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Crime Mystery Fiction

This story contains themes or mentions of physical violence, gore, or abuse.

Slowly, I pulled into the driveway of the house labeled 2269 in silver letters. The sound of waves crashing on the shore reached me the moment I was out of the car. A salty breeze blew my red and yellow cape every which way. I gathered all of my courage, then strutted up to the front door. With one last deep breath, I knocked three times.

A young woman opened the door. Her piercing blue eyes widened as they scanned my outfit.

โ€œUh, hi. Is there something I can help you with?โ€

โ€œAre you Avenlee Hursch?โ€ There was no time to waste.

โ€œYes. Who are-โ€ Before she could finish, I grabbed her by the arm. I wrapped a blindfold over her eyes, slapped handcuffs on her wrists, and we were gone.


Fifteen minutes late, I parked the car next door to an apartment complex. I left Avenlee after locking the car doors and headed to the apartments.

I repeated the same process I went through with Avenlee, picking up a middle-aged man. From what I knew, his name was Graham and he was a chef.

Two down, two to go.


Another house, but this time was different. Kavya put up a fight. The moment I tried to take her out of the house, she trashed and threw a quick right hook.

Crack!

โ€œYou broke my nose!โ€ I screeched. She threw cuss words, tried to loosen my grip, but I pinned her arms behind her.

โ€œLeave me alone; let me go!โ€ Kavya yelled. Without another word, I put the cuffs and blindfold on her.

Maybe she is a good fit, I thought as I shoved Kavya into the car.


Hoping the next candidate was easy like Avenlee and Graham, I jogged to the door. After her talk of escaping in the car, I didnโ€™t want Kavya to have the time to. I pounded on the door, but it didnโ€™t open. I rang the doorbell, knocked again, and finally, a groggy man revealed himself. He was in a bathrobe and had heavy bags under his eyes. His actions were sluggish.

โ€œIโ€™m guessing youโ€™re a writer. Letโ€™s go.โ€

Still half-asleep, the man made no move to stop me as I went through the motions and sat him in the passengerโ€™s seat. He was asleep before we left the property.


A tiny handle stuck out of the ground, almost unnoticeable. After checking no one was watching, I pulled on it, and a hatch opened to steps.

โ€œThese are steps. Might want to hang onto each other going down,โ€ I advised. Avenlee reached out and put a hand on my shoulder. I began the descent down, our footsteps echoing on the metal.ย 

โ€œClose the door!โ€ I said. It clanged shut.

โ€œWhere are we going?โ€ Graham questioned.

โ€œThis feeling would be great to describe in a book,โ€ the writer, Devan, said. I rolled my eyes.

โ€œIf you donโ€™t tell me where Iโ€™m at, someoneโ€™s gonna die!โ€ Kavya was one brave soul, but I knew it was fake. Avenlee gasped at the threat but didnโ€™t say a word. I refused to reply to any of them.

We were now walking down a metal hallway. The organization couldnโ€™t afford something to hit ground level and crack the walls, that being the reason for all of the metal.

โ€œWhy are we walking so far? I canโ€™t see! Iโ€™m starving, too.โ€ Graham continued to complain.

โ€œShut UP!โ€ I snapped. All four of the captives stayed quiet. I stopped in front of a mustard yellow door and had the number 67 at the top.

โ€œWhen we enter this room, I will take your handcuffs off, but donโ€™t be getting any ideas. Once Iโ€™m out of the room, you can take your blindfolds off. Anyone who does otherwise will be executed,โ€ I explained. It was an empty threat, but it sure did the trick.

I pulled my ID card out of my checkered jeans and swiped it on the scanner next to the door, which automatically opened. Determinedly, I marched the group into the room. Using a key stored in the pocket of my pants, I unlocked each personโ€™s cuffs, then led them to their seats.

โ€œEnjoy.โ€ I left the room, then lifted my watch to my mouth. โ€œPotential recruits are in the dining room. Reporting to your office now.

โ€œWonderful,โ€ a voice snickered back. I smirked, jogging down long, twisting hallways. I passed hundreds of different colored doors. These were all the rooms of my organizationโ€™s members.

