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Drama


At eighteen, Jess Hargrove was afraid of people his age, afraid he might embarrass himself. He spent most of his free time in the virtual world of gaming. His young body softened into an egg-shaped figure with an upside-down U of unruly hair.

But one afternoon at his cousin's house up in Pittsburgh, an hour from home, there was this girl he met. He’d driven up from Steubenville, grumbling that he hated parties, but his mother had insisted and so he made the trip in his old Kia with the broken radio, planning to show up, eat and leave.


The small house was overflowing with relatives and friends. An ice-filled cooler at the door held Cokes in old-fashioned bottles and Iron City beers. Jess loaded up a plate of casserole-type food and pigs'n a blanket, focused on the floor, and took off for the empty screened porch, scarfing down the food in minutes. Finally, he felt full. He just wanted to lie down, but stayed there and tipped up the bottle of Coke.


The screen door squeaked. A young woman walked onto the porch carrying a plate of chocolate cake and mint patties. His shoulders tensed as he took in her pretty face and long shiny dark hair. He had the urge to take off like a frightened deer.


“Hey, do ya mind if I sit awt here? So noisy in there,” she said.


He gestured with his bottle, swallowed the mouthful.


“Be my guest.” Inside he groaned, so lame. 


She took a bite of cake then with her mouth full, she said, “This is some party, right?”


“Yeah, some party.”


Her hands were long with real pretty white fingers and short squared nails painted dark purplish-red. He watched her slip a mint over her tongue, quickly licking her lips. Her eyes met his but she didn't look away like every other girl. No, she seemed okay with him. She raised her eyebrows and sighed.


“I don’t know about you, but it feels better awt here, just talking with one person. Yelling over a crowd isn't my thing."


A piece of cake had fallen on her white blouse and sat there like a boulder on the edge of a cliff. Jess looked away. He took another drink of Coke.


He said, “No kidding? I’m that same way.”


“I’m Jasmine. Jasmine Szoszorak.”


“Jess. Jess Hargrove."


For the next fifteen minutes, a lifetime to Jess, she chatted aimlessly about her summer, her plans for the fall. He nodded with his entire upper body. He couldn’t believe his luck. He felt special with her. She seemed to really hear him even though he gave short answers. He didn’t need to hold up his end of the conversation. Jasmine did it all.


An oversized shaggy dog, white and gray, whined outside of the screen door. Jess twisted around and said, "Whatsa matter big boy? Coming in?"


A quick bark followed and his tail buzzed. Jess scooted to the edge of his chair and pushed up against the arms to stand. He opened the door letting the dog in, rubbed his head, and patted his back.

Jasmine moved her plate to the table and cooed to the dog's face.

She said, "Oh, aren't you so sweet, you big teddy bear." The dog barked again, rocking back on his legs as if to play. Jasmine let out a relaxed uninhibited laugh.


She tilted to one hip, looking around Jess so that he turned too. A couple, who Jess had never seen before, was standing by the picnic table gazing at each other.


“You know them?” Jess asked placing an open palm on the dog's back, gently raking the fur.


“Oh, sort of. He used to be my boyfriend.”

There was something different in her voice as if the gears had shifted into low before heading downhill.

She asked, “Hey, what are you doing tonight?”


“Me?”


Jasmine laughed. “Of course, you. Silly boy. If you’re open, let’s do something. I mean, if you’re not busy. But you probably are. I’m sorry. That was so forward of me. You probably have a girlfriend. Never mind. Forget I said anything.”


Jess had never been on a date. “Uh, wait. I’m not doing anything. Well, just upping my ga­—” He stopped. “No, I’m open.”


She eyed the picnic table one more time. She’d lost her smile, but her voice stayed light. “Good. What should we do? You choose.”


Jess hardly knew what to say. If Jasmine were a buddy, he’d ask her over to do some Nintendo. He blurted out, “Hey, you want to go bowling?”

~

The evening had gone okay, Jess decided. He'd thrown a couple of goose eggs and berated himself for suggesting bowling. He'd never thrown a strike in his life. But Jasmine made it fun, said it gave her a feeling of freedom, not worrying about meeting someone's expectations. She was a decent bowler, even though she had only tried it one time, back when she was ten. Jasmine filled in any empty air space with her chatter.


He’d had a great time, he told her. She lived in the Polish Hill neighborhood where the roads were steep and the houses were smacked up against each other. Hers was a gray shingled place with a crooked aluminum awning over the door.


Jess looked across the street at an abandoned house. “Well, good night then. Sorry I was so bad at the game.”


“Aren’t you going to walk me to my door? That’s what you’re supposed to do,” she said and laughed her easy way, not mocking him like his sister. 


