Marriage Mirage (Pt 2 of TSoOS)

Submitted into Contest #104 in response to: Start your story with a character saying, β€œAre you coming tonight?”... view prompt

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Note: Part twooooo!!! Please comment any feedback you have and check my comment for a longer note!



Lionel

β€œAre you coming tonight?” Bea asked, tugging on my sleeve.Β 

β€œSorry Bea, not tonight. I need to get some sleep, before tomorrow. Big things are happening in a few days.” 

Bea pouted and crossed her arms, β€œyou’re a terrible brother.” She spat.Β 

β€œI’ll work on it.” 

Bea scrunched her face to try and hide her smile.

I swallowed a laugh and shook my head, β€œyou have fun at dessert, ok? You better come back and tell me all about the new treats you have.” 

Bea grinned and nodded, running out of my room.Β 

Once Bea had disappeared out the door I collapsed into a nearby chair by the fire. The weight of the day piled onto my shoulders, keeping me grounded and out of the clouds. Staying grounded wasn't the worst thing though, kept me focused, getting everything done faster.Β 

β€œYour highness, a letter has arrived for you.” 

I nodded and the maid hurried forwards with the note. I knew immediately the note was from Eve considering it was scribbled onto the back of a napkin.Β 

𝙸 πš”πš—πš˜πš  πš’πš˜πšžβ€™πš›πšŽ πš™πš›πš˜πš‹πšŠπš‹πš•πš’ πšπš’πš›πšŽπš, πš‹πšžπš πš’πšœ πš—πš˜πš  𝚊 πš‹πšŠπš πšπš’πš–πšŽ 𝚝𝚘 πš–πšŽπšŽπš? π™½πš˜πš πšœπšžπš›πšŽ πš‘πš˜πš  πš•πš˜πš—πš πšπš‘πš’πšœ πšπš˜πš˜πš” 𝚝𝚘 𝚐𝚎𝚝 𝚝𝚘 𝚒𝚘𝚞, πš‹πšžπš πš’πšβ€™πšœ 𝚊 𝚏𝚎𝚠 πš–πš’πš—πšžπšπšŽπšœ πšŠπšπšπšŽπš› πšŒπš˜πš–πš–πšžπš—πšŠπš• πšπš’πš—πš—πšŽπš› πš›πš’πšπš‘πš πš—πš˜πš . 𝙸 πš”πš—πš˜πš  𝚒𝚘𝚞 πš‘πšŠπš πšπš’πš—πš—πšŽπš› πš πš’πšπš‘ πšœπš˜πš–πšŽπš˜πš—πšŽ πšŽπš•πšœπšŽ, πš‹πšžπš 𝙸 πš›πšŽπšŠπš•πš•πš’ πš—πšŽπšŽπš 𝚝𝚘 πšπšŠπš•πš” 𝚝𝚘 𝚒𝚘𝚞. π™Έπšβ€™πšœ πš˜πš” πš’πš πš’πš˜πšžβ€™πš›πšŽ πš—πš˜πš πšžπš™ 𝚝𝚘 πšŒπš˜πš–πš’πš—πš, 𝙸 𝚐𝚎𝚝 πš’πš, πš‹πšžπš πšœπšŽπš—πš πšœπš˜πš–πšŽπš˜πš—πšŽ πš’πš 𝚒𝚘𝚞 πšπš˜πš—'𝚝, πš“πšžπšœπš 𝚜𝚘 𝙸 πšŒπšŠπš— 𝚐𝚘 𝚝𝚘 πšœπš•πšŽπšŽπš™ πšŽπšŠπš›πš•πš’. π™Έπš 𝚒𝚘𝚞 𝚍𝚘 πšŒπš˜πš–πšŽ π™Έβ€™πš– πšŽπšŠπšπš’πš—πš πšŒπšŠπš”πšŽ πš›πš’πšπš‘πš πš—πš˜πš , 𝚜𝚘 πš‘πšžπš›πš›πš’ πš‹πšŽπšπš˜πš›πšŽ πš’πšβ€™πšœ πšŒπš˜πš–πš™πš•πšŽπšπšŽπš•πš’ πšπš˜πš—πšŽ.Β -π™΄πšŸπšŽ

I smiled at Eve’s note, crumbs from chocolate cake creased into the napkin. That’s Eve for you.

