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The slender locks of brown hair fell on my face, escaping from the messy braid. The air got cooler and cooler, making my floral frock move as if it was alive.

I took my dad’s hand, and just sat there, watching and listening.

β€œIt’s been a long time since we’ve seen the sunrise,” I quietly said, resting my head on his shoulder.Β The cool breeze reminded me of my mom.

β€œIt sure has, pudding. Your mom and I used to walk up to this hill every morning and watch the sunrise. But when we had you, we had something more important to watch every morning."


I giggle, thinking about how my parents would have looked like when they were younger.Β I remember my mom’s big blue eyes, and how her face was always glowing to match her long flowing brown hair.

My dad though,Β I couldn’t picture him.

He always had a cold, stressed look on his face.Β Ever since my mom had first been diagnosed with cancer, I had only seen him with worry and stress all over his face. Neve


I turn around, and look at him.

He suddenly seemed so relaxed, he seemed calm and care-free, as if there wasn’t a worry in the world.Β I hadn’t seen him look like that in so long, It was refreshing. When my mom passed away nine months ago, Dad was a wreck.Β He still is, but he’s getting better.Β 


I watch as two little kids splash around at the shore of the beach.Β One pulled their mom in, she laughed as the bottom of her sundress got soaked. They all looked so happy together.

β€œI remember when I used to do that to Mom,” I said, looking at my dad.

He didn't answer.

Instead, he smiled and shed a single tear.

I looked up at the sun, that was now over halfway above the horizon.Β 

β€œYou know what we should do today?” He asked. β€œWe should go have fun at the beach. Take a walk, go wading at the shore, make a sandcastle, and go get some Ice-cream."

Mom and dad always took me to get Ice-cream every Sunday morning, we hadn’t gotten any since she died, so I gratefully accepted. β€œI'd love to, dad!”

β€œPerfect. What do you wanna do first, pudding?" He asked.

β€œI think we should walk along the shore, right in the sun,” I said, slightly smiling.

I stood up, smelling the sand and water mix into the air. The sun was shining so brightly in the sky, It reminded me of my mom, she always smiled brightly just like the sun. I don't know if this is a curse or a blessing but every time I look at the sun, I always think of her.

"Let's start walking!" Dad said, taking a few steps, waiting for me to catch up with him.


***

We both walked, but didn't say a word, we just smiled as the warm air hit our faces.

Just then, SPLASH. Dad shoved me into the shallow of the water!

β€œHey!” I yelled, pulling him in with me and laughing as he fell on his butt.

β€œNow I’m completely soaked,” he grinned, splashing water all over me.

β€œYou started war, dad!” I said loudly, beginning to splash him over and over. I hadn’t had this much fun ever since mom, and I never wanted it to end.


***

After a few minutes, we got out of the water.

Great, now we're completely soaked." I shivered, as the slight breeze made my dress blow around in the wind. The sun was straight above us. Still shining brightly. A huge smile took over my face, as I admired it. Just like I used to admire my mom.

I was staring up at the sky, lost in thought, when I suddenly walked right into someone.

I jumped back, startled. The woman I ran into quickly walked away.

β€œThat’s why you don’t daydream while you’re walking,” Dad laughed.

β€œI wasn’t daydreaming! I was just thinking!” I said.

β€œWell, you sure were smiling. Were you daydreaming about boys?” Dad said teasingly, causing my face to blush bright red.

β€œDad, stop!” I said, looking around to see if anyone heard him. β€œI was just thinking about how the sun reminds me of mom,” I told him.

He looked at me. β€œHow’s that?”

β€œHow it’s always shining, and makes us feel warm, just like Mom did," I paused, looking back at the sun. "Everyone takes the sun for granted though, they all expect it to be there tomorrow just because it’s here today. Kind of like what I did with Mom. Everything would be different without the sun. But there’s no guarantee that it’s always going to be here.”

β€œYou’re right,” He said quietly. β€œYour mom shined bright and beautiful, that’s all."

There was no absence of noise. Everything went quiet, and I didn't like it.

"Anyway, sandcastle competition?" I asked.

β€œYou’re on. One hour, best castle wins,” he said, grinning.

***

I worked hard on mine. I used all the skills my mom had taught me, she was the best at making sandcastles. I also made a quick visit to the gift shop to get some toy flags, umbrellas, and other decorations for my castle. I even picked some flowers to make it pretty. By the time I was finished, my sandcastle was up to my waist. "I'm done with mine." I exclaimed.

I looked over at my dad’s. His was a bit smaller, but it had more detail than mine.

"You're not the only one," Dad laughed. "Let's pick someone to choose." He said, calling the women I bumped into earlier.

