reading it, there are a few things I would do differently.
And the family tree explanation would be one. I wish I had filled in more of those details. It would make it much easier for the reader to fit pieces together.
I'm hoping for a prompt to come up at some point where I can elaborate on the Sasha and Liam story.
Thanks again for taking the time to read my story and give me your insight.
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You’re welcome and welcome to Reedsy! I’m happy you like feedback. I re-read my stories too and I always wish I had written parts differently lol. Yes, that would be great if you can elaborate in a different prompt. 😊
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really felt Sasha’s whirlwind of emotions in this, and the way you wove her story with Liam’s was such a genuine surprise. It’s a beautiful take on connection in tough times.
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Thanks so much for reading, and the feedback. I appreciate it so much!
I'm glad I was able to connect them in a meaningful way :)
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This was incredible! Loved how all the pieces came together. I also wrote a story of an adoption and plane ride for this prompt. Kinda funny!
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment I appreciate it :)
I'll have to read yours now!
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I loved the heartwarming ending of this story & how it captures the feeling of unexpected connection. You really draw us in to Sasha’s situation and endear us to her. I love the feeling of hyper-locality with the specifics of places in Newfoundland.
As a certified non-engager of strangers in public, I felt like the switch from “I have my headphones in, don’t talk to me” to friendly conversationist was a bit too far of a swing for me. If it were me and a dude was not picking up on these hints, I would be pretty frustrated, so this introduction took me out of the story for a sec. Especially considering that Sasha is exhausted, stressed, grieving and wants to be left alone—I think there needs to bit more of a beat before she jumps in.
It’s probably just a matter of order; the noticing of his freckles and the touch of familiarity should happen first, before her “Might as well” pronouncement and decision to engage. Something about him should strike her, and melt away the tension you have been mounting until that point—because you did a great job of building up the scenario and our understanding of her mental state… to have all that kind of suddenly become a non-issue didn’t provide the meaningful outlet I was expecting.
I hope you keep writing! This story was engaging and full of heart.
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Thank you so much for the insight. I'm actually from Newfoundland myself originally, and when you get on a plane full of Newfoundlanders, you're going to be talked to. Lol
But I can absolutely understand what you're saying. I agree, I could have built more into the breaking down the walls sort of speak prior to her giving him time. I did have the word count available.
As my first story on here, I wasn't sure what would be too much vs not enough. I was afraid to fall in to too much telling vs showing. It's something I'm trying to learn. I actually cut back on some areas that actually could've worked in this instance.
Thanks so much for this. I really appreciate your time and feedback :)
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Makes sense! That’s really neat—all I know about Newfoundland is from Come From Away, so very limited! I do see a bit more of the culture sprinkled into the conversation now that I’m looking for it—I would’ve loved a more local color, maybe even with Sasha’s inner thoughts, to make that element stronger. My favorite thing about reading is being transported to places I know little about, and since you are a first hand expert, I’d value your writing on it highly!!
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Thank you for mentioning that. I sometimes steer away from the accent, Newfie dialogue unless writing for specifically Newfoundland people as I'm not sure I can get it across well enough.
Maybe another prompt will come up to give me chance to tell another tale from there.
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Rushing through the airport to catch a last-minute flight home for a funeral-- this totally resonated with me.
An interesting turn, when Liam shares his adoption story and his connection to Newfoundland.
I love how you neatly tied this together.
There is huge potential for a novel here, as write about unresolved issues or secrets within Liam's adoptive or biological families.
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I love the ending to this story. I did not see it coming. You built the story steadily toward the outcome without rushing or moving too slowly. Well done!
I could picture myself in the plane, almost like I was sitting between Sasha and Liam. My head was moving back and forth in the middle seat listening to their conversation.
There were a few times when you broke the "show don't tell" rule. (BTW, I did the same thing in my own story, so you're in good company!). For example:
"Seemingly oblivious to Sasha’s obvious body language of wanting to be left alone. She closed her eyes and didn’t respond." In this case you've interpreted her actions for the reader. Maybe simplify it to, "She turned to the window and pretended to sleep."
This is a great first submission. You crafted a story with interesting characters, a vivid setting and a wonderful payoff. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate your time and thoughts, and of course, I liked hearing it wasn't terrible ;)
Ugh, yes, that pesky show vs tell rule! I know it's there, looming over every dang keystroke. And the paragraph you described, where I definitely described, I agree with you. That one in particular I messed with a few times and could never get it. So it was that way it was. Lol
Thanks again so much!
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