Β Sighing I read over the note again. She made it seem important and it wasn't like I had anything else going on, so why not.Β 

I tossed my suit jacket into the corner and hurried out the door, hoping that if I was fast Eve would still have a little cake left.Β 

Eve must’ve heard me coming. I didn't even get to knock before the door flew open and she pulled me inside. Eve twirled in her dinner gown, the blue on her dress sparkling like Cinderella’s dress. She laughed before falling onto the floor out of dizziness.

I raised a brow, picking at one of the cookies on the dessert tray.

β€œYou seem giddy tonight?”

Eve beamed, β€œI suppose you could say so,” She said before she burst out laughing.Β 

β€œDid something happen? I’m lost.”

That made Eve laugh harder and I really couldn't understand what was so funny.

β€œAre you gonna tell me?”

She caught her breath, sitting up and quickly.Β 

β€œMy sister’s having her baby soon!” 

β€œThat’s great Eve!” 

β€œYou don't get it though,” She started, her face falling slightly. β€œScaip Cla babies are very rare these days. Indi has been super nervous the last few weeks because this is usually the stage the baby doesn't survive through. This is the stage when all of the women get sick and since we don't have medicine to help them they just have to push through and hope their babies will do the same.”

I stopped, watching as her eyes fell to the ground.Β 

β€œThere’s more, isn't there?” 

Eve nodded, refusing to look up. Her giddiness was completely faded as she walked over to her bed and sat on the end, tugging a blanket over her broad shoulders.Β 

β€œMy mother wants me home while Indi is in labor, plus some time after. She worries she won't be able to handle everything. Between handling my father's duties while he’s out of town, doubling as queen, me being here and Indi having the baby she doesn't think she’ll be able to do it alone.” 

A sigh escaped me and Eve glanced up worriedly.Β 

β€œIs that a no?” 

β€œEve, I-”

β€œI know we had the big plan and everything, and I still want to go through with it, but since you still have a few more weeks before you have to make your decision I thought maybe I could leave. Just for a few days and help my family at home. If not than you can drop me and find someone you will actually spark with. I’ll find a different solution. My main priority right now is my family, and Indi’s baby.” 

β€œEve slow down, I can barely understand what you’re saying.” 

Eve bit her lip and nodded for me to continue.Β 

β€œOn normal circumstances I wouldn't hesitate to let you go home, especially with what’s going on in your family.”

β€œBut?”

β€œBut, my father has placed in some recent…time restraints that makes my decision much more complicated.” 

β€œWhat are the time restraints?” She asked, playing with a loose string on her blanket.Β 

β€œI have to announce my decision for queen in two days.” 

Eve’s eyes grew wide as she stammered out a response.Β 

β€œLionel wha- why? Why in two days? What’s the rush?” 

β€œI’m not sure. I assume it has something to do with the Valles-Esten war.”

β€œWhat does that have to do with your search for queen?” 

β€œThe sooner I find a queen the sooner my father can step down and a new leader can step up, giving the people of Esten hope.” 

β€œAnd your father actually wants to step down?”

β€œDefinitely. He’s wanted to step down for years, since a few months after my mother passed away. And now that I’m old enough, the sooner the better, in his mind.” 

Eve stared forwards, not saying a word.Β 

I moved away from the wall and plopped down into the arm chair in the corner.Β 

β€œI’m really sorry to put you in this position Eve. You’ve got a few options but none of them are ideal.” 

