juggle, burst, crunch. / rotten

Submitted into Contest #102 in response to: Start your story with a metaphor about human nature.... view prompt

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Sad Friendship

"Times change, not human nature."

- Unknown



juggle, burst, crunch.


hey.


hey.


how are you doing?


never mind.


i don't care.


im pretty sure you don't too.Β 


i'm not good.


though as if you'd care


i'm just a toy? Aren't i?


a toy.


do what you want.


right?


remember?


remember when you said those three words.


to her.


to my best friend.


you knew.


you knew i liked you.


you didn't even know her.


but you said it.


just for fun.


for fun.


did you love her?


did you even know her full name?


you must have.


you must have gotten that info out


from your friends.


y'all loved to play.


not with coins.


with hearts.


you'd juggle mine, juggle hers, then juggle theirs


you'd drop mine


but you'd keep juggling theirsΒ 


juggling juggling.


you were good at it.


juggling hearts.


when you dropped mine.


it burst.


burst with tears, emotion, everywhere.Β 


emotion as sticky, as gluey, as the tears in my palm now.


was it fun?


for you?


your friends liked me


i thought they were friends.Β 


but they also wanted hearts to juggle.


i was dumb.


i dragged mine, half broken, crying on my hands to them.


i thought they'd help.


But they broke it.Β 


crunchΒ 


crunch


crunchΒ 


again


thoughΒ 


this time,


no emotions.


no gluey, sticky mess.


numbness.


how was i so foolish?


numb.


numb as ice.


i went home.


stayed there.


'cuz everytime i came out,


you'd be there.


no one knew.


there were so many secrets.


So many.


though I'm happy now.


i think.


partly happy.


but im cool with that.Β 


partly happy.Β 


i'm happy that you didn't juggle mine.


i'm happy you dropped mine.


i'm happy your friends broke mine.


'cuz things need to be broken


before they can heal again.


Heal.


The word sounds nice.


Heal.


They can heal again.






***




rotten



you betrayed me.


you said you'd never


then why did you


why did you leave me again


you know me


you know me very wellΒ 


yet you broke me


you went with them


the others.


who also left me.


toxic.


she was toxic.Β 


"i need a break from you!" she screamt.


why would you want a break from your best friend?


i wouldn't.


well now I would.


cuz you left me.


why?


why bestie?


was i something bad?


was I rotten?


or was that you.


i told you everything.


you never told me anything.


best friend.


"i need a break from you!"Β 


should i have said that?


should I have left you?


huh?


but now you're silent.


should i have left you?


i should have… shouldn't had i?


but I wouldn't.


you knew that.


you knew everything.


you knew me, my crush, my school, my house, my parents, my favourite songs, my likes, my dislikes, the people I love, the people I hate, you knew how much I appreciated you.


how much I wanted us to stay best friends.Β 


cuz you know.


cuz you know I need a friend.


i've always needed one.


soΒ shut up.


so i could keep you.


But now, look what it's done to me.Β 


it broke me.


i hope it broke you.


and i know it's not good to hope for such things.


but you weren't good.


and now it's my chance.


but i have no one.


you have everyone.


if i was brave enough to send this to you


you'd say "okay"


and go back to them


as if i was nothing.


but i was, wasn't i?


i was nothing.


i realize that now.


so, i write this now.Β 


for when I'm strong enough.


i'll send this to you.


so, i'm half alone now.


but being alone is better than being with you.


you are rotten.Β 


that's what you are.Β 


Rotten.


- Best friend




July 12, 2021 08:40

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126 comments

Deidra Lovegren
10:08 Jul 20, 2021

This would be an excellent piece for a slam poetry presentation! I’d love to see an actor do this as an audition piece or dramatic monologue. Very powerful

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God, when I saw your comment I literally grinned, thank you so much!! I really admire this coming from one of the authors I look up to! Thanks a lot :DD

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Deidra Lovegren
10:34 Jul 20, 2021

I'm a dork. And you've got mad talent. :)

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Philia S.
13:29 Jul 12, 2021

SIA. How are you? Did the frog-face peeps do something? I swear if they did......things are gonna be bad for them.. And 'but i have no one.' say that again, I dare you, say that again. No critique except a few typos and the punctuation was deliberate right?

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PHILA. why are you so sweet? Loll you're so sweeettt gosh, bless your heart *inner grandma talking * Goshhhh you really didn't need tooooooooo <333 you gon make me tear up rn- Thanks Phili (Pronounced Feele) Phila! Phili! Yayyyyy Tysfreakingm <333333 Oh, lol yup.

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Philia S.
14:20 Jul 12, 2021

Now, now, grandma, please! Ooooh, you'll gimme cookies? COOKIES! ME WANTS COOKIES! XD what can I say, it's hard for me to not care for a god-sister. Oooh new name! Ima add it to my list of names!

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"Shut up, you monster! Fine- don't melt your grandma with those puppy eyes o' yours. *only* one, okay?" XD girll- that is *such* a good title- tysm <3333 Yayyy

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Philia S.
14:47 Jul 12, 2021

AND LISTEN TO WHAT RUTHY SAID. EVERY WORD OF IT IS TRUE. And I say so.

