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Mystery Science Fiction Thriller

โ€œMaxwell, did you drop her?"ย 

โ€œYes, sir. Should I come back, or will you do the opening?โ€ย 

โ€œI need you here, Maxwell. I guess, there are some things we need to talk...to discuss about. Come back here ASAP.โ€ย 

โ€œSure, sirย DallWall.โ€ย 

โ€œGood.โ€ he was about to disconnect his speaker when he remembered something. โ€œOh, and...sheย has no clue?โ€ย 

Maxwell chuckled manically, and replied, โ€œNope. And I donโ€™t think she ever will.โ€ย 

โ€œHaha, good, Maxwell. Donโ€™t let me down, not like that weasel did.โ€ย 

โ€œOh, I wonโ€™t, sir.โ€ย 

โ€œYou know, there was something about you that felt trustworthy to me. I am never wrong.โ€ย 

Oh, sometimes everyone is bound to being incorrect, sir. Maxwell thought, but just chuckled as a response. โ€œThank you, sir. It is an honor to be working for you.โ€ย 

โ€œOh, I know. Thatโ€™s how everyone feels!โ€ย 

โ€œWell, other than that weasel.โ€ย 

DallWallโ€™sย voiceย chokedย up a little, and he felt a bit uneasy about his words. โ€œNow, Maxwell, donโ€™t ever mention his name.โ€ย 

โ€œOk, sir.โ€ย 

โ€œI want you to reach the dome in another ten minutes. You remember, the app we were talking about? To track him?โ€ย 

โ€œYes,โ€ย 

โ€œWell, I think I am officially feeling comfortable with the app. Meaning, Iโ€™ve just become aware that we wonโ€™t really need herย after all.โ€ย 

โ€œWhat? No, sir, we need her!โ€ย 

โ€œHuh? You dare speak against my words Maxwell?! This is low, even for you, and that weasel.โ€ย 

โ€œBut the police can figure and might throw us in jail instead of her! Do you want that to happen? We built her so that she can take all the blame!?โ€ย 

โ€œYes, yes, you do have a good point. But what if she isnโ€™t behaving good? I did put emotions when building her, which was already risky.โ€ย DallWallย spoke, hesitantly.ย 

โ€œWe did plan the punishment! Sheโ€™ll be afraid. Let her enjoy her first day of โ€œWestview Middle Schoolโ€. When she comes home, weโ€™ll tell her about theย norms andย consequencesย there are forย allย her actions.โ€ย 

โ€œHmm, ok, I do like the sound of that. Great work today, Maxwell.โ€ย 

Oh, I am much cunning than you are,ย DallWall, and once the time comes, with her, you will be banished.ย 

โ€œThank you so much, sir. It is an honor for me, really, to be hearing such positive words from a wealthy man like you!โ€ย Maxwell hated saying these gooey things to him, it made him flinch.ย 

โ€œNow, enough of the talking, start the engine.โ€ย 

โ€œI sure will.โ€ he laughedย ferociously.ย 

โœธโœธโœธย 

Soon, Maxwell did reach their dome, andย DallWallย smiled a little, and stopped worrying. He relaxed a little, and soon, they both went inside to their main work room.ย 

โ€œSo, you had said something about our rouge tracker?โ€ย 

โ€œYes, and I am quite excited. The thought which has come to me is that we can use this to track that weasel. Once we do, we can bring him here. Just, about that Beta, I donโ€™t know. I feel like she is useless now.ย What are your thoughts, Maxwell?โ€ย 

โ€œAs I had told you before, we need that android. You see, itโ€™s not only that piece of technology we want from your soโ€”โ€ย 

โ€œDonโ€™t you dare speak about him. He betrayed me. He changed into an android! He lied to me and almost tried toย kill me. He will never have a place in my heart.โ€ย 

Ha! Poorย DallWallย blames his child, but if only he knew that there was a darker force, toying inside him.ย ย 

โ€œI am humbly sorry, sir. I fear that I should not have spoken about him. Itโ€™s just...nostalgia, you know? I just thought about your son and my mouth had blurted it out by accident.โ€ย 

โ€œWhatever, Maxwell. But do not repeat this again...I cannot tolerate it.โ€ย 

โ€œYes, sir.โ€ he looked down, but glanced atย DallWallย again. โ€œYou may carry on.โ€ย 

โ€œThank you.ย Now, what I was saying is that this app is the key to our success. Once we get the piece,ย Iย can doย what we wanted.ย Or,ย weย can do what we had plotted all this time. I feel like there is no point in waiting and waiting for something to happen.โ€ย 