β€œSo I can either go home and help my family and leave you to find a different queen or stay here to worry about my family?” 

I bit my lower lip, β€œthere is one other option I can think of.” 

Eve cocked her head, sitting up straighter.Β Β 

I exhaled shakily, resting my head on my hand.Β 

β€œWe could also continue with our plan and I could propose to you tomorrow.” 


Eve


I gaped, shaking my head.Β 

β€œYou can't actually be suggesting that?”

Lionel looked away, shrugging.Β 

I buried my head in my hands.

β€œThis is going way too fast, and we’ve basically planned nothing. What if the plan doesn't work? What if I can't get you troops? How can you be considering this? Haven't you sparked with anyone? You don't even love me!” 

I didn't realize I had shouted those last words until after Lionel winced and stood up.Β 

β€œEve I think I should go.” 

β€œI’m sorry Lionel, I didn't mean to yell. This just- it’s not going according to plan.”

Lionel stopped, and turned back to me, a spark of curiosity in his eyes. He sat back in the arm chair and leaned forwards.Β Β 

β€œWhat was your plan Eve?” 

β€œMy father wanted me to pretend. To win your heart and then reveal the truth and leave you after we had gotten what we needed for Scaip Cla to survive.”

β€œThat was your father's plan. What was your plan, Eve?” 

I sighed, pulling my hair over one shoulder.Β 

β€œI was hoping that if I was upfront during our first meeting you would agree and we could plan a fair trade. We would have weeks to figure all the small details out. How we would provide for the other persons country, how we would play a happy married couple.” I paused and met Lionel’s eyes.Β Β 

β€œIt surprised me when you agreed, but I just assumed you had to be super desperate or really anxious for the war to be over. Or maybe both. And then when it was time I would go home for Indi’s baby's birth and help my mother and then be back to sort out everything else here.”

A small laugh slipped out from Lionel’s tightly pursed lips.

β€œThis is definitely not according to your plan.” 

I shook my head, and Lionel stood up.Β 

β€œI really am sorry to put you in this position.” He said again.Β 

I sighed, frustrated that he was sorry. I wanted to have a reason to scream at Lionel and blame him. If I could blame Lionel, I could convince myself that this situation isn't completely because of me.Β None of what I wanted made sense anymore.

β€œIs there any way you could get an extension from your father? Do something else for him in return?” 

β€œAny ideas?” he asked and I could hear the sliver of hope creeping out in his smooth voice.Β 

β€œGive me the night and I’ll try to come up with something. Come back here before breakfast and you can escort me there after I’ve briefed you on the potential plan.” 

Lionel nodded, making his way towards the door. I fell back onto my bed, almost fully asleep before he even shut the door.Β 

β€œDon't stay up too late,” he added walking out, his shoes clicking down the hallway.Β Β 

I forced my eyes to stay open, getting up and taking my chair back to my desk before plopping down and pulling out a scrap piece of paper.Β 

β€œOk, Eve, all you need to focus.” 

I told myself it was like how I used to strategize with father and my cousin, Noam. Noam would come over on weekends and we would play Savior of Nations. Noam would go to one side of the grounds and plan his strategies with my uncle while I would do the same with father.Β 

β€œYou must think and consider every detail Eve. Think through all of your options and take small steps. Small steps will lead you to greatness. If you start with a leap there are chances you will fall. When you’re all the way back here there’s no way to see what’s that far ahead of you. Stick to small steps, to ensure you’re continuing on the right path.” 

β€œStay on the right path Eve,” I repeated. β€œConsider every detail and think through your options.”

I scribbled down different ideas, making multiple graphs as I tried to think up the perfect plan and by dawn coming up with any plan seemed impossible.Β 

After a number of hours of writing, crumpling paper, and nodding off I thought I had finally come up with something.Β 

β€œOh my god! That could actually work!”

