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Drama Fiction

I looked at my home at the dead of night, wishing I was still there enjoying the family life. Family, no such thing anymore with society pitting family members against family members.

“The government fooled all and it is such a shame,” I muttered.

It is an abandoned house I sit in by the front window, looking at the place I once lived in. Laughter. Cried. I yelled in frustration the final days.

“How did it happen so quickly?” I thought. “We were all together, but now society is fractured.”

I should have seen it as it started little by little. People accepting as everyone’s lifestyles were split into categories.

“We want to be inclusive of everyone,” we heard constantly.

It made sense at the start. So many did not have the joys of others. The scale seemed to balance out, but it quickly changed. It started to tilt the other way so the ones once enjoying were now living in misery.

“That is what they get,” many spoke out.

“Why should the innocent be punished,” I would tell myself. “Instead of being compassionate like they say they are complete fools.”

“Don’t say that so loud,” family and friends would say. “Just accept it.”

I would now cower in fear as my freedoms eroded away. One by one I lost my friends as they were lockstep with what poured forth from the ones in charge.

“I don’t want to lose my job,” my friend Joe told me a year ago.

“It’s not that bad,” my friend Christine said.

“Quit bucking the system,” my brother, Luke, demanded of me. “You are going to get our family in trouble.”

“Why do you want to follow this corrupt system?” I asked my brother. “A bunch of hypocrites who like to spout out their compassion to all, except the ones they disagree with. We are now the enemy.”

“Quit being ridiculous,” he told me, and left my presence.

As I now sit looking at my home for months ago, I knew my brother agreed with me. So many agreed with me, but didn’t want to do anything about it. Will they learn the errors of their ways? Some might but so many will not, and they will fall. I had a bad feeling that the storm was rapidly approaching.

It didn’t take long for rules to be implemented, which required people to comply with or lose many privileges we once enjoyed.

“Why are you okay with them taking our rights away?” I asked my parents a month before I departed. “The two of you should understand most of what is happening.”

“Life is still well for us,” my mother replied.

“It’s not that bad,” my father replied.

“I can’t believe how ignorant you all are.”

“You watch your mouth!” my father cried out.

My mother just shook her head. I believe she was more on my side, but didn’t want to speak up. Like so many others out there. Never speak up.

It was when the government wanted to put a chip into everyone that I had enough. I went out and protested with a group about this nonsense. It started out as a request, but quickly changed to a requirement. A large percentage, like sheep, took the chip right away. If you didn’t, then you wouldn’t be able to do a thing. You could no longer buy anything and go to many locations.

“Don’t you realize how easy it’s now to get around?” my brother asked a week before the family split. “Just get it done and all will be good.”

“Get it done and sell my soul to the devil.”

“Quit being so stubborn and ignorant.”

“Sorry I don’t want to be on the dark side.”

“You watch too much TV,” my brother said with a frown and walked away.

It was the next day that the neighbors across the street disappeared in the middle of the night. The house that I lived in at this moment.

“Do you see what happens when you do not get the chip?” my father asked in irritation.

“For our sake, get it done,” my mother pleaded.

“Sorry. I can’t sell my soul.”

“Not only will you get yourself in trouble, but get us in trouble by allowing you to stay here,” my father said.

“Should I leave?” I asked.

Neither one of them replied.

“Let me hook up with people like me,” I told them.

I did exactly that. I went to the few to see if I could stay with them. If not, I asked for options. I also found out that some took the chip or mysteriously disappear.

“What has this country become?” I thought.

“I know of a librarian that is taking people in,” one of my good friends, Ralph, told me. “Go to this location after hours and you can stay there for a while.”

“Thank you for the info,” I told him.

I went to my home for the last time and told them I was moving on. I even offered them to come with us and we would remove the chip. They declined.

“Get out of my face, you fool,” my brother told me. “Get out before I report you.”

“You would help lead me to the guillotine?”

“Just get out.”

I left them and went to the librarian. She had a hidden room that I could stay in for a bit. She told me there were others like me gathering, and it was growing and growing.

“You might be killed, but will still have your freedom,” the librarian told me.

Now, here I am staring at the home I lived in all my life. The many joys have ended. I doubt it will ever return. To me, this country has entered a very dark chapter. It’s not the first time civilization has traveled this road, and it has recovered. Will it be the same this time around?