To my relief, I finally reached the forest green door. Two beefy guards stood in my way. I raised an eyebrow. Both men quivered.

โ€œSo sorry, miss. We forgot your-โ€ the bodyguard on the left started. My eyes narrowed.

โ€œYou forgot my importance? Do that again and Iโ€™ll show you how important I am,โ€ I scolded.

โ€œOf course, maโ€™am. Weโ€™re so sorry,โ€ the other idiot said. I nodded, satisfied. They stepped aside and the door swung open. Rock music blared from an electric guitar played by an older man.

โ€œRichard! You should be watching the cameras! Iโ€™m surrounded by idiots.โ€ I watched as he continued to spin around in his chair behind the desk while he played his guitar.

โ€œTheyโ€™re going to find a way to ESCAPE!โ€ I screamed. Reluctantly, Richard stopped strumming strings and looked at me.

โ€œIโ€™m not stupid, Athena. I know Kavya could leave if she wanted to. But, you see, these glasses Iโ€™m wearing have a built-in screen connected to the cameras.โ€ Richard rolled his eyes at me, then waved me away. Furious, I walked to the room next door.

Computer screens lined the walls. As most of the roomsโ€™ occupants didnโ€™t allow cameras, a lot of the screens showed the hallways.

โ€œWhich room?โ€ the tech guy, Adam, asked from the corner.

โ€œDining,โ€ I replied. He nodded, tapped a few buttons on the wall, and every screen switched to show the dining room at every angle. The four people I took sat at the table. They stared at each other, seeming to be in a silent argument.

โ€œKavyaโ€™s looks the most savage, she should try it first. Unless sheโ€™s a chicken, of course,โ€ Graham sneered.

โ€œI am not a chicken. Iโ€™ll do it.โ€ After a hesitant moment, Kavya picked up a fry that sat in front of her. She lifted it to her mouth, and with a glance around the yellow room, took a bite.

Swallow.

โ€œIโ€™m not dead. Eat.โ€

Still a bit worried, the other three ate a few fries and a bite of their burger. I smiled, glad that they trusted each other.

โ€œI got a message from Richard. He says you should go down there now,โ€ Adam stated.

โ€œTell him not yet. Itโ€™s not time.โ€

โ€œBut-โ€

โ€œJust tell him no for Peteโ€™s sake!โ€ I exclaimed. People were so scared of Richard for some reason.

Turning back to the screens, I sighed. The men and women werenโ€™t talking to each other. Just great.

Minutes passed. The bland noise of plates and glasses clinking on the oak table was excruciating.

โ€œTell Richard Iโ€™m going in,โ€ I said, already out the door. As quickly as possible, I maneuvered my way back to the mustard yellow door, immediately going inside. All eyes were on me.

โ€œMy name is Athena Mondue. I am a part of the P.T.S. organization. The four of you are potentially going to be new members. Enjoy your dinner.โ€ Then I left.

Waiting for me in the screen room was Richard; he watched the many screens intently. I came up next to him to see three mouths moving almost fearfully. Avenlee stayed quiet, but she still seemed interested in the conversation.

โ€œWhat kind of name is Athena?โ€ Kavya asked.

โ€œI donโ€™t like her! She broke my nose earlier!โ€ I shouted, turning to Richard.

โ€œSheโ€™s feisty like you. Sheโ€™s in. Adam?โ€ Richard beckoned him from his corner.

โ€œYes, sir?โ€

โ€œTell Marshall to get Kavya to join and to tell her what she has to do to become a member. Thanks.โ€ Richard waved Adam away.

โ€œWhat do you think P.T.S. stands for?โ€ It was Devan. I turned back to the screens.

โ€œWhy didnโ€™t she tell us more? And this food is atrocious,โ€ Graham whined. It was so annoying.

โ€œHeโ€™s out,โ€ Richard and I said in unison. I heard Adam tapping buttons right away.