When they arrived at her doorstep, she kissed him, right on the mouth, a good kiss. Her lips, smooth as a fresh marshmallow, soft and sweet, her warm breath mingling with his, her hands on his shoulders as his arms hung at his sides, he imagined his hand on her back at the waist, pulling her closer. A car idled at the stoplight of Hawkins and Fifth with its radio turned up high, playing You and Me.


It turned out to be the best evening of his life. She’d made him feel important, and for those hours, he pretended he was normal, like everyone else. After the kiss, she had looked into his eyes and said “Thanks for the evening. I really appreciate it.” And she opened the door, stepped inside, and closed it while he stood there not wanting to move, afraid to lose the moment. 


He never saw her again. He called, but she was never home and didn’t call back. The drive between his house and hers took the better part of an hour. He’d tried catching up with her for weeks, but finally, he decided that was that; it wasn’t meant to be.


~


Ten years later, Jess Hargrove still lived in Steubenville and still loved animals. He'd lost weight after Jasmine and discovered exercise. Walking at first, then running, gave him energy and a better feeling about himself.


~


He hated it when a dog yelped. “Oh God, I’m sorry,” he said and rubbed Chief’s thick dark fur. The Newfie lay below the counter, to the right of the high stool where Jess worked. The dog weighed as much as an adult woman but suffered the same as a chihuahua when his paw lay between Jess's foot and the floor. The dog’s eyebrows lifted, he looked up with his one eye, the second closed in a perpetual wink.


 “Ah, Chief, I’m sorry bud. You gotta move, you know?” Chief’s tail began its wag, always ready to forgive, holding no grudges. Jess sat down on the cold concrete next to the dog and finally lay down beside him, burying his face in the dog’s fur. Chief made a satisfied slow grown, sighed, and lay his head down.

"Okay old boy, enough of this," Jess said and stood up easily using only his leg muscles. "I have to get something done. He reached for Chief with both hands, rubbing the spongy head and ears.

"Chief, move. Go. Bed."

The dog stood and wandered to the thick square bed on the floor in the corner, beside the wood-handled string mop and bucket.


Five years before, Chief had been found outside the shelter with a frayed clothesline around his neck, severely injured eye, and torn ear. The vet had worked on him for hours, repairing the ear. The eye had become infected and without any other choice, he'd removed it. Jess resisted taking him to his small apartment. Newfies eat a lot, leave gobs of hair around, bark and howl, and take up a lot of space. But his big sorry face. That sad eye. Jess had relented and took him home.


Jess was the ‘manager’ of weekend services at the re-purposed gas station, now outfitted to accommodate rescued pets. The place had windows on two sides and old garage bays that smelled of grease and oil mixed with wet dog fur and kitty litter.


Today he had a ‘crew’ of twenty-six canines, weighing between twelve pounds and a hundred. High and low voices reacted in unison to any unfamiliar sound like the bang that came from behind the shelter.

 

Jess had to prep for two dogs going out that afternoon; gather paperwork and clean up the place for the terrier couple. The glass door had clouded from anxious dogs poking noses against the glass. Jess found the Windex and a paper towel roll, carried a step ladder from the back out to the reception area. He’d clean the door later, right before the couple’s appointment.   


Outside, wheels thunked into waterfilled potholes, splashing dirty water onto the door. A woman dressed in capris and sleeveless shirt sauntered by the window pushing a three-wheeled baby stroller with a kid inside that looked old enough to walk on his own, and a second one holding onto the stroller. 


Allison had called in sick that day. She normally worked the desk, greeting visitors, yakking with little kids. She had a knack for children, getting them to talk and laugh whereas when Jess tried, they held onto their parents and hid. Maybe it’s your beard, Allison had said. But he’d cut it to stubble and still, the kids would have nothing to do with him.


The electric wall clock said five to twelve. Jess flipped the deadbolt and hung the dog-shaped sign with the words “on break, please ring buzzer”. Few people came in without an appointment so he felt comfortable unfolding the lounge chair, taking out his sandwich and phone.


He sank his teeth into the sub sandwich, tasting the peppers and onions, the cheese and turkey, hot peppers and sauce. The flavors mixed into a satisfying combo. He flipped through social media and pushed the lounge back.

 

The buzzer sounded. The kennels erupted again.

“Man, they’re early.” He took a swig of sweet tea, capped it, and hurried to the welcome room.


It was the woman with the three-wheeled stroller. The child leaned against the door window then backed up and kicked at the glass while the woman held her hand over her forehead against the door, peering inside.


Jess took a deep breath in, waved toward the door.


“Just a minute.” 


He rushed to the kennel room, to the bathroom, back to the kennel room, wishing them away. Hiding around the corner, he checked the reflection in a window. Still there, the kid pounding his small fists on the door. He checked the time: twelve-fifteen.