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Yup, the queen has spoken. *Drop the mic*

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Oh my goodnesssssss YOU MADE ME CRY!!! WHY YOU DO THAT??? I love this so so so much. I love the words and the way they flowed with each other and the way that I cried... My tears be blooping out of my face!!! Blooping launching rapidly out of eyeballs I DON'T HAVE TISSUES! Once again, the story is great, but the fact that it made me cry, and now I have no tissues is pure EVIL. I love it! xoxo, Jex

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Hey Jessica!! Oh haha lol tysmmmmmmmmm this was one of my "darkest" pieces. I'm happy it was powerful :)) Thanks, lol so sweet of u :)

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No problem! Your stories are so nice to read. Very creative :)

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Aww, thanks so much! ❀

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Dhwani Jain
10:10 Nov 24, 2021

These are really nice, just a minute or two quick reads, but the emotions they portray are relatable, yet distant. The words were simple, yet the meaning was intense. I really liked them, Sia! Good job!

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Dhwani Jain
02:04 Dec 01, 2021

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Dhwani Jain
10:07 Nov 24, 2021

Hey Sia! How are you doing? It's been a long while since we talked. Well, how is everything going writing-wise?

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Blockkkkkkk Hey! I'm fine, you? :)

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Dhwani Jain
02:04 Dec 01, 2021

Me too, partial block. I am great too!!! Schools have started offline?

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Dhwani Jain
03:15 Nov 15, 2021

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Zz Entwistle
03:23 Nov 10, 2021

Emotional, dramatic, and relatable. It flows so well, like poetry, and I'm sure many people can feel the pain, having gone through similar experiences, but also remember that we can heal, like you say. "They can heal again." I was wondering - when the narrator addresses 'you,' does it switch from being the crush to the best friend in the second section? So well done!

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Thank You!! :) such kind words. Yes, it does, :)

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Dhwani Jain
09:53 Oct 23, 2021

Hey! It's been a while, eh? How have you been? Not seeing any new stories from your side, is everything fine?

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Hey! Yeah Everything fine, just got block.

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Dhwani Jain
04:17 Oct 27, 2021

Okay!

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Kay Ee
04:10 Oct 21, 2021

this poem i guess a poem or even a speech if someone were to present it was so heartfelt and enjoyable to read. -Kay

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19:45 Oct 18, 2021

Hello, this is Em! New name :)

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14:21 Oct 20, 2021

Do you get the joke?

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12:39 Oct 22, 2021

Most people think it's Hamilton, but it's actually historical, though I do love Hamilton.

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00:37 Oct 14, 2021

hey sia

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After months of just forgetting me, you come and be like "hey sia" Wow, saphie, wow.

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22:31 Oct 15, 2021

I never forgot you sia I was off reedsy i didnt talk to anyone- I took a break

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15:46 Oct 18, 2021

life :') yeah

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Yeah. A preview from something I'm writing. "I-I KILLED HER, OKAY!" Sarah shrieked. "What?!" Detective Myers gasped. "I'm gonna have to ask you to repeat that, Ma'am." "I-I'm sorry! I-I was just so mad, I- didn't know what to do! It was hard to see her, just- so happy. " She explained. "Pl-please don't take me to jail, please, Sir." "SHE KNEW MY SECRETS!" She wailed. "I think we should have a lawyer present." Her husband instructed. Detective Myers sighed, wiping his forehead with a napkin. "Take her to the office." He said. "Si-sir p...

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Philia S.
13:53 Oct 10, 2021

YOU DELETED THE SERIES? TvT

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Sorry, I found them a little boring, and cringey. Maybe I tye future I'll rework on them. Sorryyyy

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Philia S.
03:30 Oct 11, 2021

TvT THEY WAS SO GOOD- Also, when are you posting next, I miss your stories-

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I have blooock. :( Working on something, but it's too short.

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Philia S.
13:33 Oct 11, 2021

TvT *sends writing energy*

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These poems were so emotional, and they talked about real things that people struggle with all the time. You captured it so well and I applaud you for it. -the fourth Sanderson sister

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My pleasure, Sia. :)

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Danny E.G.
09:31 Aug 26, 2021

I'm soo sorry for not getting to your stories sooner, I was kind of inactive for the summer c': This was a great read, I find it really interesting. I like your way with words and I feel like you've expressed the subject of the story well ^-^

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Moon Fox
15:41 Aug 09, 2021

u go girl. Also say him phil O~O He's paralyzed by the pure awesomeness and poetry of the story. If I had to grade this it would be an A +++

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Ahahaha, thank you so much Moon!

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Moon Fox
15:37 Aug 09, 2021

Noice. Hey do you know people who want to do a colab? Im a bit bored of just writing. I miss people. Thanks!

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was this a true story or what because if it was AHEM fight me whoever did this~ you are so good at describing things, like the broken gooey hearts, and the line breaks added a lot to it as well :) this is one of my favourite stories~ BEERIFFIC 🍻🍻🍻 job! ~ Amethyst <33

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*nervous laughter* *maybeee it is* *or is it* Tha is so gosh darn much ame, any new stories? When am I gonna see one? ;)

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*AHEM MY 4 YEARS OF TAEKWONDO HAVE BEEN SUMMONED-* ;) asdfsjdkfjksd I want to write one, but I'm gonna wait for the new prompts to come out :>

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*XD 4 years of karate for meee* Dkkdjdjdjdjdjdj ikr

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*YAHOO KINDA TWINSIES* I'm planning on writing one, but no guarantees :> I might write it while camping lol XD

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15:49 Jul 21, 2021

So I got here after your comment. I had to read this twice. No, it's not because it was difficult. It's because of the intensity of the words. I like how this is written, a little different from your others but beautiful nonetheless. And yes, it's sad too. So...yeah, you got me!

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Hey! I smiled when I saw your comment, so first off, thanks for that :) Aw, thanks so much. It really helps me as a writer to understand and adapt :)) Thanks so much! It really means a lot coming from you, your stories are meaningful/ sometimes funny/ sometimes saddening. Haha, yes it is, thanks again! (God I said 'thanks' four times in this comment-)

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