Shortly after, we watched two bodyguards walk into the dining room. One of them grabbed kavya, the other snatched Graham. The two were lugged out of the room, half-eaten plates left on the table. Avenlee gasped and Devanโ€™s eyes widened. They both jumped when the door slammed shut. That was P.T.S.: quick, but leaving with a bang.

โ€œThe โ€˜sโ€™ in P.T.S. probably stands for society since Athena said it was an organization,โ€ Avenlee whispered. It was surprising to hear her talk, considering she hadnโ€™t said a word since I collected her.

โ€œYou know, youโ€™re right! And the โ€˜pโ€™ could stand for professional!โ€ Devan exclaimed.

How were they cracking this?! I thought.

โ€œBut what would the โ€˜tโ€™ be?โ€ Avenlee furrowed her eyebrows in deep thought while she nibbled on a fry.

โ€œAthene seemed sneaky, and those guys were strong enough to crack skulls during a getaway. Maybe that has something to do with it,โ€ Avenlee said. She smiled, knowing she was getting close to the name of my organization.

โ€œMan, this would be a great plot for a book!โ€ Devan took a celebratory bite of his burger.

โ€œI like his energy, good for when we have a big project. But heโ€™ll expose us in his writing. He canโ€™t be recruited.โ€ I looked at Richard, hoping he was on the same page.

โ€œYouโ€™re right. He and the complainer will have to beโ€ฆ you know. The girls will become members.โ€ Slowly, a smile came to Richardโ€™s face; he was proud of me. I didnโ€™t say anything, but I grinned ear-to-ear.


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Six of us stood in the middle of a forest. Avenlee and Kavya each held a pistol. Devan and Graham were across from them, styling blindfolds yet again.

โ€œAvenlee and Kavya, repeat after me. I will dedicate my life to P.T.S.โ€ Richard stated.

โ€œI will dedicate my life to P.T.S.โ€ Kavya and Avenlee repeated.

โ€œAnd I will do whatever is asked of me, no matter the cost,โ€ Richard continued. The women copied him.

โ€œGreat! Complete your first assignment, ladies,โ€ I ordered. Confidently, two guns were raised.

Bang!

Bang!

Graham and Devan dropped.

โ€œWelcome to the Professional Theft Society.โ€

July 09, 2021 00:12

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MY INSPIRATION TO WRITE IS GETTING SOME SORT OF SOME THING CALLED WRITING FINISHED BEFORE THE REEDSY CONTEST ENDS not really funny but I'm trying...

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OOH SMORTTT lol np~ (Also new story posted if you feel like checking it out~ Thank you! :3)

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XDD lol (OH YAY!!!!!! me gonna go read it rn~ my pleasure! <3)

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okay so uh- reading anything good rn? (OOP THANKSS!)

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I've been re-reading Harry Potter, wbu? (NO PROBLEMM!

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*wipes sweat off forehead* After almost a month, I have a new story! :D It was super fun coming up with the whole idea for it. ^^ I'm aware that it doesn't really match up with the prompt, but I decided that it was worth it to submit this with a not-perfect prompt than wait another week to submit it. This may be my longest story that is just a stand-alone and doesn't continue at all, at ~1,700 words! Yay! I hope you enjoyed reading! :D -Brooke D. <3

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Dhwani Jain
12:19 Jul 31, 2021

Hey, Bronana I heard about you a lot from fellow Reedsy-ers and I was curious, so I dropped over. I have a challenge for you: MAKE MY 'BANANA NAME, IT SHOULD MAKE SENSE. If you complete this challenge successfully, AND at least 10 friends of mine on Reedsy like the name, I will use it to sign off my comments for a month. If you lose.. Well, if you lose, I don't know what you'll do, but tell me what you think about htis in the reply. Also, I am eager, very eager, to read your stories. Have any funny (I mean ULTRA funny) ones?