I looked over my notes again, double checking.Β 

β€œThis is the best we can do,” I told myself, trying to reassure the anxiety inside of me. This felt like my only chance to have everything work out. To stay on the right path with my plan.Β 

I dragged myself to my bed hoping I could get a few hours of sleep before Lionel showed up. The sun barely peaked through the deep blue curtains, shielding me from the new day.Β 


β€œEve you have a visitor,” I heard someone say. I rubbed my eyes and recognized that the voice belonged to Liza, one of my maids.Β Β 

β€œYou might want to get ready quickly for this visitor,” She urged a grin lighting up her eyes.Β 

I shot up and cursed as I realized who the visitor was.Β 

I flew out of bed, realizing I had slept in my gown and I could see the disapproval in Liza’s eyes. She passed me a new dress, simpler and pastel colored for breakfast. I slipped in it as fast as I could before motioning for Liza to open the door.Β 

Lionel nodded at Liza before Liza glanced at me and slipped out the door. I went to the bathroom to fix my hair and makeup and watched Lionel in the mirror that faced out of the bathroom.Β Β 

β€œYou’re welcome to sit down,” I called out to Lionel who was awkwardly standing in the middle of my room.Β 

He sunk into the arm chair by the small fireplace in my room. That was my sanction, my safe place. Lionel seemed to feel the same thing.Β 

I pinned up my hair as best I could, spraying down the runaway strands.Β 

β€œDid you figure anything out?” He asked as I moved to my make up, picking out a light neutral.Β 

β€œYeah, I stayed up all night brainstorming and I think I actually came up with something decent.” 

I set down my palette and grabbed my notebook off my desk, passing it to him.Β Β 

Lionel crossed his legs, peering at my scribbled notes.Β 

β€œYou really think this will work?” He asked, glancing up from the notebook. I ran back to the bathroom, knowing I didn't have long before breakfast started and quickly put on a few layers of mascara.Β 

β€œYes. And if it doesn't than we will have to figure that out when we get there. Small steps lead to success.” 

Lionel set the notebook down, β€œOk, fine. I will talk to my father as soon as I can and get it all sorted out.” 

I smiled, β€œwonderful.”


As we arrived at breakfast and Lionel started towards his end of the table I grabbed his arm and pulled him closer.Β 

β€œThank you for all of this,” I whispered.Β 

Lionel flashed a smile.Β 

β€œMy pleasure.” 


Lionel

Talking to father about these sorts of things always got me super worked up. I had to do this for Eve and for myself. Having more time was going to be a giant relief. All I had to do was talk with father.Β 

The guards bowed as I walked through the open door to father's office.Β 

β€œAn unexpected visit?” Father immediately questioned.Β 

I felt for the paper in my pocket before nodding. Eve had given me her notes this morning before I left.Β 

β€œI fear that if I rush my decision for my queen I will make the wrong decision and Esten will suffer.” 

β€œAre you suggesting that you don't trust my judgment? I fully believe you will make the right choice tomorrow.” 

β€œThe thing is father, I have yet to spark with any of the women here. Therefore, I think it would be better to give me a little more time. Maybe two weeks?”

β€œLionel we need something to distract the public and give them hope. If they see that you have a queen and I will be stepping down soon they will have hope for this everlasting war to be over soon.”

β€œBut the public will not trust some random woman one of the guards picked up off the streets. I propose we do a meet and greet. Let the public into the castle and have them interact with all of the princesses. Then we take a poll and see who the publics favorite is. That way my queen will make the public happy and hopeful.”

Father raised a dark brow and thought for a long time.Β 

β€œIf you can organize this β€œmeet and greet” by tomorrow and have the event happen the day after then I will allow it and give you an extension.” 

I could tell from fathers sigh that my smile was too big for the occasion. I stood up straighter and smoothed my jacket.Β 

β€œI will send you all of the details by tomorrow night and the meet and greet will happen the day after.” 

β€œDo not disappoint me son.” 

