Mar 20, 2021

Science Fiction Friendship Fiction

For Danny Glipo, because she came up with the character idea of Violet and mentioned Lucas.

She’s also awesome.

https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/danny-glipo/

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I strutted out of the door of the building, my heeled boots clunking against the pavement. My blazer ruffled in the wind as I gazed around the city. Long ago, I used to look at Ampleforth City with nothing but love. But now, mixed feelings raced through me as I looked around.

Everywhere you look, the influence of The Facility is there. The entire city has followed all of The Facility’s rules and customs. It has damaged this place. Imagine if you let someone borrow your jacket. When they give it back, it is dirty and the pockets are filled with things that were theirs. That’s what our city is like. The Facility had taken over this place. 

I hated that the city just let them do that. Sometimes, I even hated the city itself. 

But there were some small things that even The Facility couldn’t change, no matter how much their power grew. The crisp smell of pavement and baked apples that wafted through the air. Ampleforth City was a place of many smells, but the scent of pavement and apples were always there. 

The melodic wind chimes strung on every block. None were exactly the same. When the wind blew, the chimes danced on their strings, providing melodies that were soothing, yet ghostly. Some say the chimes bring back ghosts from years and years ago. 

The way our city held onto the old ways, yet embraced the future. Petchinas and dogs walked together on the streets. Phones and fabricusi alike were used simultaneously. Our citizens wore everything imaginable. From jeans and T-shirts to white dresses embedded with jewels.

The Facility could not change those things. Even if we followed their rules, our city would not crumble under its thumb. 

 As I walked through the streets, I breathed in the fresh air like I had never experienced it before. Some days, it actually felt like that. I would get stuck in The Facility’s buildings for days sometimes, looking at private information or testing superstitions. 

Thank goodness I was out of that place for today. The work was exhausting. Day in and day out, everything blended together into boredom. Looking at people’s private information to figure out if they had been doing anything that went against the rules. Working at a computsis, monitoring surveillance or working with financial issues. I barely paid attention to them, just to annoy The Facility. 

Although, there was one thing I enjoyed doing. Testing out the superstitions that could be either false or science. I would go down to the lab and test if a theory was true or not. Satisfaction would always rush through me when I discovered something new. 

Doing this was dangerous, of course. I was already doomed to die at a young age. I was also fated to lose someone I loved. But what was life without a little risk?

I flopped down on my couch, happy to be home. As I lay there, resting, I realized that everything was quiet. No curralises honked outside. No birds chirped in the trees. Even my neighbor’s vactria wasn’t running at the moment.  

Silence caused my mind to think. It wandered over to Lucas. Lucas.

A grin spread across my face when I thought of him. He was one of the only good things about working for The Facility. Lucas was the brightness in the dark of The Facility. I found this ironic, since his hair’s as black as ink.

He was all I thought about as I ate dinner. Every memory made me smile. We had been through quite a lot together. We’ve known each other since we were thirteen. 

I remembered the time we had kissed when we were playing a game of You Kiss or Miss at graduation. We had let go as quickly as we could, blushing like crazy. 

Or that time when I had broken my arm, and I had needed a robotic arm to fix it. Lucas had visited me at the hospital, and gave me flowers, along with a card that read, ‘Hey, Violet. Heard you need a robotic arm. That sucks. Don’t die from this, or I am not going to let you RUST in peace.’

All of these memories made Lucas seem normal. But I knew he wasn’t. A few days ago, he had told me his secret. He was from Terrundo. The only other planet besides ours that held humans. Humans that were more or less the same as the humans on Earth. 

When Lucas had told me that, I had thought that he was crazy. How could he be from Terrundo? It seemed impossible. Terrundo had kept their distance from Earth for years. We hadn’t even known they had existed until a few decades back. 

But Lucas never lies. He didn’t have a dishonest bone in his body. 

For once, I wished he was lying. 

For as long as I could remember, I had been taught by The Facility that Terrundo was their enemy. Earth’s enemy. I had been told that Terrundo was dangerous and unpredictable. That there would be a day when Terrundo will attack. 

Everyone in the city, if not the world, believed this. The Facility tells someone something, and they buy it automatically. It was sickening. If anyone found out about Lucas. . .

I shuddered as I lay in bed. That could never happen. It never will happen. I won’t let it happen.

But worry still nagged me as I drifted off to sleep.

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“Hey, Violet,” Lucas said, sitting next to me. “Another day at The Facility, huh?”

I nodded, looking glum. Now that I was here, staring at the piles of work, I couldn’t bring myself to do it. 

“Does The Facility know your secret yet?” I asked him, sipping my coffee. 

