" The Man who advised that Psychologists make us fool in their clinics !"

Submitted into Contest #72 in response to: Write a mystery where the detective realizes at the last moment that they have the wrong suspect.... view prompt

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Contemporary Crime Suspense

Once there was a man .He was used to of roaming here and there every time in the streets of the Lahore like in

past , City of Baghdad (The city of strangers ).He daily departed from his home during dawn and then returned near dusk ."Journey make you a great observer and thinker ,my dear son .So travel and make a journey whenever you get some tea time in your life because it is the history .All the great scholars ,historians ,philosophers were used to of traveling even Aristotle ,Plato ,Saadi ,Imam Bukhari and Herodotus ,Ibne Batuta always kept them busy in this for the learning "

,Ali 's father advised to him and died .

Right from that day he went for in the different streets of different towns and daily observe different people and wrote some morals lessons for the people .So that they may learn and stay away from the webs of different robbers in the fraud based society of fake doctors as even in this modern age of machines the crime and malpractice scandels are still going on since the age of Chaucer and to till this age of the Paulo who famously wrote "The Spy " but useless even after having soldiers ,police cops and crime petrol mobiles .Why !Why this all a young child thought and imagined in his mind and started to solve this mystery of the nature in post modern age .



So one day Ali picked his black goggles, cowboy hat and long detective coat _it was called detective coat for genius and the wisest fool Ali because he could keep all the strange and unique tools in this very secretly.


So,on the Thursday night he wanted an adventure journey because he had tied after meeting and visiting different types psychological sessions ,talking with doctors on the health and better future of his mother ,Sister and daughter .Who had the disease of paranoia of future prospects about their life and some one suggested him to take them to the famous psychologists doctors of the town who do the treatment with different types of intelligence tests or etc and the patients gets cured totally without medicine .For had in has to pay the fees of doctors in the form of pounds ,dollars ,Ruppees etc but it was useless for Ali 's family to get better .Rizwan told him to do so because his father visited to the psychologists and they made him good by saying ,"YOU WILL START TO FLY IN THE AIR FROM THE EARTH AFTER OBSERVING THE LINES ON HIS REALLY RIGHT HAND !",being Ali 's Neighbour Rizwan did so and suggested the best but alas there was issue or ambiguity .Which was always alarming and never letting sleep to Ali at night because he loved his family alot and had none in his life except his family and further he had no money in his piggy bank .



As it was said and advised to him by his father during his death ,"Journey makes us wise and good in observation and analysing the truth !". On the Friday morning .When he observed the cats and dogs rain .He went into the Gloria jeans Cafe .It was his favourite one restaurant in his native city and country Pakistan ,from which glass doors he also observe the walking ,chalking and the limping of the mouse trap as well as an investigator and detector like Sherlock Holmes and the whispering conspirators of Shakespeare 's plays.


While taking his first sip of the dark coffee and smoking his cigar from the window .He saw to a strange man .The man was a masked man and seemed like strange person .Ali just for learning and writing the lesson of the Friday .Started to chase that guy in the throng of the people to expose his personality .Who he was ...?.



The strange guy wearing mask was running very fastly , as fast as one cat found a tasty little Rat , and no one was observing to them .Ali ran and covered 5 walking steps in just one jump even .The day transformed into the darkness from the light even .Finally he got tired and whispered ,I can never chase that strange guy .Ali spoke these words in a very pathetic and emotional way ,"It was not a strange man or the killer of Sherlock Holmes 's novels but my own shadow and I was chasing to my own by my own hands ,minds and feets,hahaha! ".


After deep thinking while lying on the road and observing the time on his wrist watch , A great and sagacious Ali rose up and started to walk slowly slowly like an old Tortoise in the direction of his home .

Entered in his house and wrote his Friday 's moral in his book ,"Adventures of the fools patients !"Because after exposing the strange guy and being detective he learnt about his foolishness and got the secret of the false psychologists who looted in his past to his mother ,sister ,daughter and neighbours even with thousands ruppees ."PSYCHOLOGISTS MAKE US FOOL IN THEIR CLINICS ",Ali wrote and slept after switching of the lamp of his room on took the blanket on his face .Now he could sleep better because he found the cure of his mother ,Sister and daughter treatment by changing the fake psychologist of his towns who just had one purpose to make others fools as Ali became the fool of his own mind even after reading crime fiction of Sherlock ,Robert Louis Stevenson ,Edgar Ellen Poe and etc _when he observed himself a great fool who even did not know he was trying to catch not a criminal masked man but his own shadow ,the same as his family members were being manipulated by the fake psychological doctors just to theft the money .Only the reason was people have very strong faith on the witchcrafted psychological thinking and never tried to think ever in the solitude is I am not a genius but can be a great fool because I always thought about my own ego and judgements but not others .

When we will start to judge others by thinking about their acts after forgetting our personal intelligence of ego based attitude .Then this society will get success in exposing all the robbers ,criminals and looters in the society and every where will be peace .

Cause ,sometimes we are the criminals not others like but invisible only even we have eyes .




December 16, 2020 14:26

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9 comments

Shakeela Nawaz
16:50 Dec 16, 2020

V Nyc, amazing. Keep it up👍👍

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Arfa Rasheed
15:14 Dec 16, 2020

V.nice Your thoughts are v.strong .

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Zahra Zahra
04:00 Dec 21, 2020

You portray the realistic picture of the society in a very impressive way. well done and best of luck 👍

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Sadaf Rashid
17:23 Dec 20, 2020

Great. Keep it up Tahir.

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Saliha Huda
06:56 Dec 18, 2020

Very nice....

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Tooba Choudhary
10:14 Dec 17, 2020

Good work Tahir! Keep it up.👌🏻💯

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Mâ Rîà
17:13 Dec 16, 2020

Amazing story👌 Specially the last paragraph teaches alot✨.

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Rabia Ch
16:44 Dec 16, 2020

Wow. Amazing 👏

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Sara Gul
17:34 Dec 20, 2020

Fantastic good attempt..

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