I nodded, hurrying out.Β 

I basically skipped to Eve’s room, knocking over and over until I heard her grumble something to one of her maids.Β 

The maid from yesterday, Liza, opened the door and dipped into a deep curtsy, her red braids falling over her shoulders.Β 

I smiled back and walked through as Liza scurried away.Β 

β€œYou seem happier than I was last night,” Eve said, looking up from her book.Β 

β€œYou might want to put that down, you might throw it when you hear my news if you don't.” 

Eve furrowed her brows, closing her book.

β€œIs your news good or bad?”

β€œDefinitely good,” I said, trying to slow my words.Β 

β€œAnd the news is?” She pressed.Β 

I sat back into the arm chair by the fire, best place in Eve’s room by far.Β 

β€œMy father approved your meet and greet idea!”

Eve shot up from her bed and gasped.Β 

β€œNo way! Oh my god, no way!” 

She repeated her disbelief into those words for quite a few minutes before meeting my eyes.Β 

β€œThank you,” she said.Β 

I smiled, glad I could do something helpful for once.Β 

β€œBut since it was your idea you have to help me organize it.”

β€œOk. What do we do first?” 

I laughed at her excitement, β€œThat’s where my father's catch comes into play. We have to have it organized by tonight and it must happen tomorrow. Then we’ll poll to see who the public's favorite is and if all goes well, Father will give me a two week extension.” 

β€œSo I can go home the day after tomorrow?” 

β€œYes, but you must be back by Sunday. Four days is all I can give you, though I still need to discuss your departure with my father.” 

β€œI can't thank you enough Lionel.” 

β€œWe’re a team now, we have to work together.”

Eve’s smile grew, β€œSo, where do we start?” 

July 28, 2021 23:40

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Dhwani Jain
05:07 Aug 01, 2021

I HAVE BEEN DOWNVOTED!!!!!!! I HAD ABOUT 1100+ POINTS, AND NOW I AM LEFT AT 660+.... PLEASE HELP ME, MY REEDSY FRIENDS STOP DOWNVOTING NOW!!!!!

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awww I'm so sorry! I know how it feels to be downvoted and I'll do what I can, but remember your points dont define how good your writing is

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Dhwani Jain
02:48 Aug 02, 2021

Yeah, thanks a lot! It just kinda makes me mad, that some people have been on the leaderboard for months and they have remained on their places and they are not letting new ones to join them....

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yeah, I totally understand that

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Dhwani Jain
11:56 Aug 02, 2021

Yup!

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21:05 Nov 30, 2021

Hi

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15:25 Dec 04, 2021

How are you

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im good!! how are you?

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21:40 Dec 04, 2021

Good But falling into an endless cycle of Hamilton obsession.

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been there- it's quite fun XD

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14:42 Oct 16, 2021

This was a great addition to the first part! Yet another cliffhanger, wondering what Eve and Lionel are going to do. There were a few typos I caught here and there, but other than that, this story was awesome! the fourth Sanderson sister

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thanks so much!! <3

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01:38 Oct 17, 2021

you're welcome! <33

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Dhwani Jain
08:28 Oct 02, 2021

The post is out guys! I can’t believe it the number of views it has gotten! Please do check it out! I am really happy with the response and would love it if you guys too check the post out!!! ~ Dhwani Jain {02-10-2021}

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AMEEEE

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HELLLOOOO HRU WHERE YA BEEN HELLO

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HEYYYY GOOD WBUUUU IVE BEEN A LIL BUSYYYY WHERE HAVE YOU BEENNNNNN

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IVE BEEN GRATE πŸ§€πŸ§€πŸ§€ ;D how iz summer goinggg

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YAY THAT'S GRATE it's going good! I go back to school in like less than two weeks which I am NOT excited for, but we go to the beach tmrw for a week and it's the last thing in the summer and I'm exciteddd!! hbu? Done anything fun?!