Lucas stiffened. I wished I could take that back. He knew the risks, and I could tell it terrified him. “I don’t think so. I have to be careful, though. Even more than usual. They’ve been building machines for months, and now, they’ve finished. The machines are ones that could discover who I am with just a click of a button. Not to mention how paranoid they’re getting.”

I furrowed my brow, concerned. “What do we do about that? You shouldn’t risk your life by staying in Ampleforth City.”

It hurt to say those words. The selfish part of me wanted Lucas to stay. But the rational part knew better. It was too dangerous. 

“I have to,” Lucas said. 

“Why?”

“Because-”

“Lucas, I suppose there’s a reason why you and your girlfriend are talking instead of doing your work.” A voice said behind us.

I turned, and saw the frowning face of Trina, our boss.

“Violet’s not my girlfriend,” I heard Lucas mutter. 

Trina ignored him and continued talking. “That’s the seventh time you have been caught off task this week. How can I know both of you are not spies from Terrundo?”

I glanced at Lucas, shocked. When he said paranoid, he meant really paranoid. What had gotten into Trina?

“I’m afraid that you’re going to be tested to see if you’re spies,” Trina continued. “Just for safety measures. In fact, everyone in this building, along with some people in the city, are going to get tested today. Having someone from Terrundo within our city isn’t just bad luck, you know. It’s deadly.”

I didn’t dare look at Trina. I feared that everything would be written all over my face. 

“But we’re not spies,” I protested weakly.

Trina smiled. “If you aren’t spies, then you have nothing to worry about while taking the test.” 

I couldn’t argue with that. Apparently, Lucas couldn’t, either. We were marched down corridor after corridor, until we stopped at two white doors. 

Trina nodded. “Go on in. The test is in there.”

I glanced to my right and saw Lucas’s hand shaking on the doorknob. Fear seemed to ooze off his body.

“It’ll be okay,” I mouthed to Lucas. He shook his head.

“No, it won’t be,” he mouthed back. He opened the door slowly and trudged in. 

What would happen to Lucas? Would he. . . die? I didn’t want to think about it. I opened the door and walked in, ignoring my racing heart. 

The room was the size of a closet. It was completely white. There wasn’t a speck of dust on the floor. It felt good to ruin that with my dirty boots. 

Whirr!

A chair rose out of the floor, looking ominous with its sleek look and black leather. I looked around the room. There was no exit. The door seemed to have disappeared. 

Might as well get it over with. 

I sat down on the chair, putting my arms on the armrest. The chair, despite its sinister look, was quite comfortable. 

At least, it was comfortable until metal straps wrapped around me, tying me to the chair. I gasped as it compressed around my body. My eyesight blurred. It was a miracle my bones didn’t snap like twigs.

A needle rose from a compartment in the chair and inserted itself into my neck. Poison seemed to writhe its way through my body. I screamed in pain, my head feeling like it had been set on fire. Black spots danced across my vision. I felt little webs of poison searching my brain, looking for any indication that I might be from Terrundo. It tore through my thoughts with such force that my brain felt like it was getting cut into tiny pieces.

After what seemed like an eternity, the poison dissolved. The metal clamps released me. All of the pain disappeared as quickly as it came. 

I blinked, and suddenly, the door was right in front of me. 

“If this room isn’t magic, then I don’t know what is,” I muttered, opening the door. I stepped out, and found myself standing in front of one of my co-workers. Pablo. A middle-aged man with grey hair and a kind look in his eyes.

“You’re not from Terrundo,” Pablo said approvingly. “Trina probably won’t kill you.”

“That’s great?” I said. 

Pablo laughed. “Ain’t that the truth. Glad you’re not dead.”

“Thanks. . . I guess.”

He walked away, disappearing down the corridor. He was always a guy of a few words. 

I don’t know how long I stood outside the doors, waiting for Lucas to come out. After a while, I couldn’t take it anymore. I opened the door to his room and walked in. 

The room’s chair was in the center of the room, but it was speckled with red. My stomach did a rollover as I stared at the chair. What had happened here?

I glanced around, but only this chair remained in the room. No Lucas. 

No. No.

I raced out of the room, desperate to find him. I refused to accept that Lucas was. . . I couldn’t even say it. As I sprinted through the building, I ran into Trina. I stumbled, almost tripping.

“Ah, you’re here, Violet,” Trina nodded. “I knew you weren’t from Terrundo. I have to tell you our plans.”

“Plans?” I asked as several screams rang through the hallways. More sounded, until a chorus of cries filled the entire building. 

For once, I couldn’t hear a single wind chime in the distance. It was blocked by the sound of agony. Something that I loved about the city had vanished. That thought chilled me to the bone. 

