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Thriller Creative Nonfiction Science Fiction



β€˜Could I get some bread, eggs and Milk? A gust of wind whooshes through the door and slaps your face, you shudder. The cashier doesn’t seem the β€˜talky type’ He creeps you out. It’s like you’ve seen him before. You feel a chill traveling through your spine. The wind roars outside. Your inner ear wails due to this sound. Hailstones hit the glass door. Hailstones as hard as stone, as big as your hands.


There’s a strong, very strong blizzard, all the telephone lines are damaged and you were the only one dumb enough to forget to store food. You hear a giggle. You walk to the 6th aisle and see a badly wounded baby.Β She has hazel, brown eyes. Her hair is like a flowing golden river tied up in a β€˜Flora Fountain’. Her skin is like a snowflake soft, but delicate.Β You gasp. You feel a sudden urge to go caress her, the poor soul. You pick the icy kid; you take her in your hands as she whines. Oh My Gosh! She had a cut on her left leg which had to be treated immediately. It looks like she had been bitten by dogs. You take some water and wash and apply a bandage. You blow warm air at her face. She coos.


You feel a chilly, unhospitable hand on your shoulder, Gah! It was the cashier. He bent and said: β€˜Missy, The store’s shutting. You wanna leave or plan to stay here the night! Y-yes sir. You waddle of with the wounded kid. When you go out everything is weirdly quiet. You went to your neighbour’s house. Ring! Ring! Ring! No answer. Huh! Odd you say. She’s a social bee when you are not. You go to your next neighbour, Willow. She’s like you an introvert. Even she doesn’t answer. Very odd.Β 


You scream frantically and the baby starts to fuss. Mama! This brings tears to your eyes. You hug the toddler. Hailey. This is your name. Aily! Aily! Aily! The baby tries to repeat her name. Awwwwww!Β You chuckle. My Hailey. I love you.Β She was the apple of your eye. The blizzard was getting fiercer. Your house was locked from the inside. You panicked, scream frantically. Silence. Pure, deep silence. You help the injured child walk to the store. No one is there. Everyone vanished. You kick the door open.Β Martial arts finally came handy. Hiya! Iiya! Hailey attempts to copy you. Aww! You gush. You lock the door. You plan to survive here.


6 Years Later… 


Hi! I’m Hailey Marsh and this my diary. Well, it used to be a phone book that I found but I added some of my touches, and Voila! It’s mine. Voila is a new word I learnt. Mommy taught me! I love her, but we are the only ones on the planet Because of a blizzard. Mommy says that the blizzard happened because of global warming and defirestition Oops! Deforestation. now. Which is sort of sad but mommy says that one should never be sad, the sunny days will come, they always do. Oh! And now we have our own farm it has potatoes and tomatoes!Β And yesterday mommy surprised me with some Marshmallows! She’s a scintist Scientist. So, she somehow managed to grow them in the attic for my birthday!!Β 


- Hailey Marsh


26th December 2028 – 

I LOVE her! My birthday was yesterday {25th December 2020} I had a marshmallow! Anyways today, I saw a new plant growing it was very tiny and had 4 leaves, so I called mom and showed her. She said that it was a four-leaf clover! A four-leaf clover means good luck! And today, I found a name for the blizzard! The blizzard’s name is…… Snowa!! I know it sounds weird but I love Snowa! Oh! And mom showed me a photo of a peacock. Well, I haven’t seen any real animals yet but I have always wanted to see a Labrador! Mommy says that Snowa is getting fiercer day by day. I feel sad, and cold.


- Hailey MarshΒ 


Β Β Β Β 27th December 2028 – I found a Teddy Bear!! The colour is slightly faded but I love her! It is adorable!!!! Her name is Olivia Marsh! I wish I had a best friend except mommy, because mommy is always wondering about the future instead of actually living. I don’t Mommy says that I have a wild imagination and that if we were in a better position, I would be a prodigy! Prodigy means A person of remarkable talent. Not to brag, but my vocabulary is actually getting better!!Β 


- Hailey MarshΒ 



28th December 2028- OMG! OMG! OMG!1 Oh My goodness! Yesterday we went out to explore some more, and then we saw a bank which was open. By open I mean the door was open, not Functioning open. So, anyways we went inside armed with baseball bats. No one. We went down in the basement mom’s hand continuously gesturing me to stay behind. We heard a rustle, both of our hearts racing frantically and ready to kick the stranger’s butt. And someone jumped out! It was a boy. Mom’s age. Mom is quite young, she’s 34. So, this dude says that his name is Aiden, Aiden Miller. He has blue oceanic eyes like mine. His hair is golden. Like mine.Β Mom is allowing Aiden to stay with us at the super market but she tells me to stay away from him. I feel a connection with Aiden. Like I know him… Anyways Bye! I have to play with Olivia!


