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Drama Thriller

โ€˜Oh God, Oh God. Shoot! Mum and Dad that- theyโ€™re doing it again'. โ€˜Oh Lord, help'!ย 

This was the voice of Daisy McDonald. She had gray eyes. One in a million they say. She was one in a million. She could have been the next Bill gates. All she needed was a little push. But instead of pushing her her mindless parents pulled her down.Oh, poor, poor, powerless Daisy. Her parents were maniacs. Her mom a weirdly obsessed cat lady who hated her. And her dad, a druggist who kept her for money.


Daisy worked in an insurance company. She earned enough to live nicely but, life isnโ€™t fair.ย Her parents took all of her money and only gave her 3 % of it. She slept in the attic with rats surrounding her, she had bread and margarine in breakfast and lunch. Plus, if that wasnโ€™t enough, she had to walk to school which was 3 miles away from her home, and while being constantly called names like Daisy Mccrazy. She hated it. Her Dad loved the house whilst her mom hated it. Frederick liked it because it was old-fashioned.ย Virginia hated it because in her mind this was a hellhole. The house had a classic red roof with slates of bricks in a parallel pattern. It had creamy-coloured walls and a puffing chimney. Looked nice, right ? But as soon as you enter the darkened doorsteps of this house you'll feel a cold drought. A sixth sense telling you that its time to leave. Virginia had a long pointy nose and a pimple on it. People thought that she was a witch. Frederick, Daisyโ€™s dad had a shrunken face and a abnormally large forehead. With a gruff voice.


ย Daisy was powerless.ย ย โ€˜Daisy! Where are you...... Come to MOMMY!!โ€™ That was the desperate voice of Virginia McDonald, Daisyโ€™s mother whose black cat Queen Cymbeline always seemed to follow her. She was carrying a sharp knife with her. โ€˜Oh no, no, no, widdle Daisy is Papa's girl!!โ€™ This was Frederick McDonald. He was on drugs every day, every year since he was 15.ย ย 


Daisy was hiding in the closet. โ€˜Oh Jesus Christ, help, please!โ€™ โ€˜That's it!ย I need to kill someone! I am coming for you Daisy, I am coming'. Slurred Frederick in his gruff voice. โ€˜Ooh, I think we are playing Hide and Seek, are we? Well, I'm coming, ready or not'!!!! Said Virginia.ย ย โ€˜Oh lord! She-she's coming. Sh-she wonโ€™t kill me, right?โ€™ Daisy whimpered. โ€˜Oh, yes She will!' hollered Virginia. She could hear her dad beating his knuckles on the wood. The door flew open, and Daisy was killed. Blood splattered all over the room. Her barbaric parents tore out her organs. There was no need for her in the house. They had enough money to live happily and lavishly.ย ย 


ย 15 years later... on Daisyโ€™s death anniversary...ย ย 



ย ย Trring!! Trring!! Trring!! The rusted phone screams. This was very peculiar because all the McDonald relatives had either died or were in jail. Virginia picked it up, and said: โ€˜We donโ€™t need day-old magazines if that's what youโ€™re trying to sell.โ€™ Oh, no, no, no. Iโ€™m Daisy Mccrazy, Hahaha ha-haโ€™ said the voice in a creepy, high-pitched voice. And cut the phone. Virginia was petrified. โ€˜Uh-uh, F-Frederick y-you remember Daisy rightโ€™? โ€˜Who Daisy? The weirdo at the supermarket who's always so cheerfulโ€™? โ€˜No, our daughterโ€™. โ€˜Ohh her.โ€™ โ€˜Someone called on the phone an-and said that they were Daisy โ€˜. โ€˜What? That's impossible!โ€™ โ€˜We killed her.โ€™


ย ย A Few Days Later...ย ย Virginia was out for a kitty party. Frederick was at home, watching TV. Trring Trring Trring the phone rang. โ€˜Burning' hell!โ€™ He picked up the phone.ย โ€˜Ello Iโ€™m Daisy Mccrazy โ€™ I wanna tell you to rhyme, itโ€™s one of my favourites, here it goesโ€™ ...ย 


โ€˜Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-oย 


A scream, scream here a scream, scream there,ย 


here blood, their blood, everywhere blood-blood,ย ย 


Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-o'