“Many of the people of Ampleforth City are being tested right now.” Trina said, closing her eyes for a moment as if she enjoyed the shouts of pain. “We’re testing their loyalty to Earth. I’m afraid to say that many of them are from Terrundo. Lucas is one of them.”

 Trina’s voice held no sympathy. She searched my face, looking for signs of shock. I did my best, but I was never a good actress.

“Lucas has betrayed The Facility,” Trina continued. “He has betrayed Earth. He, like the others, have been… removed.”

Removed?” I did my best to keep from panicking. My voice shook from the effort. “Is Lucas. . . dead? Will I see him again?”

Trina brushed off my questions. “The Facility will cleanse the Earth of the people of Terrundo. After years of The Facility’s hard work, the elimination of the people of Terrundo has begun at last.”

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189 comments

Danny ~
11:21 Mar 22, 2021

eep im sorry, i forgot to like vdgdgd :''''')

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W.W. Skybelle
11:23 Mar 22, 2021

Lollll it's ok XD

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Danny ~
11:24 Mar 22, 2021

xD lol thankss

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21:51 Mar 21, 2021

yay! your karma points are growing again! 🤗

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W.W. Skybelle
22:02 Mar 21, 2021

I'm happy about that. Thx for your support :)

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Amarah Friedman
19:26 Mar 20, 2021

What a compelling story! The plot is intriguing, and I just want to keep reading. These days, I find dystopian story unnerving, and yours certainly made me squirm. A quick note: in the beginning, your story shifted tense a few times between descriptions and actions. After the first few paragraphs, there was a cleaner flow, which made it more digestible. That said, I adore your descriptions of the city. There's always a place, a smell that just feels like home, and your story brought me there. Really nice.

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W.W. Skybelle
20:48 Mar 20, 2021

Thank you! I'll take that as a compliment :) Would you mind pointing out the places where I shift tenses? Thanks again! :)

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Amarah Friedman
00:39 Mar 21, 2021

That's definitely a compliment! Squirming is good-- you evoked emotion. Huzzah! These are the shifts I'm referring to: -Paragraph 1 stayed in past tense, but the phrase, "but now," followed by past tense "raced" was a bit jarring. It felt like a place you might switch to present tense to tell the story, but the rest of it was in past. -Paragraph 2 shifted into second person while the rest of the story was in first. I really enjoyed these descriptions, though. -Paragraph 3. In previous paragraphs, you used present tense to describe the city ...

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W.W. Skybelle
02:57 Mar 21, 2021

Lol XD Ok, I’ll change that soon. Thanks for pointing them out! I will try to soon :)

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11:20 Mar 20, 2021

I love that aesthetic and description; “Crisp apples and pavement”. That’s actually (not exactly but who cares?) realistic, and kinda cool. Very interesting!

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W.W. Skybelle
11:59 Mar 20, 2021

I mean, it is science fiction. Maybe they have tech to do that lol Thank you! :)

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12:06 Mar 20, 2021

I wish our streets were that like.... aesthetic

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W.W. Skybelle
12:10 Mar 20, 2021

Lol same

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06:42 Mar 20, 2021

I saw the robotic arm and thought of Danny straight away lmao- The plot was good and I liked the dynamics between the two characters. I think the betrayal was sPiCy, though I feel it was slightly predictable. Maybe you can make a way to make him seem less suspicious? Good work, Annabelle! 🌌

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W.W. Skybelle
11:58 Mar 20, 2021

The betrayal? *confused* Do you mean like Lucas disappearing? But thank youu! :)

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23:13 Mar 20, 2021

Ah yeah sorry not betrayal just him not being from Earth- Also do u think u could help me out? I was downvoted heaps

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W.W. Skybelle
23:52 Mar 20, 2021

Yeah, you have a point. I just didn't want to make it seemed rushed or just convenient for the plot that Lucas is from Terrundo. Ig I forgot about keeping readers in the dark. Maybe I could make it so that Lucas and Violet don't know what The Facility does to people from Terrundo? Bummer. I know how it feels :( I'm going to be kind of busy for the rest of today, but I'll make sure to upvote you tomorrow :)

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03:30 Mar 21, 2021

Yeah I gotcha. Thank you so much!

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W.W. Skybelle
12:05 Mar 21, 2021

Also, I got downvoted to 1500 last night. Could you help as well?

