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Teens & Young Adult Suspense

Author’s Note:

Whenever you see ‘Jenny’ or ‘Jason’ above a section, that means it is from that character’s perspective.


Jenny

“You look fine Jenny, stop freaking out,” Meg, my best friend says. I gaze at her in awe. Her long curly brown hair hangs down past her shoulders in waves, just brushing the small of her back. Her lilac-colored dress sparkles in the evening light, casting a million tiny pinpoints of light around the room. Plum colored flowers wrap around the base of the dress which touches the floor. She looks amazing. I glance down at my own dress. My family is less fortunate than Megs, so my dress is not nearly as extravagant. My dress is baby blue, matching my eyes. It’s made out of soft cotton, and it reaches just below my ankles. My blonde hair is done up in a simple bun with navy blue felt flowers tucked around the outside.

“Sorry,” I mumble, my cheeks flushing, “I’m just… nervous,”

“Well duh, it’s prom! And you’re always nervous,” Meg says as she puts the finishing touches on my makeup. I nod and clasp my hands together in my lap. I’m not a huge fan of parties and dances. I would give just about anything to be at home reading a book right now. “Oliver and the others are going to be here in about five minutes,” Meg says, checking her phone. Oliver is Meg’s boyfriend.

“Okay,” I say. Five minutes. Five minutes until I have to spend three hours at a dance. With people. Third-wheeling with my best friend and her boyfriend. Not that there won’t be anyone else in our group, Meg has invited some of her other guy friends to come with us as well.

RING!

“Looks like they’re here early!” Meg says, rushing down the stairs and opening up her front door. I grab my clutch and follow after her.


Jason

“Meg!” Oliver says, kissing her on the cheek as she comes out the door, Jenny following her close behind. Meg looks super excited, but Jenny looks like she’s about to have a nervous breakdown. Not that I blame her. I don’t want to be here either. I’d rather be home playing video games. Jenny gives me a small smile as she passes and gets into the very back seat of the car. Meg takes the passenger seat, Oliver takes the drivers, and I and a couple of other guys squeeze into the middle row. The whole way to the dance, Oliver, Meg, and the other guys laugh and talk. 

When we finally get there, my stomach squeezes. There were people everywhere. 

“I’m so excited!” Meg says, squealing. “C’mon Jenny, it’ll be fun!” Meg hops out of the car and grabs Jenny’s arm, pulling her towards the door.

“How about Jenny, huh Jason?” Oliver says with a mischievous wink. I roll my eyes at him and shake my head.

“Nah, I’m fine,” I say. Oliver just smiles and we walk in. 


Jenny

“Isn’t this just insane!” Meg says excitedly, pulling me along behind her. I wince as other people stare at us. I know what they’re thinking. Why is the rich girl hanging out with such a loser? Why does that blonde girl’s dress look like it came from a thrift store? I look down at the floor, my cheeks burning. Why did I ever agree to come to this?

Eventually, Meg gets over her initial excitement and we go to find the guys. The first song comes on and they all go out to dance. I sit at a table and watch them, trying not to look like a total loser.“Hey,” I nearly jumped out of my seat. Jason is standing behind me, looking sheepish. “Is this seat taken?” he nods his head at the seat next to me and I shake my head, looking down at my feet. We both sit there in awkward silence until I can’t bear it any longer.

“I’ll be right back,” I say, standing up abruptly. “Bathroom,” I make my way around the crowded dance floor, trying not to step on anyone’s feet. Meg sees me and mouths, “Get back here,” I shake my head and walk into the bathroom. I lock myself into a stall and tell myself to breathe. I rub my palms together to try to calm myself down. What is my problem? I’m probably ruining this for Meg. She probably hates me right now. She’s probably thinking, “Wow, why am I best friends with such a loser?” One of the small felt flowers falls out of my hair and into my lap. I pick it up and clutch it in my palms. 

“-a minute, I’ll be right back,” the bathroom door opens, and the music from the dance leeks into the room. I hold my breath and hope that whoever walks in doesn’t notice me. No such luck. 

“Jenny Ann Gilles, what are you doing hiding in a bathroom stall?” Meg says. She sounds playful, but I can detect a hint of annoyance in her voice.

