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American Coming of Age Drama

Alice 

I was walking down the street staring into the store’s display window at a beautiful dress. It was light pink and was flowy with a belt of rhinestones around the waist. I looked at it wishing I had it for the dance happening on friday. I walked inside and asked the employee to let me look at the dress and try it on. She said I could but to be careful not to ruin the dress in any way by having it touch the floor or a rhinestone falling off. I agreed and she led me to my fitting room. When I was putting on the dress I noticed that it fit perfectly. I could not believe how stunning I looked with it on. I quickly looked at the tag and it said 2,000 dollars. No way I could buy this. So I gently took it off, tears in my eyes and pain in my heart. I put it back on its hanger and put my clothes back on. I looked in the mirror before leaving the fitting room and sighed wishing I could afford any clothes that were not from a local grocery store, like Walmart and Target ( even though my parents think Target is expensive). I walked out of the dressing room with a fake smile on my face and my eyes glistening with tears forming. I didn’t want the girl to know how upset I was so I quickly gave her the dress and practically ran out of there. I walked all the way home. 

Sarah

I saw Alice walk out of a store so fast that I almost didn’t have time to know it was her. Of course now one can miss her off-brand clothes she probably found in a dumpster behind walmart. I looked at the shop and it was way out of her league. I walked in and saw a dress that was light pink and had a rhinestone belt on the waist. It was pretty but I had a better dress hidden in the back of my closet that I've only worn once and will never wear again. I knew that this is what Alice wanted so I got it. Only 2,000 dollars, it's definitely not what I would wear if I didn't know Alice wanted it. I walked back to my white jeep and threw the dress in the back and went back to what some people would say is my mansion. I called Lisa to get over here asap for a photoshoot with a new dress I got, she agreed. I can't wait until Alice sees it and creates a scene.

Asher

Mom made me take my little cousin who was visiting to the park. It was right across from this girly shop. I saw Alice walking by it and seeing a dress in the display window. She walked inside. Alice was nice and she was friendly but she rarely talked to anyone outside of her friend group. If you are looking in from the outside you would think she is really social with how she acts with her friends at lunch but in every other class, she's quieter than a mouse. I know what you're thinking. Why am I telling you all about alice. Well we were really close when we were little. Me and her-, Alice ran out of the shop with her eyes all red like she was holding back tears. Then I saw Sarah and she saw alice. She grinned before going into the shop. And came out 10 min later with the dress from the display window. I knew what she was doing. I was also close with Sarah when we were little, so was Alice. The three of us were inseparable. Until middle school started and we had our first girl-boy party. We played spin the bottle and Alice spent the bottle and it landed on me. Sarah gave her a death glare like she was going to kill her. But everyone cheered Alice and me on, so we kissed. It was middle school so all we did was a light lip touch. After that, Alice and Sarah almost hated each other. I tried to hang out with both of them but no matter what the other would get mad. Soon I stopped hanging out with them both entirely until highschool started. Sarah started kinda paying attention to me. Then soon enough just started flirting. I was flattered of course but soon it got annoying. Plus I had my eye on someone else. 

Alice

After school today mom took me shopping for a dress at tj maxx. I didn't want to be here all day so I bought the first dress I tried on. Honestly I liked it. It definitely wasn’t the pink dress but it was ok. Me and my mom got home. I gently hung my dress up and laid on my bed. I imagined myself going to the dance in the pink dress. Having all eyes on me. Even his, seeing my beauty that's been hidden under hoodies and sweatpants. And best of all him coming up to me and asking me to-, my alarm went off at 6. Right at the good part. I needed to get a few chores done. I did my chores and it was 7:30pm. It was time to go to the spot to see julie. I've known her for 8 years but we never were really friends till about a year or 2 ago. I jumped over the fence and ran deep into the woods. There was a trail and me and Julie kept up with time so every time it grew out we cut it. I got to it and surely there she was waiting for me. I'm a grade older so I was busy with school events while she had nothing going on. So we only got to see each other at most an hour a week. We talked till 8:30 then we decided to go back. I got back and got ready for bed and before I went to bed I hoped for the dream again so I could see the best of the best for the dance. 

Sarah

Tomorrow was the dance and I was determined to ask Asher to go with me. We were the power couple of school, I like to think. At lunch I walked up to him with a smile. I asked “so what are you doing on friday?” he replied “ well there was a dance going on i was thinking of going with my friends.” i was determined to have him go with me, so i replied with “well i'm a friend so wanna go with me?” he looked at his friends and sighed and i was so sure he was gonna go with me but then he said this, “nope sorry maybe tommy will want to go with you”. I felt my cheeks getting hot with frustration and embarrassment so I stormed off, as I did I could hear his friends chuckling at me. At home I went straight to my bedroom and checked to see if Alice saw my posts and surely she did. I wonder why she didn't say anything today. That made me mad. I needed her to make a scene to ensure her reputation as drama queen still reigned. Maybe she was trying not to make a scene so she could get rid of her oh so fitting nickname. It was around dinner time so I went downstairs and yet again my family wasn’t there, they never were. I couldn’t think of a time they were in a couple of years. I was gonna see if my mother wanted to help me get ready for the dance but I guess I'll just call Lisa to come over after school. The chef came out with the food and it was delicious. I gave him my tip and went to my room and posted some more pictures on instagram. And did my self care night. I was gonna own the dance tomorrow. 