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Alya Kaikuahine
01:24 Mar 31, 2021

I LOVE this!! The anticipation, the descriptions... AGGGGHHHHHHHH HOW IS IT POSSIBLE TO WRITE SOMETHING THIS GOOD?!?!?!?!?!?! I really really liked it :):):) Also, I'm really sad you got downvoted:(:(. I was looking on your account and saw you went down to 960-something and totally freaked out. Also, I'm pretty sure I already commented about the downvoting in another one of your stories but I'm just talking about it again because I'm so MAD ABOUT IT!!!!!! *inhales deeply* Ok, I'm good now. Anyway, I just wanted to tell you I upvoted every ...

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W.W. Skybelle
01:27 Mar 31, 2021

Aw, thank you so much!!! It makes me happy that you're concerned about the downvoting. Thank you for upvoting (even though you didn't have to)!

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Alya Kaikuahine
01:31 Mar 31, 2021

It's ok, I wanted to :)

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W.W. Skybelle
01:35 Mar 31, 2021

:)

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00:54 Mar 29, 2021

by the way, sky, i saw you liked a couple of my stories, and i wanted to say thanks a lot for that, along with i loved this story :D it was powerful, and touching, and usually i don't like sci-fi but this is *chef's kiss*. keep writing!!

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W.W. Skybelle
01:01 Mar 29, 2021

Np! And tysm :D

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15:23 Mar 24, 2021

Hello!! Will you help us get rid of downvoting? Click here to sign our petition!! :) http://chng.it/Y8pTpNJG

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W.W. Skybelle
15:52 Mar 24, 2021

Oh, I don’t think I can sign online petitions.

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16:05 Mar 24, 2021

Okay! No problem. :)

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15:59 Mar 20, 2021

WOWOWOWWOOWOWWOOOWOOWOW! So many mixed feelings about this, but W O W! I loved several sentences, and I could easily tell that you have a strong gift for weaving a thread of humor into your stories :) "The entire city has followed all of The Facility’s rules and customs. It has damaged this place. Imagine if you let someone borrow your jacket. When they give it back, it is dirty and the pockets are filled with things that were theirs. That’s what our city is like. The Facility had taken over this place. " (the metaphor was priceless!!!) "Da...

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W.W. Skybelle
16:48 Mar 20, 2021

Thank youuu so much! :))) And I'm doing good lol. A bit stressed and tired, though.

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19:52 Mar 20, 2021

so I've heard...i will be praying for you! <3

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W.W. Skybelle
20:48 Mar 20, 2021

Thank youu you're so kind :)

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20:54 Mar 20, 2021

of course, that's what friends are for <3333

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W.W. Skybelle
21:13 Mar 20, 2021

:)))

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12:29 Mar 20, 2021

Loved the twist about another planet and Lucas being an alien, it was a nice touch.

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W.W. Skybelle
12:29 Mar 20, 2021

Thanks! :)

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Tru Sorcerer
06:42 Mar 25, 2021

I seriously like the twist-less ending, like that was terrific! And the full story was amazing! Love your profile pic! XD Happy today!

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W.W. Skybelle
11:41 Mar 25, 2021

Thank youuu! :)

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05:47 Mar 25, 2021

i see you have recovered your kp which is great BUT i'm not sure if you have seen Aerin's page. She is down to 3000 points and has lost 27000. as you are one of the nicest people i have met on here, can you please please please upvote her? i don't want another amazing writer to leave. thanks

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W.W. Skybelle
10:49 Mar 25, 2021

Aw, you really mean that? Ofc I've seen her kp. I'll try to help :)

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15:41 Mar 25, 2021

ofc. you were one of the first people who actually found my page as well :)))

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W.W. Skybelle
15:55 Mar 25, 2021

:))

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Cole Lane
02:40 Mar 25, 2021

Um, Violet needs to bring the revolution!! Pleeeese!

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W.W. Skybelle
10:47 Mar 25, 2021

XD

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Bill Cara
10:33 Apr 10, 2021

How are you so good at writing in so many different genres? Teach me your ways. This was amazing, again, you're really good at including the small details that seem to make your stories that much more alive. I think you kept referring to 'The Facility' a bit too much at the beginning, but other than that it was really great. Is there going to be another part? Keep up the great work (: 🌌

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W.W. Skybelle
15:01 Apr 10, 2021

I just read a ton. Any genre I've written on Reedsy I've read. Yeah, that wasn't a good idea. But I can't edit :( Yes, there will be another part! Probably. Eventually. Tanks for the feedback!

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Bill Cara
10:02 Apr 11, 2021

Ooh, I can't wait No problem (:

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W.W. Skybelle
13:48 Apr 11, 2021

:)

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W.W. Skybelle
15:23 Apr 01, 2021

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XDDDD you don't know what to say... just use emoji when you are speechless.

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W.W. Skybelle
15:25 Apr 01, 2021

Exactly.

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W.W. Skybelle
13:04 Apr 02, 2021

:)

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