He considered telling them to come back later. The kid had snot on his upper lip. Germs. Chief wandered in from the back room and to the door. The kid stopped and stared. Chief’s tail wagged. He let out a whine.


Jess straightened up, rolled his shoulders forward and back, his head to shoulder both sides, breathed in and out. He turned the deadbolt.


“Thank you,” the woman said in a tired voice. “I was abawt'a forgit it, but my son won’t stop till he gets ta visit da cats. I said, "Yinz kids behave at the store and we'll go see da kitty cats. They'd a' been yammering the whole way home if we couldn’t get in.”


Jasmine Szoszorak. She had that Pittsburgh accent that he couldn’t forget. Her hair was red now, not the dark brown from ten years ago. And she’d aged as if life pulled on her face till it couldn’t spring back. She smiled at Chief, exclaiming at how sweet he was, and asked about the missing eye. Jess watched her, amazed that after so long, she was right in front of him, real enough that he could reach out and touch her.


She drew out her phone and began scrolling, tapping her thumb on the screen.


“Uh, sorry, but all we have right now are the dogs.”


Jess rubbed his palm over his close-cut hair, down the back of his head, landing on his neck, he watched Chief behind Jasmine. The big dog’s head twisted slightly to one side as if saying, “Go on, tell her. Tell her you know her already.”


“We’ll be getting a clowder of cats next week,” Jess said. “not sure of their colors yet, but if you leave your information, we can give you a call when they come in.”


The kid said in a squeezed voice, “Clowner? Clowner cats?”


Jess’s face eased. He smiled a close-mouthed smile, “Sorry, I said clowder, not clowner. It just means a bunch.”

The kid stared up at Jess with his mouth gaping.

Jess said, “It’s okay, I didn’t know that word either till I started working here.”

The boy put two fingers in his mouth and hid behind Jasmine.


The room suddenly looked spare in a pathetic way with Jasmine absorbed in her phone, tapping away. Without looking up, she nodded, and said, “Uh, next week. Sure, that'll be good.” She stuck her phone in the shoulder bag and pulled out her wallet. “Here’s my ID.”


Her ID said Jasmine Zorak. Her hands were ringless. His hand quivered as he wrote her name on the form. “There you are, Jasmine.’ She smiled and took the card back, tucked it in her wallet.


The children began crying, “Momma, you promised, you said we could see the kitties. Please?” She rolled her eyes.


Jess stared at the boy. “Um, I haven’t had lunch yet. I can lock up for an hour. You want some ice cream? You like ice cream, don’t you?” The littlest one smiled, and the other hopped around like a cute baby goat, "Ice cream, ice cream.”


"Hang on for a minute, I have to settle Chief."


Jess called Chief to the dog bed and knelt beside him. Chief never spoke words but his face talked to Jess. "I'm telling you, buddy," the dog's expression said, "she really liked you back then. She probably's been pining for you ever since. You look different now, right? More muscle, better hair. Go on, tell her."


Jess leaned close. He whispered, "I’ll just be a little while. You hold down the fort. I’ll try, boy. Not sure, but I’ll try.”


~


The four of them settled at the ice cream parlor’s table, kids with small vanilla cones, Jasmine's was a dipped chocolate cone, and Jess with a small fudge sundae.


Jasmine said, “It’s sweet of you to help calm da' kids. I can sure use the company. I’m embarrassed to ask, but what’s your name? Maybe you said, but I didn’t catch it.”


He sucked in his bottom lip and rolled his tongue over it, looked toward the door. She really didn’t know who he was.


“Jess.”


One of the kids dropped a crayon and yelped.


“Oh, come on Frankie. Try to hold onto your things.” She picked up the crayon and laid it on the coloring book. Just then, a chunk of frozen chocolate landed onto her white tee shirt and hung there waiting to fall.


“Now. What did you say? I’m sorry. These kids are always making noise.”


“Jess,” he said and took a deep breath, “Jess Hargrove.”


“Well, nice to meet you, Jess Hargrove. We’re from Pittsburgh, just down here visiting my aunt Milly."


So, she really doesn't remember. He sighed and took a long drink of water.


She said, "It’s so nice of you to join us for a treat. I really appreciate it.”


He remembered those last words from that night.


"Hey, Jasmine, your shirt. Here, here's a napkin, if you hurry, it won't leave a mark."

February 20, 2021 04:52

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14 comments

S. Athena
10:14 Feb 25, 2021

I liked reading this story. My favourite parts were: - A piece of cake had fallen on her white blouse and sat there like a boulder on the edge of a cliff. Jess looked away. - I also laughed at out loud at: He'd thrown a couple of goose eggs and berated himself for suggesting bowling. In terms of constructive feedback, the story felt a bit slow at a few parts - for example, I think there could be less dialogue with Chief. Nice work overall!