โ€œBut I think we should wait. Developing the app and all of that is good news. But, what if, some glitches occur. When we assigned Beta to do the work, and asย aย android, sheโ€™ll be able to do the mission with no problems!ย Patience is key, sir, so I feel like we should hold on to the idea of the app.โ€ย 

โ€œHmm, since you are my most trusted adviser and my right-hand man, Iย trust you, Maxwell.โ€ย 

โ€œThank you so much for listening to me sir, this will surely help our mission indeed!โ€ย 

Oh, poorย DallWell, this will help me very much, indeed...ย 

โœธโœธโœธย 

โ€œHey, Lan 2.0?โ€ย 

โ€œYes, master.โ€ย 

โ€œYour father is on to you. He has developed this app, to track you down.ย To hunt you. He has also built some android, named Beta2021. Iโ€™ll tell you the location and all of that, and when I get the chance, I will make sure that you also become like aย fake human, like her. We will discussย all ofย this a bit later, but for now, make sure to amp your guards up. Iโ€™ve tried to distract him for some time, and bought you a chance to capture her andย DallWall, and escape, but you need to do as I say, ok?โ€ย 

โ€œOh no, master. Are they on to me?โ€ย 

โ€œYes, but you can first trick that Beta girl and make her be your friend. After that, Iโ€™ll tell you this all later, but you have to make her come to our dome, and I will deal with her later. That way,ย DallWallย and poor Beta wonโ€™t know whatย is going to hit them.โ€ย 

โ€œOh, I see, I see, master. I will be expecting you here soon.โ€ย 

โ€œMe too, Lan, me too.โ€ย 

No one is going to know what will hit them...

And just like that, Maxwell disconnected the call and went back toย DallWallย to discuss more things with him. About this app the two had worked on for a long time, about how to hold off on it, and other more official and formal matters.ย 

February 21, 2021 18:41

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Don't we ALL hate double-agents like Maxwell??? Haha, but anyways, I have an announcement for you all! I will soon have my 100th story in Reedsy posted, and just for the fun of it, I will pick 20 characters in that story who are ACTUAL people in Reedsy. This is kind of like first come first serve type of thing. There will be: 1. 1 Main Protagonist (the Leader of the good people) 2. 1 Main Antagonist (the Leader of the bad people) 3. 5 People who are working with the good people (including the leader, these 6 people are in the good side) 4....

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19:01 Feb 21, 2021

Hi! Can you please choose me? My name is Devaki!

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Avnee Writes
19:02 Feb 21, 2021

I'm the second one here! My name is Avnee!

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hi Laila! i think my name in the story would be . . Kamryn :) I'm 9th btw

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Rachel Smith
19:11 Feb 21, 2021

Hey! I'm Rachel. Looking forward to reading your story!

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THESE ARE ALL OF THE PEOPLE WHO ARE OFFICIALLY IN MY STORY. AGAIN, SO SORRY IF YOU ARE NOT INCLUDED. I TRIED TO FORM THE LIST BASED ON WHAT TIME EACH PERSON SAID THEIR NAME INTO THE COMMENT BELOW. AGAIN, SO SORRY! I WILL SURELY INCLUDE YOU (IF I ALREADY HAVEN'T) Main Protagonist: 1. Devaki Inadmar Main Antagonist: 1. Avnee Writes 5 People working with Protagonist: 1. Laiba 2. Rachel 3. Valerie 4. Isaac 5. Nainika 5 People working with Antagonist: 1. Kamryn (Amythyst) 2. Katya (Kate) 3. Leroy (Jose) 4. Luna 5. Sapphire ...

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Ana Govindasamy
10:52 Feb 23, 2021

Awww, thanks so much! and YAY I GET TO BE EVIL MUWAHAHAHAHAHAH ๐Ÿ˜ˆ๐Ÿ˜ˆ

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I AM SO SORRY BUT I CANNOT ACCEPT ANY MORE NAMES!!!! I already gave more than 20 names...so I have to check who wrote their comment the fastest...so sorry is you don't get picked. Please know it is NOT because I don't like you or anything, it's all about speed and time. THANK YOU FOR ALL THE PEOPLE WHO SUBMITTED THEIR VIDEOS...I REALLY APPRECIATE YOU ALL!!! <333333

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That Asian Creep
20:11 Feb 21, 2021

Hey Haripriya... Super story :) Woah 100 stories next? Thatโ€™s some achievement. When I joined Reedsy you supported me so much, and thank you for that! Random question, but are you fluent in any other language (apart from English, youโ€™re more than fluent in that)

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Izzie Q.
03:43 Feb 22, 2021

Hey!! haha I'm kinda late but I would LOVE to have the honor of being in one of your stories!! You've been supporting me and it makes me feel really welcome here on reedsy! we are all so lucky to know you <3

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Thank you so much Izzie and Sahana! I love your support! It really motivates me to read your comments! Also Sahana, hmm, not really. I am learning Spanish if that is what you mean.