ย ย And the phone cut.ย ย 


ย ย Frederick was horror-struck as he saw what approached him. Daisy. Daisy hovering in the air. Her hair cut into shrivelled pieces and her intestines leaning down like a rope. She sang distortedly:ย 


ย โ€˜Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-oย 


A scream, scream here a scream, scream there,


ย here blood, their blood, everywhere blood-blood,ย 


ย Old McDonald had a farm e-i-e-i-o'ย 


ย Daisy came closer and said: โ€˜Old McDonald scared?ย Old McDonald wants to Die!? Daisy Mccrazy will help youโ€™...ย A scream. And Frederickโ€™s dead.ย 


ย Virginia came home to see Frederickโ€™s dead body lying on the floor, next to the very closet Daisy was murdered in. His organs, tore out, like Daisyโ€™s. There was a note on his heart. It read: โ€˜Old McDonald is dead. And you are going to be.ย ย Virginia was panic-stricken. She had three friends, but all of them were fake, show-offs.


ย She too fainted.ย ย When she woke up, she was surrounded in darkness. โ€˜Hello? Anyone here? Please, please help me. My husband was murdered.ย Pleaseโ€™? No one. โ€˜Mom? Is that youโ€™? โ€˜Daisyโ€™? โ€˜Yes, yes itโ€™s meโ€™. โ€˜Look, Iโ€™m sorry about before, but someone murdered your dad. Lied Virginia.ย You have to help meโ€™. โ€˜Of course, Momโ€™ said Daisy smiling. But then her smile turned into a grin, then a snicker, only to reveal her blood-stained teeth. Daisy took out a blade and hugged her mom. Then slit down her throat into pieces. โ€˜Gahโ€™!ย Virginia woke up.ย ย She found writing on the wall in Daisyโ€™s room. It said: You never know if your nightmares become trueโ€ฆ...ย ย 


That night when she slept, she woke up to a โ€˜Thudโ€™ โ€˜Freddy could you go check on thatโ€™? But thatโ€™s when she remembered that โ€˜Freddy' was no longer alive. She went downstairs and saw nothing.ย Halfway up the staircase, she heard it again. Thud!ย She went into the hall to see the real Daisy banging her head on the ceiling. Thud!ย Thud! Thud!ย ย Then her spirit turned around to face Virginia. โ€˜Ello Mommy! Letโ€™s play hide and seek. Eh? Virginia stood there, unable to move a muscle. โ€˜Aaarrrgghhโ€™ Daisy charged to her mom, and stabbed her, again and again. Daisy Mccraz is happy.ย Daisy Mccrazy was happy.ย ย ย 


September 12, 2020 06:36

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Hey guys anyone spot a easter egg from Zillas story?

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07:22 Sep 13, 2020

The black cat Queen Cymbeline? Hey shouldn't you ask before using someone else's character as an easter egg?

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I dont know. In the comments, I think Zilla is fine with it. I don't suppose Akshat, or Amany asked the corresponding authors for Easter eggs. If this is offensive to Zilla or anything then I'll change it.

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Amany Sayed
13:31 Sep 13, 2020

Oh, well, actually Rhondalise told me I could use any of her characters. But, I do see Zillia is fine with it below.

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09:30 Sep 13, 2020

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Wow I am on fire today ! New story !!!!

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Woaaaah. This story is very horror-y. Really creepy, but really good. The ending was FREEEEAKY. Oh, and yeah, I caught the Easter egg! Hello there, Queen Cymbeline! Although, heads-up, even though this was minor, you should generally ask the creator of the character before you use it, even as an Easter egg. Like idk if Amany asked Rhonda for Vassi, but yeah. GREAT STORYYYYYYY! AND THE SECOND IS ONE DAAAAAAAY! KEEEEEEEP WRITING!

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Heh, thanks ! Yes ! Ohh Okay Thanks !!!!!!

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Orenda .
07:00 Sep 12, 2020

Daisy hovering in the air. Her hair cut into shrivelled pieces and her intestines leaning down like a rope. She sang distortedly: OMGG I VISUALIZED THIS AND MAN, SCARYYY hahaa Nice work again. And again, keep the quotes in mind:) Have a grrrrrreat day ahead!