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TJ Squared
00:12 Jul 29, 2021

oooooooooooooooooooooooooo definitely a surprise to see this mini series make a return! You're soooooooooooooooooooooooo close to 20 stories! that's a great mile-marker!!! I love the bits and pieces of emotion and details interspersed through this, like the characters are so developed that I can guess what they're going to say next. The details are lacking a bit, but that's because the pace is faster (not always a bad thing). I'll be looking forward to the future parts (cause that cliffhanger is just no good XD)! I noticed some very small...

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hehe yeah, I have a bit of a track record with struggling to continue series/cliff hangers but this one felt like there was more to say and yessss im so excited!!! I've been a bit slower to hit 20 than other ppl but it's fineeeee;) yeah, descriptions arent my strong suit but I'm hoping now that I've used the first two parts to lay down the ground work I can take a bit of a slower pace and I'll keep in mind to add more details:) omg thank you, you're a life saverrrrrr fixing em now thank youuuuu<333

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TJ Squared
01:16 Jul 29, 2021

I agree with that lol Makes sense Ofc, anything to help a friend of mine improve their writing ;) <333

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Dhwani Jain
11:51 Dec 15, 2021

Hey again! Please do check some of my latest stories/poems and comment on them. I have a blog too, if you can check that out! Hoping to read the Reedsycast soon!

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Will do! Oh cool, I'll check that out as well! Thanks, working on it! Love your character you sent in!

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Dhwani Jain
03:23 Dec 16, 2021

So, will it be a MC?

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not sure yet! gonna wait until I close the form to figure out characters:) I'll keep you posted tho!!

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Dhwani Jain
05:23 Dec 17, 2021

Ok

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Dhwani Jain
12:33 Nov 15, 2021

Hello all! https://wp.me/pd3y1A-fD Please check out my latest post, THE VIRUS, YOU AND ME, a podcast. I hope you all enjoy it as much as I did writing it! Dhwani Jain Dream DJ {https://djdhwanijain.wordpress.com/}

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Elliana Ramirez
13:22 Nov 02, 2021

hii! <3 I need friendsss πŸ’•

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Elliana Ramirez
17:28 Nov 03, 2021

lol heyy!

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Akshaya Sutrave
15:34 Oct 24, 2021

LUNA it's been so longgg

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omg ikkkkk how are you?!

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Akshaya Sutrave
14:13 Oct 29, 2021

I'm gooddd. how are youu?!

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im great!

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Akshaya Sutrave
05:43 Oct 30, 2021

Noice!! Doing NaNoWriMo this year?

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yep! I actually tried planning this year and i feel kinda prepared and at the same time suuuuper unprepared lol hbu?

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19:41 Oct 18, 2021

HIIIII

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hi!!!

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14:20 Oct 20, 2021

How are you?

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im good! hru?

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12:40 Oct 22, 2021

Great! My dad is sick but I'm not.

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aw sorry to hear about your dad but i hope you stay healthy and he gets better quickly!!

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Dhwani Jain
14:09 Sep 16, 2021

Happy Birthday (belated) to you, LUNANA!!! Hope you had a nice day?!

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I did, tysmmm!!!

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TJ Squared
16:01 Aug 21, 2021

Hey Luna! Ivy Carter is coming back sometime next week along with Abigail Cross, spread the word!

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omg yayyyy!!

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TJ Squared
20:51 Aug 21, 2021

yeah, I'm excited too :DDD How have you been?

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pretty good, hbu?

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TJ Squared
20:55 Aug 21, 2021

doing alright. do you/did you start school soon?

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I start monday:/ wbu?

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Sunny 🌼
21:47 Aug 14, 2021

man i wish i had your writing style luna- it works so WELL also i like where this is going there's a perfect setup for both some romance and some dRaMa

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omg ur too kind- tysm sarah!! your writing style is amazing too tho, i need to reed more of ur stories

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12:27 Aug 09, 2021

Helloooooooo! It's been a while since we've talked! I was wondering if you wanted to join my Reedsycast. ;)

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heyyyyyy!! And omg ofc I want to!!