“I-um,” I stammer, trying to come up with an explanation. Meg sighs.

“You have five minutes to get your sorry butt out here, and please, just try to have fun?” now she sounds really annoyed. The bathroom door opens and closes again as she leaves. I sigh and stand up, unlocking the stall. I’m just opening the bathroom door when suddenly several loud pops fill the room. I stare out at the dance floor, confused. That’s when I see the glass and sparks raining down from the ceiling. It looks as if several lights had exploded. The sparks hit the tissue paper decorations and they go up in flames. In second, the room is ablaze, people running everywhere, screaming. I freeze. My mind is fuzzy with panic and I just can’t seem to move. 

“Jenny!” a voice shouts. Meg emerges from the smoke and grabs my wrist, yanking me towards the now flooded exit. People batter against me knock me from side to side. Suddenly, Meg’s hand lets go of my wrist and I’m thrown backward, into the mass of panicked students. Someone shoves me aside and I hit the ground hard, my head slamming into the brick wall. Darkness envelops me.


Jason

My lungs feel as if they have been set on fire. Screams fill the air, though I’m not sure if they are screams of terror or screams of pain. I cannot tell.

I rush towards the exit, doing my best not to shove anyone. I lost Oliver and Meg somewhere back when the lights exploded and I can’t see them anywhere. I hope they made it out okay. I’m about halfway to the exit when I realize it’s hopeless, there’s no way to push through the crowd. I let out a frustrated sigh and run my fingers through my ash-covered hair. That’s when a flash of blue catches my eyes. I see Meg grab Jenny’s arm and run towards the exit. I try to make my way towards the, but the crowd’s too thick. I see Jenny stumble back from Meg and then get shoved to the ground. It’s too hard to see, but I can tell that she doesn’t get back up.

“Jenny!” I shout, stumbling towards her. Now I pay no attention to politeness. I shove people aside and run to Jenny as fast as I can. She has a deep gash on the right side of her head and it’s gushing blood into her blonde hair. Her face is covered in ash and her eyes are closed. I kneel next to her and pray that she’s alive. 

“Jenny!” I say, wiggling her shoulders. Please wake up. Please don’t be dead. I’ve never had a chance to tell you how I really feel. I don’t even know myself how I really feel. Jenny lets out a soft moan and her baby blue eyes flutter open. For a moment, she stares at me in confusion. She lifts her hand to her head and touches her gash wincing with pain as she brings it back down. When she sees the blood, her eyes widen in panic. “It’s okay, I’m going to get us out of here. Can you walk?” I ask, putting an arm under her shoulder to help her sit up.

“I think so,” Jenny says, her face contorted with pain. 

“Hey,” I say, “It’s going to be okay,” she looks up at me and I give her a small smile. She smiles back. Then suddenly, I’m leaning towards her, and she’s leaning towards me.

CRACK!

Ash and fire rain from the ceiling and I pull away. I shove Jenny away as hard as I can. Her terrified face is that last thing I see.


Jenny

It’s been three weeks since that night. That horrible, awful night. I’ll never be able to wipe the image of his body crushed beneath the burning heap of the roof. I tried to pry it off of him, but hands grabbed at me, restraining me. I remember screaming his name until I could no longer even whisper. He sacrificed himself for me. Why? It’s all my fault. If I had seen it coming down, I could have saved him. I could have saved him. But no. I didn’t. And now Jason is gone.

“Are you okay?” Meg slides next to me on the park bench. Am I okay? I do not know. I don’t know if I will ever be okay again. Not after seeing what I have seen.

Why did he save me? The question keeps resounding in my head, haunting my dreams, plaguing my every thought. I had never even bothered to talk to Jason before then, so why would he care about me now? And what happened right before the roof came down…

“Yeah,” I answer, not wanting to worry Meg.

“The scar doesn’t look that bad, you know,” Meg says. As if that's what I’m worried about. When the ceiling fell, a piece of metal sliced down the side of my cheek, nearly taking my eye out. The doctors said it would never go away, but it may fade with time. I wonder if Jason’s memory will fade with time. Maybe this pain that I am feeling right now will fade to a dull ache. Maybe I can learn to live with my guilt.