β€œSorry about bumping into you earlier. Which sandcastle is better?” I asked her.

β€œI love the one with the more detail." She stated, as my dad did a little happy dance around me.

"Whatever, that wasn't even fair anyway." I jokingly kicked my castle over.

"How about I make it up to you by buying you ice-cream, Your Sandcastle Majesty?" He laughed.

β€œI guess that could do. But only if we watch the sunset while we eat ice cream." I giggled.

β€œSure,” my dad said, as we walked up to the ice cream stand. I got chocolate, and he got vanilla.

***

At the top of the same hill, I rolled out the blanket.

I sat down, as Ice-cream was dripping down my fingers.

My dad was quiet, I think he was thinking about Mom. He stared off into the distance.

The warmth of the sun was disappearing. It was replaced with the same crisp air from this morning.Β I watched as the sun got closer to the ground, vanishing below the horizon. The sky was painted black, and the stars looked like a large hand had crushed a beautiful, sparkling diamond and tossed the dust into the sky. They twinkled in the night like a million pieces of broken glass on a wet pavement.Β 

β€œGoodbye, Sun,” I whispered, as I watched the moon coming up and reflecting in the water we earlier splashed in under the sun. β€œI really hope you’re back tomorrow.” 

October 12, 2021 13:20

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So this is a bit different from all my other stories, as you can probably tell. I’ve actually been wanting to write something like this for a while, and I'm happy to FINALLY share it with you all! :) Thanks for reading, and if you read this whole thing too, double thanks for reading! Hope you enjoyed (if you did, maybe leave a like or some feedback? πŸ˜‹ Hehe.)

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Keya Jadav
08:45 Oct 13, 2021

You totally knocked it off! This is brilliant!! C'est beau. :)

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Elliana Ramirez
14:12 Oct 12, 2021

I wanted to keep on reading. It's so nice to find an author who catches my attention from the start. I love how much of the dad's and daughter's relationship you made me explore in such a short amount of time. Beautiful ending. Now, I'll just have to search for more of your writing. πŸ’•

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Thank you! This was my first time writing like this, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading! πŸ˜‹

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Philia S.
06:10 Oct 15, 2021

I absolutely loved this! The father-daughter relationship is so heartwarming! You portrayed that wonderfully! A lil critique: 1) I noticed a few tense switches. 2) '...I had only seen him with worry and stress all over his face. Neve...' Whoops? XD 3) And then there's this line in italics which I didn't get, mind explaining?: 'There was no absence of noise. Everything went quiet, and I didn't like it. ' Otherwise you did a great job! Loved it! :D

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Svara Narasiah
02:12 Oct 14, 2021

Such a sweet and sad story--LOVE reading those. Your writing style flows and is immaculate. No grammar mistakes at all (except you did capitalise "ice cream" for some reason but that's not even worth mentioning) I'm so happy to find such a talented writer, and I'm pretty sure I'm gonna binge read your stories sometime soon :D very well done

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Thanks! This was my first time writing a sweet and sad story, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading. But if you read any of my other stories, they are gonna be complete sadness lol πŸ’•

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Keya Jadav
08:42 Oct 13, 2021

Wow Akshara! I couldn't help but smile the whole way through. It is such a heart-melting story, especially for me. It was fun to read the beautiful father-daughter relationship carved into words, especially how the protagonist's father tried his best to fill the aching void. --> Here are some minor notes. Hoping you don't mind it. My locks of brown hair fell on my face, escaping from my messy braid -- Here, I feel that there is a repetition of 'my'. Maybe it could be rephrased as "The slender locks of brown hair fell on my face, escapin...

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Thank you! This was my first time writing a sweet story, so I'm glad it came out well. :) *Does a little happy dance* I'm going to change "My locks of brown hair fell on my face, escaping from my messy braid" to "The slender locks of brown hair fell on my face, escaping from the messy braid." Thank you, so, so, so much for reading and commenting. πŸ’• Also, what did you think about the nickname "Pudding?" :)

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Keya Jadav
10:03 Oct 13, 2021

No problem! :) And yes absolutely, I loved the nickname "pudding". Quite cute and graceful.

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Thank you! :) I completely agree with what you said in your bio: To give a maximum of $25 on a weekly basis without having the true possibility of winning is an expense that I do not have. Sure posting to profiles is free now, but how long before Reedsy start charging to do that too?

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Keya Jadav
10:31 Oct 13, 2021

Yes, exactly. I really hope it changes back to the way it was. All fair and good.

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Aww, what a short but sweet story! Really captivated me <3

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Thank you! Your advice really helped! :)

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