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13:21 Aug 10, 2021

Thanks! I needed one more person, so here! https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLSfGEWmL2BlUwEvt8kKxgV1zp5XgPsc4BKje3T0R3HLz3TeRMQ/viewform

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yayyyy!!!

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Do we put a made up name or our reedsy name for the reedsycast character?

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18:57 Aug 10, 2021

I'm choosing names, but if you hav a name you want me to use, you can tell me.

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ok, sounds good!

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Dhwani Jain
14:52 Jul 30, 2021

Hello Luna, I am back, to read this story.... Here are some things that I noticed on the way: --> Once Bea had disappeared out the door I collapsed into a near by chair by the fire. {NEARBY SHOULD BE A SINGLE WORD, ACCORDING TO ME} --> She worries she wont be able to handle everything. Between handling my fathers duties while he’s out of town, doubling as queen, me being here and Indi having the baby she doesn't think she’ll be able to do it alone.” {TWO MISTAKES HERE, FIRSTLY, IT SHOULD BE 'can't' AND NEXT, IT SHOULD BE 'father's'} --> Tha...

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omg ty for those edits! I'll fix them now!! thanks! and yeah, I've had some people say it was slow at the end and got boring and some people say it was rushed so I'm getting the idea that this wasnt my best part two. Which is completely fine. Gives me an easier time improving my writing for part 3. I love that titleeeeee

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Dhwani Jain
05:09 Jul 31, 2021

You're always welcome!!! You can try out the quizzes I have in my bio. Also, a feedback from your end on my stories will be appreciated! :) I'll appreciate it if you use this title.... ;)

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I'll try and do all of those!! and yep, changed it a few days ago!!:D

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Dhwani Jain
02:46 Aug 02, 2021

Yeah...waiting. Yup! Checked it. =D

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Dhwani Jain
05:09 Jul 31, 2021

P.S: I just read, you changed the title ... XD

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Sia S
07:08 Jul 29, 2021

EKEKEKEKEKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE LUNANANNAANNANANNAANANANANANNAAA HILOOOOO SISSS WHERE HAVE YO BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEN?????? *ahem ahem* heyyyy, this was super sweet! the pace was a lilllll fast for me, but maybe thats just me, so yeah it was a lil boring towards the end, (no hate sis i love this) soo, maybe add a lil thrill okie? thats it from meee

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SIANAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA IDKKKKK IVE BEEN BUSYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY yeah, I've gotten that a few times. I'm hoping now that I've laid down the ground work for the series I can just focus on taking a slower pace and keeping things interesting. Thanks for the feedback and thanks for readinggggg<3333

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Sia S
00:57 Jul 30, 2021

YESHGHGGGGGHHHYYYHHGGGHHGG ME TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Okieeee, thanks for a great story!! <3

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I'VE MISSED YOU YOKIE SISSSSSSSSS <33

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Sia S
03:51 Jul 30, 2021

YOKIEEE :DD

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Heyyyyy As always this is my long note section sooo yeah 1. *sigh* I dont think I've ever been good at naming things but I especially hate this one. The "Two Sides of One Story" is kind of growing on me but "Extensions"? Seriously Luna? Anyways this is me pleading for title ideas, yet again 2. This story was a bit of a surprise. I usually talk about my stories a lot and give an obnoxious amount of updates, but I was very motivated to write this week and just went with it. Hoping to get pt 3 and pt 4 out in the next week or two!

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Dhwani Jain
04:11 Jul 29, 2021

DEALing with Marriage....rest, I'll tell more if I can think of after reading this story...

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ooooh ok! ty for reading!

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Dhwani Jain
03:00 Jul 30, 2021

Yeah...

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13:48 Dec 14, 2021

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