Asher

Today Sarah asked me out. I said no in the nicest way possible but it obviously embarrassed her ,the way my friends laughed at her. When I got home I had a tux sitting on my bed. My mom must have got it for me for the dance. I hung it up and went up to the basketball court with some of my buddies. I told them all about her, and they helped me come up with a plan to get her to dance with me. We even rehearsed. I loved my friends, they were always there for me. I went home and went straight to bed, seeing that it was early morning by the time we got done playing. At school me and my friends continued talking about it and soon I was buying my ticket. I was one of the first and me and my friends were spying on the booth to see if she bought her ticket. She did, so now I know she is gonna for sure be there. I got home and got ready for the dance. I was feeling excited and nervous for tonight. 

Alice

2 hours before the dance and I'm hopping in the shower after just putting on a face mask to look the best I can for the dance. I get my hair and makeup done after I get out of the shower and I still have 30 minutes till the dance starts. I wait a little and make up a fantasy in my head for the dance. 15 minutes go by and I put on my dress and shoes, grab my ticket, and go to the car. I have arrived at the dance and I go inside and give them my ticket. They give me a wristband and I go into the gym and the first thing I see is Sarah in the pink dress from the display window. This is not fair, just because she has the money doesn’t mean she can just buy anything. I walked up to her about to say something before her and her friends were surrounding me. The courage I had to even walk up to her slipped away and I went to run away to the bathroom but they cornered me. They Started saying all this stuff about me going to make a scene like I always do. They even made comments about appearance and finally a teacher walked up and I ran away as soon as I had the chance to. I ran to the bathroom and stayed there until my friends met me there. We went to the cafeteria to get food and then go back to the gym and start actually having fun. I noticed Sarah giving me dirty looks but I ignored her. Soon my mom found me in the gym and was taking pictures of me and my friends before we left. 

Sarah

Of course Alice had a mom who would come and take her picture. She had a dad who was hard working but still made time for her. She had siblings that she could hang out with. She was never alone, she didn't know what it felt like to be alone, like I did. It wasn’t fair that she got a family when all I had was staff that cooked me things and cleaned after me. I had someone for everything except family. I saw Alice walking to the bathroom by herself and followed her. I was gonna make sure she noticed my dress. When she came out of the bathroom I stopped her. “What do you want?” Alice said in a snarky tone. Good she is gonna help me with my plan. “Oh all i wanted was to show you my dress, isn’t it lovely?” She looked at me and her eyes started to fill with tears. “You know what Sarah, You know I wanted that dress and couldn't have it because of money. You walk around bragging about your money not giving a care in the world. The only thing i can say is it’s not fair, i do all i can right, i make good grades, i do my chores, i even manage getting bossed around by people here at school so i wouldn’t get anyone in trouble, and yet i have no money when you get terrible grades i don't know how your still in highschool, you don't have to do any chores because your daddy's money, and you boss people around and you are mean and a spoiled little brat, and get everything you want. So yeah I like your dress. It's lovely and I'm glad you like it too because now we have something in common, but you don't have to wave in my face.”

Asher

I went to look for Alice because I wanted to ask her to dance but she was always with someone so I wanted to say bye and tell her that I wanted to but she was already occupied when I found her next to Sarah ranting. I heard her say stuff that was harsh but really it needed to be said. Then sarah said this “ how dare you think my life is perfect you wanna know what isn’t fair? The fact that my dad gives me everything I say I want and doesn’t even give what I actually want. Which is a family, my dad is always working and never is home and my mom is always out at a bar or shopping or cheating on my dad, and I have no sibling to rant and I'm not talking bad about my parents to a friend because they wouldn’t understand like a sibling would. I'm always alone. You think that with the time my mom has to shop and drink and sleep with people she could spend time with me but she doesn’t and everytime i ask my dad he always brings up work and when i say something he just comments about how much i love his money and if i want to have money he needs to work. So I find it unfair that you have all this family right in your little home when I have a huge house filled with staff and just me and no one else.”Alice looked sad for Sarah but then it was my turn to speak so I walked up and said “ I find it unfair that you two abandoned me.” they both look at me and say in almost unison “what?” “When we were close we did everything with each other, until you guys stopped hanging out with each other and soon drifted from me” we all looked at one another and all started crying, laughing, and talking. About an hour goes by and Alice remembered her mom and ran off. I left soon after and the next day I saw Alice and Sarah talking during lunch and I joined them. Ever since then we were close again, we never became as close as we were, but we were close. I started dating Alice and Sarah actually fell for tommy. 

August 12, 2022 01:07

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Margo Harris
19:05 Aug 18, 2022

I like the story you tell about Alice wanting what Sarah has, Sarah wanting what Alice has, and Asher watching both of them from the outside. I think it's relatable for a lot of people. The story needs to be edited. There are several grammatical errors and it's often hard to tell who is talking due to the way it's formatted. I think if you go over it again it can be a really great piece!

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Betty Gilgoff
15:09 Aug 15, 2022

Interesting the way you write this from different perspectives, a useful ingredient for good story telling, although for me the story would work better if the characters turned out to be less predictable. That said, the essence of us all wanting what we don’t have, envying that in others, is definitely worth writing about. It will be interesting to read more of your work to where you go with this.

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