Crime Drama Fiction

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[Trigger warnings: death, murder, gore, abuse along with attempted murder, possession by spirits, mental health with trauma, and physical violence! Please do not continue reading if any of these topics upset you. By the way, this is a fictional story! None of this happened in real life!]

"Where I come from, there had been a murderer in the making. I had unknowingly befriended both them and their soon-to-be victim. It started back when I was 5. My father had been abusing me and had even gone so far as to attempt to kill me at least 7 times. One day, I was walking around town because my father had kicked me out of the house when I accidentally bumped into two different people. One had bright red hair that wouldn't settle down, while the other had black hair."

"What were their names, Logan?"

"The girl with red hair was Eseza Angara and the boy with black hair was Exer Ayuna. I started apologizing to them, but Angara immediately said that it was okay and befriended me. Exer was much quieter, but he murmured his agreement. We hung out every Saturday at the mall for 10 years. I had just turned 15, Angara was 16, and Exer was 15. On Saturday, November 8, everything changed. I had gone to our usual spot, but I didn't see Angara or Exer."

"Why do you call Eseza Angara by her last name?"

"I no longer wish to call her by her first name like I did when we were friends. We are no longer friends and I don't want to acknowledge her as such."

"What did you do when you found that they weren't there?"

"I walked around the entire mall to try and find them, but I didn't see any sign of them until I saw a hairclip on the ground that I knew belonged to Eseza. It was in front of a door that was only for employees, so I was hesitant to go down there, but I decided that I needed to. Once I got halfway down the stairs, I heard the most horrifying thing. It sounded like something was getting chopped up and Exer was screaming. I ran all the way down the stairs and turned toward the noise before freezing in my tracks. The thing that had been getting chopped up was Exer!

"Eseza had been attacking him, but she heard me coming and attacked me as well. She managed to hack my left arm off and get an eye out of me, but that was all she managed before she ran away and left the ax behind. I bolted over to Exer and tried my best to save him, but he died a few minutes after I had gotten over to him.

"I ran back up the stairs to go get a security guard and to call the cops, but I was stopped by a store owner. He asked me what happened and I told him that I needed a security guard and I needed somebody to call the cops because I had just seen somebody get murdered and I had also been attacked. A few years later, I went back to that mall for the first time since the murder. That's when Exer formed an attachment with me. He goes where I go because he's a part of me. He can even possess me sometimes!"

"Yeah, I can possess Logan sometimes. It's pretty weird and I don't really like doing it, but if I need to talk to somebody, then I have to possess her because nobody else besides her can see me."

"So, you're Exer? The kid that was killed?"

"Yes. Everything Logan has told you is true. Logan and I had both believed that Eseza was a true friend. It turned out that we were wrong about her and how she truly was. Once I knew how she really was, I didn't want Logan to get involved with her and still be friends with her, but then Logan saw me die. I can only imagine how hard it must have been for her to see that and then go home to collect her things so that she could start a new life when she knew that my life was over. I don't know how she managed to make it through everything that had happened to her. I wouldn't have been able to if I were her, but I suppose that just shows how strong she truly is."

"Are you guys inseparable? Can you still go anywhere you want if you're not bonded to her?"

"There are certain rules to being a ghost. If you choose to stay on Earth after you die, your soul is bound to the place you died until you bind your soul to something else, such as somebody else's body and/or soul. If I were to unbind my soul from her body, I would immediately be bonded back to that horrid mall once again. I'll never break the bond between us because I never want to go back to that place, but I also don't want her to feel as though she's alone like she used to be. Even though I may be dead, I know what it feels like to be alone and not have anybody with me for a long time. That's why I waited for her to come back to the mall for so long. I wanted to get out, but I also wanted to keep her company and know that she was still alive."

"You really were best friends, huh?"

"Yeah, we were. She's just awesome."

"Did either of you find out what happened to Eseza?"

"Yeah. She got what was coming to her and I'm glad that karma doesn't forget."

When he says that Ezesa got what was coming to her, he's referring to the fact that she went to jail and died there. Let's just say that most of the other inmates didn't like her. By the way, Logan is a girl. Her name is Logan Grayce Kanjigar and she was born a girl but her dad wanted a boy, so she has a boy's name.

September 18, 2022 13:58

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Michał Przywara
21:01 Sep 19, 2022

I see on your bio that sharing your stories is a new thing for you - so good on you for doing so. I've found sharing my stories has helped me improve my writing a lot, although sometimes the feedback can be rough :) I like the opening line to this, as it certainly grabs our attention. The story is a dialogue between Logan and some unidentified speaker (though I assume some kind of authority figure - initially I thought maybe a cop interviewing her about Angara, but it could be a therapist or someone else too). Then we learn that it's not j...


Makayla Mikels
20:10 Sep 23, 2022

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this! I love your ideas and feedback and will definitely consider using them for future posts (with credit to you, of course!). I especially love your final idea where you propose that Angara possesses the detective that is being put on the case! It's very intriguing and it will be a great challenge to figure that part out. Overall, I'm just very thankful for your feedback and I will be sure to try and keep up the (possible) series!


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