“I hope so,” I said as I stood up to leave. “I pray so.”

June 13, 2021 03:34

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Jay Luuu
16:08 Jun 13, 2021

Nice story! I can see that it reflects some aspects of the real world, too. About how many people are thinking this and thinking that and it comes to a point where you don't know what to believe in anymore. Nice nice! —JLU

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Corey Melin
17:46 Jun 13, 2021

Yes indeed. Definitely some reality that is taking place as we speak and how quick it’s happening

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Pippin Took
23:45 Jun 13, 2021

I like the story, very powerful. I have a question, how come a couple of the contests (#85 and #80) didn't have any winners? I've been wondering for weeks, I only just got around to asking someone.

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Corey Melin
00:42 Jun 14, 2021

Thank you for the comments! Not sure why there is no winners. I didn’t submit any stories at that time. I don’t pay attention to the winners much. Near the bottom of my list when it comes to Reedsy. Other contests I strive for winning. Just enjoy the other writers on this site. Love the name you have. My top books and what started me writing

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Pippin Took
13:33 Jun 14, 2021

Np :D LOL I like the name too. Yeah I don't care much either, but I was just curious.

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Corey Melin
13:57 Jun 14, 2021

On the leaderboard I believe # 2 and #12 stated they were judges. There are others but you need to go where it states judges

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Pippin Took
14:55 Jun 14, 2021

Okay, I can check it out.

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Esha Mahmood
15:54 Jun 29, 2021

Wow. Such a heart breaking dystopian story. How d'you write so well? D'you have some tips?

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Corey Melin
16:41 Jun 29, 2021

Many years of writing with the help of pro writing aid. Thank you for the comments!

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Esha Mahmood
13:14 Jun 30, 2021

Oh, so it's true that practice makes a person perfect.

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R. S. King
17:30 Jun 23, 2021

I couldn’t relate to the protagonist, but I loved his family.

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Corey Melin
19:32 Jun 23, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Deidra Lovegren
18:17 Jun 20, 2021

Excellent dark satire (my favorite kind). A perfect marriage of Jonathan Swift and Edgar Allan Poe... Very compelling.

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Corey Melin
18:31 Jun 20, 2021

Appreciate the comments!

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Cole Lane
03:24 Jun 20, 2021

Wow, this was powerful, kinda scary because it feels like this could be happening in the near future. It was an amazing take on the prompt. I like that there was some hope at the end because I would hope there would be!! Really great story Corey!

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Corey Melin
03:52 Jun 20, 2021

Greatly appreciate the comments. Events like this has happened and there are signs of it possibly happening again. I hope not.

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Kristin Neubauer
14:14 Jun 19, 2021

Gosh, Corey....this was haunting. You had a powerful opening sentence and then every sentence after kept me wondering what was coming next. The image that imbues the whole story - of the narrator staring at his old family home - carries such a mix of emotions. Fantastic work.

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Corey Melin
15:25 Jun 19, 2021

Greatly appreciate your comments!

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S. Nicole
23:35 Jun 18, 2021

Great job! You do very well to relate this to reality.

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Corey Melin
23:46 Jun 18, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Kimber Harps
13:06 Jun 16, 2021

Great story! And I know many people have already said this but it really does relate to reality. Which is sad but incredible that you can capture it so well.

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Corey Melin
13:56 Jun 16, 2021

Thank you the comments!

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Arya Jackson
13:46 Jun 14, 2021

Good story!!

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Corey Melin
13:58 Jun 14, 2021

Thank you for the comment!

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Ojasvi Teltia
05:56 Jun 14, 2021

I really like the story!

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Corey Melin
13:53 Jun 14, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Tia Jackson
04:53 Jun 15, 2021

Woah! This is quite a complex story, the idea in itself is quite the concept to grasp. It’s both relevant and somehow futuristic. Did it take long to write ? It’s absolutely phenomenal, from the beginning to the end. Your opening and closing line are such incredible ones, perfect hook and ending. Probably one of my favorites. Hope you keep writing, your stories are great!

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Corey Melin
13:54 Jun 15, 2021

Thank you for the comments! I would say it has some elements of what is taking place in reality and what could happen in the future. Also what has happened in the past

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Tia Jackson
16:19 Jun 15, 2021

I agree, and I enjoyed it ! Have a good day or night

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