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Orenda .
07:22 Sep 12, 2020

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Orenda .
07:27 Sep 12, 2020

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Lmao !!!!!๐Ÿ˜…๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿคช๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜œ๐Ÿ˜‹๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ˜‹๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿค—๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜ถ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜—๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜—๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜œ๐Ÿค‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜ถ๐Ÿค‘๐Ÿค‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿคฉ๐Ÿ˜œ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ˜‹๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿค‘๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜„๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜™๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜„๐Ÿ˜—๐Ÿ˜˜โ˜บ๐Ÿ˜—๐Ÿ˜ถ๐Ÿ˜’๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿคฉ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿคฉ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜†

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Orenda .
05:26 Sep 14, 2020

Ye siso, lookin at ye bio

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Orenda .
05:31 Sep 14, 2020

Ooooh yeeee man, Warrior of Boredom , I so love it<333

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Orenda .
11:35 Sep 16, 2020

Heylooo watchu doin? I'm just passing time lmaoo

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M doing algebraaaaaaaa Huhuhuuhuhhuhuhhhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhujujujuhujuhuhujuhuhujuhuhuhuhuhuhuhjuhuhuhhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuhuh7h6hhuhuhuhuhuhuhuh That was fun !!

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Orenda .
12:01 Sep 16, 2020

Omg algebra never seemed to enter my brain. And these huhus, climbed out the windows huhuhuhuh Yeah, it's always fun to spam!

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Rayhan Hidayat
07:17 Sep 12, 2020

Wow, the imagery here was super scary, especially the whole intestines-hanging-out bit. And Iโ€™m never going to hear that nursery rhyme the same way ever again...

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Hehe, even I was surprised by how scary that was lol.

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Zilla Babbitt
14:27 Sep 12, 2020

You asked me to read, so here I am. Wow! I like the inclusion of the nursery rhyme, it ratcheted up the tension for me. Nice touch. And I saw my Queeny! Mainly grammar problems. There's nothing badly wrong with the actual pillars of the story, but it's the way you tell it that makes it either delectable or disgusting to the reader. Always indent before someone speaks, and right after unless there's a dialogue tag. Manuscripts look messy, too, if there's lots of ellipses points and multiple exclamation points together (!!!). Write out num...

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:) You saw Cymbeline ! I read that story and I loved it. You could see the beach, the cats , everything! Okay.... tysm Again, Thanks !

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Zilla Babbitt
14:51 Sep 12, 2020

No problem! And I'm glad you liked my story :)

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:) if you have time, you could check out Angelic Friends. If you have time.

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Zilla Babbitt
15:06 Sep 12, 2020

I skimmed it! It was fun though I didn't comment :)

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Hriday Saboo
16:24 Sep 12, 2020

Upvoted you more๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜œ๐Ÿคซ

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Hriday Saboo
16:39 Sep 12, 2020

Thanksssssss!!!!!

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Hriday Saboo
16:10 Sep 12, 2020

Hey upvote spree?? Just upvoted you abt 107 points

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Hriday Saboo
16:39 Sep 12, 2020

Thank you sm

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Hriday Saboo
16:39 Sep 12, 2020

Ohh

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Hriday Saboo
16:40 Sep 12, 2020

Im 51 Hehe

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07:43 Sep 12, 2020

Ohhh, it was awesome and SCARY!! That intestine hanging out thing was really creepy. I have read your stories before 'the glitch' and I think you have improved a lot. Some little things I noticed; 1. In this sentence, '.... instead of pushing her her mindless parents....' there should be a comma after her. 2. Change the paragraph whenever a new person is speaking. 3. In sentences like, โ€˜Mom? Is that youโ€™? and โ€˜Daisyโ€™?, question mark should come inside the quotation mark. That's it, I think. Good job!!! Have a great day:) ~D

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Okay, thanks for the help. Editing!

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08:08 Sep 12, 2020

Anytime!! Happy to help:)

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04:16 Sep 19, 2020

Hey Sky, just posted a new story, mind checking it out?