- Hailey Marsh



29th December 2028- So… Nothing much. I played with Aiden a lot! While mom was giving me the stink eye. Hmph! Aiden and me found out some old crosswords. And played with them all day! Comparing Mom and Aiden’s behaviour I think that Mom is a worrywart, While Aiden is REALLY fun! I saw mom and Aiden kissing behind the door today… I don’t know. I feel weird.


30th December 2028- I still feel weird about yesterday. Mommy noticed my behaviour and talked to me about eavesdropping and stuff. Anyways today was pretty boring.


- Hailey Marsh





31st December 2028- Hailey. My child. My daughter. My heart. Is now dead. She was playing outside when Snowa swept her up. My child is dead! Aiden is dead with her. My child, I cannot survive without you.Β Β Β Β Β Snowa KILL ME! Take me to my child, Snowa, Take me to MY CHILD!Β 


- Abigail Marsh






Snowa took her in too...


September 18, 2020 14:35

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Great job! How did you write this that fast?!

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Lol πŸ˜† this is one of my older stories. Ya know, before the glitch

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Ooooooooooooh. Good story! I like the names. And good job finding a way to use an old story!

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And I like your new profile pic! Is that you?

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Wait this is Sia right?? And if that thingy is you then I like your hair. (If it is not then I will still probualy like your hair)

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Hey, Sia! Upvote spree for upvote spree? (I mean, upvote Aerin, not me)

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Ya sure ! Sorry for late reply, was sleeping 😴

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Noice! I’ll upvote you now :D

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Ugh another 300 points gone!!

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how many points did you lose ?

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I have no idea. In total? Probably 3k.

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Hey guys don't think I am a superhero πŸ˜†πŸ˜†. this is one of my older stories which I saw that it fitted the new prompt I submitted it. Yope you all have fun reading it . Before the glitch some people say that this was similar a lot to Zilla's story The Quateris grocery store. so if you still think that this is copied, I am sorry but I guess I added my own touch to it. Thanks for reading!!

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Hriday Saboo
04:07 Sep 21, 2020

Ohh truly an amazing story. Beautifully described. I liked the name snowa. So far I didn’t find any mistakes. A bad news. The- One -who -isn’t -cool took more hundred points of mine. I am in a loss of 300 now 😭.

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Thanks Hriday ! Oh, I'm sorry about the downvoter :( will upvore u .

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Hriday Saboo
05:11 Sep 21, 2020

Thanks re. I will upvote you too. Means it’s disturbing that someone takes 300 points of urs without you even knowing

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Ya, they took another 400 pts. In total 900 poinys losss by now. But thanks

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Hriday Saboo
06:01 Sep 21, 2020

What! Your nine hundred points! Unbelievable

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Aveena Bordeaux
07:07 Sep 19, 2020

This was really good and the diary entries were great! Premade story or not, it fit really well with this prompt. I loved this!

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Hriday Saboo
08:14 Sep 26, 2020

Wowwww!! 28th in the leaderboard Whoa. Brilliant Upvote spree??

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Hriday Saboo
10:23 Sep 26, 2020

Thanks

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04:55 Sep 25, 2020

Hey, Hermione would you be kind to watch the first video it's on Harry potter. https://youtu.be/KxfnREWgN14 Sorry for asking your time, This my first time to edit video

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Hriday Saboo
08:17 Sep 26, 2020

Hey prathamesh A VERY VERY VERY BRILLIANT EDIT!!! KEEP MAKING MORE OF SUCH EDITS

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13:31 Sep 27, 2020

Thanks a lot Hriday

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10:11 Sep 24, 2020

Enjoy the upvotes!!

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thanks!! Stupid downvoter 5ook 1500 pounts +

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12:45 Sep 24, 2020

Welcome! He took 1000+ for mine too.

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14:40 Sep 24, 2020

Ya. Sorry for you too.