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Cathryn V
03:10 Mar 28, 2021

Thank you Athena! I’m glad you enjoyed the story😁

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Tom .
23:20 Feb 23, 2021

Lovely story, nostalgic. My favourite bit was the conversation with the dog before the ice cream parlour. It reminds me of when I share my innermost thoughts with my dog. I don't have any critique to offer, it follows the prompt and does exactly what it says on the tin. Good Job.

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Cathryn V
23:40 Feb 23, 2021

Hi Tom, Thanks for taking the time to comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Gerard Watson
19:35 Mar 13, 2021

Hey, Cathryn V., It's good to read one of your stories. Do you consider yourself a romance writer? I, too, share a passion for them. Let me say, I enjoyed the premise of your story. The opening paragraph was great. I closed my eyes and envisioned Jess. The dialogue between jess and jasmine was fine. I just wish there was more of it. For instance at the bowling alley. I know you wrote that everything went fine, I bet dollars for donuts and an awkward guy like Jess have a few, well, awkward moments. I would have loved to see their interaction ...

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Cathryn V
20:11 Mar 13, 2021

Thank you Gerard! I am definitely a romance writer. To answer your question about Jasmine not recognizing Jess, you're correct on both counts. She was never into him and now that he's beefed up and lost weight, his appearance is so different. She was all focused on that 'former' boyfriend that was in the back yard. Getting a story fleshed out in under 3,000 words is always a challenge. The trick, for me, is to build in nuances that imply for the sake of spareness. Thanks for taking the time and offering critique!

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Howard H
08:59 Feb 22, 2021

Hello Cathryn, I enjoyed your story and got to like Jess as he developed and grew throughout the tale. I had a couple of things that I’ll mention and please don’t read my remarks as negative criticism... When Jess and Jasmine first meet my alarm bells went off at the words “felt” and “seemed” in the phrase: - “He felt special with her. She seemed to really hear him even though he gave short answers....” You go on to a section where they interact which illustrates those emotions so maybe add more dialogue at that point and lose the tell? Th...

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Cathryn V
19:30 Feb 22, 2021

Thanks so much for taking time to comment. Yes, I see what you're saying about felt and seemed. I've been concentrating lately on showing feelings rather than telling and put that in as a way to guide the reader to his reactions. Not sure, other than having him interact with a friend (but he has no friends ha ha). Re seeing your remarks as negative...I don't. Fellow Reedsy writers' comments are always welcome. I want to be a better writer. Readers' input is one great means of getting there. I wonder though, if other people find my commen...

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H L Mc Quaid
14:41 Feb 21, 2021

Hello Cathryn! Felt like I was back in the 'burgh. I lived in Polish Hill for few years during grad school, in an old butcher shop that an architect converted into apartments. Anyway, I enjoyed this story. The main character and his faithful friend were likeable and real. And some memorable descriptions, like: "A piece of cake had fallen on her white blouse and sat there like a boulder on the edge of a cliff." I don't have any sentence-structure critiques, but I did notice few things. When Jasmine introduces herself, it's spelled, "SzoS...

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Cathryn V
18:40 Feb 21, 2021

Ha, a fellow Pittsburgher! Amazing. I grew up in Forest Hills. And you are in London? I am in Oregon. so far away. Everything you caught is really useful. You're like a comb, pulling out the snags, lol. And I can use a lot of combing! I'll go for another round with this story today. I see you have a submission that you're looking for feedback on. Will do it today. Thanks for taking the time for my writing and giving such great feedback.

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H L Mc Quaid
19:08 Feb 21, 2021

Yeah, Pittsburgh is my adopted home town, I lived there for 15 years before moving to London. Oregon, huh? We both picked places that rain a lot. ;) I've realised I must be a really visual reader...I'm picturing the story as I read it, and then my brain flags up things that don't go with the picture, the 'snags' as you call them. It's like my brain is picking at threads and pulling. haha. Anyway, glad if some of it was useful. And thanks in advance for reading my latest, I'm gonna delete sometime next week, but hoping to get a little feed...

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A.Dot Ram
20:11 Feb 20, 2021

This story feels so quietly true to life. It's sad how for Jesse, Jasmine was this sort of life-changing experience, but he was merely a bright spot in her day because of what he offered. But that's how things often go-- our feelings aren't evenly matched-- which makes it all the more miraculous if we find someone who feels the same. Anyway, charming story.

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Cathryn V
21:05 Feb 20, 2021

But at least he has Chief. Thanks for your critique, I really appreciate it!

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A.Dot Ram
21:19 Feb 20, 2021

Yes! There's some love it will be hard to match 😄.

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