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wowwwwwwwww Siaaaaaaaaaa thisssssss wasssssssss AMAZINGGGGGGGGGGGGG I'm soooooooooooooooooooooooooo late (yet again), but I'm so happy I read this!!! How do you get these amazing ideas? That ending was grate ๐Ÿง€๐Ÿง€๐Ÿง€ XD If you write anymore horror stories like this one, pleaseeeeeeeeeeeee tell me they're soooooooooooo good ~ Amethyst p.s. sorry for the excessive o's and e's XDDD

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EHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEH I LOCE THIS STORAYYYYY THANK YOU SO MICH BADBBDBDBABSB IVEBEENTRYINGTOWRITEONESINCEAGESANDBCBBZNDBFBWNNAD

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YASSS ME TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO np!! :) YOUSHOULDRRYANDFINISHTHESEARESOGOOD JCBEIBSXKHFVSKDB

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AHAHAHAH YASHHHHHH :)) YESHHHMAYBEINDAVACATIONS

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:DDDDDD YASSSSSSSYOUSHOULDDDDD

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AHAHAHHAAAAA OOOOOKH WE COULD TRY A COLLAB IN DA HOLIDAYZZZZ (if you're okie) Mah holidays start on the 10th of April!

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Orenda .
13:52 Sep 16, 2020

yoooooo, check out the quiz i created. Merci! https://forms.gle/TgaUcNjEzwrVSPTB7

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Orenda .
14:48 Sep 16, 2020

yeee thnxxx

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Orenda .
15:09 Sep 16, 2020

๐Ÿ’ƒ๐Ÿ’ƒ๐Ÿ’ƒ๐Ÿ’ƒ

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Hriday Saboo
17:37 Sep 12, 2020

Forty twooooooo!!! Youโ€™re killing it

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Hriday Saboo
08:39 Sep 12, 2020

Hiya sia good stories Liked both of them a lot And i am happy that you wrote stories (finally)

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Hriday Saboo
09:42 Sep 12, 2020

Hehehe ๐Ÿ˜‚ welcome

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okay wow. talk about a thriller, Daisy seemed like such a good kid though oof. I'm still shivering from reading that geez. The death of Daisy seemed kinda quick and harsh and well mean in general. 'The door flew open, and Daisy was killed.' I mean wow, so fast. Might have nightmares tonight ack. A few other errors that I can list of you want, but other than that, the plot was pretty solid (a few holes here and there, like why they wanted her dead so quickly), so yeah. I would say coolio, but I'm still shivering so yeah XD

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Tru Sorcerer
07:07 Mar 08, 2021

this is so incredibly loony, and sickening, like a horror movie, and by the way, it was awesome! XP happy today!

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Ohmilord THANKS!! XDD O.O..... Happy today..... wow............................thats so optimistic, man/dude/dudette/ you are amazing!!(can I put that in my bio?

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Tru Sorcerer
08:06 Mar 08, 2021

You want to put happy today in your bio? well, it's a greeting i made up almost three years ago and ya, it's so cool right? (ahem, don't take that as boasting XP) and i haven't applied for a copyright yet, so you can surely put it in your bio XD Happy Today! XP

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Yeah! Wowww! (Lmaoo nah XP) XDDDD you're the owner so you'll be there Mr. Sorcerer XDD happy today!!

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Tru Sorcerer
08:41 Mar 08, 2021

XD

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00:17 Mar 07, 2021

This was sickeningly violent. I love it.

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Hi, Sia. I just read your bio, realizing that you're having a hard time. Just remember that people are always there for you, and there's always a bright side. For now, though, let those tears out. You'll always feel better. After you cry, though, look for the positive. Look for the bright side. And all of us here on Reedsy care about you. A lot of people care about you. But the most important thing is that you care and love yourself. -Brooke D. <3

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I dont know how to respond to this. All I can say, is that thanks SO much. This comment, means a lot to me. You are so wonderfully kind. Thanks for brightening my day. :)

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You are welcome so much. You deserve it. :)

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Hi, Sia! If you read my new story, I think and hope it'll make you happy! :D If you don't read it, that's okay.

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Audrey S
21:04 Oct 21, 2020

Wow, I love the ending. I understand Daisy had a hard life, but sheโ€™s creepy! I love how she made phone calls, It kinda reminds me of stranger things. Another great story as always ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

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Audrey S
04:55 Oct 22, 2020

Anytime!

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Harley Quinn
06:45 Oct 13, 2020

Love the story ๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚ really suspenseful๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ๐Ÿ•ต๏ธโ€โ™€๏ธ keep up!!!!!!

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