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Hriday Saboo
04:10 Sep 23, 2020

Congo for πŸ’― followers

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Hriday Saboo
06:54 Sep 23, 2020

No problem

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Hriday Saboo
04:10 Sep 23, 2020

Hey hermoine. The downvoter took another 80 points. 😒 I am so saaaddd

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17:29 Sep 22, 2020

β€˜Could I get some bread, eggs and Milk? ~ This should be "Could I get some bread, eggs, and milk?" With the double quotation marks and lowercase 'm' in milk. A gust of wind whooshes through the door and slaps your face, you shudder. ~ I think you're missing a 'making' before the 'you shudder.' I feel it'll help with the flow of the words. The cashier doesn’t seem the β€˜talky type’ ~ A period is missing here! You feel a chill traveling through your spine. ~ I don't think 'through' is the right word here. Maybe 'down?' Like "You feel a...

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Woah!! Thanks a lot Ria !! Will make the changes. Btw I love your name !!!

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03:09 Sep 23, 2020

Thanks! Could you please read my stories? It feels very nice when an author up high on the leaderboard comments on my work. P.S. I am in LOVE ❀ with your name. But shouldn't it be Hermione, not Hermoine? It's very creative, though, especially since you're a writer.

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Aww thats so sweet ! Sure !! Honestly, I'm not that high on the learderboard. Just 30 πŸ˜†. Oh and my real name isn't Hermoine I just kept it for a day but I LOVE Harry Potter. My real name is Sia, Sia Sharma ;)

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04:19 Sep 23, 2020

Np! You're still higher than me by like what, 40 places? And, yes, I know it's not your real name lol. Who'd be fortunate to be our lovely Golden Girl's namesake? Not me, that's for sure. I wish! πŸ˜‰ Oooh, Sia is a gorgeous name! It rhymes with my nickname, Ria. How cool is that? (Not that cool tbh xD)

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yass I know!! Thanks!! Ya know what ? Ur so nice I'm gonna upvote ya 10 places !

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Woww!!!! This was Honestly such a nice story and I loved the diary entries. Btw, Thank you for putting me in your bio!! Writer's block cure-er, eh? I'll take it!!

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Thanks 😊 Rachel !!!! ;)

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Ur a potterhead !!!! Meh toooo

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YEAH!!!! POTTERFAMMM

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Tessa Takzikab
03:48 Sep 21, 2020

I'm glad you're past your writer's block, even if you had to recycle a story. I would like to point out a few things you could change to make the story flow better. You start the story with an open quote, but you never close it. Using dialogue would help make more parts of the story flow better, like when Abigail names Hailey, because you wrote the story in second person, you might use the quotes to show that 'Hailey. This is your name.' is spoken, because otherwise, it seems like Abigail is the one who is named Hailey. Also, when you switc...

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Wow, thanks a lot Tessa !! Sure will edit that !

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okay, a bit confused on a few things...wHy Is ThErE a ToDDlER iN a StOrE tHaT lOoKs LiKe ShE wAs BiTtEn By DoGs? It's never really explained... First it's hailing, then all of a sudden it's a blizzard...I can see that, but why so sudden? how is everyone whipped out cause of a smoll blizzard??? "26th December 2028 – I LOVE her! My birthday was yesterday {25th December 2020}" this alone confuses me...it just said 2028 at the top of the entry, then it says 2020 in the side note so... the journal entries are kinda random, just saying, like this...

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Hriday Saboo
08:24 Sep 26, 2020

Upvoted you 50 points

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Hriday Saboo
10:23 Sep 26, 2020

Never mind

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Hriday Saboo
10:23 Sep 26, 2020

Thanks

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The Cold Ice
05:49 Sep 26, 2020

Fantastic story.Great job keep it up.I loved your story.Keep writing.Waiting more from you.Well written. Would you mind to read my story β€œThe dragon warrior?”

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The Cold Ice
06:14 Sep 26, 2020

Thanks.

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The Cold Ice
06:20 Sep 26, 2020

Just a request You can upvote me.And I will do the same.

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09:25 Sep 25, 2020

Siaa what did you do to your accountt

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11:57 Sep 25, 2020

Haha

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Omigosh! This story was so full of heart! I was so upset at the end when they died, though! This was an amazing story, and I loved the journal part at the end, that's super cool. The end is so saaaad, though!!

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Wow !thanks a lot Kylie ! Appreciate the time put !

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Hey, thank YOU for writing such a good story!!

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You're mentioned in my lastest story! Go check it out!!

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