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Izzie Q.
23:35 Feb 22, 2021

Heyyy same!! I'm using that Duolingo app tho! I'm learning Spanish, Greek, Japenense, and Thai! I've got my hands full but English is my main launguage!

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Haha, we have a talented person up here in the comment section!! THE ONE AND ONLY....IZZIE!!!! :)

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Izzie Q.
23:52 Feb 22, 2021

Awww!! Hahah that made me smile, thank you!!!

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That Asian Creep
09:19 Feb 26, 2021

Ooooh. I'm fluent in English, Tamil, Malayalam and Hindi, and I'm learning Korean, Latin, Greek, French, German and Chinese.

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Izzie Q.
12:08 Feb 26, 2021

omg thats AMAZING! Wow, you are really talented!! Wheres one place you really want to travel? You could show off your skills haha WHAT makes you want to travel? is it to see the culutre, to be with family, to eat food etc

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That Asian Creep
09:18 Feb 26, 2021

Oooh. Yes, that's exactly what I meant. That's interesting

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Ana Govindasamy
19:33 Feb 21, 2021

This story was great! The narration felt a little robotic and clunky, Iโ€™m not sure if that was purposeful or not, but I loved it nonetheless! Well done and good luck for your 100th Reedsy submission!

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Ana Govindasamy
19:36 Feb 21, 2021

Thanks so much Laila! :)

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Philip Clayberg
22:15 Feb 21, 2021

Interesting story. Thank you for writing it. Sounds like Maxwell is a sort of double-agent, playing both sides against each other. It also reminds me a little of the movie "War Games", where Joshua (the supercomputer at NORAD) asked, "Shall we play a game?" Btw, were all the characters human? If not, which one was the app (or was there more than one app)? Editing comments follow: You dare speak against my words Maxwell?! [comma missing after "words"] which was already risky.โ€ [the period should've been a comma] โ€œI sure will.โ€ he l...

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Thank you so much for your feedback. I will fix all of them. To answer your question, yes and no. I think if you read the first part of this story, you will kind of understand.

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Philip Clayberg
01:53 Feb 23, 2021

I'll go back and re-read that section of your story ... and I'll try to do it as a reader, not as both reader *and* editor. Hopefully, that'll help too.

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Philip Clayberg
01:57 Feb 23, 2021

You're welcome. I did go back just now to read the first part of your story (before the three large asterisks). And I'm sorry but I'm still a little confused. Maybe you could explain it more simply? If it was a game of chess, I would probably ask for a diagram showing the board, the pieces, and then the moves made each turn. Even then, I might still have to ask *why* a certain piece was moved and *why* it was moved to that specific square.

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Umm, ok, I will try to explain it as simple as possible. So, basically there is this android named Beta2021, and she doesn't know that she is being used for something bad. She thinks that finding that rouge robot will make her "master" (aka. DallWall) happy, but DallWall is a bad man, and only his trusted friend, Maxwell knows that. Now, Maxwell is being a double agent, because Beta2021 is being sent to find the rouge android (aka. DallWall's son, who turned himself into an android), and Maxwell knows that since DallWall's son betrayed him a...

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Bonnie Clarkson
22:49 Mar 31, 2021

very well written. Would like to know more about dome. Like a cathedral? Like for astronomy? Hope a prompt so you can continue.

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Bonnie Clarkson
22:44 Mar 31, 2021

Very well written. Would like know more aax

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B. W.
17:04 Feb 22, 2021

I'm sorry that I really haven't been leaving feedback or anything on your stories lately, though you do make a lot really quickly. This was a great one like usual and I loved the prompt you used for it ^^ I'll give this a 10/10 :) good luck with your 100th story.

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B. W.
23:19 Feb 22, 2021

No prob ^^ so you're adding people into the 100th story?

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B. W.
01:42 Feb 23, 2021

If you don't mind me asking this, could I maybe be in it? It's fine though if you already have a lot of people.

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I am so sorry, you kind of responded a bit late! I will definitely dedicate a story for you separately!

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