I close my eyes and take a deep breath. I squeeze my palms together. I can hear Jason’s last words whisper into my ears, “It’s going to be okay,”



October 20, 2020 22:09

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25 comments

Hi Felicity!! This was one of those stories where I think something is going to happen in the end, but turns out that something TOTALLY different occurred! I loved the plot twist you did at the end!! Great job! :)

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00:33 Oct 21, 2020

Thank you so much, Hariprya!!!

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No problem!! :)

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Artemisia Pearl
19:32 Oct 25, 2020

Felecity! Oh my gosh! This story is absolutely amazing! The descriptions are what got me! And oh my goodness! I could perfectly picture everything in my head! Well done!

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00:34 Oct 26, 2020

Thank you, Arte!!

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Radhika Diksha
15:08 Oct 22, 2020

Nice story, even I have written a story similar to it. I saw a sentence error "I see Jenny stumble back from Jenny" and there were some sentence formation errors. But you know we will overcome it, by practice. If you have spare time please give feedback on my stories too. Keep writing

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15:11 Oct 22, 2020

Thank you so much! I will be sure to go check yours out!

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Echo Sundar
15:20 Oct 27, 2020

This story is really great! I love the plot and the characters and it was just a very fun story to read.

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15:30 Oct 28, 2020

THank you so much!!

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18:16 Oct 24, 2020

Hey, great story! I just had a few things that I've noticed over the course of your stories: - Keep your verb tense consistent. That means if you're going to write it in present, make sure there's nothing that's in past tense. Also, I've seen a couple punctuation, capitalization, and grammar mistakes, but those aren't huge deals. All in all, good job!

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19:25 Oct 24, 2020

Thank you so much, Ink!

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Chris Buono
23:10 Oct 20, 2020

Another ending that took me by surprise. Wow, I was really getting excited for Jason and Jenny, but good story telling isn’t always happy. Great job, Felicity!

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00:04 Oct 21, 2020

Ha ha, thank you!

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Hallie Blatz
19:56 Oct 31, 2020

How could you do this?! You’re horrible! (In the sense that you killed a character I was beginning to like. Please don’t take it literally.) You got me emotionally invested in a very short amount of time so good job on that. Sincerely, Hallie

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20:18 Oct 31, 2020

Thanks, Hallie! No offense taken. ;)

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Hallie Blatz
01:49 Nov 02, 2020

😊

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Claire Wingfield
22:04 Jan 29, 2021

I LOVE LOVE LOVE this! it's such a sweet story! I do like happy endings but I also really like sad ones like this😢😢

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20:07 Jan 30, 2021

Awww thank you so much, Claire!!!! :)

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Phoebe De Neve
15:15 Dec 09, 2020

Great story! I almost teared up at the end to be honest. I really liked how you put in different point of views.

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15:02 Dec 11, 2020

Aww thank you, Phoebe!

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22:30 Oct 20, 2020

AHHHH WHYYYYY😭😭😭😭😭 I shipped them so hard but the thingy 'sad' on top gave it away. I knew he would die just couldn't accept it. This was also beautiful! You have a way off captivating your readers-- well me. Everytime I start I just can't stop till I get to the end..I really liked it but sad that Jason died. Kinda annoyed with Meg... and poooor Jenny😭. But once again Beautiful story!!!

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22:31 Oct 20, 2020

Thank you! Maybe I should remove the 'sad', just to be less predictable. ;)

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22:47 Oct 20, 2020

If you want go for it! It would definitely surprise alot of people when they read😂

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R. K.
06:11 Nov 11, 2020

Oh! Now I remember, I read this before but I didn't know you then. Emotional, but I love how you didn't sugarcoat it. Life is sad because... life is real. Your website is awesome and I was awestruck by the black rose picture for this story (which would suit the new one too). Speaking of the new one, thank you so much for the dedication, I just saw. You're so sweet, I'm flattered beyond words :)

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14:29 Nov 11, 2020

Haha, that's okay! ;) Thank you so so much! And yeah, I hadn't quite come up with the black rose idea before I used that pic, so I'll probably change it. :) No problem!! :D

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