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Hi! Aw, that makes me so happy to think that you've heard about me from others. :D CHALLENGE ACCEPTED! Your new banana name shall be d h w a n a n a. If that does not meet your standards, I can try again to finish the challenge. :) Yay! Thank you! Well, I wouldn't necessarily say it is ULTRA funny, but you could check out my story called "Waiting." :)

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Dhwani Jain
05:05 Aug 01, 2021

I HAVE BEEN DOWNVOTED!!!!!!! I HAD ABOUT 1100+ POINTS, AND NOW I AM LEFT AT 660+.... PLEASE HELP ME, MY REEDSY FRIENDS STOP DOWNVOTING NOW!!!!!

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Of course! I'll head over to your account.

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Dhwani Jain
03:19 Aug 03, 2021

Thanks!

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Dhwani Jain
05:01 Aug 01, 2021

Hello! Yeah, people like Aerin and Luna talk about you! GOOD! dhwanana is kinda weird (no offence) because if I pronounce it, it sounds like "เคงเฅ‹เคจเคพ เคจเคพ" in Hindi, which means to not to wash something.... XD Okay, I'll read it!!!

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Aw! Ooh! And none taken. But did I beat the challenge?

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Dhwani Jain
03:20 Aug 03, 2021

Yeah....I'll ask people and then tell.

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Dhwani Jain
05:03 Aug 01, 2021

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Dhwani Jain
03:20 Aug 03, 2021

Yeah....

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u dont know me, and idk u, but u a frend of Aerin's soo- HEWO XDD Am gibing u a nickname, u r now Brookie Cookie c:

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a friend of Aerinโ€™s is a friend of mine- ๐Ÿ˜Š HIIIII Ooh yayyyyy <3

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Haiii c: XD HEWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO HRUUU c: <3

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XD Nothing much, wbu?

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๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚ Iโ€™ll check it out soon :)

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:) I filled It out! Thanks so much Leste! <33 tHe BeSt KiNd nOw Im TeMpTeD tO bRiNg iT bAcK bEtTeR rUn WhIlE yOu StIlL hAvE a ChAnCe

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oH yEs ChIlD I hAvE bEgUn PrEpArAtIoNs (omg yay ima go read it asap) wait Leste I'm confuzzled- I'm reading TSAU rn, and then Ima read EUTW EUTW is the reedsycast right- or am I insane- I'm confuzzling myself

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Endellion .
21:32 Oct 19, 2021

One thing: If someone's nose is broken, they would just be like "She broke my nose" They would be in severe pain and have to have the bones corrected, they would have a bloody nose and probably wouldn't just be walking around, doing their normal tasks.

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Oh, okay! I meant it as more of a joke and not she actually broke her nose, but thanks anyway!

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Endellion .
21:46 Nov 03, 2021

Oh, well, shut my mouth. lol.

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19:42 Oct 18, 2021

HELLO HELP THIS IS EM I'M BORED TO DEATH

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HELLO I WILL TRY THIS IS B R O N A N A DUDE ME TOO IDK WHAT TO SAY THO

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11:53 Nov 04, 2021

I'M SOOOOO BORED DO YOU LIKE ROCKS

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ME TOOOO BUT I HAVE HW TO DOOOOOOO YES I LOVE ROCKS THEY ARE THE ESSENSE OF MY EXISTENCE DO YOU LIKE ROCKS

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23:06 Nov 08, 2021

I LOVE ROCKS ESPECIALLY THE SHINY ONES AND THE SMOOTH ONES THE ROUGH ONES ARE UNCOMFORTABLE TO HOLD I LIKE SMALL ONES

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THOSE ARE LITERALLY THE BEST ROCKS OOH AND I LOVE THE ONES THAT ARE PINK BUT LIKE CLEAR AT THE SAME TIME THE PURPLE AND GREEN ONES LIKE THAT ARE GREAT TOO

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HOCUS POCUS ALAKAZAM

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Why did I do that. BECAUSE YOU ARE GOING INSANE SIENNAAAAAAA Nah I'm just bored

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๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚ No, please continue!!!!! Love it <3333333

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I literally love ur bio And I know I already said this but ITโ€™S GOLD

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Awww, thanks! Itโ€™s really just a lot of rambling Brooke-ness Your chaotic ness is even better tho!!!!!! I love it so much :) Iโ€™ll try to get to your TikTok acc soon

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yessss which is the bestttttt aksjajsjsjajdfj thank you!!!! wait lol *dies of embarrassment even tho Iโ€™m posting links places anyways* ty-

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duuuuude thank youuuuuuuuuuu my pleasure! *lol ofc* yw-

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18:33 Oct 09, 2021

I- That was... Well... They're...dead now...so um...wow. Uhh... Moving on... I really liked the story!! I think it fit in well to the prompt and really dramatized the whole thing. Hope there'll be a sequel??? Livia

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Yeahโ€ฆ They areโ€ฆ Thanks so much, Livia! Iโ€™m thinking about it, although I have had block for months now and canโ€™t get out ๐Ÿ˜ญ Brooke

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23:25 Oct 10, 2021

Ugh for some reason sequels are so much harder than the first ones ๐Ÿ˜ฃ๐Ÿ˜ฃ Good luck though!! Liv

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They are *sobs eternally* Thanks! the fourth Sanderson sister

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16:24 Oct 15, 2021

:)

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Dhwani Jain
08:28 Oct 02, 2021

The post is out guys! I canโ€™t believe it the number of views it has gotten! Please do check it out! I am really happy with the response and would love it if you guys too check the post out!!! ~ Dhwani Jain {02-10-2021}

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Iโ€™m sorry, but Iโ€™m not sure I know what youโ€™re talking about. โ“

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Ava F
15:02 Sep 29, 2021

pls look at my new story up!

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21:59 Sep 26, 2021

AH AH AH AH A BROOOOOOOOKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE BROOKE + COOKIE = BROOKIE I MISSED YOU

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SAPHIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE SAPPHIRE + FIRE = SAFIRE GURL I MISSED YOU MORE

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03:05 Oct 13, 2021

WOAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SAFIRE OMG HOW HAVE YOU BEEN

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YASSSSSSSSSSS SAFIRE Iโ€™M BETTER NOW WEโ€™RE TALKING AGAIN!!!!!! WBU???

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15:38 Oct 15, 2021

YASS SAME!!!!!! IM SO HAPPY TO BE BACK AIUFNAIUGNVAOIEJ

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DUDE SAME I CAN ACTUALLY BE ACTIVE ON WEEKENDS NOW (but only weekends. :( )

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YES I LOVE THAT MOVIE I need to rewatch it soon omg

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IKR ME TOOOOOOO I just watched it recently and I was like "omg this is a whole vibe and I need it"

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Dhwani Jain
06:05 Sep 01, 2021

So it turns our everyone LOVES my nickname. And now acc. to our deal, I am using it as my name.

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Yay! Iโ€™m so excited!

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Dhwani Jain
10:52 Sep 04, 2021

Yeah

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I LOVE it! Also, i think that you should be on the leader board, with all the stories that you have, and the cool name, I don't know how you're not on it. -Breckin N :)

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Aw, thank you so much, Breckin! I actually used to be on the leaderboard, around 20th place I believe, but a downvoter (or multiple) went on a spree and got rid of a bunch of my besties' and my own points. We're all over it now, though. :) -b r o n a n a

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Awwwww, thank you so much!

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Heyyyy Brooke! Ivy Carter is coming back sometime next week along with Abigail Cross, spread the word!

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Hey, Wolf! It's already in my bio! :DDD

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:D Pretty good, you?

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Hey, Bronana! (hehe that's fun to say) I am suddenly seeing you EVERYWHERE so I was like, hmm let's go see his page. I really like this story! Like a lot a lot a lot! Great job! Happy writing! Oh and before I forget, can you make my banana name? ๐Ÿฅบ

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Hi, Bella! (haha thanks) Aww, that's so awesome for me to hear! :D (By the way, I don't mean to be rude, but I go by she/her, not he/his. Sorry if something was confusing. :) ) Thank you so much! Of course! Let me think... b e l n a n a! :D

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:D Oops, I even read your bio and saw that you were Brooke, and I still ended up putting his? Sorry!! You're welcome! thanks! :D

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You're totally fine! :D No problem!

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